Writing Feedback / Most of businesses' objective now is gaining highly profitability with only concern for the money [2]

Hi Ziad
I'm trying to give you some suggestions

just for sharing, perhaps you can put hook in your first introduction, for example : In modern era, the situation has influenced by capitalism business which gets much money from its project. I think this could give you the brief before you come to your paraphrase the question.

As a result business may suffer because contradict the nature law . what does it mean?, you do not put some examples if u rose a new idea, your explanation maybe

there is about your wrong grammar also
it will be acceptaccepted by all people and stand for long time.

Ok, keep writing!