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|Playing around with friends - UBC
3 - You should write more about how your friend change you, what did they do to make you more open...
UndergraduateYDNdaniel - Nov 29, 2022 / vankhanh - 15 hrs ago
|Everything is Engineered - Waterloo AIF for Electrical Engineering
2 - There is no real passion for engineering in this statement. Where is the pursuit of Engineering activities to help...
UndergraduateImaginedragon - 2 days ago / Holt - 2 days ago
|UBC prompt community involvement in a global/diverse society "exposure to unique situations"
Undergraduatelhyphotos - Dec 1, 2022 / lhyphotos - Dec 2, 2022
|UBC prompt important activity "photographer + prod. technician"
2 - When there is an option to highlight one skill in the essay, always go for the topic that can...
Undergraduatelhyphotos - Dec 1, 2022 / Holt - Dec 2, 2022
|Waterloo AIF for Electrical Engineering; electrical circuits knowledge
2 - There is nothing impressive about the basis of your educational goal. Anybody who has the money, time, and inclination...
UndergraduateImaginedragon - Dec 1, 2022 / Holt - Dec 1, 2022
|UBC entrance undergrad - tell us about you "personal growth, confident"
3 - Hey there! Thanks for the "advice" on my thread. Sorry your account got suspended. @catlover1 First off, I believe...
Undergraduatecatlover1 - Nov 29, 2022 / Slyrae - Nov 30, 2022
|"Essay about growing up in the Entertainment Industry" - UCLA Supplemental for Film Personal Essay
2 - You are applying for admission to film school. Therefore, you need to be a highly imaginative and creative storyteller....
Undergraduatesawyervalin - Nov 29, 2022 / Holt - Nov 29, 2022
|UBC Tell us about yourself essay question "Improvement"
3 - I am most proud of seeing how my students and my own skills as a swim instructor improve over...
UndergraduateSlyrae - Nov 28, 2022 / catlover1 - Nov 29, 2022
|UBC 'what is important to you?' essay "taking that next step"
3 - @Holt Hello @Holt! I greatly appreciate your advice, and I've tried to implement more elements of adaptation...
UndergraduatehopefullyUBC - Nov 28, 2022 / hopefullyUBC - Nov 29, 2022
|Event that catalyzed change in belief/action - Queen's SE
2 - The main problem that I see with this essay is that it embodies the dream of someone else for...
Undergraduateyyqlin - Nov 27, 2022 / Holt - Nov 27, 2022
|A child of an immigrant family - UBC: Tell us about who you are
Undergraduatetofu9 - Nov 27, 2022 / Holt - Nov 27, 2022
|Personal statement on student's foreign language acquisition before graduation.
2 - Where a general idea is presented, there is no need to exaggerate the basis. That means, the restatement should...
UndergraduateBun cha - Nov 25, 2022 / Holt - Nov 26, 2022
|I keep a copy of every writing assignment - ubc personal profile WHAT IS IMPORTANT TO YOU? WHY?
3 - @Holt yo thanks man ive been struggling to write these ubc questions but its nice to get some outside...
Undergraduatejonthanw713 - Nov 23, 2022 / jonthanw713 - Nov 23, 2022
|A capable leader - Tell us about who you are - leadership and growth
2 - Do not lose sight of whose point of view is important here. While the second point of view response...
UndergraduateCW27 - Nov 23, 2022 / Holt - Nov 23, 2022
|Tell us about who you are - My growth as a person
3 - @Holt I don't really understand what you mean by disengaging from my writing and to use the third person...
Undergraduatekevinxu - Nov 14, 2022 / kevinxu - Nov 14, 2022
|Robotics club and mentorship - Tell us about who you are. UBC
3 - So I am a little confused by this response. What exactly would I need to change to improve this?...
UndergraduateKrTh - Nov 13, 2022 / KrTh - Nov 14, 2022
|Essay about the influence a dance competition had on me (CA Personal Statement Prompt #2) - critique
2 - The essay does not open with the correct focus point. Rather than a performance mishap that could have influenced...
Undergraduatevardaan2708 - Nov 13, 2022 / Holt - Nov 13, 2022
|My essay on height - "A Tall Package"
2 - The essay introduces what is a unique character description of this person based on his home country. Since Nepalese...
Undergraduatemightytallperson - Nov 12, 2022 / Holt - Nov 13, 2022
|HKUST Undergraduate Personal Statement for Engineering Courses
3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your feedback. I have rewrite my essay, since there is a word limit,...
Undergraduateputrikhansa - Nov 11, 2022 / putrikhansa - Nov 12, 2022
|Government oppression - why you decided to apply to the department/area of Sejong University.
2 - The information provided does not reflect that of a person who is truly decided on a career in Digital...
Undergraduatebunikjun - Nov 11, 2022 / Holt - Nov 11, 2022
|Essay about my ambition to become an Astronaut - Common app prompt Some students have a background,
6 - @bunikjun and @Alao0702 Thanks for the feedback I think I have to rewrite the whole essay once again...
UndergraduateDestiny - Nov 9, 2022 / Destiny - Nov 11, 2022
|Mini essay-UBC application's personal profile. Problem and/or an unfamiliar situation.
2 - We need a more relatable backstory for this. As a customer service agent, it was not really your task...
Undergraduatedeafleaf - Nov 3, 2022 / Holt - Nov 4, 2022
|Towards accomplishment - UBC - 1. Tell us about who you are. Personal Profile essay
2 - This prompt actually asks the applicant to write about himself from the third person perspective in 3 settings: as...
Undergraduatesh103150 - Nov 2, 2022 / Holt - Nov 3, 2022
|Dream and the efforts made in order to achieve it. KAIST Entrance Essay
UndergraduateBelayed - Nov 2, 2022 / Belayed - Nov 2, 2022
|How I discovered public relations
3 - This essay was straight to the point just how it should be, it described how this shaped the writer....
Undergraduatebreezybunny135 - Oct 29, 2022 / almightytbo - Oct 31, 2022
|Stacked against me - COMMON APP ESSAY - CRITIQUE
3 - I really enjoyed this essay, but I was a little confused on all these points and how they are...
Undergraduatejiyam - Oct 30, 2022 / almightytbo - Oct 31, 2022
|The Physics Department - Why Davidson supplement essay?
2 - The main question is in relation to what you can contribute to the unique learning experience at Davidson. All...
UndergraduateAryan1234 - Oct 30, 2022 / Holt - Oct 31, 2022
|"Hey fool, pass the ball" - common app - Recount a time when you faced...
NEW - I think life isn't a destination, like everyone says it is. "Keep working hard and you'll reach your destination"...
Undergraduatespeedram - Oct 30, 2022 / — -
|At Fordham, we expect students to care for and engage with their communities.
2 - The topic chosen for the discussion was promising but the writing approach Missed out on the potential to greatly...
Undergraduatenataliely - Oct 30, 2022 / Holt - Oct 30, 2022
|math and physics - University of Wisconsin-Madison supplementary essay review
2 - The essay is well written. It creatively uses an imaginative and engaging presentation that captures the reader's attention. Until...
Undergraduatejamie foxx - Oct 30, 2022 / Holt - Oct 30, 2022
|"Journey of Understanding" - Common app Personal essay
2 - Which of several common app essay prompts is this essay supposed to respond to? Since you did not provide...
UndergraduateCoolduckz - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
|Common App essay 2022. Single mother,CS
2 - Let me put it bluntly, the reviewer will not be interested in the life travails of your mother, grandmother,...
UndergraduatePikachu - Oct 28, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
|A bucky badger - why you decided to apply to the University of Wisconsin-Madison
2 - Here is the thing, the essay is devoid of true passion in the sense that there is no evidence...
Undergraduatenataliely - Oct 28, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
|Personal statement for a Joint Master regarding Eastern Europe, Russia, Eurasia
2 - First of all, remove the political references in the essay. As a student, the focus should be less on...
Undergraduatelancerlot99 - Oct 27, 2022 / Holt - Oct 28, 2022
|"Tell a story from your life that developed or help you develop your character" essay
Undergraduatemnivar - Oct 27, 2022 / Holt - Oct 28, 2022
|Women empowerment - Common app essay on event that sparked period of personal growth
4 - Merged: Common App Essay- incident that sparked a period of personal growth Please review and give honest...
Undergraduaterandombrowngirl - Oct 22, 2022 / randombrowngirl - Oct 27, 2022
|The choir teacher - UBC: Explain How You Responded To A Problem
3 - @Wigic I think you need to structure the essay with more context. I would suggest you use the STAR...
UndergraduateWigic - Oct 16, 2022 / Jasminbajwa - Oct 26, 2022
|External validation - What is important to you? Why?
UndergraduateJasminbajwa - Oct 26, 2022 / Jasminbajwa - Oct 26, 2022
|Computer Science and Engineering - Personal Statement for a Korean University ( GIST , UNIST , PNU )
3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback. I thought writing 80% academics and 20% extra stuffs would do okay. I...
Undergraduatebrian7 - Oct 18, 2022 / brian7 - Oct 19, 2022
|Sport enthusiast, reader, dancer and computer lover. Common App Essay - background and identity
2 - The written presentation fails to satisfy the information requirements as indicated. These activities are quite common among the youth...
Undergraduatejellyybom - Oct 18, 2022 / Holt - Oct 19, 2022
|Brave and enterprising women - The "Why Barnard College?" essay
2 - The applicant animatedly speaks of the reasons why her keen interest in the university was developed. It is clear...
Undergraduatevalerialb - Oct 16, 2022 / Holt - Oct 16, 2022
|CommonApp Essay PS - the effect of Chess on my life
Undergraduatefrizter - Oct 13, 2022 / frizter - Oct 14, 2022
|Outgoing, passionate and holistic - Tell us about who you are
2 - The prompt will be used to assess how well you will merge into the student community of the university...
UndergraduateShitty05 - Oct 13, 2022 / Holt - Oct 14, 2022
|Constant battle - umich supplement - community essay (294 words)
2 - The idea behind this essay is to show the way that the applicant positively views herself through her membership...
Undergraduaterimjhim - Oct 3, 2022 / Holt - Oct 4, 2022
|UIUC Supplementary Essay_Explain your experience related to your first-choice major.
Undergraduateminiwinsle - Oct 3, 2022 / Holt - Oct 3, 2022
|Managing and planing - Quest Bridge College Application - Short Answers Section
2 - While being a fantastic time and schedule manager is admirable, that is not exactly the kind of proudest achievement...
Undergraduatemin_soe - Sep 20, 2022 / Holt - Sep 20, 2022
|A world full of global warming, war and depleting resources - GLOBAL KOREAN SCHOLARSHIP
3 - Hi, I'm no expert. But since as a reader i really like the content, you've put into this essay....
Undergraduateessybear - Sep 15, 2022 / famma12345 - Sep 17, 2022
|Quest Bridge National College Match Personal Statement- Essay on my ability to focus
2 - There is no need to state the obvious at the end of the essay. Allow your paragraphs to speak...
Undergraduatevivi12345 - Sep 14, 2022 / Holt - Sep 17, 2022
|What sparked a period of your personal growth? Running competition; "should I just give up?"
2 - The sentiment presented in this essay will certainly be seen as thoughtful and personal by the reviewer. However, he...
Undergraduatemadigrace8975 - Sep 14, 2022 / Holt - Sep 15, 2022
|My first sketch - Architecture University
3 - Merged: Sketch 2 - GKS-U Personal Statement Years after my family recovered from an electrical fire in...
Undergraduatecruellapoisonz - Sep 11, 2022 / cruellapoisonz - Sep 15, 2022
|GKS STUDY PLAN ON MAJOR, FUTURE PLAN- MICROBIOLOGY
Undergraduatejulia_stn7 - Sep 12, 2022 / Holt - Sep 14, 2022
|I quickly grasp the learning concepts; GKS UNDERGRADUATE STUDY PLAN - PUSAN NATIONAL UNIVERSITY
3 - actually, i think you really messed up this study plan. they will not care how you followed the strict...
Undergraduatejulia_stn7 - Sep 11, 2022 / mylife1234 - Sep 12, 2022
|Question about your dreams and efforts you've made so far and future plans on it
UndergraduateAlexander Park - Sep 11, 2022 / Alexander Park - Sep 11, 2022
|Essay about an experience or accomplishment which has shaped you as a person
2 - The text is too compressed on the page. It lacks proper formatting based on paragraph focus and content. Please...
Undergraduateshefickle - Sep 11, 2022 / Holt - Sep 11, 2022
|Common App PS - The effect that color guard had on my ability to plan and prioritize
2 - Provide an explanation of what a color guard is. A clarification is needed since not everyone will be familiar...
Undergraduateweewoo - Sep 10, 2022 / Holt - Sep 11, 2022
|Essay about my choice for Econ major from my common app personal statement.
3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your response! I understood my mistakes. I will rewrite the essay...
Undergraduateakhmadaliyev_n - Sep 9, 2022 / akhmadaliyev_n - Sep 10, 2022
|"Striving is the only reasonable answer" Global Korea Scholarship Essay
3 - @Holt thank you so much for your feedback. I will post the updated one in a different thread is...
Undergraduateapollogeist - Sep 8, 2022 / apollogeist - Sep 9, 2022
|Finding Insight, Purpose and Potential in Chaos_QuestBridge Biographical Essay
2 - The camper van lifestyle should be held together by a beginning. How did the family end up that way?...
Undergraduatecmakenna - Sep 4, 2022 / Holt - Sep 4, 2022
|Admission Essay - Essay about my interests on blockchain and how I got into it
Undergraduatedark_sword77 - Aug 24, 2022 / dark_sword77 - Aug 25, 2022
|Give us an example of how the pandemic has changed your involvement in the community or group- UBC
2 - The essay is not well thought out by the applicant. As an overall presentation, it is disconnected and uses...
UndergraduateArshit0303 - Aug 21, 2022 / Holt - Aug 22, 2022
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