sekoufoley
Nov 1, 2016
Undergraduate / The most innovative and creative students - Help on Penn Essay [4]
When I first visited the University of Pennsylvania in May of 2016, I was genuinely impressed by every aspect of the university. It possessed a uniqueness that I had not experienced in previous college visits. From the flexible curriculum to the world-class academics and professors, I knew that Penn was the ideal place for me to efficiently pursue my academic and professional goals.
If I am admitted into Penn, I plan to actively pursue my interests in the areas of economics and business at the renowned Wharton School. As a young entrepreneur, I genuinely believe that Wharton will provide me with the indispensable tools to reach my full potential as an entrepreneur. I will be able to immerse myself in an educational environment that provides students with the knowledge and tools to become prominent leaders in business. The beauty of Wharton is that the material that is taught is directly relevant to real-world circumstances. By being instructed by award-winning professors such as Anne Greenlaugh in Management 100: Leadership and Communication in Groups, I will have the opportunity to hone my leadership and communication skills by working with many ingenious students in 70 field projects over the course of the year. This class will enable me to develop substantial relationships with like-minded students that will prove beneficial to me when I graduate from Wharton. I also look forward to taking Professor Andrew Carton's class, Management 101, in which I will have the opportunity to refine my management skills involved in controlling my clothing company, Faith Apparel Company (faithapparelco.com). I founded this company in May of 2016 and have accumulated sales of $97,455. We are projected to annually gross in excess of $200,000 in worldwide sales. A Wharton education will enable me to grow my company into a global brand and have most of the global retailers carry our products.
Apart from academics, the clubs that Wharton offers are commensurate with my interests. I will exemplify my passion for entrepreneurship by joining the Wharton Undergraduate Entrepreneurship Club. Through guest speakers, student presentations, and networking opportunities, I will be able to acquire essential strategies to apply to my business endeavors. I also intend on joining the Black Wharton Undergraduate Association, which serves to represent the African-American interest in business for undergraduates at Penn. As an African-American business owner, I hope to become a prominent member of the club and aid in generating African-American interest for entrepreneurial pursuits. Last but not least, I intend to join the Wharton Undergraduate Real Estate Club. This club's accentuation on educating the Penn community about the real estate industry is directly related to my personal experience in the field. My mother is a real estate developer who serves as president of VOB Development, which focuses on developing affordable housing for low-income families. I work for her during my summers by writing her applications for Low Income Housing Tax Credits and conventional financing. Many times we as a development team have NIMBY(Not In My Backyard) issues and have to educate the community that we intend to build of the benefits of affordable housing. Most recently, I was a part of the team that rehabilitated the historic building, the Carroll Building, in Waterbury, Connecticut and saw the shared appreciation by the State Representative, Larry B. Butler, and the community for revitalizing a condemned building that was at risk of demolition. By participating in the Wharton Undergraduate Real Estate Club, I will receive essential knowledge to continue my ongoing interest in real estate and share my experiences in this industry with my classmates.
A Wharton education would provide me with a challenging, but rewarding experience. I look forward to bringing my intellectual and unique perspective to the Wharton community and sharing my creative ideas with the most innovative students in the world.
Made some edits. Should I simply omit the entire real estate section?
Sekou
When I first visited the University of Pennsylvania in May of 2016, I was genuinely impressed by every aspect of the university. It possessed a uniqueness that I had not experienced in previous college visits. From the flexible curriculum to the world-class academics and professors, I knew that Penn was the ideal place for me to efficiently pursue my academic and professional goals.
If I am admitted into Penn, I plan to actively pursue my interests in the areas of economics and business at the renowned Wharton School. As a young entrepreneur, I genuinely believe that Wharton will provide me with the indispensable tools to reach my full potential as an entrepreneur. I will be able to immerse myself in an educational environment that provides students with the knowledge and tools to become prominent leaders in business. The beauty of Wharton is that the material that is taught is directly relevant to real-world circumstances. By being instructed by award-winning professors such as Anne Greenlaugh in Management 100: Leadership and Communication in Groups, I will have the opportunity to hone my leadership and communication skills by working with many ingenious students in 70 field projects over the course of the year. This class will enable me to develop substantial relationships with like-minded students that will prove beneficial to me when I graduate from Wharton. I also look forward to taking Professor Andrew Carton's class, Management 101, in which I will have the opportunity to refine my management skills involved in controlling my clothing company, Faith Apparel Company (faithapparelco.com). I founded this company in May of 2016 and have accumulated sales of $97,455. We are projected to annually gross in excess of $200,000 in worldwide sales. A Wharton education will enable me to grow my company into a global brand and have most of the global retailers carry our products.
Apart from academics, the clubs that Wharton offers are commensurate with my interests. I will exemplify my passion for entrepreneurship by joining the Wharton Undergraduate Entrepreneurship Club. Through guest speakers, student presentations, and networking opportunities, I will be able to acquire essential strategies to apply to my business endeavors. I also intend on joining the Black Wharton Undergraduate Association, which serves to represent the African-American interest in business for undergraduates at Penn. As an African-American business owner, I hope to become a prominent member of the club and aid in generating African-American interest for entrepreneurial pursuits. Last but not least, I intend to join the Wharton Undergraduate Real Estate Club. This club's accentuation on educating the Penn community about the real estate industry is directly related to my personal experience in the field. My mother is a real estate developer who serves as president of VOB Development, which focuses on developing affordable housing for low-income families. I work for her during my summers by writing her applications for Low Income Housing Tax Credits and conventional financing. Many times we as a development team have NIMBY(Not In My Backyard) issues and have to educate the community that we intend to build of the benefits of affordable housing. Most recently, I was a part of the team that rehabilitated the historic building, the Carroll Building, in Waterbury, Connecticut and saw the shared appreciation by the State Representative, Larry B. Butler, and the community for revitalizing a condemned building that was at risk of demolition. By participating in the Wharton Undergraduate Real Estate Club, I will receive essential knowledge to continue my ongoing interest in real estate and share my experiences in this industry with my classmates.
A Wharton education would provide me with a challenging, but rewarding experience. I look forward to bringing my intellectual and unique perspective to the Wharton community and sharing my creative ideas with the most innovative students in the world.
Made some edits. Should I simply omit the entire real estate section?