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|Does My Essay Fulfill the Requirements Given: Essay Topic B ApplyTexas
NEW - To be honest, I really just want feedback on whether my essay fulfills the requirements of the College Essay...
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|SOCIALLY AMBIDEXTROUS - CommonApp Personal Statement
7 - I am a fellow student applying to college (you posted on one of my threads earlier today). I hope...
Undergraduateroomonfire - Nov 14, 2017 / TheMistyMolly - 4 hours ago
|Common App Topic A essay and Rice short answers
UndergraduateTheMistyMolly - Dec 7, 2017 / TheMistyMolly - 5 hours ago
|Write an essay about someone different from yourself who has made an impact on your life?(My friend)
4 - @michelle1234 Hi ! I think the essay would be more insightful if you could share some distinguished case or...
Undergraduatemichelle1234 - Dec 7, 2017 / kukas90 - 15 hours ago
|Spending two years of my life at a hilltop in rural Maharashtra changed my outlook on life
Undergraduatemadiefarts123 - Nov 26, 2017 / roomonfire - 20 hours ago
|Life-defining time. Describe the highlights of your most outstanding achievements or contributions
Undergraduateboonjin - 22 hours ago / boonjin - 20 hours ago
|How my gender nonconformity molded my aspirations - FIT ADMISSIONS ESSAY
2 - Jackson , I would not change the content of your essay because your presentation of your non-conformist gender aligns...
Undergraduatej12fab1999 - 1 day ago / Holt - 23 hours ago
|Shapeshifter - College essay about self love and realization of ones self
4 - From a person who is non religious (like the other colleges you are applying to), I think this is...
UndergraduateNathanEtta - Nov 30, 2017 / TheMistyMolly - Dec 7, 2017
|Spread the positivity! - Global UGRAD program: Why would you be a great participant?
2 - Lutfia , I have to say that this essay is fun to read, informative, and hopeful. However, it does...
UndergraduateLutfianuri - Dec 7, 2017 / Holt - Dec 7, 2017
|Hoping to grow my knowledge and experience at UNCW, Admission Essay
4 - So I revised the essay quite a lot, hopefully, it describes my want and excitement to be at the...
UndergraduateChacobos - Dec 3, 2017 / Chacobos - Dec 4, 2017
|This prestigious university Texas A&M will put me in the best position possible to reach my goals
2 - Mario, the response that you gave is not really impressive nor complete. The first paragraph contains irrelevant information from...
Undergraduatealberto936 - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 4, 2017
|The bland food reflects my bland, although exciting, life - CWM Essay
2 - Jingxuan, you should try to combine your point of view about life with your love for bland food. You...
UndergraduateJingxuan - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|Essay about learning how to ride a bike and what it taught me
Undergraduatemmeneses - Dec 2, 2017 / mmeneses - Dec 2, 2017
|Essay on a career. Out of hundreds of thousands of careers out there, it is hard to pick just one.
2 - Arjun , your essay does not provide the required explanation for your response. First up, you need to choose...
Undergraduatextrimix - Dec 2, 2017 / Holt - Dec 2, 2017
|Cultural disassociation through my name change
Undergraduateclin8167 - Nov 30, 2017 / clin8167 - Nov 30, 2017
|I want to be at a school that makes me happy - FIT Admissions Essay
3 - Pili, your essay will be better served if you remove the unrelated first paragraph. That is nothing more than...
Undergraduatepili - Nov 29, 2017 / Holt - Nov 30, 2017
|How are you a leader and how will this show on campus?
2 - Jay, there is no true leadership role included in this essay. You are only implying that you have played...
Undergraduatejrd519 - Nov 29, 2017 / Holt - Nov 30, 2017
|USC Undergad Supplemental Essay - Why USC? Major: Communications 2nd choice: International Studies
4 - Hello, You will need to dive a little deeper here. There are a few Annenberg school of communications...
Undergraduateryanjtran - Nov 28, 2017 / admission2012 - Nov 29, 2017
|I am applying to UBC and in the application form, it requires me to write an essay about myself
6 - This essay is not too coherent. In any event, all they are asking you is "What are you passionate...
Undergraduatebenamilada - Nov 27, 2017 / admission2012 - Nov 29, 2017
|UBC - Tell us more about one or two activities
4 - Hi Michell! I also agree with Holt and @Lyipheoryia, and I want to add maybe you should connect those...
UndergraduateMichell20 - Nov 28, 2017 / benamilada - Nov 29, 2017
|My deep desire to help others. UBC Personal Profile
UndergraduateLyipheoryia - Nov 29, 2017 / Lyipheoryia - Nov 29, 2017
|Alone at home. This is the Intro to a very personal UC admissions essay.
6 - @Holisuna You still have a lot to develop on your essay. I think your paragraph is just fine as...
UndergraduateHolisuna - Nov 25, 2017 / Michell20 - Nov 27, 2017
|Being an outcast in my community. What do I value about Columbia?
2 - Daryl, don't just focus on the social inclusiveness as the value that you hope to pursue and achieve when...
Undergraduatekainakoa808 - Nov 27, 2017 / Holt - Nov 27, 2017
|My academic record is a mirror of myself
2 - Jay, you should be saying that the grades reflected in your academic record are NOT an accurate representation of...
Undergraduatejrd519 - Nov 27, 2017 / Holt - Nov 27, 2017
|STUDY PLAN. I would like to ask if the Canada embassy will help me to achieve my goals
Undergraduatefahme - Nov 22, 2017 / jrd519 - Nov 27, 2017
|If You could have any career, what would it be? (technology)
2 - Jay, this is a pretty good response. It lays the foundation for your interest in code. However, it doesn't...
Undergraduatejrd519 - Nov 26, 2017 / Holt - Nov 27, 2017
|My Struggle Through Teen Bullying/Suicide -Common App Prompt
4 - @jiholee5217 Hello! I totally agree with Holt. I believe that you should you Hannah only as a catalyst to...
Undergraduatejiholee5217 - Nov 16, 2017 / madiefarts123 - Nov 25, 2017
|What's the probability of existing? Make something out of it!
4 - hello isabella, I didn't really get carried along in your essay, I got lost at some point, I don't...
UndergraduateIsabellaalmeida - Nov 25, 2017 / Codex1717 - Nov 25, 2017
|What are the things most crucial to you and why?
7 - hello warisha, i agree strongly with isabella, recounting an experience that reflects your desire for personal growth will help...
UndergraduateWarisha - Nov 24, 2017 / Codex1717 - Nov 25, 2017
|Being Indifferent - Tell us about who you are. UBC
UndergraduateMichell20 - Nov 24, 2017 / Michell20 - Nov 24, 2017
|'The Art of Paper-Folding' - writing CommonApp Prompt #1
Undergraduateasemdi00 - Nov 24, 2017 / asemdi00 - Nov 24, 2017
|"The limit does not exist!" - Personal essay - Canadian destination
3 - @Holt im applying to a highschool. I believe they only asked me to write a personal statement without any...
Undergraduatequanphm - Nov 24, 2017 / quanphm - Nov 24, 2017
|What factors have shaped me - influenced by surrounding people, especially by one boy; my first love
4 - Hello polina, I think you should focus more on the influence the boy had on you.. What you've stated...
UndergraduatePolinaProto - Nov 17, 2017 / Codex1717 - Nov 22, 2017
|Will it be beneficial to teach students of distinct abilities collectively?
5 - Chinky, your concluding paragraph is what destroyed the ability of this paper to get a high score. Your concluding...
Undergraduatechinkybehl22 - Nov 21, 2017 / Holt - Nov 22, 2017
|UT Dallas College Essay for Admission and AES Scholarship
3 - Thank you Holt for the amazing feedback! Do you think that this essay could also be used for this...
Undergraduatephnguyen0912 - Nov 18, 2017 / phnguyen0912 - Nov 22, 2017
|How I'm the next Macgyver (UC prompt 3) opener
2 - Madison, since this essay is supposed to be a type of interview, you may want to consider opening the...
UndergraduateMadisonDozier - Nov 21, 2017 / Holt - Nov 22, 2017
|Perfect Candidate for FIT? Admissions Essay - Advertising and Marketing Communications
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for the valuable input. I have submitted my essay after making the suggested edits....
Undergraduatekjaxk17 - Nov 21, 2017 / kjaxk17 - Nov 21, 2017
|Colgate Supplement - 3 word description - "bold, humble and happy" (250 W or less)
3 - Holt, I've rewritten the essay entirely and asked again for new descriptions and this is what I got so...
Undergraduaterowliejohnflores - Nov 17, 2017 / rowliejohnflores - Nov 20, 2017
|What is important to you? My freedom.
4 - Hi Michell, This is my contribution towards your essay.I think your third and fourth paragraph is too small.As far...
UndergraduateMichell20 - Nov 19, 2017 / Ashkan123 - Nov 19, 2017
|From Napoleon to Genes - diversity in thought
UndergraduateIsabellaalmeida - Nov 17, 2017 / Isabellaalmeida - Nov 18, 2017
|Syracuse University - Person dreaming of becoming - 250 W or less
2 - Hello rowlie, Nice essay. I think this sentence should have been "The college democrats organization will fuel my interest...
Undergraduaterowliejohnflores - Nov 17, 2017 / Codex1717 - Nov 18, 2017
|Fashion Institute Of Technology/FIT Fashion Business Management essay "evolution of fashion"
5 - Lisa, you are right about not saying "I am a good candidate because". In fact, all applicants to any...
Undergraduatesugarcanexox - Nov 16, 2017 / Holt - Nov 18, 2017
|Ethics and Integrity - when it affects your family
UndergraduateIsabellaalmeida - Nov 16, 2017 / Isabellaalmeida - Nov 17, 2017
|The study plan to convince Canadian visa officer my application of study permit
3 - I have some comments on your writing, I have already corrected them: - Originally, I was an International sales...
Undergraduateq910044 - Nov 16, 2017 / Ann Ngo - Nov 17, 2017
|Syracuse University (SU) - Why Syracuse? Who-What? STUDENTS OF SUSTAINABILTY ORG. (250 W or less)
2 - Rowlie, the reference point for this essay should use the future tense of "will" since you have yet to...
Undergraduaterowliejohnflores - Nov 17, 2017 / Holt - Nov 17, 2017
|Describe any of your previous experiences in Film Production
6 - I'm lost on your word count.... But I'll still correct what I can.. In junior high school period......
Undergraduates890217 - Nov 16, 2017 / rowliejohnflores - Nov 17, 2017
|My interest in engineering started at an early age; Texas A&M Engineering Admission Essay
3 - tobiadio, this response is highly curt and barely responds to the prompt questions. You must work on lengthening your...
Undergraduatetadio - Nov 16, 2017 / Holt - Nov 16, 2017
|Coffee and its universal laws. Caltech students have fun.
UndergraduateIsabellaalmeida - Nov 15, 2017 / Isabellaalmeida - Nov 16, 2017
|Additional info that may not be easily discernible from your academic record or list of activities
8 - Thank you very much for the response! I will revise my essay according to the feedback given....
Undergraduatemadiefarts123 - Nov 13, 2017 / madiefarts123 - Nov 16, 2017
|"We are about to be homeless" - Common app personal essay
4 - Aime, Your story is pretty impressive. I totally agree with @Holt. You should tell more about yourself, your...
UndergraduateAmatis250 - Nov 15, 2017 / Isabellaalmeida - Nov 15, 2017
|Three experiences which helped to explore your desire to study and possibly pursue a career in STEM
UndergraduateIsabellaalmeida - Nov 15, 2017 / Isabellaalmeida - Nov 15, 2017
|"My experience as a basketball captain. " - General CommonApp Prompt
7 - you did a good job to describe your extracurricular activities very well, but if you pay more attention to...
Undergraduateroomonfire - Nov 7, 2017 / al50332 - Nov 15, 2017
|"my first job interview" - GT short answer - being outside of the comfort zone
3 - Guangze , your response is totally inappropriate for the prompt provided. This s not something that happened to you...
Undergraduategzu2018 - Nov 15, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|Additional intellectual activities that you have not mentioned or detailed elsewhere in your form
4 - Thank you @Holt and @roomonfire for your analyses. As a general view, the words mentioned are in Portuguese, not...
UndergraduateIsabellaalmeida - Nov 11, 2017 / Isabellaalmeida - Nov 15, 2017
|Pitzer Supplement Essay: a topic on Menstruation!
2 - Keely , I am confused by the essay discussion. You need to clarify whether you are in Vietnam or...
Undergraduatelittlebig1 - Nov 14, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|"Growing up across the world" - UW second essay
5 - Maya, I adore this essay! Especially considering it's so close to my heart (Indian born and raised in Japan)....
Undergraduatemojomaya - Nov 5, 2017 / roomonfire - Nov 14, 2017
|University of Washington essay - When my dad lived away from my family and what I learned from it
2 - Christian, the reason your essay is over the word count is because you are treating this essay as a...
Undergraduatecreepnchristian - Nov 13, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|Qualified for English major class. Admission essay to the Tran Hung Dao High School
7 - @Holt thanks...
Undergraduatekhang1310 - Nov 12, 2017 / khang1310 - Nov 13, 2017
|At Georgia Tech, I aspire to engage in Hack GT and captivate my passion for computer science.
4 - @Holt Is this response better? I have removed the descriptive parts about my personality and instead focused more...
Undergraduategzu2018 - Nov 12, 2017 / gzu2018 - Nov 12, 2017
|College Application Essay to the University Of Buffalo Prompt 6
2 - Vashan, what is the specific prompt you are trying to respond to? Your response is not aligned with the...
UndergraduateChannelBlonde - Nov 11, 2017 / Holt - Nov 12, 2017
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