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Business entrepreneurship - Turkey burslari scholarship essay application 2026

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your time You took the time to review my essay and i appreciate...

UndergraduateKpro123 - Feb 12, 2026 / Kpro123 - Feb 13, 2026

LETTER OF INTENT for Turkiye Burslari scholarship for medicine

2 - Since you are applying for acceptance into a college of medicine, the reviewer will expect you to have almost...

Undergraduatehelulu - Feb 11, 2026 / Holt - Feb 12, 2026

My Chosen UChicago Prompt: find the beauty in trash.

2 - Repeating this several times in the essay makes this declaration lose impact. Learn to position your hooks for...

UndergraduatePhanuel - Feb 10, 2026 / Holt - Feb 12, 2026

"Describe achievement in your academic experience & how it supports your choice? Graduation plans?"

3 - Thanks a lot for the feedback!...

Undergraduateeatcheese - Feb 3, 2026 / eatcheese - Feb 6, 2026

Personal Statement for GKS-U Undergraduate in Architecture at PNU

4 - The reviewers actually look for your personality in your writing. An effective personal statement allows you to show your...

UndergraduateLannabia19 - Jan 29, 2026 / Holt - Feb 4, 2026

Statement of Purpose - Reason why I chose a particular laboratory as my preferred host laboratory

2 - Please remove the researched information or reference to the research in the essay. An SOP does not require an...

UndergraduateSarah74 - Jan 22, 2026 / Holt - Jan 24, 2026

"A small scar" - GKS-U Personal statement for AI major Embassy Track

5 - The stucy plan contains different information. For that part you will need to establish the focus of your studies....

UndergraduateDivine_07 - Jan 14, 2026 / Holt - Jan 21, 2026

Autobiography for National Taiwan University (Program : Computer Science & Information Engineering)

2 - This is an exaggeration. Your parents could not have supported your educational goals since birth because a baby...

UndergraduateNatethegreat2007 - Jan 11, 2026 / Holt - Jan 12, 2026

Stipendium Hungaricum motivation letter (Mongolian student) for BSc on Physics

2 - The information that you provide in this essay is not convincing enough. You have no real ambition beyond simply...

UndergraduateBudbilguun - Jan 10, 2026 / Holt - Jan 12, 2026

Star names - Personal Essay on CommonApp Qs. 6

2 - Do not open the essay with you referencing yourself in the third person. That does not make any sense...

UndergraduateHaranAn - Jan 9, 2026 / Holt - Jan 11, 2026

Application essay for Msc in critical care

3 - @Holt Thanks, sorry I didn't clerify this is a motivation letter for Msc critical care in Edinburagh Uinversity....

UndergraduateLobaba - Jan 5, 2026 / Lobaba - Jan 8, 2026

Personal Statement on Curiosity - Undergraduate in Chemical and Biomolecular Engineering at HKUST

2 - The main reason that this essay is overly long is because you spent way too much time on the...

Undergraduatecyap - Jan 1, 2026 / Holt - Jan 2, 2026

Write one short essay in English that includes the following three topics - engineering essay

2 - The essay space is being wasted in the first part because you are discussing an unrelated topic. There is...

Undergraduatewishuthebest - Jan 1, 2026 / Holt - Jan 2, 2026

Success as a solitary achievement: Common App (Personal Statement)

3 - @Holt Thank you for your careful reading. I realize now that my phrasing left room for misinterpretation. My father...

Undergraduatetimetoshine - Dec 31, 2025 / timetoshine - Dec 31, 2025

I like to Gamble - Common Application Essay Help

2 - I would not use the term "gamble" in this case. Since this is an academic essay, it is better...

Undergraduateluptla - Dec 27, 2025 / Holt - Dec 29, 2025

Stipendium Hungaricum - Motivation Letter for BSc in Earth Science

2 - The response is too wordy without enough relevant content. More than 50% of this essay would be better suited...

Undergraduateclementine11 - Dec 23, 2025 / Holt - Dec 27, 2025

Common App Personal Statement-international education major

2 - I am not sure which of the prompt your wrote this in response to but I have to say,...

UndergraduateTopaz - Dec 23, 2025 / Holt - Dec 27, 2025

My hands and brain - Common App - Personal Statement

2 - There is something wrong with this recollection. You were 4 and taking your 7 year old sister to...

UndergraduateScormbl - Dec 22, 2025 / Holt - Dec 27, 2025

Math - Cite cases in which you thought/attemped in ways different from others & how it affected you.

2 - Your response cannot be considered unique by the reviewer. The experience you shared is quite common among those who...

Undergraduatewishuthebest - Dec 8, 2025 / Holt - Dec 8, 2025

"Seek knowledge in the Land of China" - Personal statement for CUHKSZ

2 - The advice that your parents gave you is the anchor point of this whole essay. Therefore, saying you were...

Undergraduatemer - Dec 6, 2025 / Holt - Dec 7, 2025

Leading a Mojita Stall - U of T Supplemental

2 - Again, please clarify at the very start that this is a school project that you undertook. Stop making your...

UndergraduateMultiTasker - Dec 1, 2025 / Holt - Dec 3, 2025

Overcoming perfectionism - U of T Supplemental Essay

2 - You need to be more specific in your essays. You are always over reaching instead of focusing your statement...

UndergraduateMultiTasker - Dec 1, 2025 / Holt - Dec 3, 2025

Ethnicity targeting - U of T Supplemental Application

4 - It would be best for you to write a totally new response that better explains your observations regarding the...

UndergraduateMultiTasker - Nov 29, 2025 / Holt - Nov 30, 2025

RSM BSc / head of Finance - Diversity question

4 - The way that you have framed your explanation makes it appear like you are discussing a professional experience. You...

Undergraduatetksyou - Nov 28, 2025 / Holt - Nov 30, 2025

RSM BSc - Why International Business Administration?

2 - You cannot use 4th grade exposure to sales within a controlled environment as an influence reference for Business Administrator....

Undergraduatetksyou - Nov 27, 2025 / Holt - Nov 28, 2025

Personal Statement Master MOTIS IN France

2 - The reviewer would much appreciate if you could connect your undergraduate history and work experience with the student qualifications...

UndergraduateMiftaaj01 - Nov 27, 2025 / Holt - Nov 27, 2025

The lessons we take from obstacles - UofT One idea application

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback, what are some ways I can make this approach more interesting, can I...

UndergraduateAliyaAAAA - Nov 23, 2025 / AliyaAAAA - Nov 23, 2025

Autobiography for Taiwan university application

2 - I would have to say that your autobiography lacks a clear direction that would show the reviewer how your...

UndergraduateAlbert Owen - Nov 21, 2025 / Holt - Nov 21, 2025

Forensic pathology - essay for NTU mbbs- personal statement

2 - Your dream of becoming a Forensic Pathologist is the end game for your medical studies. However, you are not...

Undergraduatewelton - Nov 20, 2025 / Holt - Nov 20, 2025

My education in Taiwan - Study plan for scholarship in division of global commerce

2 - This will not make sense to the reviewer. If your father is your sponsor, then what was the...

UndergraduateAlbert Owen - Nov 17, 2025 / Holt - Nov 18, 2025

Personal statement for HKUST - Chemical and Biology Engineering program

3 - Could you possibly shorten the essay from 600+ words to something between 250 and 300 words? The essay is...

UndergraduateTreeee - Nov 14, 2025 / Holt - Nov 18, 2025

Common App: Gap Year Essay

2 - I am not sure about the prompt for your gap year essay. Normally, a gap year essay requests the...

Undergraduatetimetoshine - Nov 12, 2025 / Holt - Nov 13, 2025

Fordham essay on contributing to a community

2 - It will be very possible to discuss your advocacy for human dignity and your fight against injustice without referencing...

Undergraduateilovepenguins - Nov 8, 2025 / Holt - Nov 9, 2025

Education as a force of change- UWC application essay

2 - You lost me from the very start of this essay. How does travel relate to ASL? Are you one...

Undergraduatealmosthalloween - Oct 25, 2025 / Holt - Oct 26, 2025

Conflicting personal values - essay for UWC

2 - The reviewer will not see this essay as one that is personal nor original. He will see this as...

Undergraduateplopkw - Oct 23, 2025 / Holt - Oct 24, 2025

"From the linoleum to the marble" - Personal Statement

2 - Kindly include the prompt that you are writing in response to next time so that I can give a...

Undergraduatelolgiancarlo - Oct 22, 2025 / Holt - Oct 23, 2025

GKS U 2026 SOP for Business administration + finance

2 - The essay is too creative in presentation. It focused too much on the telling of a story that it...

UndergraduateShubhay07 - Oct 14, 2025 / Holt - Oct 15, 2025

Nigeria and Economic Constraints - Statements of Purpose (S.O.P)

2 - You should not open the statement of purpose with a reference to the thoughts of someone else. The reviewer...

UndergraduateMystro_Dynamic - Oct 13, 2025 / Holt - Oct 14, 2025

Being Excluded in a project - Waterloo AIF Question #3 - Experience Reflection

2 - The reason why you were sidelined by the group in meetings should be clearly explained in the statement. You...

UndergraduatePancakes2 - Oct 13, 2025 / Holt - Oct 14, 2025

Starting a music club at my school - Waterloo AIF question #2 - Community Involvement

2 - This leadership statement is too self focused. There is a lack of teamwork, consideration of the needs of the...

UndergraduatePramodChavali - Oct 12, 2025 / Holt - Oct 12, 2025

My Passion for Music - Waterloo AIF question #1

2 - The passion aspect is a bit thin in this presentation. It started off on the wrong foot as well....

UndergraduatePramodChavali - Oct 12, 2025 / Holt - Oct 12, 2025

Undervalued at a hackathon - Waterloo AIF Question #3 - Experience Reflection

2 - While your story shows how you eventually recovered from being undervalued by your teammates, it took time for you...

UndergraduatePramodChavali - Oct 12, 2025 / Holt - Oct 12, 2025

Data analytics - KUAS enrollment essay - Why KUAS ties in with my future goals

2 - The second paragraph does not justify what will make you a good candidate for a student slot at KUAS....

Undergraduateumohon - Oct 11, 2025 / Holt - Oct 11, 2025

The Sound of His Steps - Common App Essay

2 - Please do not ask me which aspects you should cut from this essay because it is a personal decision...

UndergraduateThienAnhLe - Oct 11, 2025 / Holt - Oct 11, 2025

NATIONAL TAIWAN UNIVERSITY AUTOBIOGRAPHY 'Ten fingers will all have different lengths'

2 - A personal statement should, in my opinion, not be more than 300 words in length. That is because the...

Undergraduatesnowblossoms - Oct 7, 2025 / Holt - Oct 8, 2025

Standing Behind, Seeing Beyond (COMMON APP PERSONAL STATEMENT)

2 - One thing that the applicants always make a mistake with when writing the common app essay is that they...

UndergraduateThienAnhLe - Oct 7, 2025 / Holt - Oct 8, 2025

Passion for Game Development - Waterloo AIF Question 4 - Goals for Waterloo

2 - I reviewed your statement response several times and came to the same conclusion each time. The provided information responds...

UndergraduatePramodChavali - Oct 6, 2025 / Holt - Oct 7, 2025

GLOCAL PROGRAMME - CREATIVE INDUSTRY POLICY AND ECOSYSTEM

2 - The main problem that I see with this essay is that it does not address your educational background. How...

Undergraduateu_utmaut - Oct 6, 2025 / Holt - Oct 6, 2025

My Relationship with Glasses - Common App Essay

3 - @Holt Thanks for the feedback! Just one question: When you say to totally skip the pre-k reference, do you...

Undergraduatemathauntie - Oct 5, 2025 / mathauntie - Oct 5, 2025

Before humans die - (GKS_U) 2026 Media essay

2 - The essay is too imaginative in approach when it should be more direct and informative. I understand that you...

Undergraduatehinuyenthihue111 - Oct 4, 2025 / Holt - Oct 5, 2025

curly hair main common app essay

2 - I am not sure what common app prompt you are responding to with this essay so I can give...

Undergraduateclaudiacorsini - Oct 3, 2025 / Holt - Oct 4, 2025

PERSONAL ESSAY - STUDENT EXCHANGE PROGRAM (Chemistry Department & Internship Opportunity)

2 - Your background is quite strong in terms of academics. I would like to see the same strengths or, even...

Undergraduaterelovikyl - Sep 9, 2025 / Holt - Sep 13, 2025

COMMON APP Personal Statement - Teachings From My Sister

2 - This is a very interesting and personal background story. However, The reviewer could believe that the essay is more...

UndergraduateScormbl - Aug 29, 2025 / Holt - Aug 30, 2025

PERSONAL STATEMENT GKS-U University Track Mechanical Engineering

2 - Kindly remove the Hangul characters for Phineas and Pherb. The essay must be written in either pure English or...

Undergraduateadel5067 - Aug 26, 2025 / Holt - Aug 27, 2025

PERSONAL STATEMENT - GKS-U TOUR MANAGEMENT

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your feedback on my personal statement. It means a lot. I will...

Undergraduateweeathers - Aug 14, 2025 / weeathers - Aug 15, 2025

GKS-U PERSONAL STATEMENT (astronomy and space science)

2 - It is too early in the discussion for you to introduce this topic. You may state this later...

UndergraduateAndyNJ - Aug 10, 2025 / Holt - Aug 10, 2025

interspecies - university of chicago extended essay

2 - The first part relating to your grandfather and how he influenced your love of history is irrelevant to the...

Undergraduatearrralle - Aug 4, 2025 / Holt - Aug 10, 2025

Out-of-the-red - University of Chicago extended essay

2 - The essay seems to be taking several directions and focusing on the wrong person and events. If you want...

Undergraduatearrralle - Aug 4, 2025 / Holt - Aug 10, 2025

GKS-U Personal Statement for AI Major

2 - Develop this statement further. Include some of the activities that you led and participated in. What was that...

Undergraduatedivine_9 - Jul 19, 2025 / Holt - Jul 20, 2025

"The French Toast" - common app 7- Share an essay on any topic of your choice

2 - The essay needs more balance. You spent too much time discussing French Toast and the negative body image that...

Undergraduaterocky123c - Jul 14, 2025 / Holt - Jul 16, 2025

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