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|Dreams, plans for the future and reasons for choosing KAIST
3 - @Holt Wow, thank you so much for the detailed feedback. Really though, I see you everywhere, pretty much a...
Undergraduategabriellesinaga - May 14, 2020 / gabriellesinaga - May 16, 2020
|Cybersecurity - how did you choose your proposed course and institution?
3 - @ChrisPra One of the poorest essays I have ever seen. Think twice, thrice before you write an important thing....
UndergraduateChrisPra - May 11, 2020 / TaraAryal23 - May 14, 2020
|Fulbright essay-personal statement- economic development
3 - @Holt How can I contact you privately? You may contact us at: email@example.com (request me for a private service)....
UndergraduateNiko_s - May 12, 2020 / Niko_s - May 12, 2020
|Why did you choose chemical engineering?
3 - This is not a statement that actually responds to the prompt. Your reasons are generic. It could apply to...
Undergraduatejhonferisaltamba - Apr 27, 2020 / Holt - Apr 27, 2020
|Personal statement to apply to universities in the UK (just the introduction and the conclusion)
2 - It would have been alright for you to post just the beginning and end of your personal statement if...
Undergraduatethuychitran - Apr 23, 2020 / Holt - Apr 24, 2020
|"Why Do You Want To Attend a Service Acdemy?" Question(s) for Nomination
3 - @Holt I appreciate the sincerity of your response. Honestly I was taken aback at first then realized that you're...
Undergraduatewilly_mcnilly - Apr 16, 2020 / willy_mcnilly - Apr 21, 2020
|[PERSONAL STATEMENT] If you could change anything about the way you were raised, what would it be?
2 - Let's consider what the prompt is asking you to discuss. What is it about your upbringing that you would...
Undergraduategrace261202 - Apr 9, 2020 / Holt - Apr 9, 2020
|Common App Essay, Non-Catholic attending Catholic School
Undergraduatepaigecaskey - Apr 6, 2020 / Holt - Apr 7, 2020
|SCAD Statement of Purpose - Transfer/ Illustration Major
2 - The essay is weak in two parts: (1) the preparation that you have done throughout that will make you...
UndergraduateNadai25 - Apr 1, 2020 / Holt - Apr 2, 2020
|NUS personal statement + SOP essay for science
3 - @Holt Thanks for youe review i had been thinking too to add a detailed experience but due to word...
UndergraduateSshreya - Mar 30, 2020 / Sshreya - Mar 31, 2020
|Statement of purpose AMA+ K'art, Screenwriting
3 - In my view, your essay is too informative, which is difficult for the reviewer to get into your story....
UndergraduateMelitanh - Mar 24, 2020 / khangdu8897 - Mar 24, 2020
|Germany - Personal Statement Essay for AFS Application - Proof-reading
2 - This is an excellent start to your response essay. You provide enough basic answers to the the questions. What...
Undergraduatevibrance - Mar 9, 2020 / Holt - Mar 10, 2020
|Canada Cartage - Waterloo Admission Information Form - Additional Information
2 - Talking about your part time job is the perfect way to respond to the instruction. There are no hard...
UndergraduateAbhayWalia - Feb 27, 2020 / Holt - Feb 27, 2020
|Waterloo AIF - Circumstances with an adverse effect on my academic performance
UndergraduateAbhayWalia - Feb 27, 2020 / AbhayWalia - Feb 27, 2020
|SAIC application - Artist Statement
2 - This is a very strong essay unto itself. However, it lacks one important aspect. You have spoken of any...
Undergraduatespidernovna - Feb 26, 2020 / Holt - Feb 27, 2020
|Columbia Science Honors Program Essay Revision - interests and background in science and mathematics
UndergraduateRithvik - Feb 26, 2020 / Rithvik - Feb 26, 2020
|Waterloo AIF Form (Mathematics)
3 - It is useless to discuss your academics in this part of the statement because you were given several chances...
Undergraduatehanxuan - Feb 24, 2020 / Holt - Feb 25, 2020
|Help with Waterloo AIF form (Part a, Computer/electrical Engineering)
UndergraduatePeterra - Feb 24, 2020 / Peterra - Feb 24, 2020
|My reason for choosing the data science and CFM majors at Waterloo University
Undergraduatealice725 - Feb 15, 2020 / alice725 - Feb 22, 2020
|NUS (NATIONAL UNIVERSITY OF SINGAPORE) PERSONAL STATEMENT FOR ARCHITECTURE UNDERGRADUATE.
4 - @Holt hello Holt, your feedback helped me alot in improving my personal statement. i rewrote it in order to...
Undergraduatehrishi - Feb 17, 2020 / hrishi - Feb 22, 2020
|CHANGING SCENERY; Loyola Marymount University application question - Critical thinking
2 - This is a somewhat correct response to the prompt. Depending upon what your word allotment is, you could have...
Undergraduatekevinjbarr - Feb 17, 2020 / Holt - Feb 18, 2020
|Essay about a place - Ho Chi Minh
2 - I'll assume that you are practicing to write in British English and use that as the reference point. Remember...
UndergraduateThnhNgn - Feb 16, 2020 / Holt - Feb 17, 2020
|The Disciples of Christ Church - Chapman Personal TRANSFER essay
2 - I believe that you misunderstood the instruction for the discussion. It is not asking you for your path throughout...
Undergraduateaanselmostudent - Feb 15, 2020 / Holt - Feb 15, 2020
|UWaterloo AIF Help (Computer Science and Data Science) - reasons of your program choice
4 - Hi. I think you need to be more specific about what sparked your interest in CS and Data Science....
UndergraduateAcedia1001 - Feb 10, 2020 / Ulaai - Feb 14, 2020
|What is your main reason to study media and communication? Bachelor Degree
Undergraduatehatdenhoxxx - Feb 13, 2020 / Holt - Feb 14, 2020
|Help with my Waterloo AIF! (Comp. Sci / Math [Data Science])
3 - There are two keywords in this essay that will weaken your consideration for a student slot. The words are...
Undergraduateheet - Feb 11, 2020 / Holt - Feb 12, 2020
|Middle school teacher - The most memorable person in your life
3 - The introductory sentence is missing the subject "person" as indicated in the title of the statement. The sentence does...
Undergraduatephu nhuyen - Feb 11, 2020 / Holt - Feb 11, 2020
|'amazing, a wonderful friend and an even better person' - Other people's opinions of me
2 - If you just revise the beginning of the statement to exclude the reference to your brother and focus instead...
Undergraduateash1699 - Feb 10, 2020 / Holt - Feb 10, 2020
|My Younger Brothers Cancer
3 - Writing: Your writing is very good, I am just pointing out some grammatical and spelling mistakes that I found...
Undergraduatepaigecaskey - Feb 10, 2020 / Gaucho - Feb 10, 2020
|IVEY AEO ESSAY (Character in Leadership)
4 - Well, this is certainly a very reflective essay response. You actually managed to respond to the prompt in a...
Undergraduateyellowjello123 - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Feb 1, 2020
|The swimming community- Advice on my Queen's PSE Essay
UndergraduateFercruz - Jan 29, 2020 / Fercruz - Jan 31, 2020
|Essay on an important political issue concerning my community and my generation. -UT Austin prompt
Undergraduatezanwar2 - Jan 29, 2020 / zanwar2 - Jan 29, 2020
|Computer Science - Undergraduate application Jacobs University
2 - This statement is too general in terms of references. You are not really giving the reviewer any information that...
UndergraduateOngun1905 - Jan 28, 2020 / Holt - Jan 28, 2020
|Describe a situation when it was important for you to work with someone you didn't know
7 - @Holt I suggest you rewrite this essay using a situation in which you met the lecturer of yours half...
UndergraduateSunday Ujong - Jan 20, 2020 / ReginaOtu - Jan 25, 2020
|What does diversity mean to you and why do you think society needs diversity? No more than 250 words
Undergraduatejacobs - Jan 24, 2020 / Holt - Jan 25, 2020
|NTU - Skin problems / Describe a person who has had an influence on you.
2 - Is there a character limitation on your statement? If so, you should lessen the description of your skin problems...
Undergraduatejtjt99 - Jan 23, 2020 / Holt - Jan 23, 2020
|Tell us about a time when you learned from failure - UofT One Idea Application
4 - Merged: Tell us about a time when you learned from failure - UofT One Idea Application During...
Undergraduateguyucguy - Jan 21, 2020 / guyucguy - Jan 23, 2020
|Part A, Waterloo AIF - biomedical program, pharmacy
2 - The essay is weak and unimpressive for the most part. However, there are certain sections that you can use...
Undergraduatevmsl1937 - Jan 21, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|Describe a situation when you had to work very hard to achieve what was required.
UndergraduateEvidenceBrown - Jan 20, 2020 / EvidenceBrown - Jan 21, 2020
|AIF Extracurriculars Essay - additional information
3 - This is meant to be only a response statement as it offers only a 600 character allotment. So you...
Undergraduategeorgiaberg - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 20, 2020
|Why I decided to try in school - AIF Waterloo; tell anything else about yourself
4 - You need to write a new supporting statement. It is alright to brag, in a less direct manner in...
Undergraduatehowardturtle - Jan 19, 2020 / Holt - Jan 20, 2020
|The Reason Why I Am Interested In Engineering And Willing To Perform Well
5 - Can you provide the complete prompt for this essay so that a proper review of your work can be...
Undergraduatetheone2020 - Jan 19, 2020 / Holt - Jan 20, 2020
|AIF For Software Engineering (More About Your Goals)
2 - Without access to the actual prompt you are responding to, I cannot really tell you that you are responding...
Undergraduatetheone2020 - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 20, 2020
|Why I'm not motivated in highschool
3 - I'm not sure if lack of motivation is what they're looking for, typically I believe this is used for...
Undergraduatehowardturtle - Jan 17, 2020 / georgiaberg - Jan 20, 2020
|International issues - Personal Statement for Applying to undergraduate course at NUS
7 - Have you tried build your own games? You can elaborate more on that. What programming language or platform did...
UndergraduateLemonBreadKing - Jan 1, 2020 / Ulaai - Jan 18, 2020
|UBC Personal Profile: Importance of a Balanced Life
3 - I am afraid that the essay ran away from you and the prompt itself. What you discussed was more...
UndergraduateFamai - Jan 4, 2020 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|Moving to the Philippines - NTU: event or incident you have encountered personally
2 - What is missing in this essay is the actual impact of how these immersive experiences on you as a...
Undergraduatejtjt99 - Jan 18, 2020 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|One employment opportunity - it's impact and the greatest learning outcome for me
2 - As of the moment, what I think is implied in the essay is that you are a self-centered person...
UndergraduateSakyo107 - Jan 16, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|UW AIF Part B: Question 4. Data Science / Machine Learning
2 - This statement is meant to get to know you beyond your interest in Data Science and Machine Learning. I...
Undergraduatejust_a_gene - Jan 16, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|Uw AIF for computer science coop. Part A Question 1
3 - As Holt mentioned, try to be more specific in your goals and what led you to them. For example,...
UndergraduateIR_567 - Jan 16, 2020 / just_a_gene - Jan 16, 2020
|Writing my personal statement on moving states and finding myself
2 - Try to make this essay stronger by explaining what research path you wish to take. If it is laboratory...
Undergraduatenormsauce - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|'to make a difference in Prague' - ERASMUS MUNDUS SCHOLARSHIP: TOURISM DEVELOPMENT AND CULTURE (MSC)
2 - The last paragraph should be the opening paragraph of this essay. It carries your actual motivation for your desire...
UndergraduateVitova6 - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|My plans are connected with Indonesia if I'll be not able to receive the scholarship (100 words max)
3 - Your response sounds too relaxed for the prompt provided. You need to take a more serious tone in response...
Undergraduateandreazarina - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|"adaptable" - UBC application essay----tell us about yourself
2 - You only responded to the last part of the essay regarding what you are proud of. You failed to...
Undergraduatekarmalea - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|Engineering as a major - China student enrolling in USA
3 - @Holt I really appreciated your response, and I tried to fix my answer by the order of question that...
UndergraduateHotDragon10 - Jan 13, 2020 / HotDragon10 - Jan 15, 2020
|I am putting forward my candidacy for enrollment in electrical engineering of an University
2 - Don't just rely on Elon Musk and his accomplishments in the field of neural science to prove your motivation...
Undergraduatemoog2001 - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|COMMON APP, is this necessary? Details of circumstances or qualifications...
3 - This part of the application essay is optional because it has to do with some factors that may exist...
UndergraduatePabloEscobar - Dec 25, 2019 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Tell us about who you are. How would your family, friends describe. (UBC personal profile)
4 - It would be better if you used a different personality trait for every section required in the essay. The...
UndergraduateArmaanS - Jan 5, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Waterloo Engineering and AFM AIF - Accounting and Financial Management
UndergraduateWaterCivEngAFM - Jan 14, 2020 / WaterCivEngAFM - Jan 14, 2020
|The band that I organized by myself. Activities that are most important to you
Undergraduaterichardli0124 - Jan 14, 2020 / richardli0124 - Jan 14, 2020
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