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|Essay about worldwide market share of notebook computer
2 - There is an inconsistency in your time reference throughout the essay. As you are speaking of measurements taken in...
Writing Feedbackwearelearning - 1 hr ago / Holt - 1 hr ago
|The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years.
2 - Your essay is quite good. However, you have a tendency to not complete the minimum 3 sentence requirement per...
Writing Feedbacktung53202 - 4 hrs ago / Holt - 1 hr ago
|It is no longer necessary to use animal as food or to use animal products.
2 - Your stance in the actual discussion is unclear. The essay requires the defense of only one stance in the...
Writing Feedbackiamktrang - 18 hrs ago / Holt - 2 hrs ago
|Common for people to get married and have children in their thirties rather than when they are young
3 - Your second paragraph is a little bit more applicable to the prompt instructions when compared to your first reasoning...
Writing Feedbackhungdo - 20 hrs ago / Holt - 2 hrs ago
|The line graph illustrates how people consumed fast food in UK per week
Writing FeedbackHunT - Mar 28, 2020 / tung53202 - 4 hrs ago
|Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization.
5 - @Holt Thank you for your very helpful review! In fact, i did not do any research. The 2008 recession...
Writing FeedbackFreyMiggen - 2 days ago / FreyMiggen - 8 hrs ago
|Difficulties of urban life.
3 - I think in the opening, you dont neccessaily have to mention "three remedies", and I think the transition to...
Writing Feedbackaprilmk - 2 days ago / Thangnguyen315 - 21 hrs ago
|Task 1: Line graph about countries' birth rates
2 - You have to remember that you have to follow a certain format for writing the Task 1 essay: -...
Writing FeedbackThangnguyen315 - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|Sexual Assault: Its Effects on Victims
2 - Truth be told, the paper doesn't make much sense. The introduction doesn't really outline what the discussion will be...
Writing FeedbackTina 9910 - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|IELTS Writing task 1: Internet Users from countries as percentage of population 1999-2009
3 - i think your writing has some mistakes in terms of grammar and the word choice. For instance, the first...
Writing Feedbackmaizaq - Mar 30, 2020 / Thangnguyen315 - 1 day ago
|Women who worked in parliament - IELTS _Writing Task 1_Line Chart
7 - I think beside some minor grammar mistakes, you should also take the word choice in to consideration. For example,...
Writing Feedbackmy123456 - Mar 27, 2020 / Thangnguyen315 - 1 day ago
|Too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds.
3 - Apart from some wrong spelling, your essay is totally done very well.You generate your sentences by using flexible linking...
Writing Feedbackbella05 - 1 day ago / Nguyenkhanhnhu - 1 day ago
|Many animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in the sea
3 - Thank you so much for showing me. I will try my best to improve these mistakes and apply your...
Writing Feedbacklanfeng - 2 days ago / lanfeng - 1 day ago
|IELTS Task 2: Disappearance of high street shops
5 - Overall, your essay is so good that you are capable of combing your views and the examples completely. I...
Writing Feedbacktaeyonieee - Mar 30, 2020 / aprilmk - 2 days ago
|IELTS Task 1: Pie chart: Revenue Sources and Expenditures of a USA Charity
Writing FeedbackTHC1310vn - Mar 30, 2020 / THC1310vn - 2 days ago
|Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they...
2 - Your prompt paraphrase is inaccurate. You have not properly responded to the given discussion requirement. Compare what the original...
Writing Feedbackemmawattson - Mar 31, 2020 / Holt - Mar 31, 2020
|Essay about the influence of Education on eating habbit
3 - You are not being asked to deliver a solution to the problem in this essay. You are only being...
Writing Feedbackiuudung - Mar 31, 2020 / Holt - Mar 31, 2020
|Some students choose to study in another country for a time during high school or university.
Writing Feedbackcuongndangh2003 - Mar 20, 2020 / hmphuongg - Mar 31, 2020
|Domestic recycling - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 LINE GRAPH
Writing Feedbackemmawattson - Mar 30, 2020 / emmawattson - Mar 31, 2020
|Learning online is sometimes a necessity: the pros and cons
3 - Hello Diem, in my view, you have done a good job, except for several sentences to be polished. ...
Writing FeedbackdiemanhN - Mar 31, 2020 / Zavy - Mar 31, 2020
|Children to know right from wrong - IELTS 10 Test 1 Writing Task 2
Writing Feedbackjacksonhong - Mar 30, 2020 / jinjin000 - Mar 31, 2020
|IELTS task 2: Time spent by young adults with their family
Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - Mar 30, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Mar 31, 2020
|'Museums should be open to everyone' - IELTS Task 2 - Many museums charge for admission
Writing Feedbackphong3baotap - Mar 26, 2020 / phong3baotap - Mar 31, 2020
|Household living - WRITING TASK 1_BAR CHART_CAMBRIDGE 13 TEST 2
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|Many people recommend that we should use more public transports for our sake. Do u agree or disagree
2 - As a task 2 essay, I would have to caution you against writing less than the minimum word count....
Writing Feedbackimbiinn - Mar 30, 2020 / Holt - Mar 30, 2020
|Our planet's nature - writing IELTS Task 2 cambridge 14
3 - Some grammar error you need to note: 1. important environmental problems. 2. In addition, on in a busy...
Writing FeedbackEvi_Nurliza - Mar 30, 2020 / phong3baotap - Mar 30, 2020
|General Training, Task 2 - Type: Direct Questions - Subject: Prepare students for the world of work
2 - Dear, although your essay is lengthy enough, there are problems with coherence that I want you to ponder: ...
Writing FeedbackGaucho - Mar 30, 2020 / miatran239 - Mar 30, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 ( Topic: science & research)
4 - Some grammatical and spelling mistakes: -THE governmental scientific staff -THE scientific industry -.. and A huge budget -these...
Writing Feedbackngocminh96 - Mar 28, 2020 / Gaucho - Mar 30, 2020
|Australian household energy use and greenhouse gas emissions. Task 1: IELTS - CAMBRIDGE 10
Writing Feedbackmiatran239 - Mar 29, 2020 / miatran239 - Mar 30, 2020
|Giving possibility to choose subjects students prefer or enforcing obligatory subjects at schools?
5 - Some grammatical and spelling mistakes: - ... they have AN interest in ... - ... to reach the...
Writing FeedbackJackieMahamn - Mar 29, 2020 / Gaucho - Mar 30, 2020
|Writing task 2: Academic knowledge vs Life skills
3 - Since you did not provide the original prompt and there are several essays that fall under this topic, I'll...
Writing Feedbackleanhtu121 - Mar 29, 2020 / Holt - Mar 29, 2020
|Some individuals claim that the only purpose of movie is to entertain. Others have different opinion
4 - dear @Holt The full topic is "Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. Others...
Writing Feedbackxuangiao2000 - Mar 29, 2020 / xuangiao2000 - Mar 29, 2020
|Ielts task 1 - line graph shows changes in the amount of fast food consumed by Australian teenager.
Writing Feedbackhuyenhuyen - Mar 28, 2020 / huyenhuyen - Mar 29, 2020
|Export revenues from five different products - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Two charts - Cambridge 14
3 - The summary overview is creative but, it is lacking in representation. There are 5 categories represented in both the...
Writing Feedbackmomopeach - Mar 28, 2020 / Holt - Mar 29, 2020
|What can be done about the hunger crisis? Advanced agriculture and lack of food.
Writing Feedbackhuynbin99 - Mar 28, 2020 / huynbin99 - Mar 28, 2020
|The chart - information about the age of women in Australia who give first birth
2 - The first problem with this presentation has to do with the summary overview. You forgot to mention: - The...
Writing Feedbackcongcongzo - Mar 28, 2020 / Holt - Mar 28, 2020
|Topic: Television is harmful for communication skills of people. Why?
3 - There are actually 2 different prompts that apply to the Task 2 essay topic you have chosen. Unless I...
Writing Feedbacktrongduong - Mar 27, 2020 / Holt - Mar 28, 2020
|Dangerous automobile drivers
3 - As an English writing exercise, you did not do a bad job. You actually have a coherent essay presentation...
Writing Feedbackyenyee - Mar 27, 2020 / Holt - Mar 28, 2020
|IELTS Task 1: Process diagram: Generating electricity
Writing FeedbackTHC1310vn - Mar 25, 2020 / THC1310vn - Mar 28, 2020
|Problems - New technologies have changes the way children spend their free time.
2 - Okay, the original prompt asks you to consider if the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. That means that your approach...
Writing FeedbackSunn123 - Mar 27, 2020 / Holt - Mar 27, 2020
|Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read
2 - This is a 5 paragraph essay based on the discussion outline requirement which was provided in the original essay....
Writing FeedbackJanny_Ttttt - Mar 27, 2020 / Holt - Mar 27, 2020
|Distant-learning and telecommuting
Writing FeedbackHuy27112002 - Mar 27, 2020 / Holt - Mar 27, 2020
|Being right or being kind, which is more important to you?
3 - @Holt thank you for your feedback. Hope you can make time to look through my rewriting of this topic...
Writing FeedbackSillyFox - Mar 23, 2020 / SillyFox - Mar 27, 2020
|IELTS Task 2: Advantages and Disadvantages - Children enjoy playing video game.
3 - @Holt Hi, I've read your response. Thank you for helping me to check this essay. Whenever I start writing,...
Writing Feedbackrosincent - Mar 26, 2020 / rosincent - Mar 26, 2020
|Many wild animals are in danger.
2 - Any essay, be it an academic or English exam presentation requires the same formatting presentation: -Introduction -Discussion 1...
Writing Feedbackanotherdth - Mar 26, 2020 / Holt - Mar 26, 2020
|Older generations have traditional values about how people should live, think and behave
2 - The question is "To what extent do you agree OR disagree with the given statement?" You are not being...
Writing Feedbackminhtram166 - Mar 26, 2020 / Holt - Mar 26, 2020
|What are the causes for changing jobs every couple of years?
4 - The essay restatement is good. It clearly restates the prompt and outlines the discussion paragraphs clearly. However, when it...
Writing FeedbackBrianstorm - Mar 26, 2020 / Holt - Mar 26, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2: Public funds on the arts? Is the government wasting money?
5 - @bachache: I appreciate your idea about another upside of investment in art. As for the structures and language used...
Writing Feedbackbee_linhtinh - Mar 25, 2020 / bee_linhtinh - Mar 26, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2: Should animals be kept in zoos? Describe both views and give your own opinion
2 - There is a distinct possibility that you could score within the 5 range with this type of work. The...
Writing Feedbackbachache - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 26, 2020
|There is disagreement on the impact of increased business and culture contact between the countries
2 - Your response deviated from the discussion reason that was provided in the original prompt. The only perspective that you...
Writing FeedbackThien Xuan - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 26, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2: different views about teaching children to become a good citizen of the community
2 - First of all, the way you divide your argument into paragraphs is not completely logical. This is a "...
Writing Feedbacknguyenanh97 - Mar 25, 2020 / taeyonieee - Mar 26, 2020
|The government should sometimes infringe on people's freedom for the security of society.
Writing Feedbackducpronehaha123 - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] Discussion about online courses
2 - There is a slight error in your discussion instruction paraphrase. You are not going to discuss the advantages and...
Writing Feedbackjohn221 - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Should museum ask for entrance fee?
2 - Never use words of uncertainty in a Task 2 test. The essay is calling for a precise description of...
Writing Feedbackpotatowee - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|IELTS Task 2: Advantages and Disadvantges: Conveniece foods
Writing FeedbackTHC1310vn - Mar 17, 2020 / anhnn146 - Mar 25, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages?
Writing Feedbackkaisergod47 - Mar 20, 2020 / anhnn146 - Mar 25, 2020
|Advantages of living in a large city - quality of life?
3 - @Holt Thank you very much. My writing is very bad, so I just write this thread to practice and...
Writing Feedbackhoa1128 - Mar 25, 2020 / hoa1128 - Mar 25, 2020
|Students should study whatever they like or only allowed to study subjects that will be useful
2 - This is a comparative discussion with a personal opinion essay. The one thing this is not is a personal...
Writing Feedbackminhtram166 - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|The beneficial elements and the drawbacks of advertisements
2 - The discussion approach for this essay is a single opinion based defense of your opinion. That means, you respond...
Writing Feedbacknhatduy240203 - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|Government should protect environment and provide education / health care
3 - This writing is a combination of 2 different Task 2 essay topics. As such, it will be difficult to...
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