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(IELTS TASK 2) The public should be encouraged to use public transportation more. Give your opinio

6 - Hello I think you should change something: With technologic developments, automobiles, which are very important in the transportation...

Writing Feedbackeminhaqi - 15 hours ago / minhphuccttv - 6 mins ago

Writing Task 1 - An information on the aged of the populations of Yemen and Italy

3 - Philo, it is difficult for me to review the work that you did in this essay because you forgot...

Writing Feedbackalfabio - 6 hours ago / Holt - 11 mins ago

IELTS writing task 2: Liability to support state education system

4 - Dear Mary Rose and Johnny Hsu, Thank you very much for your advises and comments. I'll try to...

Writing Feedbacksarahna - 1 day ago / sarahna - 14 mins ago

[TOEFL] Which do you prefer, traveling with a companion or alone?

2 - Liu, when you write your essays, make sure that you always speak in completed paragraphs. That means, each thought...

Writing FeedbackJayde - 10 hours ago / Holt - 43 mins ago

[Wring IELTS task 1] bar graph

NEW - Hi, Here's the link to the file: 1drv.ms/w/s!AuZRT5rrgIV9gZZ8uEi18idIq8WbxA I appreciate your help...

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[IELTS writing task 2] Rising pressure on students, positive or negative?

3 - Nguyen, the strength of your essay lies in the method by which you discuss the body of paragraphs. The...

Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - 12 hours ago / Holt - 11 hours ago

Writing task 1 (IELTS). Process of coffee manufacturing

4 - Giang, each paragraph must be composed of 3-5 sentences in order to meet the requirements of the C&C section...

Writing Feedbackngangiang - 18 hours ago / Holt - 12 hours ago

[IELTS Writing task 1] What UK graduate and postgraduate students did after leaving college in 2008?

5 - @BADJ This essay is simple but very effective, helps readers to fully understand with relatively ease. Furthermore, it...

Writing FeedbackBADJ - 21 hours ago / hgianghgiang - 13 hours ago

CAE Essay Part 1: Methods schools and universities use to help students find suitable jobs

3 - Hanh, since this CAE test comes with a suggested discussion introduction, it would be best for you to present...

Writing FeedbackHanh Ngoc - 23 hours ago / Holt - 14 hours ago

IELTS Writing task 2; some people think that social networking sites have a damaging effect

4 - Good article with construction. Here are my personal views. 1.I think it will be better if we answer...

Writing Feedbacktuanminhnguyen - 1 day ago / Goldenjohnny - 23 hours ago

IELTs Task2: Advantages and disadvantages do home computers have for children

2 - Van, it is unfortunate that you forgot to upload the complete original prompt instructions along with your response essay....

Writing FeedbackVan Trang - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago

IELTS Task2. Is 24-hour television a good thing? Or it may bring some harm.

3 - @Holt Oh, you're right! I was confused by the two words, positive and negative, and jumped into writing immediately....

Writing FeedbackGoldenjohnny - 1 day ago / Goldenjohnny - 1 day ago

[TASK 1] Consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European nation

4 - thank you for helping me a lot @Holt and @hgianghgiang I have to spend more time on writing as...

Writing Feedbackminh2310 - Aug 18, 2017 / minh2310 - 1 day ago

To succeed, It is necessary to make sure that others know about your strengths or accomplishments.

4 - @sweetkick Well, I think you do have a clear mindset in organizing your article. While I am not a...

Writing Feedbacksweetkick - 2 days ago / Goldenjohnny - 1 day ago

IELTS Writing Task 2: should information be freely accessible?

3 - Long, this essay will get an automatic failing score. It will not pass any of the criteria for consideration...

Writing Feedbackhaugiangguny - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago

IELTS Writing Task2 - Why ppl try to find out the history of their family? Positive trend?

2 - Phuong, I understand that this is your first time writing an IELTS Task 2 essay. Which is why you...

Writing Feedbackviolavu - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago

IELTS Writing Task 2: Opinion over providing a wide range of young people with higher education

3 - Pham, there are points for correction in your opening statement. First of all, you were being asked to discuss...

Writing FeedbackFiar - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago

This simple electronic deveice should be banned in school. Do you agree or not.

3 - Nuru, I believe that you are trying to respond to a Task 2 IELTS essay. The problem, is that...

Writing Feedbackfastweb - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago

IELTS Writing task 2: Discussive passage (money on road systems?)

2 - Cam, this is an improperly developed essay. You did not properly develop the opening statement, you did not discuss...

Writing Feedbackcamtuvu - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago

The percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents.

4 - thank you so much for your feedback. These are very useful for my next essay...

Writing FeedbackYulia Indah - Aug 19, 2017 / Yulia Indah - 1 day ago

Salary must be consider top priority in choosing a job. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

3 - Kim, did you post the complete prompt instructions along with your essay response? It does not seem like you...

Writing FeedbackMimi123 - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago

Ad vs disad of a young population - IELTS task 2 essay

3 - @Holt I'm truly thankful for your remark. Regarding your advice on opening and concluding statements, I was following some...

Writing Feedbackxbb84 - 1 day ago / xbb84 - 1 day ago

Chevening Scholarship essays on Leadership and influence; early experiences

5 - Hi I have rewritten my essay on leadership and want your input Travis Bradberry defined leadership in his...

Writing FeedbackDanstand - Aug 16, 2017 / Danstand - 1 day ago

4 creteria: Coherence and cohesion, Lexical resource, Grammar, Task respond and comment

2 - Hi wind0111, Is the essay requirement correct? In my opinion, there are basic grammar errors in this topic...

Writing Feedbackwind0111 - 2 days ago / sarahna - 1 day ago

Museums are interesting mostly for tourists not locals. Reasons and solutions?

2 - Richard, this is a good essay with some slight problems. The first problem, is that you mentioned that there...

Writing Feedbackbangyeuemlam - 2 days ago / Holt - 2 days ago

ESSAY: Downloading songs and books is considered a crime. Do you agree or disagree?

2 - Nguyen, this is a very well developed discussion of a controversial topic. Your statements have made a mark on...

Writing Feedbacktianangbandem - 2 days ago / Holt - 2 days ago

IELTS Task 2 [direct question] Why do people want to research their family history?

5 - @Danstand Thank you for your word choice corrections. I'll fix those mistakes in my second draft. Hope you can...

Writing FeedbackLinh Tran - Aug 18, 2017 / Linh Tran - 2 days ago

GRE argument essay. Prunty County and highway safety.

2 - Aryan, where did the 25 percent number come from in your argument? Did you accidentally post an incomplete prompt...

Writing Feedbackiaryansingh - Aug 19, 2017 / Holt - 2 days ago

Ielts 2: Comic, Books, Radio, TV, Film, Theater - Advantages and disavantages.

2 - @tran14 I think your essay is good but you need to cross-check your vocabulary and sentence structure for example,...

Writing Feedbacktran14 - 2 days ago / LAudrey - 2 days ago

[IELTS task 1]The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England

6 - 1) Your way of paraphrasing the topic sentence is not appropriate. 2) It is better to join the two...

Writing FeedbackJohn050645 - Aug 16, 2017 / tran14 - 2 days ago

Should young people follow traditions of their society or be free to behave as they will?

3 - @Holt Thank you for giving me so many constructive suggestions about IELTS writing! I have been struggling for improvement...

Writing FeedbackGoldenjohnny - Aug 19, 2017 / Goldenjohnny - 2 days ago

Gender equality at schools controversial topic research

3 - Thank you so much for your help. I'll keep what you said in mind and try to follow the...

Writing Feedbacknguyenthibichhan - Aug 18, 2017 / nguyenthibichhan - Aug 18, 2017

Map of Brandfield. New shopping mall project.

4 - Thank all of you for comments on my essay. This will help me much in my next work...

Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 18, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 18, 2017

The table and the pie chart below shows the numbers of visitors and the survey of satisfaction.

5 - Hello Try In your writing has many mistakes: The table with a set of data present => presents,...

Writing FeedbackTryToImprove - Aug 12, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 18, 2017

Working from home: Effects? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

5 - Hello Giang, Here is my view on your essay: modern employees => recent employees, conventional => general,...

Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Aug 16, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 18, 2017

The number of passenger in three distinct types of railway in The United Kingdom

3 - You need to attach the illustration once you submit your work because withou it, we hardly can help you...

Writing FeedbackAhmad1103 - Aug 17, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 18, 2017

(IELTS) Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities

5 - @Holt Hello Mary Rose, Thank you very much for your feedback. It is really detail and useful to my...

Writing FeedbackSerena11 - Aug 17, 2017 / Serena11 - Aug 18, 2017

Ielts; demand for electricity in England, common consumer usage

3 - Thank you for your advice. It will help me a lot....

Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 16, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 18, 2017

Some say that combative sports should be left out from the school curriculum, I disagree.

3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your review and advice :)...

Writing Feedbackzeal - Aug 16, 2017 / zeal - Aug 17, 2017

[Toefl] Buying a new technological device right away is better than waiting until many people...

3 - Matthew, please do not exaggerate the terms of the discussion being presented in the essays. Exaggerating by using terms...

Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 17, 2017 / Holt - Aug 17, 2017

[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] The charts below show the comparison of water usage for three important

3 - Abdul, your summary overview must include the type of measurement being used in the pie charts (percentages) and the...

Writing Feedbackhenryo2 - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 17, 2017

America the Land of the Confined

3 - Sage, I don't get the point of this research paper. The extremely ill formatted opening paragraph does not contain...

Writing Feedbacksagecamp - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017

IELTS Task 2 Topic: sports events. Type: Discuss both view

2 - Anh, there is a clear disconnection between what the original essay instructions are and what you are discussing in...

Writing FeedbackNhu Tran - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017

Job satisfaction and how to have job satisfaction from all workers

3 - Annie, you misunderstood the last question in the prompt. The question relates to whether or not an employee can...

Writing FeedbackAnnie Tran 162 - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017

Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. Agree?

3 - Thank you very much for your advice. I will rewrite this and post it here!...

Writing FeedbackSkynet - Aug 16, 2017 / Skynet - Aug 16, 2017

IELTS task 2 - The pros and cons of being watched

2 - Jennie, you used the wrong representation in the final sentence of you opening paraphrase. It is important that you...

Writing Feedbackchopresident981 - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017

Ielts task 2, topic: management, type, money reward: Discuss and solution.

5 - Hi @tran14, I think you essay is good,but you have some grammar mistake like: this act: this action...

Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 16, 2017 / Nhu Tran - Aug 16, 2017

Methods of measuring learning in educational settings

5 - Nguyen, you are only being asked for your opinion about exams. Therefore, there was no requirement for you to...

Writing Feedbackchocuatt - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017

Besides making money, enterprises should also have public responsibilities

3 - Bui, here is something that you need to know about the prompt requirements. Unless the instruction says "Discuss both...

Writing Feedbackchauanhbui99 - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017

The benefits of teaching art, music or ports subjects at schools

4 - @Holt Dear Holt, thank you so much for your comment, I realized that I should learn more and more...

Writing FeedbackThuHangLC - Aug 15, 2017 / ThuHangLC - Aug 16, 2017

A permanent job and work under same company for the whole life

3 - 1) Your introduction contains too many details that are not really necessary. Just paraphrase the topic and give your...

Writing FeedbackMimi123 - Aug 15, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 16, 2017

Chinese Civil War. Major historical events have powerful impact to people.

4 - @Holt @zeal Thanks for your comments. I really appreciated it. For me, there are still a lot of things...

Writing Feedbacktoseanliu - Aug 15, 2017 / toseanliu - Aug 16, 2017

Working while studying pfenomenon.

4 - @Holt @zeal Thanks for your opinions. They are quite useful to me. I will try to fix my writing...

Writing Feedbacktoseanliu - Aug 15, 2017 / toseanliu - Aug 16, 2017

Apartment vs. Dormitory - University student living

3 - That was my edited post, thank you for your comments places to live for students Students at...

Writing Feedbacktrongtuan441996 - Aug 14, 2017 / trongtuan441996 - Aug 15, 2017

Ban for fast food adverts? [WRITING TASK 2]The best way to prevent obesity in children!

6 - @minhphuccttv Hello, this my personal idea . In the first para A number of the population ----> a number...

Writing Feedbackminhphuccttv - Aug 15, 2017 / trongtuan441996 - Aug 15, 2017

I have just graduated from Hue University of Education - autopresentation

2 - @Tran Trinh the subject is Physics, with an S at the end, not Physic as you mistakenly spell it...

Writing FeedbackTran Trinh - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017

How many tonnes of goods were transported in the UK over a 28-year period

2 - Anh, the presentation has a number of minor problems that need to be addressed. For the summary overview, you...

Writing Feedbacktienanh - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017

Leadership skills: Some people could be naturally good leaders. Or people just can learn leadership?

3 - Vu, when you are given a "2 points of view plus personal opinion" instruction, you must never combine your...

Writing FeedbackVu Thanh - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017

Travel during Public Holidays - Problems & Solutions

4 - Holt, I'm sorry if the request mentioned above is offensive to you. I didn't mean any kind of privilege...

Writing Feedbackearlnguyen - Aug 13, 2017 / earlnguyen - Aug 15, 2017

[Toefl] It is crucial for youngsters to have the planning and organizing skills.

4 - @Katthew Kim These are a few comments for you and I hope it is helpful. Firstly, the opening paragraph...

Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 14, 2017 / Mimi123 - Aug 15, 2017

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