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AI & Computer Engineering Personal Statement - UGKS

2 - First up, please reorder the essay to follow the flow that the writing guide represents. It will make it...

Undergraduate Joshuaa682 - 12 hrHolt - 5 hr
Personal Statement help - HKUST BEng in Computer Engineering

2 - It is important that you balance the academic reflection of who you are with your interests outside of school....

Undergraduate yippie - Sep 12, 2026Holt - 2 days
Autobiography - University Application Essay (Taiwan)

5 - This is my revised biography. I have shown this to a few people, and some of them said that...

Undergraduate Horiz0ns - Aug 16, 2026Horiz0ns - Sep 9, 2026
My autobiography for uni - Business Administration

2 - Okay. The major adjustment for this essay is the extremely long, yet irrelevant paragraph about your love for dance....

Undergraduate Bibadubih - Sep 7, 2026Holt - Sep 8, 2026
"Boov" - Common App Narritive Essay

2 - The way that your opening paragraph will be received by the reviewer will depend upon the common app prompt...

Undergraduate Lakois - Sep 7, 2026Holt - Sep 7, 2026
Systems of "assumed care" - Common app essay and advice for yonsei uic prompt

2 - Reviewing this from the point of view of an adcom member, I would have to say that the essay...

Undergraduate iloveshishkebab - Sep 4, 2026Holt - Sep 4, 2026
GKS-U SMART SECURITY - PERSONAL STATEMENT

2 - The essay is truly a well written autobiography. It is long and informative, providing a wealth of information to...

Undergraduate stpaul0710 - Sep 4, 2026Holt - Sep 4, 2026
Chinese Proficiency Improvement Statement - National Taiwan University

2 - You are on the right track with this response. However, your pre-arrival learning plan needs some additional information. How...

Undergraduate Horiz0ns - Aug 29, 2026Holt - Aug 29, 2026
"Proactive learning student" CUHK personal statement

2 - This characterization is weak. It is not necessary for the reviewer to know since it does not follow...

Undergraduate simper - Aug 24, 2026Holt - Aug 25, 2026
fortune-teller - Common app

2 - This is not a common app response that will help your application. The reason for this is because I...

Undergraduate userbabycuteasia - Aug 18, 2026Holt - Aug 18, 2026
visual expression - NTUST taiwan uni admission

2 - The reviewer will not take this claim seriously. You cannot develop a passion for something at that age...

Undergraduate rerecords - Aug 17, 2026Holt - Aug 17, 2026
My grandfather - accomplishment essay or event

3 - Has anyone else noticed how the best memories often happen when you ditch the plan and wander into something...

Undergraduate Ur dream bf - Aug 10, 2026pemaptheki - Aug 17, 2026
"dropped out of olympiad training program" CUHK personal statement

2 - I do not suggest that you use the 3 section outline that you listed. The writing prompt is very...

Undergraduate simper - Aug 15, 2026Holt - Aug 15, 2026
Personal Statement on Obesity??

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for the advice!...

Undergraduate dablobking - Aug 12, 2026dablobking - Aug 13, 2026
Reciting weather - Common App

2 - I understand what you are trying to explain in this essay but the relation to your current situation came...

Undergraduate sojinaz - Aug 10, 2026Holt - Aug 11, 2026
Before the Explanation - Common App Personal Statement

2 - This essay shows a lot about sibling attitude within your family and how it played out during some important...

Undergraduate sojinaz - Aug 5, 2026Holt - Aug 6, 2026
What paper cannot write - Common App Personal Statement

2 - I know that you are trying to go for a deeply insightful tone in your writing. You are trying...

Undergraduate sojinaz - Aug 5, 2026Holt - Aug 5, 2026
If you look good, you will feel good, and your day will be good

3 - @Holt Its more of a college essay, im not really sure what a good target outcome would be ,but...

Undergraduate cecehascalledu - Aug 4, 2026cecehascalledu - Aug 5, 2026
NUS application essay (Q3): How can I make my response better?

3 - @Holt Thank you very much...

Undergraduate Maria16 - Aug 2, 2026Maria16 - Aug 2, 2026
HKUST Personal Statement for Risk Management - How can this improve? Slightly Generic?

2 - I would focus on the personal aspect of this application. Discuss more of your relevant work experiences that reflect...

Undergraduate ethan2936 - Jul 16, 2026Holt - Jul 26, 2026
Statement of Purpose - Healthcare Professional Seeking Global Education

2 - Tone it down. Do not sound so over eager. The reviewer prefers to read a statement of purpose...

Undergraduate emmaswann - Jun 20, 2026Holt - Jun 21, 2026
Personal Statement essay for a Management Studies diploma scholarship

2 - The essay shows potential that is currently lost in the presentation. Your thoughts are scattered throughout the essay, making...

Undergraduate cheeseburger - Jun 11, 2026Holt - Jun 12, 2026
Autobiography for Feng Chia University (Technology Pre-Major Program)

2 - When you introduce your family, try to say a few things about both your parents. What did your mother...

Undergraduate Sstriaa - Apr 9, 2026Holt - Apr 10, 2026
Computing passion - personal statement opinions

2 - The personal statement you have written carries human elements, but not enough human writing to pass the AI assessment...

Undergraduate Aissa - Apr 8, 2026Holt - Apr 9, 2026
Parents and Teachers Association - solving a challenge and to implementing change or reform

2 - This essay shows that you are an effective planner, but not necessarily an effective leader. The event was more...

Undergraduate S11255405 - Apr 1, 2026Holt - Apr 2, 2026
An additional essay that highlights my fit and interest in Reed - Reed waitlist essay

2 - I think that this essay would help you better stand out as a student applicant if you expand on...

Undergraduate Jean marc - Mar 17, 2026Holt - Mar 18, 2026
Unexpected moments - motivational essay for college

2 - You used AI to write this essay without understanding what content is to be found in a motivational essay....

Undergraduate kmca0 - Mar 10, 2026Holt - Mar 12, 2026
Simons NYU Summer Explorations program grammar and tips for improving my essay

4 - The prompt is asking you to describe how the program will help build yourself and your community. Think...

Undergraduate ejva189 - Mar 2, 2026Holt - Mar 5, 2026
Business entrepreneurship - Turkey burslari scholarship essay application 2026

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your time You took the time to review my essay and i appreciate...

Undergraduate Kpro123 - Feb 12, 2026Kpro123 - Feb 13, 2026
LETTER OF INTENT for Turkiye Burslari scholarship for medicine

2 - Since you are applying for acceptance into a college of medicine, the reviewer will expect you to have almost...

Undergraduate helulu - Feb 11, 2026Holt - Feb 12, 2026
My Chosen UChicago Prompt: find the beauty in trash.

2 - Repeating this several times in the essay makes this declaration lose impact. Learn to position your hooks for...

Undergraduate Phanuel - Feb 10, 2026Holt - Feb 12, 2026
Personal Statement for GKS-U Undergraduate in Architecture at PNU

4 - The reviewers actually look for your personality in your writing. An effective personal statement allows you to show your...

Undergraduate Lannabia19 - Jan 29, 2026Holt - Feb 4, 2026
"Describe achievement in your academic experience & how it supports your choice? Graduation plans?"

2 - Please indicate if this is a free certificate course of an open learning course without certification of completion....

Undergraduate eatcheese - Feb 3, 2026Holt - Feb 4, 2026
Statement of Purpose - Reason why I chose a particular laboratory as my preferred host laboratory

2 - Please remove the researched information or reference to the research in the essay. An SOP does not require an...

Undergraduate Sarah74 - Jan 22, 2026Holt - Jan 24, 2026
"A small scar" - GKS-U Personal statement for AI major Embassy Track

5 - The stucy plan contains different information. For that part you will need to establish the focus of your studies....

Undergraduate Divine_07 - Jan 14, 2026Holt - Jan 21, 2026
Autobiography for National Taiwan University (Program : Computer Science & Information Engineering)

2 - This is an exaggeration. Your parents could not have supported your educational goals since birth because a baby...

Undergraduate Natethegreat2007 - Jan 11, 2026Holt - Jan 12, 2026
Stipendium Hungaricum motivation letter (Mongolian student) for BSc on Physics

2 - The information that you provide in this essay is not convincing enough. You have no real ambition beyond simply...

Undergraduate Budbilguun - Jan 10, 2026Holt - Jan 12, 2026
Star names - Personal Essay on CommonApp Qs. 6

2 - Do not open the essay with you referencing yourself in the third person. That does not make any sense...

Undergraduate HaranAn - Jan 9, 2026Holt - Jan 11, 2026
Application essay for Msc in critical care

3 - @Holt Thanks, sorry I didn't clerify this is a motivation letter for Msc critical care in Edinburagh Uinversity....

Undergraduate Lobaba - Jan 5, 2026Lobaba - Jan 8, 2026
Personal Statement on Curiosity - Undergraduate in Chemical and Biomolecular Engineering at HKUST

2 - The main reason that this essay is overly long is because you spent way too much time on the...

Undergraduate cyap - Jan 1, 2026Holt - Jan 2, 2026
Write one short essay in English that includes the following three topics - engineering essay

2 - The essay space is being wasted in the first part because you are discussing an unrelated topic. There is...

Undergraduate wishuthebest - Jan 1, 2026Holt - Jan 2, 2026
Success as a solitary achievement: Common App (Personal Statement)

3 - @Holt Thank you for your careful reading. I realize now that my phrasing left room for misinterpretation. My father...

Undergraduate timetoshine - Dec 31, 2025timetoshine - Dec 31, 2025
I like to Gamble - Common Application Essay Help

2 - I would not use the term "gamble" in this case. Since this is an academic essay, it is better...

Undergraduate luptla - Dec 27, 2025Holt - Dec 29, 2025
Stipendium Hungaricum - Motivation Letter for BSc in Earth Science

2 - The response is too wordy without enough relevant content. More than 50% of this essay would be better suited...

Undergraduate clementine11 - Dec 23, 2025Holt - Dec 27, 2025
Common App Personal Statement-international education major

2 - I am not sure which of the prompt your wrote this in response to but I have to say,...

Undergraduate Topaz - Dec 23, 2025Holt - Dec 27, 2025
My hands and brain - Common App - Personal Statement

2 - There is something wrong with this recollection. You were 4 and taking your 7 year old sister to...

Undergraduate Scormbl - Dec 22, 2025Holt - Dec 27, 2025
Math - Cite cases in which you thought/attemped in ways different from others & how it affected you.

2 - Your response cannot be considered unique by the reviewer. The experience you shared is quite common among those who...

Undergraduate wishuthebest - Dec 8, 2025Holt - Dec 8, 2025
"Seek knowledge in the Land of China" - Personal statement for CUHKSZ

2 - The advice that your parents gave you is the anchor point of this whole essay. Therefore, saying you were...

Undergraduate mer - Dec 6, 2025Holt - Dec 7, 2025
Leading a Mojita Stall - U of T Supplemental

2 - Again, please clarify at the very start that this is a school project that you undertook. Stop making your...

Undergraduate MultiTasker - Dec 1, 2025Holt - Dec 3, 2025
Overcoming perfectionism - U of T Supplemental Essay

2 - You need to be more specific in your essays. You are always over reaching instead of focusing your statement...

Undergraduate MultiTasker - Dec 1, 2025Holt - Dec 3, 2025
Ethnicity targeting - U of T Supplemental Application

4 - It would be best for you to write a totally new response that better explains your observations regarding the...

Undergraduate MultiTasker - Nov 29, 2025Holt - Nov 30, 2025
RSM BSc / head of Finance - Diversity question

4 - The way that you have framed your explanation makes it appear like you are discussing a professional experience. You...

Undergraduate tksyou - Nov 28, 2025Holt - Nov 30, 2025
RSM BSc - Why International Business Administration?

2 - You cannot use 4th grade exposure to sales within a controlled environment as an influence reference for Business Administrator....

Undergraduate tksyou - Nov 27, 2025Holt - Nov 28, 2025
Personal Statement Master MOTIS IN France

2 - The reviewer would much appreciate if you could connect your undergraduate history and work experience with the student qualifications...

Undergraduate Miftaaj01 - Nov 27, 2025Holt - Nov 27, 2025
The lessons we take from obstacles - UofT One idea application

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback, what are some ways I can make this approach more interesting, can I...

Undergraduate AliyaAAAA - Nov 23, 2025AliyaAAAA - Nov 23, 2025
Autobiography for Taiwan university application

2 - I would have to say that your autobiography lacks a clear direction that would show the reviewer how your...

Undergraduate Albert Owen - Nov 21, 2025Holt - Nov 21, 2025
Forensic pathology - essay for NTU mbbs- personal statement

2 - Your dream of becoming a Forensic Pathologist is the end game for your medical studies. However, you are not...

Undergraduate welton - Nov 20, 2025Holt - Nov 20, 2025
My education in Taiwan - Study plan for scholarship in division of global commerce

2 - This will not make sense to the reviewer. If your father is your sponsor, then what was the...

Undergraduate Albert Owen - Nov 17, 2025Holt - Nov 18, 2025
Personal statement for HKUST - Chemical and Biology Engineering program

2 - Can you translate this to English? Since the application should be completed in English, it is best to...

Undergraduate Treeee - Nov 14, 2025Holt - Nov 15, 2025
Common App: Gap Year Essay

2 - I am not sure about the prompt for your gap year essay. Normally, a gap year essay requests the...

Undergraduate timetoshine - Nov 12, 2025Holt - Nov 13, 2025

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