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[IELTS] consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat - GRAPH



matthewdang131 1 / 2  
Sep 12, 2013   #1
The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph compares the consumption of chicken, beef, lamb and fish from 1979 to 2004.
As can be seen from the graph, the grams of beef, lamb and fish was consumed per week going downward while the trend of chicken consumption was upward.

At the beginning of 1979, the amount of consumed beef stood at 225 gram per week. After fluctuating with an upward trend to the peak of just under 250 gram per week, the consumption of beef plunged to under 100 gram per week in 2004. Between 1979 and 2004, there was an erratical drop of the consumption of lamp from 150 gram per week (1979) to 80 gram per week (2004). Fish was consumed more stable than other type of meat with a slight decrease from roughly 60 to under 50 gram per week. In contrary, the amount of consumed chicken increased from under 150 gram per week in 1979 to over 250 gram per week in 2003, and then slightly fell back at 250 in 2004.

OP matthewdang131 1 / 2  
Sep 12, 2013   #3
I'm sorry I can't either attach the picture of the graph or link it from other web page.
MisterWandering 18 / 314  
Sep 12, 2013   #4
the grams of beef, lamb and fish was consumed per week going downward while the trend of chicken consumption was upward.

There was a rise in the amount of chicken consumed while the other three experienced an opposite trend.

gram

grams

lamp

lamb

Fish was consumed more stable

Fish consumption was more stable

other type

other types

In contrary

On the contrary/In contrast
dumi 1 / 6793  
Sep 19, 2013   #5
Hi,
Please open IELTS related writing in Writing Feedback forum.
Also, you can use the feature, "Attach file(s) " to upload your diagrams. It is always recommended to have them together with your writing because it helps others provide you with more relevant comments.

Overall, I find your writing is really good. It follows the desired structure for this task. However, without the graphs I cannot verify things what you've written in your response :(


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