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|Describe the factors that have most influenced you and your hopes and dreams.
6 - @charzbk Hello! I feel that your essay was written well although you should start it stronger -- something that...
Undergraduatecharzbk - Jan 15, 2017 / notmargaux - 09:31am
|Diversity -------UW Mad------- Something unnoticed, importance to me.
2 - Natalia, your essay is short in the "show" portion. Apart from the opening statement which was more anecdotal in...
UndergraduateNaty - 07:46am / Holt - 08:16am
|From a homebody to the active body. UW Madison Essay -- Something important but unnoticed
8 - If you want to approach the essay from an out of the box point of view, then use the...
Undergraduatebarney - Yesterday / Holt - 06:43am
|Young Hands - my childish enthusiasm at my very fingertips. Common App Personal Statement
3 - Anthea, I am not sure why you are discussing your musical inclination in this essay. How does this relate...
Undergraduatetchaikovsky - Yesterday / Holt - Yesterday
|How I overcame my fear of public speaking - UBC Business Tech Management Personal Profile
4 - @anxjos. Is quite okay. But my little addition is that yiu should say you have always looked for an...
Undergraduateanxjso - Jan 14, 2017 / Knockout - Jan 17, 2017
|'the choice to change the world' Spelman College Transfer Essay
11 - @Holt Thank you very much - for your guidance and assistance on my essay!!...
Undergraduatemayline87 - Jan 8, 2017 / mayline87 - Jan 17, 2017
|Loyola Marymount Supplement - The primary purpose of education
3 - Selin, like Ichan said, you have to get your essays into the Urgent thread if you have a short...
Undergraduatesweetsenior - Jan 16, 2017 / Holt - Jan 17, 2017
|Virginia tech - Our motto is UT Promise. How is service to others important for you?
2 - Nathan, Ut Prosim which is the Latin motto of Virginia Tech literally means "That I may serve". The prompt...
UndergraduatenathanL - Jan 16, 2017 / Holt - Jan 17, 2017
|A talk with an ex-homeless person - UBC personal profile
6 - I think your essay could get much stronger if you emphasized how you felt when you heard that man's...
UndergraduateDluusional - Jan 14, 2017 / sweetsenior - Jan 16, 2017
|Exchanging ideas and sharing experiences. Applying in scholarship, Essay about my interests.
11 - @Holt Thank you so much for your help. It really helpful for me, but I'll try my best first....
UndergraduateAlindaputri - Jan 9, 2017 / Alindaputri - Jan 16, 2017
|Providence College Supplemental essay: Finding the ultimate truth
14 - Thank you for helping me with all my essays! If it hadn't been for you I don't know how...
Undergraduatengokhoa99 - Jan 14, 2017 / ngokhoa99 - Jan 15, 2017
|Investing in human development through education and research for national energy defense
5 - Zaki, since this is a very specific application prompt, I believe that you should focus on the possible hypothesis...
Undergraduatemasktaz - Jan 8, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Project with Syrian Kids - critical thinking story / Why LMU? (LMU Supplements)
3 - Selin, due to the one essay per thread policy of the forum, you will only receive a review for...
Undergraduatesweetsenior - Jan 15, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|USC supplement:describe a time where I have to collaborate to accomplish more than I could by myself
4 - Jiang, what is the purpose of your organization or online magazine? Aside from the name of the organization, you...
UndergraduateBennyoooo - Jan 15, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|My experience of selling samosa taught me to be optimistic... UBC Pharmacy
3 - Alsa, the first thing that you have to change in this essay is the reference to "we". The essay...
Undergraduatetaroto - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Mini-essay for my UBC application's personal profile. Problem and/or an unfamiliar situation.
6 - The new 2nd paragraph is better focused, even though it is not as lengthy as we hoped it could...
Undergraduatedavkang - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Essay opening description help - College experience
1 - Hello everyone, can someone please help me with the opening description of this supplement. a perfect college ...
Undergraduatecssanmy - Jan 15, 2017 / — -
|FASHION INSTITUTE OF TECHNOLOGY - Creative Photography Essay
5 - Olivia, your narrative focuses too much on the photography journey that you are taking. Now, depending upon whether or...
Undergraduatelgates12 - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Application Essay - Describing Experience which taught me about myself and/or those around me
6 - Christopher, it is alright for you to use the same response for different essays in different university and college...
UndergraduateCDuke93 - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|UBC Business Tech Management Personal Profile, Unfamiliar Situation
5 - Karin, The situation and solution to the problem that you discussed both times is too elementary and does not...
Undergraduateanxjso - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|USC supplement: when I'm exposed to a new perspective
5 - @Holt Thank you! I'll add a little more development. Anyway, thanks a lot....
UndergraduateBennyoooo - Jan 13, 2017 / Bennyoooo - Jan 14, 2017
|Aspects of Colorado College which attracted my attention. Why this College?
2 - Batjin, the essay that you developed is well thought out and really displays admirable reasons for wishing to attend...
Undergraduatel3atjin - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|My university essay which delivers more info about me, my life, struggles and achievements
5 - Try to find something really special and unique about your background, that way it won't sound like ordinary essays....
UndergraduateAbdulZ1997 - Jan 12, 2017 / l3atjin - Jan 13, 2017
|What really impressed me is that TEDxZYZ is really influential. Extra activities essay.
4 - Jiang, the problem with the essay is that is focuses on the organization and how it works rather on...
UndergraduateBennyoooo - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|USC Supplemental: A time my beliefs were challenged
3 - @masonn8 So you just told us a story of you, but you don't have your conclusion. What do you...
Undergraduatemasonn8 - Jan 13, 2017 / Bennyoooo - Jan 13, 2017
|Uni Admission Essay - I am more than just my grades
3 - Wow, you seem very well rounded and all of these awards are really impressive. I don't think your essay...
UndergraduateHSY - Jan 12, 2017 / masonn8 - Jan 13, 2017
|Robotics and software engineering really take my interest. USC supplement essay
5 - I'm also working on the USC essays and I had a few suggestions. Admissions knows what classes you need...
UndergraduateBennyoooo - Jan 12, 2017 / masonn8 - Jan 13, 2017
|Describe an experience from my life that demonstrates my character or helped shaped it
2 - Charlene, congratulations on overcoming such a huge educational obstacle. Your story is truly inspirational and I can understand how...
Undergraduatecharade - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 12, 2017
|Your essay should answer the following questions: What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT?
2 - Leana, it would be best if you complete the prompt requirement that was given to you for the development...
UndergraduateLeavaler - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 12, 2017
|Briefly discuss a current global issue indicating why you consider it important and what you suggest
3 - Nima, please provide us with the complete prompt for your essay. It got cut off because you tried to...
UndergraduateCrew - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 12, 2017
|Tell us more why you intent to finish the Computer Engineering Program?
2 - Nate, when you develop your reason for pursuing this academic program, make sure to relate it to a particular...
Undergraduatenhenderson98 - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 12, 2017
|The brain chemistry. USC Supplemental Essay: How will you pursue your academic interests
5 - @Holt I really appreciate your feedback. Can't tell you how much it helps!...
Undergraduatemasonn8 - Jan 11, 2017 / masonn8 - Jan 12, 2017
|The features of nursing profession. NURSING PROGRAM ADMISSION ESSAY
7 - Excellent work Chloe, I strongly suggest that you use this version of the essay for your application. It is...
Undergraduateclr - Jan 9, 2017 / Holt - Jan 12, 2017
|Another late night at the hospital. Constructive Advice Needed on Nursing Program Entrance Essay
7 - Hi Chloe. I must say that you effectively applied the suggestions that I made for the improvement of your...
Undergraduateclr - Dec 5, 2016 / Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Art, music, poetry, knowledge, love of life and humorous spirit vs kalashnikovs. Pitzer- Core Values
2 - Narmine, your statement about student responsibility should be placed at the start of the essay and be changed to...
Undergraduatestudent58 - Jan 10, 2017 / Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Ivey AEO Activity Essay #1 - my candidacy to be enrolled in the HBA program
8 - Actually, you should only present one activity that clearly represent the 3 character traits indicated in the prompt. Being...
UndergraduateMT1 - Jan 8, 2017 / Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Why I believe that Virginia Tech is the right place for me
16 - @Holt Whoa !! Thanks for that ! Really Appreciate the help :) and i promise i will improve my...
Undergraduateduboi - Jan 5, 2017 / duboi - Jan 10, 2017
|Personal Profile for University Admission - an episode that taught you something about yourself
2 - S M, due to the one essay per thread policy of the forum, I will only be responding to...
Undergraduatenhjoy - Jan 10, 2017 / Holt - Jan 10, 2017
|Why Lafayette? Comparing myself to a French general
14 - Its a decent hook because it shows that unlike other students who just base their essays on the work...
Undergraduatengokhoa99 - Jan 9, 2017 / Holt - Jan 10, 2017
|Passion for Neuroscience transfer intent essay
5 - Joseph, the portion about your excitement about research should be directly related to the university that you will be...
Undergraduatemasonn8 - Jan 4, 2017 / Holt - Jan 10, 2017
|University of Delaware Essays; me as a student, being treated unfairly, great accomplishment
3 - Nick, are you familiar with the University of Delaware? I am sure that you have some sort of backgrounder...
UndergraduateNickNack - Jan 9, 2017 / Holt - Jan 9, 2017
|I discovered the art of filmmaking. MSU Personal Statement
4 - Anaija, consider film making as the focal point of your talent that you wish to share with the student...
Undergraduatetumblr - Jan 9, 2017 / Holt - Jan 9, 2017
|Reinstatement essay explaining recent academic dismissal
4 - @MT1 Thank you for the revisions!...
Undergraduateneedhelpwessay - Jan 6, 2017 / needhelpwessay - Jan 9, 2017
|Common App Essay prompt 4- Balancing Tradition with Experience
4 - @Holt Thank you! After reading it over I can see how it would be more suitable for this prompt....
Undergraduateasaid99 - Jan 7, 2017 / asaid99 - Jan 8, 2017
|What would I do if I were a billionaire?
3 - @Holt Yeah, you are absolutely right. Appreciate your help, thank you :) Hopefully I will pass...
UndergraduateVarlamow - Jan 8, 2017 / Varlamow - Jan 8, 2017
|Overcoming Is Growing/ Global UGRAD Program: Why would you be a valuable attendant?
3 - @Holt I have already submitted it. Thank you for your help. I am honor student, member of a research...
UndergraduateLorelly - Jan 6, 2017 / Lorelly - Jan 7, 2017
|A timid boy living in own comfort zone. Changes made opportunities to achieve a lot more.
17 - That decision is something that you should make for yourself. My opinion is that it can accurately respond to...
Undergraduatemarcusimwj - Jan 2, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|He who does not know where he is coming from will never get to his destination.
5 - @Holt thanks for your comments...
Undergraduateyeboah hanson - Jan 6, 2017 / yeboah hanson - Jan 7, 2017
|"The White Crayon" - Art School Admission Personal Statement REVIEW
3 - Diandra, is there a specific instruction for this personal statement as dictated by the university? If there are no...
Undergraduatediandraelmira - Jan 7, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|The idealist perspective. Why do you think Earlham is a good fit for you?
5 - Khusel, you should definitely use the second version of the last paragraph for your closing statement in the essay....
UndergraduateNuverte0452 - Jan 6, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|I believe on Penn's education. Supplemental Essay for John Hopkins.
3 - Harriet, your essay tells us why you have chosen John Hopkins as your primary university application choice. You have...
UndergraduateHarriet - Jan 7, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|'What you have learned about yourself as a result of the volunteering activities.' (250)
4 - Nanda, careful with the use of special characters. That might not translate or be seen properly on the computer...
Undergraduatenandasharma - Jan 6, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|"How you would use the education you obtain at our institution ?" (250)
4 - Hi Nanda, I believe that it would be best for you to indicate at the start of your post...
Undergraduatenandasharma - Jan 6, 2017 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|Innovation and Seeking the Truth
7 - Now you understand the prompt Jhe. All you have to do is pick one of the beliefs or values...
Undergraduatejiale1029 - Jan 3, 2017 / Holt - Jan 6, 2017
|"How have you overcome an obstacle or challenge you have faced in your life ?" (250)
2 - Nanda, just as you had to translate the meaning of "bandha" for the reviewer to understand what it means...
Undergraduatenandasharma - Jan 6, 2017 / Holt - Jan 6, 2017
|Your 'ability to do' will appear in other parts of this application. The 'things needed to be done.'
3 - Marcus, I would not focus on community service or the community at this point. Most of the applicants to...
Undergraduatemarcusimwj - Jan 6, 2017 / Holt - Jan 6, 2017
|'I was never truly exposed to poverty' UBC Undergraduate Entrance Essay
3 - @philliplombard I want to first all commend your effort in putting up a 199 word story about your...
Undergraduatephilliplombard - Jan 6, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Jan 6, 2017
|5th December: The day that I will never forget.
5 - Hi, i think you should elaborate more on your story that how your family inspired you to help people...
Undergraduateshippuden - Jan 5, 2017 / marcusimwj - Jan 6, 2017
|BU Transfer Essay- "the objectives" - The Shot
3 - Gabriella, your being rejected from NYU is not an issue in this case. In fact, bringing it up is...
Undergraduategabbyademi - Jan 5, 2017 / Holt - Jan 6, 2017
|The book all of Colgate's Class of 2021 should read
5 - @Holt Thanks a lot! I'll make sure to do that. And thank you for all your help with...
Undergraduatealexgzm - Jan 4, 2017 / alexgzm - Jan 5, 2017
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