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Sticky: [WRITING TASK 1] The average on cell phone, national fixed line amd international fixed line service

4 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your feedback. Maybe i typed too fast so i made a lot unexpected mistakes. I...

Writing Feedbackelliemiller - Oct 13, 2020 / elliemiller - Oct 14, 2020
IELTS@In many countries, people spend more and more time away from their families. What causes this

3 - Please note that the word count on your essay isn't met the IELTS requirements for task two. You can...

Writing Feedbackwjc74751 - 10 hrs ago / huyjunnie - 2 hrs ago
Homelessness IELTS part 2

NEW - Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes...

Writing FeedbackQuang Bao - 3 hrs ago / — -
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (NATURAL PROCESS): The diagram shows the life of a honey bee.

5 - I think your part 1 writing is not well-structured, your second overview paragraph is not doing such a good...

Writing FeedbackHelen Phan_4505 - 2 days ago / Quang Bao - 4 hrs ago
PROBLEM WHEN RESIDING ABROAD - LANGUAGE BARRIER.

3 - Your first starting senctence is not quire clear, but I think still acceptable. However, you have used incorrectly word...

Writing FeedbackDonfil - 11 hrs ago / Quang Bao - 5 hrs ago
A writing about education.

NEW - Students have to pay for their studies as it only benefits individuals rather than society. To what extent do...

Writing FeedbackNhat Ha - 5 hrs ago / — -
If a product is good enough or it meets people's needs, advertising is unnecessary. Opinion essay

4 - Yes, I also think you made a mistake about "fish source" instead of "fish sauce", which then causes the...

Writing Feedbackarthur123 - Aug 12, 2022 / Nhat Ha - 5 hrs ago
It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history.

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback, I'm going to take the IELTS exams so do you have any recommendations...

Writing FeedbackNhat Ha - 11 hrs ago / Nhat Ha - 5 hrs ago
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: IS MONEY THE MOST IMPORTANT FACTOR TO MOTIVATE PEOPLE TO STAY IN THE WORKFORCE

3 - I agree with the consultant that your conclusion is a little too short while your introduction is quite detailed,...

Writing Feedbackgradient - Aug 11, 2022 / Nhat Ha - 5 hrs ago
Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones (school day). Both views

3 - I think you should divide the second paragraph into 2 parts so as to make it easier to follow....

Writing Feedbackanhkhoa257 - Aug 12, 2022 / Nhat Ha - 11 hrs ago
IELTS Task 1 - write a letter to report customer's complaints

3 - The writer has made some basic grammatical mistakes in this letter, such as "become perfect" instead of "become perfectly"...

Writing Feedbacktslove - 2 days ago / Donfil - 12 hrs ago
BUSSINES ADMINISTRATION PERSONAL STATMENT FOR GLOBAL KOREA SCHOLARSHIP

3 - Thank you for your answer Since junior high school, I have been interested in business. At that time,...

Writing Feedbackaprilia27 - Aug 7, 2022 / aprilia27 - 1 day ago
Nothing can be done to prevent crime. To which extent do you agree or not?

2 - Do not immediately discuss the essay topic in the first paragraph. That is an automatic failing score since the...

Writing FeedbackWangYu0611 - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
ESSAYS ABOUT PUBLIC MUSEUMS AND ART GALLERIES (are they still needed?)

3 - Hi, In your first reasoning paragraph, your topic sentence mentions that:"... public museums and art galleries had better be...

Writing FeedbackDonfil - Aug 12, 2022 / lexuanhoa123 - 2 days ago
The youth pay more attention to entertainment celebrities than the historic figures of their nations

2 - The prompt restatement is well developed. However, the establishing discussion topics are missing from the opinion statement, thus leaving...

Writing Feedbackmichaelpark - Aug 12, 2022 / Holt - 2 days ago
Big salary is more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

2 - When writing the prompt estatement do not indicate "several reasons" when it cannot be referred to in the original...

Writing Feedbackmileyno - Aug 11, 2022 / Holt - Aug 12, 2022
Shortage of physical exercise is a prevailing situation among citizens

2 - A review of the original prompt indicates that the writer should have provided reasoning topics for the questions provided....

Writing Feedbackhdklntt - Aug 10, 2022 / Holt - Aug 11, 2022
IELTS 1: The changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent for housework.

2 - The summary as presented by the writer makes it appear that there is one image representing 2 measurement types...

Writing FeedbackJori - Aug 10, 2022 / Holt - Aug 11, 2022
Workforce motivation - IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - AGREE OR DISAGREE

2 - The writer has not provided an originally worded prompt topic restatement. He used a clear cut and paste phrase...

Writing Feedbacknghkmth - Aug 10, 2022 / Holt - Aug 11, 2022
Globalisation and cultural identities

2 - It is advisable to avoid statements of fact such as "It is obvious" since there are no such claims...

Writing FeedbackDuyanh120197 - Aug 10, 2022 / Holt - Aug 11, 2022
In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why? Is it a good thing?

NEW - In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Reason? Is it always a good thing to work...

Writing Feedbackcherryblossom - Aug 10, 2022 / — -
Write about the advantages and disadvantages of money.

4 - "... develop stably which causes many conflicts". You mentioned " conflicts" but what conflicts. The following example is irrelevant....

Writing FeedbackNolan Le - Aug 7, 2022 / cherryblossom - Aug 10, 2022
Should school-aged kids be compelled to partake in local volunteer projects without payment or not?

3 - unpaid community services should be a compulsory subject -> community service is not a subject -> simply " should...

Writing FeedbackNguyenviet - Aug 8, 2022 / cherryblossom - Aug 10, 2022
IELTS TASK 2 : the media empowering too much attention to the celebrities' personal life

3 - "empowering too much attention to". "follow the breaking news" I think these collocation does not exist. Your limited understanding...

Writing Feedbacklenannhien - Aug 9, 2022 / jasmine4 - Aug 10, 2022
Ielts Writing Part 2: Criteria for schools to choose student.

3 - @hklinh2792001 -"Firstly, students, who get a good mark throughout the process of learning, are usually considered ..." --> I...

Writing Feedbackhklinh2792001 - Aug 9, 2022 / Thuy Tran 07 - Aug 10, 2022
The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attract

2 - The summary overview should have been divided into 2 sentences + the trending statement. The 2 sentences should have...

Writing Feedbackchaminh306 - Aug 10, 2022 / Holt - Aug 10, 2022
The questionnaire about opinions of club members and general public for the new theater in one town

2 - The writer did not perform a proper analysis of the table provided. the representation of the image should have...

Writing Feedbackjane_00 - Aug 10, 2022 / Holt - Aug 10, 2022
The table shows the television channels viewing figures for sports in some countries

4 - You missed the overall and even your report was quite short in my opinion....

Writing FeedbackQuangvan752 - Aug 7, 2022 / jane_00 - Aug 10, 2022
Government should not spend money on international aid when they have their own disadvantaged people

2 - There is no reference to a timeline within the original presentation. Therefore, including a timeline mention in the rewrite...

Writing Feedbackjane_00 - Aug 9, 2022 / Holt - Aug 10, 2022
What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

2 - The essay is definitely too short to receive a passing mark since deductions will apply for writing only 223...

Writing FeedbackStellar365 - Aug 9, 2022 / Holt - Aug 9, 2022
Technology is affecting family relationships in many ways. What are advantages/disadvantages?

2 - The writer should refrain from presenting a personal opinion within an advantage or disadvantage prompt presentation. That is because...

Writing FeedbackLinh Luong - Aug 8, 2022 / Holt - Aug 9, 2022
Task 1: The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows

NEW - uk residents in travel The line graph compares the trips to and from the UK between 1979 and...

Writing FeedbackIloveielts - Aug 8, 2022 / — -
Essay regarding government spending which should be more targeted on education or on infrastructure

3 - The first body paragraph has missed the task achievement point since it is not logical : A person will...

Writing FeedbackAxis0019 - Aug 3, 2022 / Iloveielts - Aug 8, 2022
The graph below gives information from report about consumption of energy in the USA

4 - when you give the background information, the period of time should be placed at the end of the sentence....

Writing Feedbackquandz - Aug 7, 2022 / Nguyenviet - Aug 8, 2022
Writing task 2 - Essay about public healthy and the growing presence of sports facilities

2 - The main reason that this essay will receive an overall failing score has to do with the lack of...

Writing Feedbackloanphanbich - Aug 6, 2022 / Holt - Aug 7, 2022
IELTS writing task 2 about a work-life balance: related problems and the best solution

3 - @Holt Thank you very much...

Writing FeedbackKieuOanh151202 - Jul 31, 2022 / KieuOanh151202 - Aug 7, 2022
IELTS writing task 2 - topic: who should be accountable for the environmental protection?

3 - hi, I'm not a professor, but I'm hoping this will help you. Your essay includes too many details and...

Writing Feedbackmymyhannah - Aug 6, 2022 / pngnnn21 - Aug 6, 2022
The proportion of car trips made by male and female drivers for 8 purposes in the year of 2005

2 - The trending statement is over extended. A trend is a singular measurement of one activity or action. As such,...

Writing FeedbackIloveielts - Aug 6, 2022 / Holt - Aug 6, 2022
Evaluate my ielts writing task 2 essay about health and diet topic

3 - The first one is the mistakes with vocabularies. : sedentary lifestyle, and it usually goes with lead a sedentary...

Writing Feedbackhuyenanhmcqn - Aug 6, 2022 / Iloveielts - Aug 6, 2022
The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 200

3 - Thanks for your feedback, i really appriciate it! Hope you have a good day!...

Writing Feedbacktranvanson2001 - Aug 5, 2022 / tranvanson2001 - Aug 6, 2022
In today's world, urban life has been associated with many persistent issues

3 - The first thing is the misbalance between 2 bodies: extending the roads and improving the quality of public transports...

Writing Feedbackxuanvietmc123 - Aug 3, 2022 / Iloveielts - Aug 5, 2022
IELTS TASK 1 THE MOST POPULAR ACTIVITIES IN TWO COUNTRIES

3 - I apologize for not giving a graph of the data. Thanks for your feedback...

Writing FeedbackLa Da - Aug 5, 2022 / La Da - Aug 5, 2022
Problems living in big cities and whether the government should encourage more people to relocate

2 - The topic restatement is highly confusing. If it is a suggestion, then why did is suddenly turn into a...

Writing Feedbackalice05 - Jul 24, 2022 / Holt - Aug 5, 2022
IELTS Task 2 - Essay about whether they will choose traditional materials or read online freely.

2 - The writer obviously misunderstood the discussion requirement for the essay. He has not responded in the manner that will...

Writing Feedbackviethoangpham - Aug 1, 2022 / Holt - Aug 5, 2022
Task 1: different types of waste disposed of in one country

2 - The trending paragraph should be simpler in presentation. It should not a total report paragraph unto itself as is...

Writing FeedbackIloveielts - Jul 30, 2022 / Holt - Aug 5, 2022
A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited and have same rights as humans

2 - Wow! A dictionary exploded all over this statement. It is like the student decided to look up word descriptors...

Writing Feedbacktrong - Aug 4, 2022 / Holt - Aug 5, 2022
The outcomes of a survey on coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

2 - The summary overview does not identify the type of image nor the number of images. The listing of cities...

Writing FeedbackHomayoun khan - Aug 4, 2022 / Holt - Aug 5, 2022
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of being famous individual

2 - The opening sentence would have better served the presentation had it been used as the introduction to the personal...

Writing Feedbackpngnnn21 - Aug 4, 2022 / Holt - Aug 4, 2022
Task 1 : production of vegetables in 5 different countries.

2 - The trending statement is overextended. There needs to be only one trend presented since the amount of potatoes produced...

Writing FeedbackIloveielts - Aug 1, 2022 / Holt - Aug 4, 2022
Task 2: Several laborers are struggling to achieve the work-life balance

2 - The essay is heavily reliant on word and phrase fillers to meet the word count. These are what made...

Writing FeedbackIloveielts - Aug 2, 2022 / Holt - Aug 4, 2022
Sources in the overall energy - IELTs writing task 1: Chart summary

2 - While the word count is impressive, the lack of proper sentence structuring and sentence type representation will hold back...

Writing Feedbackkhanghoang - Aug 4, 2022 / Holt - Aug 4, 2022
Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, causing many health problems

2 - Try to limit your writing to 300 words. That will allow ample time for proper editing and finalization of...

Writing Feedbacktanuzky - Aug 3, 2022 / Holt - Aug 4, 2022
It is often said "when in Rome, do as the Romans do." Do you think people should adapt and accept...

3 - "hands-waving in Greek..." you mean hand-waving since you use only one hand while waving. Also better to use either...

Writing Feedbackngnnthu - Aug 2, 2022 / Axis0019 - Aug 3, 2022
Is the only reason for learn languages is to travel and work overseas or not. Discuss both views.

2 - The writer shows incorrect punctuation usage in the presentation. Any student of written English knows that the basic punctuation...

Writing FeedbackEsther Lee - Aug 3, 2022 / Holt - Aug 3, 2022
The usage of electrical devices and the number of hours used for housework per household; IELTS 1

2 - Please post only one version of the essay next time. Multiple postings in the same thread will result in...

Writing Feedbackhaiyen0903 - Aug 3, 2022 / Holt - Aug 3, 2022
TOPIC: The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors (in thousands) to three different area

2 - The essay will get a failing score due to the poor writing abilities of the writer. He has obvious...

Writing FeedbackWangne - Aug 3, 2022 / Holt - Aug 3, 2022
IELTS1: Bar Chart: international students graduating from universities in various Canadian provinces

2 - The summary overview fails to properly recognize the type of graph provided because it used a cut and paste...

Writing Feedbackpthtnh - Aug 2, 2022 / Holt - Aug 3, 2022
In some cultures, the old is more valued, while in other cultures youth is more valued. Both views

4 - In place of on the other hand you can use however or apparently Like you compared both the...

Writing FeedbackJared26 - Aug 2, 2022 / Lebica_97 - Aug 3, 2022
Ielts writing task 2 topic hobbies; Industrial revolution 4.0

3 - On the one hand, people who greet new things outside are more creative, not only seize the opportunities for...

Writing Feedbackchauminh - Jul 30, 2022 / Iloveielts - Aug 2, 2022
Some people believe that keeping pets is beneficial while others believe that it is a bad idea

5 - In my opinion, having pets is an overall positive practice due to the great psychological advantages enjoyed by owners....

Writing Feedbackjasmine4 - Jul 29, 2022 / Iloveielts - Aug 2, 2022

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