fazilcansizoglu
Jul 15, 2016
Writing Feedback / Topic: Leading countries must contain a majority of elderly people. Do you agree with? [2]
(Topic: Leading countries must contain a majority of elderly people. Do you agree with?)
Some people claim that population of the elderly people shows us the level of the country. But I believe that a number of teenage population demonstrates us the real level of the country.
Firstly, everyone knows that elderly people not able to work well rather than teen people. For example, English people are getting retired an early age. So that it causes to unemployment. If you had visited London you can see very old buildings. Because everybody in England is not working at their the most active age. So what are the unemployed people doing in the whole year? Unemployment is tending people to bad habits. So they are starting to use drugs and drinking alcohol.
As I mentioned before the majority of people saying that a county which contains elderly people are leading. However on that situation, we would understand that a country which contains elderly people very much is not leading at all.
I claim that if a country contains productive teen population instead of elderly people that country would be the most leading country for me. From my eye, it is a crucial thing to raise productive children for the future of the country.
In a conclusion, determining the level of leading countries should refer to the number of productive teen and adult population. I don't agree with the most leading countries contains elderly people. But as you can see that an old people who retired at an early age and who use drugs and alcohol wouldn't work as well as a teen person.
(Topic: Leading countries must contain a majority of elderly people. Do you agree with?)
Some people claim that population of the elderly people shows us the level of the country. But I believe that a number of teenage population demonstrates us the real level of the country.
Firstly, everyone knows that elderly people not able to work well rather than teen people. For example, English people are getting retired an early age. So that it causes to unemployment. If you had visited London you can see very old buildings. Because everybody in England is not working at their the most active age. So what are the unemployed people doing in the whole year? Unemployment is tending people to bad habits. So they are starting to use drugs and drinking alcohol.
As I mentioned before the majority of people saying that a county which contains elderly people are leading. However on that situation, we would understand that a country which contains elderly people very much is not leading at all.
I claim that if a country contains productive teen population instead of elderly people that country would be the most leading country for me. From my eye, it is a crucial thing to raise productive children for the future of the country.
In a conclusion, determining the level of leading countries should refer to the number of productive teen and adult population. I don't agree with the most leading countries contains elderly people. But as you can see that an old people who retired at an early age and who use drugs and alcohol wouldn't work as well as a teen person.
