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Races - What do you do for fun (MIT)



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Jan 4, 2022   #1
We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it

200-250 words

I am a huge Formula 1 fan!

For twenty-two weekends out of the year, I devote three hours to watch my favourite driver battle it out on track. I'm usually not an early bird, but I never miss any Formula 1 races, even if they are happening at five in the morning.

I enjoy watching the incredible speeds of the machines, their physics-defying nimbleness at the hands of the drivers, and the complex team strategies. The fierce competition between the drivers and all of the teams always has me at the edge of my seat. I sometimes scream at my TV hoping my favourite drivers can hear me cheering them on.

Aside from the intense wheel to wheel racing, other aspects of the sport, such as the controversies and rivalries, add to its appeal.

My favourite driver at the moment is Lewis Hamilton, and my dad's favourite driver is whoever is Lewis's biggest rival. My dad and I have a very competitive mindset when it comes to sports, which is why we always cheer for the opposite teams. I love this aspect because when my favourite driver wins, it feels ten times better.

Outside of the races, I really enjoy reading about the rules and watching videos about how the different parts of the car function. It gives me a better understanding of the sport and the controversy is much more interesting if you understand all the terminology.

It also helps me win debates against my dad

I would appreciate it if anyone would give me some feedback :)

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15400  
Jan 4, 2022   #2
I believe that the essay will be even better if you can add to the fun that you have with your dad while watching the Formula 1 races. It will help enhance your image as a son who knows how to enjoy the company of your parent or male role model. The reference to engineering and mechanics as a fun activity for you is really evident in the essay but should not be the focal point of the"fun" part. Not all of the responses need to lead back to your study interest. It should show another aspect of your personality aside from the budding engineer. This is a good example of how you can use your interest to help build a relationship with your father in a fun way. So try to add to the information about how you do this for fun, with the enhancement of building your relationship with your parent. That will help balance out the "fun" aspect of the discussion. Making this a shared hobby with your dad, focusing only on the Formula 1 aspect, will most certainly help make this a better character and relationship driven essay. An aspect of your personality that will certainly be of interest to the reviewers.


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