Letter of Recommendation from Supervisor - expressing support for a student

A promising programmer who likes challenges

Dear Admissions Committee,
I am very pleased to recommend Iwan Bagus Setyawan P in his admission in The Master of Information System (MISM), Carnegie Mellon University Australia. I hope this letter can help describe his quality as well as expressing my deepest support for him.

On academic side, he impressed me during his study in the college. In the first year, he was struggling in Algorithms and Data Structure, subject that I taught. However, his respond to this problem was really exceptional. While many others gave up to this subject; he had a different view and took it as a challenge for himself. I noticed that he pushed himself, practiced regularly, and conferred with his seniors to get extra mentoring. As a result of all his endeavours, he turned his score into the A point in the subject and other related subjects regarding to programming such as Object Oriented Programming, Database (SQL) Programming, Object Oriented Database, and Cryptography with a great result. Along with this condition, he became the Assistant in my laboratory (Programming Laboratory) for three years and he did it very well.

I was also supervising him in his thesis about Human Computer Interaction entitled 'The Implementation of User Centered Design (UCD) in the development of Website's User Interface through Soft System Methodology (SSM)'. I found this thesis very interesting and fascinating because it was quite uncommon from prevalent thesis topics in his field. During the progress, I can conclude that he was an open-minded person and accepted for criticism and suggestion very well. Furthermore, I used to give him extra materials from international journals. Although it was quite difficult for him to understand the materials at the beginning, he showed his strong desire to learn about the topic because he wanted to increase his thesis quality. After several extensive consultations with me, he completed his thesis and passed the final exam successfully.

To sum up, I would like to restate my greatest support in his application of Master Degree. Please do not hesitate to contact me for any further information, I will be glad to write it for you. Thank you for your time.

Sincerely,

Mr. Somebody

Iwan, when presenting your name, there is no need to include your middle initial. The way you have it written on the page at the moment makes it a bit difficult to understand your name. Removing the P will help the reviewer to understand what your full name actually is. By the way, your letter contains missing information regarding the person writing the letter of recommendation. The missing information pertains to the number of years that this professor worked with you. In order to ensure an authoritative presentation of the relationship, he needs to have been your teacher and adviser for at least one year. Indicate the number of years that he worked with you. Also, the person recommending you needs to indicate his own name in the essay along with his academic position in relation to his introducing you as the person he is writing this letter for. The information in the letter itself is accurate and is relevant to the kind of student traits that a reviewer would be interested in learning about you. Please add information about the 3 years that you were his lab assistant. Indicate the kind of work that you did for him which would further strengthen your background and show the kind of skills that can help you excel as a student overseas. Once you do that, the essay should be good to go.

@bagusetyawan
Hi !Really nice to read your work.I has some mistakes.First of it his respond to this problem was really exceptional.
While many others gave up to this subject; he had a different view and ...
respond is verb ,response is noun because after his you should use response .
Your idea is not bad but I lacks some details. For example, I have not seen your name , your country or anything of your information.You should tell us why you were interested in this , what make you feel you have to write this .You have so many confused sentence, it is too long even I can understand what you really want to say. You have lexical problem.First do not use so many word such as: Computer Interaction entitled [...] quite uncommon from prevalent thesis

Thank you for your review. Regarding with my Supervisor's name, I have to ask her first about her full name. So let's ignore that first.

Hey there. Present the paragraph about your work as a research assistant in a separate paragraph. Add more information to it regarding how you participated in the research. What tasks were assigned to you, how you handle the assignments or pressures of the job, and what the end result of the research was based upon your assistance. That is imperative because the reviewer needs to see how skilled you are in terms of research since you are a masters degree student and will probably be taking a thesis based program along with your regular course load. This will serve as evidence of your ability to handle the pressures and demands of a masters degree curriculum and also, offer the reviewer extra information as to how well versed you might be in the field of interest that you are applying for admission to. The rest of the essay just needs some grammar correction later on. Since the grammar problems do not distort the message of the letter, I am not very concerned about correcting it before the final content version is completed.