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COMMON APP SHORT ESSAY EXPERIENCE AS A PREFECT

NEW - "Please keep quiet", "Please fold your socks", "Do your top button" are statements I made countless times during the...

Undergraduateoshkoshmadam - 28 mins ago / — -

Georgia Tech. To be an architect that will leave a mark inspiring the current and future generations

3 - Joseph, you have written a very good response to the prompt. You don't need to edit anything with regards...

UndergraduateEdSharon - 13 hours ago / Holt - 41 mins ago

AUB essay - invention that has a great impact on my life - common app

3 - Steven, the response you are giving is highly generic. It is the standard go to response that every student...

UndergraduateStevenSameh1512 - 17 hours ago / Holt - 47 mins ago

Fashion School Admission Essay for FIDM; expectations, hobbies, interests, goals and aspiration

2 - Nai, the essay feels like it spins its wheels without going anywhere for the first few paragraphs. The direct...

Undergraduateleothewriter - 22 hours ago / Holt - 1 hour ago

What book or piece of literature you believe is important for the entire Colgate Class to read? Why?

NEW - Supplement essay for Colgate University Colgate's core curriculum teaches students empathy, informed debate, and critical thinking. Please tell...

Undergraduateuchiaelodin - 1 hour ago / — -

Com Apps essay - the story of great Hustler, Ignazio Wexler

NEW - Topic of your choice Host : Good morning folks, I'm your host Dick, with you for another episode....

Undergraduatekimyoungjin123 - 1 hour ago / — -

A full comprehension of the world's nature obtained through rigorous reasoning and experimenting

3 - Thank you!!!...

Undergraduatephamhung - 1 day ago / phamhung - 6 hours ago

'I need to be a journalist' Applying to some Ivy League and top tier colleges. How common is my app?

4 - The essay still becomes confusing to read because you are discussing 2 unrelated topics in one essay. Pick one...

UndergraduateJohnatanReiss - 2 days ago / Holt - 9 hours ago

Desiring to be an explorer. Application letter for Global UGRAD exchange program

2 - I think that your begining is quite long and unnecessary. Acorrding my experience, I think the structure below will...

Undergraduatenusrat8662 - 1 day ago / Alicelanphuong - 1 day ago

Global Ugrad - Making the difference in the education of students

4 - In my opinion, the whole essay does not work because you are not properly focusing in the requirement of...

UndergraduateNossferatu - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago

Global UGRAD program - a different culture experience, interchanging ideas, products, and influence

4 - @Holt @Dannyalc92 Thank you so much for your feedback. I'll write a new essay soon and update the...

Undergraduatezimmer - Dec 16, 2018 / zimmer - 1 day ago

My drive to always learn something new and be the best version of myself that I can be; UBC essay

2 - Jason, the essay isn't cocky at all. It sounds like it was written by a level headed person who...

Undergraduateecho16 - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago

FIT portfolio essay evaluating how I take criticism

3 - Woah you're definitely right! I was just trying super hard to sum everything up because the word limit was...

UndergraduateLazydazey - 2 days ago / Lazydazey - 1 day ago

"Understanding the heart of another"- Dartmouth college supplement

2 - Sharon, rather than trying to apply the prompt to the world around you, try to apply it to yourself...

UndergraduateAgirlhasnoname - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago

UVA Supplement - The Steppe Bison

3 - Ryan, you sound really surprise in the essay, but you are not clearly explaining why. So you will need...

Undergraduateafriendinneed - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago

Why major essay for a tons of school!

2 - To reduce the number of words perhaps you could remove one of the examples you used in the first...

UndergraduateSasakfld - 2 days ago / Agirlhasnoname - 2 days ago

Georgetown - What does it mean to you to be educated?

2 - HI！ I really like your answer to the question "what does it mean to you to be educated". It's...

Undergraduateleylamagsud - Dec 15, 2018 / Sasakfld - 2 days ago

The Experimental Class. Tell about the important place, or places, you call home.

3 - Got it！Thanks very much for your advice...

UndergraduateSasakfld - Dec 16, 2018 / Sasakfld - 2 days ago

I co-founded Muniversiti, a non-profit organization with the purpose of galvanizing the youth

3 - Thanks for pointing that out. Its a trivial matter. I'll contact someone from the digital networking department and the...

Undergraduatekartikt - 2 days ago / kartikt - 2 days ago

UPENN Supplement - the vanilla ice cream essay

4 - I like the analogies with vanilla ice cream, however, it becomes too repetitive and downplays the main topic of...

Undergraduateredname898 - Dec 6, 2018 / Dannyalc92 - 2 days ago

A seemingly impossible obstacle can become one's biggest asset; Amherst essay

2 - Anant, there is a lack of backstory to this essay that prevents the reader from understanding the full importance...

Undergraduatebokaaaaaa - Dec 16, 2018 / Holt - 2 days ago

"Don't limit your challenges, challenge your limits" - My reason for choosing Waterloo

3 - What is your opinion on this fix then? Does it fix all the problems you sited? Economics...

UndergraduateEssaysReview - Dec 15, 2018 / EssaysReview - 2 days ago

"Without any Expectations"- Motivational Statement Essay for Peace Corps Application

4 - While there are grammatical errors and sentence structure issues with your writing, the fact that I am asking you...

UndergraduateHikeBikeRepeat - Dec 14, 2018 / Holt - Dec 16, 2018

Devoting to communities - I need advice for my SOP for UGRAD Program

3 - Hi! Sincerely thank you a lot for your advice. I've struggled with this SOP for 1 months, written 3...

Undergraduateiamngocthao810 - Dec 14, 2018 / iamngocthao810 - Dec 15, 2018

Why UChicago Essay 2018: Is it Ready? Like a home.

2 - Shana, you should only write a 725-750 word essay if you have enough interesting information to share with the...

Undergraduatejungkook666 - Dec 14, 2018 / Holt - Dec 15, 2018

Sharing the world - application essay. (to Duke Kunshan University)

3 - Thank you so much for giving me such detailed and thoughtful advice on my essay ! ! I also...

Undergraduatekaia0911 - Dec 9, 2018 / kaia0911 - Dec 13, 2018

JHU Supplemental Essay - an impact by collaboration with others

2 - Hi Leyla. I have to say, this essay really hit the mark when considering the prompt requirements. It is...

Undergraduateleylamagsud - Dec 11, 2018 / Holt - Dec 12, 2018

To be a part of the introduction of sustainable and affordable biotechnology, the International Plan

2 - Ibukun, what is the maximum word count for this essay? The reason I ask is because you need to...

Undergraduateibk101 - Dec 11, 2018 / Holt - Dec 12, 2018

Identify one piece in your portfolio that you are most passionate about, tell us the story behind it

2 - Hannah, every painting has a story. The Mona Lisa depicts the story of a shy woman with a beautiful...

Undergraduatech15hann - Dec 11, 2018 / Holt - Dec 12, 2018

A time, in or outside the classroom, when you worked with others and what you learned from this

4 - Momina, the first thing I would change about the referencing in this essay is the way that you always...

Undergraduatemominanaveed - Dec 11, 2018 / Holt - Dec 12, 2018

I am answering the why NYU Abu Dhabi question. Will it catch the attention of the admissions officer

3 - Your essay is commendable. However, there are a few things that you can improve. Firstly, you have discussed more...

Undergraduatebilis - Dec 4, 2018 / mbk7162 - Dec 11, 2018

Personal Statement for Undergraduate Program in Computer Science

2 - Mohammed, the essay works but could be improved. The last part about the choice of university, makes this decision...

Undergraduateanon123 - Dec 10, 2018 / Holt - Dec 11, 2018

What are your artistic interests/goals? Advice on CalArts artist statements.

3 - Thank you so much!! I really appreciate your help :) Yea, I was just trying to throw everything I...

Undergraduatech15hann - Dec 10, 2018 / ch15hann - Dec 10, 2018

Bakery and recipes - WASHU SUPPLEMENTAL ESSAY

5 - @Holt Hello, thank you for the honest review. I really someone to tell me this wasn't the right prompt...

Undergraduatech15hann - Dec 7, 2018 / ch15hann - Dec 10, 2018

Science excites me and l aspire more: to learn and to create as what my own childhood taught me

3 - Thanks for the feedback. I have to tried to implement what you said. And l have also tried...

UndergraduateTendekai - Dec 3, 2018 / Tendekai - Dec 9, 2018

What is important to me? PROTECTING OUR NATURE AND ENSURING ANIMAL WELFARE

3 - I would not want to confuse the reviewer by using dividers to create choices in the presentation. You are...

UndergraduateSupantha - Dec 8, 2018 / Holt - Dec 9, 2018

They say that I'm the one who does crazy stuff with Electricity; Tell us about who you are essay

2 - Oops! Nischay, you were off to a good start till you got to the part after your friend's description...

UndergraduateNishantfizz - Dec 8, 2018 / Holt - Dec 9, 2018

Common application essay - When that Eisenbahn hit me

3 - Thanks for the comments! :)...

UndergraduateCabradasbrisa - Dec 8, 2018 / Cabradasbrisa - Dec 8, 2018

GWU Supplement Prompt 1 - how would you change the course of history?

2 - Lelya, since the prompt indicates that the student of GWU interact with policy makers and world leaders, the aim...

Undergraduateleylamagsud - Dec 7, 2018 / Holt - Dec 8, 2018

All the typical hopes and expectations, of being a studious person, were placed on me

3 - Sailesh, the essay is good overall, but it doesn't answer the prompt question. Also, you mostly focus on talking...

Undergraduatesailesh - Dec 2, 2018 / leylamagsud - Dec 7, 2018

"Don't screw up your life like she did." College App Essay for Ivy leagues

3 - I do agree with Holt that the essay is mostly about your mother, not you, but I don't agree...

UndergraduateMia2000 - Dec 4, 2018 / leylamagsud - Dec 7, 2018

To spend a study semester in the USA - Global Undergraduate exchange program essay

2 - Yaroslav, not all of the information in this essay can be used for the prompt requirement. Let me point...

UndergraduateMonsieurNN - Dec 6, 2018 / Holt - Dec 7, 2018

Thermodynamics class - Brown ESSAYS

2 - Alexandra, you are not directly responding to the prompt. The reviewer could care less about the stem class taught...

Undergraduatealex42 - Dec 6, 2018 / Holt - Dec 7, 2018

I am the only teenager in my community who thinks something different unlike others. Essay about me.

3 - Supantha, it is important that you understand what the prompt requirements are and how to deliver it. For this...

UndergraduateSupantha - Dec 6, 2018 / Holt - Dec 7, 2018

Colgate Supplemental (3 words your friend would use to describe you)

4 - Thank you so much for the feedback! I changed it up a little, but I am slightly over the...

Undergraduateleylamagsud - Dec 5, 2018 / leylamagsud - Dec 6, 2018

Common app Personal essay- recount a time when you faced a challenge, setback, or failure.

4 - ... in caps, and black hooded... (remove and) I felt butterflies in my stomach - you could also change...

Undergraduatearnoldb - Nov 21, 2018 / leylamagsud - Dec 5, 2018

Johns Hopkins Essay - Collaboration with others, including peers, mentors, and professors

3 - Hi Arnold! I really enjoyed reading your essay, I think it is written really well. Seeing that you are...

Undergraduatearnoldb - Nov 28, 2018 / leylamagsud - Dec 5, 2018

A never-ending pile of whys. I am applying to some top universities.

3 - Thank you for your advice! Is there anything I should change about the essay itself? I rewrote it, would...

Undergraduateleylamagsud - Dec 3, 2018 / leylamagsud - Dec 4, 2018

Assistant Coach - UBC short answer - an activity

2 - Emma, the presentation is a bit scattered. I would divide this presentation into 2 paragraphs. The first paragraph would...

Undergraduateemilydavis - Dec 2, 2018 / Holt - Dec 3, 2018

Achievement Supplement for CWRU - we are interested in hearing more about you.

2 - Abby, the reference to your 4 year old self is irrelevant to this discussion. You are stretching your perceived...

Undergraduateabifyor - Dec 1, 2018 / Holt - Dec 2, 2018

UBC PERSONAL PROFILE - something about yourself, also according to opinions of others

2 - Try to not be a one trick pony. You will bore the reviewer by your constant reference to your...

Undergraduateisica - Nov 30, 2018 / Holt - Nov 30, 2018

Essay on how I deal with the overstimulation of information

2 - Giuliana, you never responded to the question you posed for yourself in the essay. The main question is how...

UndergraduateGiuliVal - Nov 30, 2018 / Holt - Nov 30, 2018

I spent this past summer performing in a show at the Winnipeg Fringe Theatre Festival ACTIVITY ESSAY

3 - Hi Victoria, the essay in itself needs to be better presented. The strength of the essay and the interest...

Undergraduatevictoria_003 - Nov 27, 2018 / Holt - Nov 30, 2018

'The friends around' - UBC PERSONAL PROFILE, WHAT IS IMPORTANT TO YOU AND WHY?

3 - This looks like a really good response and I love how you outlined how your friends brought a positive...

Undergraduatekaffafle - Nov 28, 2018 / isica - Nov 30, 2018

Waterloo; comment e.g. on your exposure to engineering through school-related and other experiences

2 - Mohammed, your essay is dry, boring, and not very informative. You should be focusing in providing interesting responses for...

Undergraduatemmahtab10 - Nov 28, 2018 / Holt - Nov 29, 2018

Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by environment around

3 - jinzhejian, you have chosen a very interesting topic for this discussion. However, your presentation is off. You are talking...

UndergraduateJack_Kin - Nov 28, 2018 / Holt - Nov 29, 2018

Personal Statement - Common Application - Gynecomastia Disease

2 - I think that this is a great essay so far but just some tips: Im not sure what the...

UndergraduateStevenSameh1512 - Nov 28, 2018 / ch15hann - Nov 29, 2018

OVERCOMING AN EDUCATION BARRIER. How did overcoming this barrier help shape who are you today?

3 - What is the word count? Also I agree with the person above me, I think you have to...

Undergraduatesmarquez16 - Nov 27, 2018 / luna789 - Nov 29, 2018

College App Essay - 200 American movies

3 - the bolded "We're going to America" at the top, is that part of the essay or is it a...

Undergraduatesnazbt - Nov 27, 2018 / luna789 - Nov 29, 2018

Students presenting a portfolio in Art Practice must include an artist's statement

2 - Hi, I think this a great essay. I think there is too much of visualize there, try another synonym...

Undergraduatech15hann - Nov 28, 2018 / arnoldb - Nov 28, 2018

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