I'm writing the UC essay prompt #1 the prompt is :Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. It is due in a week, please please please be super harsh and correct my grammar errors and please give me as many suggestions as you can. Thank you very much！ I'm a english learner from china, and my prompt #1 is about how the entire environment and the art classes affect me.
UC PROMPT ONE:
When I went to middle school in China, our class discussed about our dreams. I told my teacher that my dream was studying hard and go to a good high school, because in China, people need super good grades.
"Is that it?" The teacher asked me. I said, "yes" so confidently. After the class, she told me that she really support my dream right now, which was going to a good high school, but she thought my dream should go deeper and further. I didn't understand that time, I thought middle school student don't need an ambitious or a long-term dream. However, I noticed I'm wrong when I moved to America.
I moved to America three years ago, and I entered high school as a freshmen. In the first day of class, in the club meeting as a new member, we were asked of talking our dream, but I still cannot tell what is my dream. I realized that I should think seriously about my dream. And one decision remind me that actually the whole environment affect what is my dream.
In the beginning of my junior year, I saw the online brochure of Art center. And I saw the fashion sketching class on the class list. In that moment, I just decided to go to this class. I recalled my memory back to China, when I was little. I learned sketching, oil painting, watercolor in art class. And I also learned playing Chinese zither for three years, through the music class, I learned Chinese ancient music. Through out all different type of art classes, I was thinking, maybe I should work in the art field in the future, but back to the time I was in middle school, that just a vague and basic idea. And since I went to the fashion sketching class, I use marker draw the figure, and put my idea on the drawing, such as use bright color to fit a specific type of dress or use both light and heavy skin tone color to make the figure's skin looks perfect. During summer, I started learning how to make videos. I made videos for my English class project and sometimes for my own pleasure.
I've been learning a lot of type of arts, and I want to pursue a major as a designer, which can learn and design all type of art. Is that it？ No, I'll continue learning art and use art.
UC PROMPT ONE:
When I went to middle school in China, our class discussed about our dreams. I told my teacher that my dream was studying hard and go to a good high school, because in China, people need super good grades.
"Is that it?" The teacher asked me. I said, "yes" so confidently. After the class, she told me that she really support my dream right now, which was going to a good high school, but she thought my dream should go deeper and further. I didn't understand that time, I thought middle school student don't need an ambitious or a long-term dream. However, I noticed I'm wrong when I moved to America.
I moved to America three years ago, and I entered high school as a freshmen. In the first day of class, in the club meeting as a new member, we were asked of talking our dream, but I still cannot tell what is my dream. I realized that I should think seriously about my dream. And one decision remind me that actually the whole environment affect what is my dream.
In the beginning of my junior year, I saw the online brochure of Art center. And I saw the fashion sketching class on the class list. In that moment, I just decided to go to this class. I recalled my memory back to China, when I was little. I learned sketching, oil painting, watercolor in art class. And I also learned playing Chinese zither for three years, through the music class, I learned Chinese ancient music. Through out all different type of art classes, I was thinking, maybe I should work in the art field in the future, but back to the time I was in middle school, that just a vague and basic idea. And since I went to the fashion sketching class, I use marker draw the figure, and put my idea on the drawing, such as use bright color to fit a specific type of dress or use both light and heavy skin tone color to make the figure's skin looks perfect. During summer, I started learning how to make videos. I made videos for my English class project and sometimes for my own pleasure.
I've been learning a lot of type of arts, and I want to pursue a major as a designer, which can learn and design all type of art. Is that it？ No, I'll continue learning art and use art.