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|What motivates you to join 'Teach for india'
2 - You are off track with this presentation. You have not really convinced the reader that you are interested in...
Undergraduateanas3223 - Oct 21, 2020 / Holt - Oct 21, 2020
|Common Application Essay about the Fashion Industry
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for the feedback! I'll get rid of the first 2 paragraphs and shorten the...
UndergraduateArtlover1623 - Oct 18, 2020 / Artlover1623 - Oct 18, 2020
|Common App Essay: Khushi Means Happiness
3 - @Holt The word count this year is 650. How can I make it more engaging? Do you think shortening...
Undergraduatekvyas123 - Oct 16, 2020 / kvyas123 - Oct 18, 2020
|Why I hate the questions where are you from
7 - @MattiaPiaggi I think only last part of your essay indicates why you want to be in NYU. I would...
UndergraduateMattiaPiaggi - Oct 12, 2020 / lylrose - Oct 17, 2020
|WHY DAVIDSON COLLEGE? I've thought of several things and these really stood out to me
2 - The first paragraph is of an excessive length. Remove the reference to the major you have chosen to pursue...
Undergraduateawelawi - Oct 15, 2020 / Holt - Oct 16, 2020
|Lifelong bonds - What is important to you? And why?
2 - There is a disconnection between the first few sentences in your presentation and the rest of your essay. You...
Undergraduateheheh123 - Oct 13, 2020 / Holt - Oct 13, 2020
|Struggling to answer UBC personal profile prompts because of my personal circumstance.
UndergraduateDragonlady - Oct 12, 2020 / Dragonlady - Oct 13, 2020
|Personal Statement for Uk University - Consulting Company Experience
2 - You have not written a personal statement. This is a curriculum vitae. It is not considered a proper personal...
Undergraduateabdullahmo - Oct 11, 2020 / Holt - Oct 12, 2020
|Common App Essay - Prompt 4 "how I defeated my social anxiety"
3 - With the limited word count that you were provided, it is impossible to accommodate a highly intricate explanation of...
Undergraduateaklflol - Oct 9, 2020 / Holt - Oct 10, 2020
|Autobiography about myself - for university scholarship
2 - This is an excessively long essay. I am sure that you were provided with a minimum and maximum word...
Undergraduatehuean217 - Oct 8, 2020 / Holt - Oct 9, 2020
|Columbia Essay on an active role in my community. A sock drive for a local homeless shelter
2 - I like this essay. It is engaging, informative, and fun to read. You pretty much covered all of the...
Undergraduatejenincollege - Oct 7, 2020 / Holt - Oct 8, 2020
|Prompt: Discuss a popular stereotype that you believe people might have about YOU. Explain
4 - @Holt I have tried to make some adjustments according to what you have told me. I mainly added some...
Undergraduatejustagirl - Oct 6, 2020 / justagirl - Oct 7, 2020
|Common App Essay - A Year in Japan Prompt 1 - identity, interest, or talent
2 - Try to come up with a more interesting title for the essay. One more descriptive of the discussion you...
UndergraduateHaruka_na - Oct 5, 2020 / Holt - Oct 6, 2020
|BFA Photography and Video - Statement of Intent
4 - A statement of intent needs to prove that you are a qualified candidate for the course you hope to...
UndergraduateFreedomGround - Oct 3, 2020 / Holt - Oct 4, 2020
|Tell us about who you are; I have the will and patience it takes to make a strong individual.
4 - The essay asks you to choose between your friends or community for the second description regarding how other people...
Undergraduatesaatvik7 - Oct 3, 2020 / Holt - Oct 4, 2020
|India and children future - Tell us about who you are
3 - I do not really see any rebellion in this presentation. Unless you mean that you rebelled by going against...
Undergraduatearchitphy - Sep 29, 2020 / Holt - Sep 30, 2020
|Nigeria - Educational resources and opportunities - My personal essay for common application
UndergraduateReinabel - Sep 28, 2020 / Holt - Sep 30, 2020
|Hard-working, analytical, intellectual - Application essay from an international student.
5 - @Holt Thank you very much for your response! I applied the first part, however, I can't seem to find...
Undergraduateddejud - Sep 27, 2020 / ddejud - Sep 28, 2020
|College Essay about meeting my dad
2 - Well this story really gets the reviewer into a part of your life that the other prompts may not...
Undergraduatetolbertk - Sep 28, 2020 / Holt - Sep 28, 2020
|GKS-U Personal Statement BIOTECHNOLOGY
2 - Your motivation to study in Korea is not making sense. You just said the same thing 3 different ways....
UndergraduateJPM21 - Sep 25, 2020 / Holt - Sep 26, 2020
|Describe personal information you want to share as a part of your admissions application
2 - You have a pretty good outline of what you want to discuss. Yes, these are extenuating circumstances that you...
UndergraduateWorthyJ2001 - Sep 24, 2020 / Holt - Sep 25, 2020
|Moving homes obstacle essay for common app
2 - Well, this is certainly a well written essay. However, I am not sure if you wrote this for the...
Undergraduatepelikrispy - Sep 22, 2020 / Holt - Sep 23, 2020
|Common App Essay : 'Clay Shavings'
Undergraduatepuffadore - Sep 17, 2020 / puffadore - Sep 18, 2020
|Films and Genders - why you selected this specific academic program - common app essay
2 - You did not provide a proper response to the question. You were asked about why you chose your major,...
UndergraduateSungbin Moon - Sep 18, 2020 / Holt - Sep 18, 2020
|An academic oriented family - Global Korean Scholarship Undergraduate (personal statement)
2 - It is a good essay. It is simple in presentation and very straightforward. You delivered on most of the...
Undergraduatevalentinamatelli - Sep 17, 2020 / Holt - Sep 18, 2020
|Common App gap year essay (250 words)
UndergraduateSungbin Moon - Sep 11, 2020 / Sungbin Moon - Sep 18, 2020
|The next generation of technology - Personal statement for apply the British university.
UndergraduateVoidburn Rong - Sep 15, 2020 / imhana - Sep 15, 2020
|Mother's departure - personal statement for college application
3 - @Holt thank you so much for your message. Let me try and make things a bit Clearer. I'm answering...
UndergraduateThams - Sep 2, 2020 / Thams - Sep 7, 2020
|Naval Academy / Curious - USNA Personal Statement
2 - The interest in the Navy needs to show a progression on your part. The way you tell the story,...
Undergraduatesmugdrip - Sep 1, 2020 / Holt - Sep 2, 2020
|Texas A&M Transfer Essay- Agricultural Economics/ Agricultural Business
2 - Remove the last 2 paragraphs as these are irrelevant to the discussion prompt. Not only that, but it is...
Undergraduatekneeii - Aug 29, 2020 / Holt - Aug 30, 2020
|"Dreamers cannot be tamed." - Common Essay --Aiming for the elite colleges
5 - while I think that you are quite a great story-teller, please consider using less fancy words, I get that...
UndergraduateAtharvraturi27 - Jul 25, 2020 / KurekoHikari - Aug 24, 2020
|'Blue scrubs was all I knew growing up' - An event that sparked a period of personal growth.
2 - The focus of this essay is too much on your grandmother, the relationship you have with your grandmother, and...
UndergraduateKaylaburks28 - Aug 21, 2020 / Holt - Aug 21, 2020
|How would I describe the culture of my school community? Personal profile question
Undergraduatemahek agarwal - Aug 10, 2020 / mahek agarwal - Aug 12, 2020
|Flagler College 2020 Make History Essay
2 - The essay is confusing to read because of the timeline reference. You are moving from past to present tense...
Undergraduatejessicagiraldo02 - Aug 7, 2020 / Holt - Aug 8, 2020
|Fashion Business Management - FIT NYC FBM MAJOR UNDERGRADUATE
UndergraduateMissmay14th - Aug 2, 2020 / Holt - Aug 2, 2020
|Being the CEO - Describe a person that you admire
4 - "He changed my thought when I heard his life." Maybe add "about" after heard. Also,"He actually is an English...
UndergraduateHuong789456123 - Aug 1, 2020 / Dolly Doloris - Aug 1, 2020
|Essay for common app: montage structure essay about my planner.
3 - @Holt Thank you for your insight!! Out of all the common app prompts I chose "Some students have a...
UndergraduatelittleKivy - Jul 25, 2020 / littleKivy - Jul 26, 2020
|Virtual information session - Why Lafayette?
3 - The focus should not only be on the Dyer Center. You should also be focusing on addressing how your...
UndergraduateDilli - Jul 25, 2020 / Holt - Jul 25, 2020
|Influencing people - Leadership Chevening essay
UndergraduateThebiod - Jul 21, 2020 / Thebiod - Jul 23, 2020
|KGSP scholarship - I should not overlook this opportunity
UndergraduateKimmie3 - Jul 18, 2020 / Kimmie3 - Jul 19, 2020
|My answer prompt for essay question 1 of GSEP Program Application in Titech.
2 - Your essay is far off base, you actually forgot what the original prompt is about. You were being asked...
Undergraduateshahriar10 - Jul 17, 2020 / Holt - Jul 18, 2020
|I am going to apply for GSEP Program for Bachelor study in TITECH, Japan.
2 - I m afraid that you missed responding properly to several discussion points. You have to be clearer in your...
Undergraduateshahriar10 - Jul 15, 2020 / Holt - Jul 16, 2020
|Medical school personal statement - fortunate and grateful
Undergraduatetiredpremed - Jul 14, 2020 / Holt - Jul 15, 2020
|My own chords - Common App Essay
Undergraduatealsu03 - Jun 26, 2020 / wmm88 - Jun 28, 2020
|Nursing School Admissions Essay (assault, abuse, poverty, mental illness)
2 - What you have to understand is that the reviewer is looking for a unique backstory that will reflect the...
Undergraduatevioletmoon - May 28, 2020 / Holt - May 29, 2020
|Readmission Essay- Overcoming Academic Suspension
2 - I believe that you have written a tremendously strong, detailed, and insightful readmission request letter. You have acknowledged your...
UndergraduateDreamstofollow - May 28, 2020 / Holt - May 28, 2020
|Dreams, plans for the future and reasons for choosing KAIST
3 - @Holt Wow, thank you so much for the detailed feedback. Really though, I see you everywhere, pretty much a...
Undergraduategabriellesinaga - May 14, 2020 / gabriellesinaga - May 16, 2020
|Cybersecurity - how did you choose your proposed course and institution?
3 - @ChrisPra One of the poorest essays I have ever seen. Think twice, thrice before you write an important thing....
UndergraduateChrisPra - May 11, 2020 / TaraAryal23 - May 14, 2020
|Fulbright essay-personal statement- economic development
3 - @Holt How can I contact you privately? You may contact us at: email@example.com (request me for a private service)....
UndergraduateNiko_s - May 12, 2020 / Niko_s - May 12, 2020
|Why did you choose chemical engineering?
3 - This is not a statement that actually responds to the prompt. Your reasons are generic. It could apply to...
Undergraduatejhonferisaltamba - Apr 27, 2020 / Holt - Apr 27, 2020
|Personal statement to apply to universities in the UK (just the introduction and the conclusion)
2 - It would have been alright for you to post just the beginning and end of your personal statement if...
Undergraduatethuychitran - Apr 23, 2020 / Holt - Apr 24, 2020
|"Why Do You Want To Attend a Service Acdemy?" Question(s) for Nomination
3 - @Holt I appreciate the sincerity of your response. Honestly I was taken aback at first then realized that you're...
Undergraduatewilly_mcnilly - Apr 16, 2020 / willy_mcnilly - Apr 21, 2020
|[PERSONAL STATEMENT] If you could change anything about the way you were raised, what would it be?
2 - Let's consider what the prompt is asking you to discuss. What is it about your upbringing that you would...
Undergraduategrace261202 - Apr 9, 2020 / Holt - Apr 9, 2020
|Common App Essay, Non-Catholic attending Catholic School
Undergraduatepaigecaskey - Apr 6, 2020 / Holt - Apr 7, 2020
|SCAD Statement of Purpose - Transfer/ Illustration Major
2 - The essay is weak in two parts: (1) the preparation that you have done throughout that will make you...
UndergraduateNadai25 - Apr 1, 2020 / Holt - Apr 2, 2020
|NUS personal statement + SOP essay for science
2 - The reviewer is not asking you to enumerate your accomplishments and seminars attended. Instead, the statement requires you to...
UndergraduateSshreya - Mar 30, 2020 / Holt - Mar 31, 2020
|Statement of purpose AMA+ K'art, Screenwriting
3 - In my view, your essay is too informative, which is difficult for the reviewer to get into your story....
UndergraduateMelitanh - Mar 24, 2020 / khangdu8897 - Mar 24, 2020
|Germany - Personal Statement Essay for AFS Application - Proof-reading
2 - This is an excellent start to your response essay. You provide enough basic answers to the the questions. What...
Undergraduatevibrance - Mar 9, 2020 / Holt - Mar 10, 2020
|Canada Cartage - Waterloo Admission Information Form - Additional Information
2 - Talking about your part time job is the perfect way to respond to the instruction. There are no hard...
UndergraduateAbhayWalia - Feb 27, 2020 / Holt - Feb 27, 2020
|Waterloo AIF - Circumstances with an adverse effect on my academic performance
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