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Common App Essay for Rice "My Mother Taught Me"

2 - Your observations are correct. I learned more about your mother's history than I did about you in this essay....

Undergraduatenajma101 - 20 hours ago / Holt - 10 hours ago

College entrance essay for Pitt. How have you made an impact?

3 - Emily, the essay flies off in 2 different directions. The first, indicates how you participate in Valentine's Day activities...

Undergraduatequeenlcg - 1 day ago / Holt - 12 hours ago

The Match-Deciding Goal - Common App Essay Prompt 2

2 - Tahmeed, you have written a relevant essay but, you are using too many technical jargons in the essay. You...

UndergraduateTmos - 1 day ago / Holt - 12 hours ago

You're So Immature - Common App Essay; something that sparked a period of personal growth

6 - It's really simple. you challenged the belief of your father in your maturity. You questioned his belief that you...

Undergraduatenatasha1313 - 1 day ago / Holt - 13 hours ago

Common App College Essay- Im applying Early Decision to Syracuse so I want this to be good!

NEW - a gateway to my own introspection Pearl is her name. She's a little bulkier than most but gives...

UndergraduateLuchianoP - 1 day ago / — -

My American teacher. UVA supplement essay, is this good?

5 - Thanks so much for the advice, I'll try to integrate your advice into my essay in the best possible...

Undergraduatedaniel6shin - Oct 15, 2018 / daniel6shin - 1 day ago

Contributing to Community - MIT Supplemental Essay

2 - Jackie, you can improve this essay by first, removing the reference to Grey's Anatomy. You just don't know how...

Undergraduatejjw1711 - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago

Fresh off the Boat and Me - US College Essay (Harvard)

3 - Thank you for the feedback! The idea was supposed to be how my background inspired a passion/ talent which...

Undergraduatenesasux - Oct 16, 2018 / nesasux - 2 days ago

'I can't take it anymore I want to quit!' Common App Essay for University of Michigan

2 - Hannah, the personal growth in this essay is almost an afterthought in the discussion. When you read the essay,...

Undergraduatehec2019 - Oct 16, 2018 / Holt - 2 days ago

BEING ON THE OTHER SIDE OF THE COURT -- (COLLEGE ESSAY)

2 - Ameya, don't use this essay. The common app prompts come with 2 specific and separate topics for discussion. Those...

Undergraduateameyajain07 - Oct 14, 2018 / Holt - Oct 16, 2018

Essay about the environment I was raised in and how it shaped me as a person.

3 - @Holt Thanks for taking the time to read this, I really appreciate it!...

Undergraduateamanda_sauce - Oct 14, 2018 / amanda_sauce - Oct 16, 2018

A custom question on academic and career goals, that received criticism

3 - Ali, your essay is so roundabout in responding to the prompt that you ended up giving a non-response to...

Undergraduatesomething411 - Oct 14, 2018 / Holt - Oct 15, 2018

Probably the first thing anyone thinks of when they see me is "Hey, that guy's an Asian!" UBC essay

3 - Jonathan. This is an interesting creative writing exercise. It is not a prompt responsive presentation. There is a time...

UndergraduateAlpineBlade - Oct 14, 2018 / Holt - Oct 15, 2018

Academics and community. Who or What influenced you to apply to Syracuse? 250 word cap

3 - Thank you! Really appreciated the grammatical comment and the part to be more specific about the learning communities. Glad...

UndergraduateLuchianoP - Oct 10, 2018 / LuchianoP - Oct 14, 2018

William and Mary "What Makes You Unique?" Essay: Amiibo Collecting Essay

3 - @Holt Thank you for the feedback Holt, I really appreciate it. With regards to going full circle with...

Undergraduatepietrom - Oct 13, 2018 / pietrom - Oct 14, 2018

What have motivated you to study in the eight-year program? My love for Science

2 - Sydney, when you say that you were too young to understand what the illness of your uncle meant, exactly...

Undergraduatesmarquez16 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018

Essay about a story of my life that demonstrates my character or helped to shape it

2 - Sabrina, I learned more about the type of character your father has and your family struggles in this essay...

UndergraduateAriesa7 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018

The powerful aromas of ginger and turmeric - 'encountering an obstacle' essay

2 - Sam, the prompt you picked does not fit the response that you wrote. This is not an obstacle you...

UndergraduateSammy123 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018

Parents and Pastors - AppplyTexas essay topic A

3 - Thanks for the critiques...

UndergraduateJames1135 - Oct 12, 2018 / James1135 - Oct 13, 2018

"Home" - Boston University Transfer Application essay

4 - Merged: "Home" - Boston University Transfer essay [rewritten] I recently posted my first draft of my Boston...

Undergraduatectbouzan - Oct 11, 2018 / ctbouzan - Oct 13, 2018

UBC Personal Profile Answer - 'kindness is a virtue??'?

4 - Hello! I'm still new to replying and providing feedback on here but I hope to provide you with some...

Undergraduatetastpom - Sep 24, 2018 / ctbouzan - Oct 13, 2018

Georgia tech application - Describe a day in your life

5 - Alright Holt, thank you....

Undergraduatejoshuaronis - Oct 12, 2018 / joshuaronis - Oct 13, 2018

How has a film influenced me (NYU Tisch Prompt)

2 - Nirvigna, don't narrate the movie to the reviewer. He already knows what the movie is about and what aspects...

Undergraduateproxyishere - Oct 11, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018

FILM/TV Student Why NYU College ESSAY (400 words)

5 - Nirvigna, this essay does not need any background music. You don't need to "love me like you do". You...

Undergraduateproxyishere - Oct 10, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018

Fear of asking for help - Common App Essay

2 - Gaby, the story you narrated doesn't fall under an obstacle that you had to overcome. Instead, it falls under...

Undergraduatelynnlynn - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018

Common App Application - How building my first computer impacted me

2 - Hi James. After reviewing your essay, I have come to the conclusion that your language teacher is right. It...

UndergraduateJalspaw096 - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 12, 2018

Common App essay on baking. Cake as a form of expression

4 - I am confused about the actual point of this open topic essay. What was the personal prompt that you...

Undergraduatekebegan - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 12, 2018

My Bucket List 1.SELECT ONE EXAMPLE HAVEN'T FINISHED IN YOUR BUCKET LIST 2.HOW TO FINISH THIS GOAL

3 - Hi Derek, can you tell me if you are writing this essay for an English language class or if...

Undergraduates89180 - Oct 11, 2018 / Holt - Oct 12, 2018

My ticket of success, ticket of dreams and ambition - College essay "ticket in hand" prompt

7 - Ok thank you for the advice I'll just show you my other draft when I do it This...

Undergraduateleilo10 - Oct 10, 2018 / leilo10 - Oct 11, 2018

Helping Community in Florida - MIT Supplemental Essay

3 - Jackie, your presentation is too short. Aim to present at least 200 words for this response essay. By increasing...

Undergraduatejjw1711 - Oct 11, 2018 / Holt - Oct 11, 2018

UBC College Essay Prompt 1 - about me in my community - and my attempt (undergrad)...

4 - Thanks for the feedback. The essay is 249 words excluding the words in the brackets. Perhaps you also had...

Undergraduateurbestpal - Oct 10, 2018 / urbestpal - Oct 11, 2018

Reasons to choose UWaterloo and Software engineering

3 - Thank you Holt for your suggestions are these edits alright :- # I want to build a startup in...

UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Oct 9, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Oct 10, 2018

My friends and family would describe me as someone who is very supportive and hardworking. UBC essay

2 - Hi Victoria, have you given any thought to providing the response to this question by interviewing one specific person...

Undergraduatevictoria_003 - Oct 9, 2018 / Holt - Oct 9, 2018

Common APP : Self Reflection Essay - God's plan for me

3 - Jesutofonmi, when I read a highly religious response to a given prompt, even for an open topic one, I...

UndergraduateJayalli - Oct 7, 2018 / Holt - Oct 8, 2018

I know that I belong at FIT - I will be able to thrive there and meet my full potential

3 - thank you so much! your comments have been very helpful and I made a lot of changes...

UndergraduateArmelle - Oct 3, 2018 / Armelle - Oct 7, 2018

Texas A&M Topic A College Application Essay - How my family and responsibilities have impacted me

2 - This is a solid essay that responds to the prompt in a highly informative and imaginative way. I can...

Undergraduatedanacschubert - Oct 6, 2018 / Holt - Oct 7, 2018

Parents' advice about thinking - TEXAS A&M UNIVERSITY ESSAY QUESTION

10 - Lara, at this point, any changes or additions to the statement that you wrote is actually up to you....

Undergraduatelaradonabedian - Sep 28, 2018 / Holt - Oct 7, 2018

UChicago Required Short Essay - a chess match is my most prevalent memory of Chicago

3 - Ok thank you so much for the response! Here's a new version I remember seeing a chess game...

Undergraduateczhang - Oct 5, 2018 / czhang - Oct 6, 2018

The freedom to think, innovate and create something solely using imagination and logical reasoning

3 - Mr. Holt can you please check this modified answer. I have tried to implement your suggestions in the below...

UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 27, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Oct 5, 2018

Part of me knows the vital and constitutive ideals of the environment I am accustomed to live with

2 - The essay does not need help when it comes to bettering the content. The information is too complete, engaging,...

UndergraduateJGiselle123 - Oct 4, 2018 / Holt - Oct 5, 2018

Help me to correcting my introduction essay :)

6 - @btoguntade Thank you very much for your kindness to help me :) your suggestions are very helpful. I'll try...

UndergraduateEsseenn - Oct 4, 2018 / Esseenn - Oct 4, 2018

Common App Essay - Baking. I love baking. I stress-bake. I bake when I'm happy, sad, angry, or tired

2 - I think you should describe it more clearly. I think this prompt likes describing your hobbies or something like...

Undergraduatedelfin2001 - Oct 4, 2018 / mainguyengoc2908 - Oct 4, 2018

"I did my best" - Describe a time that you were late for and event:

3 - By looking at your name and reading your writing style, I'm guessing that you are Vietnamese, just like me....

Undergraduatekhuong97dx2 - Oct 3, 2018 / Ly Huyen Tran - Oct 4, 2018

KGSP Program for Undergraduate/Study plans to improve foreign languages (Korean, English, etc)

4 - Muchas Gracias, thank you very much! @Holt @dfwm...

Undergraduateluisa998483 - Oct 1, 2018 / luisa998483 - Oct 2, 2018

Request to review my AIF for University of Waterloo on Programming Knowledge

4 - @terminal28 Oh yeh thanks, I forgot to mention that these programs are written in python. @cao1km I will...

UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 28, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Sep 30, 2018

My transfer application essay to UIUC Aerospace Engineering

2 - Hello, I am a final year Computer Science and Engineering student. I have a few points in mind...

Undergraduatethescholar123 - Sep 30, 2018 / datascienceboy1 - Sep 30, 2018

UBC Entrance Essay on Unfamiliar Situation and Learning Outcomes - Airplane Engine Failure

2 - Dimitri, this is a very weak response to the prompt. The lesson learned is not impressive because there was...

Undergraduatedimitri0071 - Sep 29, 2018 / Holt - Sep 30, 2018

Passion for music and computer science. While playing the piano I'm also practicing programming.

3 - ... are not all that different --> do you think that "that" is necessary here. ... I remembered buying...

Undergraduatevivianlin - Sep 27, 2018 / cao1km - Sep 29, 2018

My first microscope - University of Illinois at Chicago admission essay

2 - Hamza, the focus of your essay is supposed to be Biological Science right? I take it that you are...

Undergraduatehamz787 - Sep 28, 2018 / Holt - Sep 28, 2018

My tours - review my Personal Profile (about myself) for UBC

4 - Thank you Holt for your suggestions I will implement these....

UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 24, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Sep 28, 2018

UofT One Idea Supplementary Essay (similar to the common app essay) - learning from failure

2 - Ophelia, consider shortening the backstory for your essay. It is way too long and creates a really boring component...

Undergraduatebhcc21 - Sep 26, 2018 / Holt - Sep 27, 2018

What shaped you into the person you are today? 2019 college application essay

4 - @cao1km thank you for the feedback, I changed the "if" and "would" part and they still have the same...

UndergraduateMiguelolvera1 - Sep 24, 2018 / Miguelolvera1 - Sep 25, 2018

An impromptu speech without any earlier preparation - my response for a problem

3 - Hetav, there is no need, in my opinion, to change anything in this response statement. It is simple and...

UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018

West Union Building: A metaphor for my life (WHY DUKE ?)

2 - Kartik, it would do your essays well if you stop with the imagery and simply respond to the prompts...

Undergraduatekartikt - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018

Request to review personal profile for admission in UBC

4 - Hetav, for this essay, you just need to rearrange some of your presentation in order to make your response...

UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018

QuestBridge Miscelleneous Short Questions for college application

3 - 1. You are not talking about an achievement and what it says about you. Rather, you are discussing a...

UndergraduateJainam_Shah - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018

THE BRILLIANT FOLLY OF A MAGNET DRIVEN CAR - Amherst Supplement Essay

4 - @kartikt Definitely much better. It's more believable in terms of age requirement and the situation presented is something that...

Undergraduatekartikt - Sep 22, 2018 / Holt - Sep 23, 2018

Why are you applying and how can we help you achieve your goals at Syracuse?

2 - There are three points on which I believe your first essay can be developed- 1. You could include specific...

Undergraduatestatic100 - Sep 22, 2018 / kartikt - Sep 22, 2018

Grey Hair and Stuffed Rooms - Common App Essay

3 - Thank you sooo much for your valuable feedback ! Astronomy is my central hook for the entire application. I...

Undergraduatekartikt - Sep 21, 2018 / kartikt - Sep 22, 2018

How to effectively describe my career goals? - Indiana University

2 - Zach, the best way to approach this essay is to first, think about what your immediate plans are for...

Undergraduatezachfl - Sep 20, 2018 / Holt - Sep 21, 2018

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