First draft of my essay to the Cornell U College of Arts and Sciences. Criticize and over criticize if you'd like. I want the essay to be as polished as possible. Thanks :)
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study. (Max. 500 words)
Opportunity's Door
When I was younger, adults would always ask me, "What do you want to be when you grow up?" "A vet!" I responded with enthusiasm to the question each time, although I was always greeted with the same response. A knowing smile, a few brief words to my mother that I will probably change my mind hundreds of times as children often do. I never did, and I'm now steps away from my journey toward achieving that goal.
I always preferred a challenge over taking the easy route, whether it was daring friends who could race uphill the fastest instead of on level land, or attempting with everything I had to read an entire thesaurus at the age of five instead of the picture books that were offered to me. Academically this is no different. I desire Cornell's diverse atmosphere, the challenging majors and mentally stimulating courses that are available.
Studying biology at Cornell can academically bring me to new heights I could never reach before. I have one set goal - to be a veterinarian - but so many extra-curricular interests that only Cornell's vast array of fine programs could satiate them. I've explored acting in dramatic and comedic plays, delved deep into studying the classical compositions of Mozart and Czerny, and volunteered in both bustling inner cities and rural communities. The variety at Cornell excites me, and I'm ready to dive head-first into the new opportunities that lie ahead.
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study. (Max. 500 words)
Opportunity's Door
When I was younger, adults would always ask me, "What do you want to be when you grow up?" "A vet!" I responded with enthusiasm to the question each time, although I was always greeted with the same response. A knowing smile, a few brief words to my mother that I will probably change my mind hundreds of times as children often do. I never did, and I'm now steps away from my journey toward achieving that goal.
I always preferred a challenge over taking the easy route, whether it was daring friends who could race uphill the fastest instead of on level land, or attempting with everything I had to read an entire thesaurus at the age of five instead of the picture books that were offered to me. Academically this is no different. I desire Cornell's diverse atmosphere, the challenging majors and mentally stimulating courses that are available.
Studying biology at Cornell can academically bring me to new heights I could never reach before. I have one set goal - to be a veterinarian - but so many extra-curricular interests that only Cornell's vast array of fine programs could satiate them. I've explored acting in dramatic and comedic plays, delved deep into studying the classical compositions of Mozart and Czerny, and volunteered in both bustling inner cities and rural communities. The variety at Cornell excites me, and I'm ready to dive head-first into the new opportunities that lie ahead.