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'senior year was supposed to be easy' - ucf essay - bump in the raod



virgo66 2 / 1  
Sep 7, 2008   #1
I would really appreciate any feed back

I would really have to say that the "bump in the road" that affected my academics, would have to be health reasons. I have had my share of health issues from freshman through my junior year of high school. Little did I realize what a problem this would become, not only academically but in my personal life also. I really did miss a lot of school and it was hard to keep my grades where they should have been. I missed having fun with friends when I was not feeling well and had to stay home many Friday nights when all my friends were at football games, I was home in bed. So many Saturday mornings, my friends called and wanted me to go to the beach, or shopping I just couldn't get out of bed. I even missed homecoming my junior year. Yes, I bought a ticket, bought a dress that I had searched months to find the perfect one, but as usual I got sick as I was putting on my new dress. I was heart broken.

I finally decided that something had to be done. My doctor finally decided surgery was my only option. Not too mention I was sick and tired of medication. Reluctantly, my parents and I agreed to surgery. It really came down to the only thing that would make me better. We decided to have it done over the summer, so I would have plenty of time to recover. I was scared. I never had any surgery and didn't know what to expect. My parents were always very encouraging. They told me that there was noting to be afraid of, and would tell me how much better I will be after. They were right. I am doing so much better. I still feel sore, but as each day goes by, I notice a remarkable difference.

This year, my senior year is supposed to be easy. All my hard work was supposed to pay off this year. Not for me, because of an illness I have to work extra hard to prove myself. I know that the "bump in the road" is over, surgery was successful. I have in fact, never felt better physically. I do not want people to think of this as an excuse, or a cop out. It really happened to me. I feel like I missed a lot of events throughout high school due to this bump in the road. I am looking forward to all the senior events and even joining clubs to make the most of my year. Perhaps trying to fit everything in this year will be a challenge, but I want to do what I missed out on my first few years. I plan on going to college, no matter what it takes to get there. I will be the first in my family to attend college, and there is no bump in the road big enough to stop me from doing that. I know with perseverance and determination I will not stop until I succeed.

EF_Team5 - / 1583  
Sep 7, 2008   #2
Good evening.

I would really have to say that the "bump in the road" that e ffected my academics (Remove comma) would have to be health-related . I have had my share of health issues from freshman through my junior years of high school.

I missed having fun with friends when I was not feeling well and had to stay home many Friday nights; when all my friends were at football games, I was home in bed. So many Saturday mornings (Remove comma) my friends called and wanted me to go to the beach (Remove comma) or shopping but I just could not get out of bed.

I was heartbroken .

I never had any surgery and did not know what to expect.

This year, my senior year, is supposed to be easy.

Not for me, because of an illness. I have to work extra hard to prove myself.
OP virgo66 2 / 1  
Sep 7, 2008   #3
Thank you so much. It is great to get your feedback. You really helped!


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