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|NUS (NATIONAL UNIVERSITY OF SINGAPORE) PERSONAL STATEMENT FOR ARCHITECTURE UNDERGRADUATE.
2 - The essay is a bit difficult to understand due to the problematic sentence structure. It is obvious that you...
Undergraduatehrishi - 5 hrs ago / Holt - 3 hrs ago
|Essay about a place - Ho Chi Minh
2 - I'll assume that you are practicing to write in British English and use that as the reference point. Remember...
UndergraduateThnhNgn - 18 hrs ago / Holt - 11 hrs ago
|The Disciples of Christ Church - Chapman Personal TRANSFER essay
2 - I believe that you misunderstood the instruction for the discussion. It is not asking you for your path throughout...
Undergraduateaanselmostudent - 2 days ago / Holt - 2 days ago
|My reason for choosing the data science and CFM majors at Waterloo University
2 - Try to open the statement with the factual presentation that you were attracted to the Waterloo curriculum and courses...
Undergraduatealice725 - 2 days ago / Holt - 2 days ago
|UWaterloo AIF Help (Computer Science and Data Science) - reasons of your program choice
4 - Hi. I think you need to be more specific about what sparked your interest in CS and Data Science....
UndergraduateAcedia1001 - Feb 10, 2020 / Ulaai - 2 days ago
|What is your main reason to study media and communication? Bachelor Degree
Undergraduatehatdenhoxxx - Feb 13, 2020 / Holt - Feb 14, 2020
|Computer science and business/mathematics - Help with my waterloo aif
2 - If you can just stop constantly referring to "applied to the University of Waterloo" so that you can immediately...
Undergraduaterwufeng - Feb 12, 2020 / Holt - Feb 13, 2020
|Help with my Waterloo AIF! (Comp. Sci / Math [Data Science])
3 - There are two keywords in this essay that will weaken your consideration for a student slot. The words are...
Undergraduateheet - Feb 11, 2020 / Holt - Feb 12, 2020
|Middle school teacher - The most memorable person in your life
5 - (The most memorable person in your life) The most memorable person in my life is my teacher in middle...
Undergraduatephu nhuyen - Feb 11, 2020 / parviz - Feb 11, 2020
|Help with UWaterloo AIF Part A (Applying to Computer Eng.)
Undergraduateangrypanda - Feb 10, 2020 / angrypanda - Feb 11, 2020
|'amazing, a wonderful friend and an even better person' - Other people's opinions of me
2 - If you just revise the beginning of the statement to exclude the reference to your brother and focus instead...
Undergraduateash1699 - Feb 10, 2020 / Holt - Feb 10, 2020
|My Younger Brothers Cancer
3 - Writing: Your writing is very good, I am just pointing out some grammatical and spelling mistakes that I found...
Undergraduatepaigecaskey - Feb 10, 2020 / Gaucho - Feb 10, 2020
|IVEY AEO ESSAY (Character in Leadership)
4 - Well, this is certainly a very reflective essay response. You actually managed to respond to the prompt in a...
Undergraduateyellowjello123 - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Feb 1, 2020
|The swimming community- Advice on my Queen's PSE Essay
UndergraduateFercruz - Jan 29, 2020 / Fercruz - Jan 31, 2020
|Essay on an important political issue concerning my community and my generation. -UT Austin prompt
Undergraduatezanwar2 - Jan 29, 2020 / zanwar2 - Jan 29, 2020
|Computer Science - Undergraduate application Jacobs University
2 - This statement is too general in terms of references. You are not really giving the reviewer any information that...
UndergraduateOngun1905 - Jan 28, 2020 / Holt - Jan 28, 2020
|Describe a situation when it was important for you to work with someone you didn't know
7 - @Holt I suggest you rewrite this essay using a situation in which you met the lecturer of yours half...
UndergraduateSunday Ujong - Jan 20, 2020 / ReginaOtu - Jan 25, 2020
|What does diversity mean to you and why do you think society needs diversity? No more than 250 words
Undergraduatejacobs - Jan 24, 2020 / Holt - Jan 25, 2020
|NTU - Skin problems / Describe a person who has had an influence on you.
2 - Is there a character limitation on your statement? If so, you should lessen the description of your skin problems...
Undergraduatejtjt99 - Jan 23, 2020 / Holt - Jan 23, 2020
|Tell us about a time when you learned from failure - UofT One Idea Application
4 - Merged: Tell us about a time when you learned from failure - UofT One Idea Application During...
Undergraduateguyucguy - Jan 21, 2020 / guyucguy - Jan 23, 2020
|Part A, Waterloo AIF - biomedical program, pharmacy
2 - The essay is weak and unimpressive for the most part. However, there are certain sections that you can use...
Undergraduatevmsl1937 - Jan 21, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|Describe a situation when you had to work very hard to achieve what was required.
UndergraduateEvidenceBrown - Jan 20, 2020 / EvidenceBrown - Jan 21, 2020
|AIF Extracurriculars Essay - additional information
3 - This is meant to be only a response statement as it offers only a 600 character allotment. So you...
Undergraduategeorgiaberg - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 20, 2020
|Why I decided to try in school - AIF Waterloo; tell anything else about yourself
4 - You need to write a new supporting statement. It is alright to brag, in a less direct manner in...
Undergraduatehowardturtle - Jan 19, 2020 / Holt - Jan 20, 2020
|The Reason Why I Am Interested In Engineering And Willing To Perform Well
5 - Can you provide the complete prompt for this essay so that a proper review of your work can be...
Undergraduatetheone2020 - Jan 19, 2020 / Holt - Jan 20, 2020
|AIF For Software Engineering (More About Your Goals)
2 - Without access to the actual prompt you are responding to, I cannot really tell you that you are responding...
Undergraduatetheone2020 - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 20, 2020
|Why I'm not motivated in highschool
3 - I'm not sure if lack of motivation is what they're looking for, typically I believe this is used for...
Undergraduatehowardturtle - Jan 17, 2020 / georgiaberg - Jan 20, 2020
|International issues - Personal Statement for Applying to undergraduate course at NUS
7 - Have you tried build your own games? You can elaborate more on that. What programming language or platform did...
UndergraduateLemonBreadKing - Jan 1, 2020 / Ulaai - Jan 18, 2020
|UBC Personal Profile: Importance of a Balanced Life
3 - I am afraid that the essay ran away from you and the prompt itself. What you discussed was more...
UndergraduateFamai - Jan 4, 2020 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|Moving to the Philippines - NTU: event or incident you have encountered personally
2 - What is missing in this essay is the actual impact of how these immersive experiences on you as a...
Undergraduatejtjt99 - Jan 18, 2020 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|One employment opportunity - it's impact and the greatest learning outcome for me
2 - As of the moment, what I think is implied in the essay is that you are a self-centered person...
UndergraduateSakyo107 - Jan 16, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|UW AIF Part B: Question 4. Data Science / Machine Learning
2 - This statement is meant to get to know you beyond your interest in Data Science and Machine Learning. I...
Undergraduatejust_a_gene - Jan 16, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|Uw AIF for computer science coop. Part A Question 1
3 - As Holt mentioned, try to be more specific in your goals and what led you to them. For example,...
UndergraduateIR_567 - Jan 16, 2020 / just_a_gene - Jan 16, 2020
|Writing my personal statement on moving states and finding myself
2 - Try to make this essay stronger by explaining what research path you wish to take. If it is laboratory...
Undergraduatenormsauce - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|'to make a difference in Prague' - ERASMUS MUNDUS SCHOLARSHIP: TOURISM DEVELOPMENT AND CULTURE (MSC)
2 - The last paragraph should be the opening paragraph of this essay. It carries your actual motivation for your desire...
UndergraduateVitova6 - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|My plans are connected with Indonesia if I'll be not able to receive the scholarship (100 words max)
3 - Your response sounds too relaxed for the prompt provided. You need to take a more serious tone in response...
Undergraduateandreazarina - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|"adaptable" - UBC application essay----tell us about yourself
2 - You only responded to the last part of the essay regarding what you are proud of. You failed to...
Undergraduatekarmalea - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|Engineering as a major - China student enrolling in USA
3 - @Holt I really appreciated your response, and I tried to fix my answer by the order of question that...
UndergraduateHotDragon10 - Jan 13, 2020 / HotDragon10 - Jan 15, 2020
|I am putting forward my candidacy for enrollment in electrical engineering of an University
2 - Don't just rely on Elon Musk and his accomplishments in the field of neural science to prove your motivation...
Undergraduatemoog2001 - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|COMMON APP, is this necessary? Details of circumstances or qualifications...
3 - This part of the application essay is optional because it has to do with some factors that may exist...
UndergraduatePabloEscobar - Dec 25, 2019 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Tell us about who you are. How would your family, friends describe. (UBC personal profile)
4 - It would be better if you used a different personality trait for every section required in the essay. The...
UndergraduateArmaanS - Jan 5, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Waterloo Engineering and AFM AIF - Accounting and Financial Management
UndergraduateWaterCivEngAFM - Jan 14, 2020 / WaterCivEngAFM - Jan 14, 2020
|The band that I organized by myself. Activities that are most important to you
Undergraduaterichardli0124 - Jan 14, 2020 / richardli0124 - Jan 14, 2020
|UBC Personal Profile: What is important to me (Ikigai - a simple, but fulfilling philosophy)
2 - The last paragraph of this essay should really be the first paragraph because that is the direct response to...
Undergraduatehumairak - Jan 13, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Social anxiety, academic failure - My Common App Personal Statement
4 - "Show, don't tell" is vital to writing an engaging essay, and this is the point students struggle with most....
UndergraduateLearn2Do89 - Jan 8, 2020 / sky004 - Jan 13, 2020
|Unfortunate circumstances - UBC essay question for admission
3 - The essay doesn't respond to the prompt. You are telling me about your brother with special needs when the...
Undergraduateaaron_20222 - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|Ivey MSc Business Analytics - Technical and Quantitative Aptitude
2 - The essay sounds more like you explaining what you understand about the course objectives. You come across more as...
UndergraduateXindy - Jan 9, 2020 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|UBC application essay--- What is important to you? And why? To respect one another's views.
2 - The theme of the response should be found in the first paragraph. Since respecting the point of view of...
Undergraduatekarmalea - Jan 13, 2020 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|ADMISSIONS ESSAY: TELL MORE ABOUT YOU. RELATE ONE/MORE EXPERIENCE AFFECTING YOUR DEVELOPMENT.
2 - The essay theme is a good one. However, the presentation is not very good. It suffers from proper editing...
Undergraduatethaithu - Jan 10, 2020 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|UBC PERSONAL PROFILE - study of psychology (WHAT IS IMPORTANT TO YOU AND WHY)
2 - The title of your essay could use some improvement. It is not as eye-catching nor interesting as you might...
Undergraduateharsh003 - Jan 10, 2020 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|Canada summer 2018 - Social10. Your reaction to a problem and/or an unfamiliar situation
UndergraduateEstellaL - Jan 6, 2020 / EstellaL - Jan 13, 2020
|Energetic boy / family love - UBC personal profile_Tell us about who you are
Undergraduatejane2020 - Jan 11, 2020 / jane2020 - Jan 12, 2020
|SOP for Research Internship (machine learning project)
2 - The essay is too informal in presentation. Since you are writing an academic essay, you have to avoid placing...
UndergraduateShan99 - Jan 8, 2020 / Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|UBC Personal Profile essay - About my aspirations and describing myself
Undergraduatekathleenjeanne - Jan 4, 2020 / Holt - Jan 11, 2020
|Queen's Commerce PSE - ECs Impact and Learning Outcome, value of collaboration
2 - I do not feel as if you have properly reflected the lesson in cooperation and community in the 2nd...
UndergraduateUyenN272 - Jan 3, 2020 / Holt - Jan 11, 2020
|Square ONE - Common app essay suggestions
2 - There are several development plot points in your essay that require further attention in order to tie the essay...
UndergraduateDaisy7703 - Dec 31, 2019 / Holt - Jan 11, 2020
|Society goals - WHY WOULD YOU BE A GREAT PARTICIPANT FOR THE GLOBAL UGRAD PROGRAM? #ESSAY 1
2 - Sam, your essay provides a generalized review of how you view your country and leadership skills. Unfortunately, these types...
UndergraduateSoukeang Sam - Dec 25, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2020
|Solar Cooking - WashU Supplemental: Something that sparks your interest and curiosity
UndergraduateJiaxin Ye - Dec 23, 2019 / Jiaxin Ye - Jan 3, 2020
|Arabic music rhythm. Last minute Stanford Application Essay
2 - @Abraham29 HI there. Welcome to the forum. I hope that my feedback suits you well. While I find...
UndergraduateAbraham29 - Jan 1, 2020 / Maria - Jan 2, 2020
|UBC Personal Profile: The Idealistic Dreamer
3 - @Maria Thanks for the feedback! Actually, the essay doesn't even have a title, I just included it to highlight...
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