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|Allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters or not
2 - Just_writer, hi please see below Overall comments: 1. I recommend to avoid these types of sentences in the...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - 3 hours ago / nemezidus - 3 hours ago
|The diagram presents the process of generating electricity from geothermal energy in a power plant
2 - @just_writer Hi! I am not expert in writing, but I want to criticize your writing((( I think your introductory...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - 3 hours ago / Mara - 3 hours ago
|Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 16, 2017 / AliminHamzah - 6 hours ago
|IELTS Task 2: International tourism brings negative consequences for visited countries.
5 - hello, glad to read your essay. you wrote more than 250 words and you used well grammar but you...
Writing Feedbackpeachaddiction - Oct 5, 2017 / AliminHamzah - 6 hours ago
|The difference of consumption between chicken beef lamb and fish in a European country
Writing Feedbackcherry_amour - 19 hours ago / cherry_amour - 9 hours ago
|The place where students hang out
Writing FeedbackSheGoesLalala - 22 hours ago / SheGoesLalala - 12 hours ago
|Some people think that boarding schools are an exellent option for children, while others disagree
5 - Helloo Usman, you have met the IELTS criteria when it comes to writing task 2. This essay has covered...
Writing FeedbackUkiUsman - Oct 5, 2017 / eddies - 17 hours ago
|IELTS TASK 2: much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the country side
5 - Hi. I'd like to show another way to paraphrase the prompt. =>In the last few years, some countries...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 9, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - 22 hours ago
|The bar chart illustrates the Biritish male and female employees working in different occupations
5 - @hapi_hana9 Hi, I'd like to rewrite a sentence for you. Overall, the percentage of men ... => Overall,...
Writing Feedbackhapi_hana9 - Oct 10, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - 23 hours ago
|Students want to live away from home while they continue to study
Writing Feedbackaliceliang - 1 day ago / aliceliang - 23 hours ago
|Kids can learn from the very first days by their parents, but other say it's the task of the school
3 - @Ummu Hi, I'd like to give you another example of paraphrasing the prompt: Children is an essential thing......
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 9, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - 1 day ago
|A person's worth should be judged by social status, material possessions or traditional values
4 - @tadey Hi, I'd like to give you an example to paraphrase the prompt: Opinions differ as... => These days,...
Writing Feedbacktadey - Oct 5, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - 1 day ago
|People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing
5 - Thank you @ah_zafari and @duynguyen1808 for your comments and corrections. I wonder why my vocabulary becomes so basic in...
Writing Feedbackpier - 1 day ago / pier - 1 day ago
|The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurant between 2003,2013
3 - You should actually aim to write at least 200 words of the 150 minimum for this type of essay....
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|[task 1] line graph - the revenue of a New York City Bookstore
6 - @Holt @pier...
Writing Feedbackphduyenngo - 2 days ago / phduyenngo - 1 day ago
|IELTS task 2: The advantages and disadvantages of the current population structure
5 - @monopolymi Hi. I think your paraphrase of the prompt is good enough. I'd like to give you another example....
Writing Feedbackmonopolymi - Oct 8, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - 1 day ago
|Why grand and expensive marriages became more and more common in recent years?
3 - @Ecirtaeb Hi, as @Holt has said, you didn't paraphrase the prompt correctly. I'd like offer you another example. ...
Writing FeedbackEcirtaeb - Oct 8, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - 1 day ago
|Taking a gap of one year after completing high school and before taking admission
4 - As @Holt has pointed out, you should have paraphrased the prompt rather than copy it. I'd like to give...
Writing Feedbacknguyencaocuong - Oct 7, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - 1 day ago
|Writing Task 2. Small Village and City Center
5 - @Ummu Hi. I'd like to make corrections for you. => ..., inhabitants live in (...) to socialize with...
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 12, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - 1 day ago
|Is it better to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway or on public transport?
3 - ... money to makes the available existing transportation system better. It's is a controversial discussion, so I will discuss...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - 1 day ago / nemezidus - 1 day ago
|The official forbiddance of smoking in public places - IELTS writing practice task 2 academic
5 - @lhy1216 Hi, I'd like to make a correction for you. ...because smokers contribute make up only a ......
Writing Feedbacklhy1216 - Oct 19, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - 1 day ago
|[task 1] bar chart writing - where people live in the Northwest region
9 - I totally understand and it's perfectly fine. I just did not like the Holt's comment. It was quite offensive....
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - 2 days ago / ah_zafari - 1 day ago
|The proportion of men and women from the Aussie country who did systematic physical activity
7 - @just_writer due to your active participation in the forum, you have earned the privilege of getting another response from...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - 1 day ago
|The bar chart compares the worldwide sales figures for four different games over 6 years period
9 - Hi monopolymi, A few pieces of advice: 1. In the introductory statement, while you are paraphrasing the...
Writing Feedbackmonopolymi - Oct 6, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - 2 days ago
|IELTS Task 1 - Bar chart - Population distribution in the Northwest region (1900 to 2050)
8 - Holt has briefly pointed out the main faults in this essay. However, I would like to point out some...
Writing FeedbackTran Minh Hien - Oct 15, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - 2 days ago
|IELTS Task 1: The trend of GDP growth in post-reform China
7 - Hello Wong, As a fellow candidate preparing for IELTS academic I can give you few pieces of advice...
Writing Feedbackwinky_wong - Oct 9, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - 2 days ago
|[task1] map writing: the evolution of a villege
4 - I see. Thank you for your advice. I will improve skills accordingly and try to turn writing into my...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 20, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - 2 days ago
|Punishment for each type of crime was often a prominent rule in societies
2 - Jalaleh, I would have been very happy to review this introduction for you had you just not forgotten one...
Writing FeedbackSol19921992 - 2 days ago / Holt - 2 days ago
|When proffesors give project on which students must work together, the students learn more effective
5 - @pier Hello Pier, your second draft is a lot better. However, there are some sentence construction errors in...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 18, 2017 / Onyinye123 - Oct 20, 2017
|Use of animals for testing medicines is cruel or not ?
3 - Hi jayy, I think you didn't correctly paraphrase the prompt. You also didn't discuss two views correctly. For example,...
Writing Feedbackjayy98 - Oct 20, 2017 / pier - Oct 20, 2017
|Is it essential for newcomers to get used and follow the traditions and culture in a foreign country
3 - Hi, a great deal ofmany/a lot of problems bussiness->business profoudly->profoundly to make youyour business success,. Besides, new residents integrate...
Writing Feedbackhoanghienktvn141 - Oct 19, 2017 / pier - Oct 20, 2017
|[task1] Three possible sites for a new hypermarket, which will be built in the city of Pellington
7 - @Holt Thank you for your explanation. But I'm a bit confused. I suppose the map is about "shopping center",...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 19, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 20, 2017
|A school has been given money to spend on one thing to improve the school.
3 - Laura, I think you have not been properly briefed as to how to write the opening statement of a...
Writing FeedbackLauraMoriarty - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 20, 2017
|Academic IELTS task 1-The maps of town center of Islip now and in the future
4 - Lu, when you provide the summary overview for your essay, always remember to include the discussion instruction at the...
Writing FeedbackChi Han - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 20, 2017
|The population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults. good or bad?
3 - This sort of essay, based upon your title heading, indicates that you are to pick only one side of...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 20, 2017
|Communication and trust are considered to be indispensable parts of social life
5 - @Holt Thank you very much, but I still don't know what should I do about the opening paragraph. Could...
Writing FeedbackRubenstein - Oct 19, 2017 / Rubenstein - Oct 19, 2017
|Maps below show the centre of small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development
4 - Hi just_writer, One mistake in paragraph 3: "The main road usability...." The meaning of "usability" means the ease...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 19, 2017 / Chi Han - Oct 19, 2017
|Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to VIP's personal lives
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 19, 2017 / TJLuschen - Oct 19, 2017
|Whether taking a gap year is a reasonable idea? (help, rescue poor writting)
4 - Hello Jane, I found some mistakes from your essay. Firstly, Grammar: -learn different culture of other countries...
Writing Feedbackchche - Oct 18, 2017 / happyfunny - Oct 19, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Is local history more important than world history? Opinion essay.
7 - @Holt Thanks your commend. I made a big mistake when I didn't make the question clear. I've learnt from...
Writing Feedbackscully_vananh - Oct 18, 2017 / scully_vananh - Oct 19, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Many countries increase the amount of household garbage going to landfill every year.
2 - Hang, you are taking an IELTS Task 2 test. This means, you are not allowed to start your discussion...
Writing FeedbackHannielee - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|It is now possible for scientist and tourist to travel remote natural environment eg. the south pole
4 - Ummu, the difficulty in understanding your presentation and the lack of cohesive and coherent paragraphs have led me to...
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|IELTS2 - it is necessary for parents to attend parenting training course to bring their children up
6 - Hello Guy, I think your essay didn't follow the prompt, I found some grammar mistakes: 1.You should...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 19, 2017 / happyfunny - Oct 19, 2017
|Children raised in the countryside have better than those from urban areas?
4 - Hi Pier, 1. I think it is better to write "... better educational facilities and effectively learn modern communication...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 18, 2017 / Hannielee - Oct 19, 2017
|Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research
5 - There are 2 observational points that I would like to call your attention to. The first, is the problem...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|Dependance on mobile phones. Everyone is using them more or less intensively.
3 - Huynh, you properly discussed the prompt by choosing to discuss only one side of the issue. This is a...
Writing Feedbacktieunuhuyenbi207 - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|Should long-term job-seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work
4 - I have modified it, based on the feedback. Please suggest. In many countries, the government gives benefits to...
Writing Feedbackitsme2216 - Oct 17, 2017 / itsme2216 - Oct 18, 2017
|Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle.
5 - I have modified it, based on the feedback. Please suggest. In many counties, the government gives benefits to...
Writing Feedbackitsme2216 - Oct 16, 2017 / itsme2216 - Oct 18, 2017
|IELTS writing task 1: Accommodations for holidaymakers
Writing Feedbacksarahna - Oct 3, 2017 / sarahna - Oct 18, 2017
|[task 1] Below is a map of the city of Brandfield - investments plan
3 - @Holt I see. Thank you for your explanation. I've finally found the proper way to write map analyses on...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 18, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 18, 2017
|Providing different kind of support to improve the quality of life of citizens in poorer nation
Writing FeedbackSummer1994 - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 18, 2017
|Some people believe that the amount of time that is put into art could be better managed
5 - Your second point on: parents who think there are no points in learning art for their child, is not...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 17, 2017 / Competent_Anna - Oct 18, 2017
|IELTS task 1-The charts below give information on the ages of people when they got married...
4 - @madeline8484 your summary overview is missing a few details that could have made it stronger. You should not have...
Writing Feedbackmadeline8484 - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 18, 2017
|The bar charts compares the percentage of Australian men and women who do regular exercise
4 - hi Chi Han. glad to read your writing, you wrote more than 150 and you sometime using well grammar...
Writing FeedbackChi Han - Oct 16, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 18, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug
6 - you're writing is not full chaotic, such as you used several correct grammar and you wrote more than 250...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 16, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 18, 2017
|The unpaid community service is not necessary to be a compulsory program in high school
3 - Hello hiimsandra, Here are some small possible corrections: free labor replaces get a lower wage more opportunities...
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 17, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 17, 2017
|[IELTS] We lived in a world of technology these days. Opinion essay.
4 - Few corrections:- information is more significant (information is singular) it raised concerns over the way of military having...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Oct 17, 2017 / itsme2216 - Oct 17, 2017
|Nowadays, a lot of new, big supermarkets are appearing every day - what about local business?
4 - Hi just_writer. You have a lot of comma splices and run-on sentences in your essay. A comma splice is...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 17, 2017 / TJLuschen - Oct 17, 2017
|[IELTS Task2] learning a different language benefits our lives apart from working and traveling
7 - Hi Katty, from what I can see from your essay is that shorten the paraphrasing. State your opinion in...
Writing Feedbackkatty1234600 - Oct 5, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 17, 2017
|Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
3 - Bezhab, you can very well use the word "However" in your paragraph presentation because it is meant to break...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 17, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
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