nancy23
Oct 8, 2016
Undergraduate / FIT admissions essay. I would really appreciate some suggestions on my essay. [3]
*This is just the beginning of my rough draft for my essay and i would really appreciate some feedback.*
Prompt: What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT? Why are you interested in the major you are applying to? The essay is also your chance to tell us more about your experiences, activities and accomplishments. (No more than 750 words, please.)
The earliest childhood memory I have is of me in my parent's room, climbing up onto their sink and smearing on my mom's bright red lipstick; I thought I was the cutest looking 5-year-old. It took my dad everything he had to stop laughing long enough to snap a picture. My dad used to tell me how my love for makeup came from his mom how she would rock a red lip everywhere she would go. My dad taught me many things in the 16 years I had him in my life. He taught me to stand up for what I believe in and to always work hard to get to where I want in life. I would thrive in the kind of environment FIT provides for its students. I am very competitive, independent, I know how to rationalize to accomplish my goals and most importantly I never stop trying. The experience that FIT provides is incomparable, while at FIT I would love take advantage of the internships related to cosmetics and the fact that the professors have real life experience is something that greatly appeals to me.
Furthermore, I am interested in majoring in advertising and marketing communications because in my early years of high school I was very shy and every day I would dread going to school. I felt like I didn't have a voice like I was trapped and couldn't express myself. To me this field is an art and my form of self-expression that I so desperately craved in high school. After I finish my associates I plan to get my bachelors in fragrance and cosmetic marketing so I can incorporate the two things I love into my career.
*This is just the beginning of my rough draft for my essay and i would really appreciate some feedback.*
Prompt: What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT? Why are you interested in the major you are applying to? The essay is also your chance to tell us more about your experiences, activities and accomplishments. (No more than 750 words, please.)
The earliest childhood memory I have is of me in my parent's room, climbing up onto their sink and smearing on my mom's bright red lipstick; I thought I was the cutest looking 5-year-old. It took my dad everything he had to stop laughing long enough to snap a picture. My dad used to tell me how my love for makeup came from his mom how she would rock a red lip everywhere she would go. My dad taught me many things in the 16 years I had him in my life. He taught me to stand up for what I believe in and to always work hard to get to where I want in life. I would thrive in the kind of environment FIT provides for its students. I am very competitive, independent, I know how to rationalize to accomplish my goals and most importantly I never stop trying. The experience that FIT provides is incomparable, while at FIT I would love take advantage of the internships related to cosmetics and the fact that the professors have real life experience is something that greatly appeals to me.
Furthermore, I am interested in majoring in advertising and marketing communications because in my early years of high school I was very shy and every day I would dread going to school. I felt like I didn't have a voice like I was trapped and couldn't express myself. To me this field is an art and my form of self-expression that I so desperately craved in high school. After I finish my associates I plan to get my bachelors in fragrance and cosmetic marketing so I can incorporate the two things I love into my career.
