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|University of Connecticut transfer essay - Storrs campus
2 - Eshan, the direction of your essay should take on a comparative look as to why you believe that Broward...
UndergraduateKoenigseggseggse - 03:24am / Holt - 03:41am
|Everything starts from its core - Georgia Tech Short Answers
4 - If you would just remove the reference to the "living species" and the humor will be well placed. I...
Undergraduatesalsabluer - Yesterday / Holt - Yesterday
|For the majority of my life, I underestimated the importance of physical health. Issue of Importance
3 - Morgan, the essay is really very prompt responsive on a personal level. The only problem is that it tends...
UndergraduateMorgannh - Feb 23, 2017 / Holt - Yesterday
|What really blew my mind was electricity. Waterloo "Engineering" essay
7 - Thanks a lot! :D...
UndergraduateEiad21 - Feb 23, 2017 / Eiad21 - Feb 23, 2017
|We want to read about what makes you special. Tell us something about yourself
5 - Hi @vcerpasalas! In my opinion, there we some errors with the use of comma. Also, please observe proper...
Undergraduatevcerpasalas - Feb 15, 2017 / gcki - Feb 22, 2017
|Define the highlights of your most crucial accomplishments or tasks inputs.
4 - As I mentioned in my previous response, your contribution should be something that has a personal meaning to you....
UndergraduateTrouvaille 05 - Feb 22, 2017 / Holt - Feb 22, 2017
|Waterloo "reasons for choosing" essay - two portions answer
10 - Thanks a lot for your patience with me :D Writing isn't really my strong suit but I try to...
UndergraduateEiad21 - Feb 19, 2017 / Eiad21 - Feb 21, 2017
|My career path is not straight. College Transfer Essay - Statement of Purpose
2 - Morgan, try to focus on the actual purpose behind the reason for your transfer. If you are transferring based...
UndergraduateMorgannh - Feb 19, 2017 / Holt - Feb 20, 2017
|Selected program of study and the aim to make durable, easy to fix, and upgradable electronics
5 - @greyhamster I just came here to cheer you up! I'm a writing learner too. Let's keep it up and...
Undergraduategreyhamster - Feb 16, 2017 / goo9dan - Feb 19, 2017
|I plan to get a doctorate in Clinical Neuropsychology - UNIV. OF TEXAS SOP (PSYCHOLOGY/NEUROSCIENCE)
6 - Tana, I see where you are coming from now. The essay that you wrote includes the important elements I...
UndergraduateNervera - Feb 18, 2017 / Holt - Feb 19, 2017
|Mesmerizing world of Chemistry - Personal Statement on my activities and plans for next years
2 - Pam, the only revision to your essay that I can suggest at this point is the removal of the...
Undergraduatepamveerapen - Feb 17, 2017 / Holt - Feb 18, 2017
|Something went out not like I expected
6 - I am of a different opinion on this matter. Due to the fact that your previous response already spoke...
UndergraduateAABMOSALAM1998 - Feb 15, 2017 / Holt - Feb 16, 2017
|Queen's Commerce: Describe the most important constructive criticism you have received
2 - @jlee99 Hi, jessica. I rewrite your essay. Of course, I am not good at writing a essay, I just...
Undergraduatejlee99 - Feb 15, 2017 / ilskyilsky - Feb 16, 2017
|Personal insight questions for applying schools.
4 - Please find few grammatical errors. Every students here have sad stories punish them probably because she feels her...
Undergraduatejohnny165234 - Feb 14, 2017 / sinchana2017 - Feb 15, 2017
|How helping others helps you? MIT essay
5 - I would not have finished it earlier than I did in my previous essays without your help, thank you...
UndergraduateAABMOSALAM1998 - Feb 15, 2017 / AABMOSALAM1998 - Feb 15, 2017
|Tell us about your experience learning English. How often do you use English in your daily life?
4 - Valeria, at the point where the essay asks you "How often do you use English in your daily life?",...
Undergraduatevcerpasalas - Feb 15, 2017 / Holt - Feb 15, 2017
|My dream school. The spirits of MIT's community is unlike anywhere else
21 - Thank you for your valuable feedback :) @Holt...
UndergraduateAABMOSALAM1998 - Feb 14, 2017 / AABMOSALAM1998 - Feb 15, 2017
|Queen's University Commerce Application Essay
2 - Jessica, try to expand a bit more on the athletic sponsorship aspect as something that you hope to enter...
Undergraduatejlee99 - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|Brainstorming session with you to help me direct essay of 250 words for college LAC
4 - Okay. Since there is no specific prompt for this essay, you should focus on introducing yourself to the reviewer...
Undergraduateesfo2017 - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|Alzheimer's unit. Guidance needed in editing peace corps motivation statement
6 - The only part of this essay that needs more development is the first paragraph. In my opinion, you need...
Undergraduatemimi009p - Feb 11, 2017 / Holt - Feb 12, 2017
|Describe an exceptional achievement and lesson learned in your academic experience.
4 - Hi @atrix, I am studying currently in a Singapore university (NUS). I feel what the university looks for...
Undergraduateatrix - Feb 11, 2017 / Malavika Venu - Feb 12, 2017
|Personal Statement - A requirement to get a Letter of Acceptance from University
6 - Bagu, you still have paragraph one in this essay when I already told you to remove it. If you...
Undergraduatebagusetyawan - Feb 11, 2017 / Holt - Feb 12, 2017
|"One Last Chance"- Transfer essay for MIT
15 - As the moderator pointed out, you can post new essays once you have helped others with their work. If...
UndergraduateAABMOSALAM1998 - Feb 9, 2017 / Holt - Feb 11, 2017
|My high school courses of Chemistry, Physics and Biology intrigued my desire to pursue Pharmacy
3 - The essay has to be no more than two pages...
Undergraduatemickeyyyy - Feb 6, 2017 / mickeyyyy - Feb 6, 2017
|Soak up knowledge - University of Washington Personal Statement 2017
4 - Lin, there is a discrepancy in your opening statement. You claim that you enrolled at Seattle Central College to...
Undergraduatetzuwen - Feb 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 5, 2017
|My most memorable experience: 21st November, just after my birthday; Colony Cricket League
6 - Hi Jnanam, it certainly feels good on our part to know that you are confident enough to say that...
UndergraduateJnanam Shah - Feb 24, 2014 / Holt - Feb 5, 2017
|Waterloo AIF- My goals and interest and my reason for choosing Waterloo
10 - @Holt Thanks a lot!...
UndergraduateChibi1 - Dec 31, 2016 / Chibi1 - Feb 4, 2017
|Why are you interested in The College of Wooster? College Application Essay
4 - @Holt @lukme Thank you very much for the comments and advice to my essays. I felt that I...
Undergraduatemarkja - Jan 29, 2017 / markja - Feb 2, 2017
|"Youth connectors of future" Program by Swedish Institute.
5 - @Shamsher sing The line from the second paragraph "Predominantly ... poverty" is quiet wordy. Try to break it into...
UndergraduateShamsher sing - Feb 1, 2017 / aravee - Feb 2, 2017
|Young entrepreneur experiences - FIT entrance essay
6 - Hi, you did good job but you work have some mistake and I will give you some advise .your...
Undergraduateheliza - Feb 1, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Feb 2, 2017
|I Was Bullied as a Kid - Essay Question: Tell us more about yourself.
3 - @TGorsi Hi! Your work is really good but it has some problems.Firstly, grammatical problem.For example, Eventually, I was tired...
UndergraduateTGorsi - Feb 2, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Feb 2, 2017
|Desi. Common Application Essay - "Underrepresented"
2 - Hi Izzy, you wrote a very interesting personal essay that can best be used as a background story, not...
UndergraduateIzzyRen - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 2, 2017
|Me, as a part of the strategic planning board of one of the multinational corporations
14 - @Holt May thanks for your continuous support during preparation of those essays. I'd like to come back to you...
UndergraduateAhmed_Sanad - Jan 29, 2017 / Ahmed_Sanad - Feb 1, 2017
|Essay for Yale Young Global Scholars summer program
7 - Good work Marianne! This is the concluding paragraph that you should definitely use in the essay. It provides the...
UndergraduateMarianneB - Jan 30, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|Minority in a diversity -------UW Mad------- Something unnoticed, importance to me.
3 - Merged: 'What is life, but a constant struggle to live?' Consider something unnoticed. My Past. UW Madison ...
UndergraduateNaty - Jan 19, 2017 / NataliaSotelo - Feb 1, 2017
|I belong to the community of honor guard members
5 - Cheng, before you launch into the discussion of the way the honor guard functions as a team and as...
UndergraduateMWC - Jan 31, 2017 / Holt - Jan 31, 2017
|From a homebody to the active body. UW Madison Essay -- Something important but unnoticed
19 - @Holt thanks for all the help !! i really appreciate your efforts !...
Undergraduatebarney - Jan 18, 2017 / barney - Jan 30, 2017
|A letter on the reasons why I need a scholarship
13 - A big thank you to Holt and Chizy!...
Undergraduatediamante - Jan 22, 2017 / diamante - Jan 30, 2017
|UIUC Transfer | Passionate about Aerospace; Applying to Mechanical instead
2 - Bassel, try to impress the reviewer with your final paragraph by portraying a definite research idea that you can...
UndergraduateBAJ1997 - Jan 29, 2017 / Holt - Jan 30, 2017
|Stopping the spread of invasive species
3 - Jonathan, before you launch into the discussion of how to stop the spread of illegal fish in the Northern...
UndergraduateJohnnyk5432 - Jan 29, 2017 / Holt - Jan 30, 2017
|Personal User Manual: Introducing Yourself to Your Instructor
2 - Vaidehi, I am sure that the term "joint family" makes perfect sense in your vernacular language. However, it is...
Undergraduatevaidu_2000 - Jan 29, 2017 / Holt - Jan 29, 2017
|I really want to earn this chance; Exchange student program - self-introduction
6 - Hi @muggy. I am not really good at english but I can give you some advice about your essay...
Undergraduatemuggy - Jan 24, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Jan 27, 2017
|I've been told that I'll never make it... Fashion Institute of Technology admissions essay
2 - Imani, the personal statement for FIT always has one pivotal requirement that your essay currently underrepresents, that of your...
UndergraduateImanijo - Jan 27, 2017 / Holt - Jan 27, 2017
|Medical Dietetics Undergraduate Application Personal Statement - 300 words of my life
7 - Danielle, why don't you try to represent your mindset regarding being healthy as having been influenced by the advertisements...
Undergraduateroberts1641 - Jan 25, 2017 / Holt - Jan 27, 2017
|Applying in Turkish Universities, expectation from studying in Turkey and express the future plans
3 - Alinda, your response is good. However, it requires editing. Remember that you cannot start an academic response with the...
UndergraduateAlindaputri - Jan 26, 2017 / Holt - Jan 26, 2017
|Exchanging ideas and sharing experiences. Applying in scholarship, Essay about my interests.
12 - @Alindaputri Meet with new people is fun for me. I do believe that this sentence is irrelevant. And I...
UndergraduateAlindaputri - Jan 9, 2017 / Ahmed_Sanad - Jan 26, 2017
|Describe the factors that have most influenced you and your hopes and dreams.
9 - Charlotte, I can tell that you did your best to deliver a totally new essay that would best suit...
Undergraduatecharzbk - Jan 15, 2017 / Holt - Jan 23, 2017
|1. How'd you like to learn about by attending this conference?
4 - Van, based upon the instructions / expectations of the conference hosts, it seems that there is a particular set...
Undergraduatebawimang - Jan 23, 2017 / Holt - Jan 23, 2017
|'the biggest leap of my life' - Fashion Institute of Technology / Fashion Business Management essay
5 - Maya, the only relevant portion of your essay in terms of the prompt requirement does not start until paragraph...
Undergraduatemayakay - Dec 11, 2016 / Holt - Jan 23, 2017
|7 billion individuals. What goes Unnoticed in My Life and Why It's Important to Me
3 - Tara, the topic that you chose to discuss is interesting, but turned out to be too broad in scope...
Undergraduateleafury - Jan 22, 2017 / Holt - Jan 23, 2017
|MIT UPDATES- working as a chemical engineer
6 - Diva, I am confused by the declaration that you made in the first paragraph. Who has the BSC from...
Undergraduatedivalo - Jan 21, 2017 / Holt - Jan 23, 2017
|NUS Asean Scholarship Personal Statement-Key qualities.
4 - Lim, there are still some major points of correction in your essay that require an increased word count on...
Undergraduatedesinlim - Jan 20, 2017 / Holt - Jan 22, 2017
|Transfer essay: "I want an intellectually stimulating education at a research-oriented school"
3 - In this case, The approach should be mentioning your career goals with concrete points and how University of Illinois...
Undergraduateskazo - Jan 21, 2017 / Hjamil - Jan 21, 2017
|My Penn Supplement Essay: How is it?
3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback. I will work on it.:)...
UndergraduateNeppenn - Jan 20, 2017 / Neppenn - Jan 20, 2017
|Young Hands - my childish enthusiasm at my very fingertips. Common App Personal Statement
3 - Anthea, I am not sure why you are discussing your musical inclination in this essay. How does this relate...
Undergraduatetchaikovsky - Jan 18, 2017 / Holt - Jan 18, 2017
|How I overcame my fear of public speaking - UBC Business Tech Management Personal Profile
4 - @anxjos. Is quite okay. But my little addition is that yiu should say you have always looked for an...
Undergraduateanxjso - Jan 14, 2017 / Knockout - Jan 17, 2017
|'the choice to change the world' Spelman College Transfer Essay
11 - @Holt Thank you very much - for your guidance and assistance on my essay!!...
Undergraduatemayline87 - Jan 8, 2017 / mayline87 - Jan 17, 2017
|Loyola Marymount Supplement - The primary purpose of education
3 - Selin, like Ichan said, you have to get your essays into the Urgent thread if you have a short...
Undergraduatesweetsenior - Jan 16, 2017 / Holt - Jan 17, 2017
|Virginia tech - Our motto is UT Promise. How is service to others important for you?
2 - Nathan, Ut Prosim which is the Latin motto of Virginia Tech literally means "That I may serve". The prompt...
UndergraduatenathanL - Jan 16, 2017 / Holt - Jan 17, 2017
|A talk with an ex-homeless person - UBC personal profile
6 - I think your essay could get much stronger if you emphasized how you felt when you heard that man's...
UndergraduateDluusional - Jan 14, 2017 / sweetsenior - Jan 16, 2017
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