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|Sticky: [WRITING TASK 1] The average on cell phone, national fixed line amd international fixed line service
4 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your feedback. Maybe i typed too fast so i made a lot unexpected mistakes. I...
Writing Feedbackelliemiller - Oct 13, 2020 / elliemiller - Oct 14, 2020
|Do the advantages of shopping online outweigh the disadvantages?
4 - Hi, my fellow student. I noticed that the second paragraph contained as many as eight sentences. It is not...
Writing Feedbackdieudan - 2 days ago / LadyOfClockwork - 3 hrs ago
|THE MIGRATION FROM RURAL AREA TO CITIES IS INCREASING
NEW - Nowadays, the number of people migrating to cities is increasing gradually. This essay will discuss the mains reasons and...
Writing Feedbackkhanhdoan_1110 - 9 hrs ago / — -
|IELTS Writing Task 2 Discussion - The study of food science and its preparation
2 - This is a 5 paragraph discussion essay. The format for the information presentation should be based on a 2...
Writing Feedbackphatblack - 1 day ago / Holt - 13 hrs ago
|Many believe that individuals can do little to improve the environment.
3 - Hi. As @Holt said, I believe it would have been better if you had outlined the reasons for your...
Writing Feedbackvipro - 2 days ago / LadyOfClockwork - 16 hrs ago
|These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers in secondary schools
Writing Feedbackhaavyy - Apr 4, 2021 / phatblack - 1 day ago
|Nuclear energy is a better choice for meeting increasing demand, agree or disagree?
3 - Hi, as @Holt said, when the question is Agree/Disagree, all you are expected to do is to indicate your...
Writing Feedbacksaoran6234 - Apr 4, 2021 / LadyOfClockwork - 1 day ago
|On Travelling to DaLat Trip
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|Teenagers should have the opportunity to hold a part time essay
NEW - Hello, I would like your feedback to improve, especially the introduction and conclusion part since is an area where...
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|Celebrity lives in the media - ( to what extent do u agree or disagree )
2 - As this is an extent essay, your actual opinion must be presented in the paraphrasing section to help represent...
Writing Feedbackhuathduoc - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the
2 - I cannot continue to review this essay as it falls under the minimum word count. Out of 250 words,...
Writing Feedbackbinh3108 - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|Reasons to support the idea of having new teachers each year
Writing FeedbackJasmine999 - Mar 29, 2021 / Jasmine999 - 2 days ago
|Funds for system that provides people with various kinds of transportation to commute
2 - Your discussion is short by 2 words of the minimum 250 word count. There will still be a minimal...
Writing Feedbackmyle19 - Apr 7, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
|The maps below show the development of a particular area from 1965 to the present day
2 - Your summary overview is incorrect. It must give a description and identification of the images being provided. You are...
Writing Feedbacklahieuu63 - Mar 30, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
|Why is cycling not popular in many places? And how to increase its popularity?
2 - You are being asked 2 direct questions at the end of the original prompt. You are required to give...
Writing Feedbackthiendep123 - Mar 29, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
|IELTS TASK 2 - THERE ARE NOT ENOUGH POLITICAL ACTIONS TO STOP GLOBAL WARMING
6 - Hi @juliachung As far as I know, the primary cause for global warming is not overconsumption of plastic...
Writing Feedbackjuliachung - Mar 21, 2021 / LadyOfClockwork - Apr 7, 2021
|The given line graph tracks how many tonnes of acid rain was emitted from four different sectors
NEW - UK acid rain emissions graph The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes,...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Apr 7, 2021 / — -
|Universities should focus on specialist subject - this is a much better choice. IELTS Writing task 2
5 - Hi @CBQ. I'd love to discuss the sentence "it leads to undergraduates' poor motivation..." I don't think the...
Writing FeedbackCBQ - Mar 24, 2021 / LadyOfClockwork - Apr 7, 2021
|Proportion of water used for agriculture - writing task 1 test 1 in cam ielts practice
NEW - three purposes of how water is consumed The pie chart illustrates 3 different purposes of how water is...
Writing FeedbackABCDisme - Apr 6, 2021 / — -
|We need to take an action - daily diet and physical activities to reduce the number of obese kids
NEW - Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Then-First Lady Michelle Obama, who is one of...
Writing Feedbackbinh - Apr 4, 2021 / — -
|The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed driving test-task1
NEW - driving licenses passing statistics The diagram depicts the rate of women and men in an Asian nation who...
Writing Feedbackduchoang18052001 - Apr 3, 2021 / — -
|Is society's overall success more important than individual well being?
Writing Feedbackanubhavkaro - Apr 1, 2021 / Holt - Apr 2, 2021
|IELTS writing task 2: Punishing children at an early age, agree or disagree?
NEW - I need help to check errors and identify the band score. It is important for children to learn...
Writing Feedbackkiro14893 - Apr 1, 2021 / — -
|Writing task 1 the alteration of country's export of several products for one year from 2015
2 - Your information in the first sentence is incorrect. First of all, there are two images represented, a table chart...
Writing FeedbackNMU123 - Mar 29, 2021 / Holt - Mar 30, 2021
|Self-employment became popular among the majority of people. Why is that?
Writing FeedbackMsC - Mar 25, 2021 / MsC - Mar 29, 2021
|To afford a house instead of renting one is tremendously essential for people in some nations
3 - @Holt Firstly, I want to thank you for giving me those comments. Secondly, I want to make this clear....
Writing Feedbackgiangkc1811 - Mar 28, 2021 / giangkc1811 - Mar 29, 2021
|Possibility of space tourism and its impact on astronomic
Writing Feedbackphong4703 - Mar 29, 2021 / Holt - Mar 29, 2021
|Writing task 1: The chart show households in renting and owning accomocation in English and Wales
NEW - Houses owned vs rented 1918-2011 The chart illustrates how purchasing and renting houses of people in England and...
Writing FeedbackLe Minh Hien - Mar 28, 2021 / — -
|Going to school or homeschooling
5 - The way that you are using to divide your essay is inappropriate. There should not be just one sentence...
Writing Feedbackmiraitowa - Mar 19, 2021 / giangkc1811 - Mar 28, 2021
|NZ International businesses - Is this a well thought out Introduction and Thesis Statement
2 - You cannot jump from first to last without representing the discussion topics in between. You have the right idea,...
Writing Feedbackkartstar113 - Mar 27, 2021 / Holt - Mar 28, 2021
|Future people will not buy printed newspaper or books, they will read everything they want online
3 - Hi, I think you could diversify your presentation by using synonyms for 'printed newspaper" instead of the word itself....
Writing FeedbackHodiep - Mar 23, 2021 / LadyOfClockwork - Mar 26, 2021
|The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in million tonnes from four different sectors
5 - Hi. As a reader, I'm not happy with the "enormous change" sentence. First, I think you could make...
Writing Feedbackngockhanh181107 - Mar 19, 2021 / LadyOfClockwork - Mar 26, 2021
|Some are born with talents. Some are not. But an appropriate approach can help.
2 - You have an almost perfect presentation here. The only problem, is that you used your personal opinion as a...
Writing Feedbackhungprovip0089 - Mar 25, 2021 / Holt - Mar 26, 2021
|Topic: Some people believe that children are required to obey the rules of their parents and teacher
2 - A prompt restatement is always helped by a clear opinion being presented at the end of the final thesis...
Writing Feedbackthanhvo - Mar 25, 2021 / Holt - Mar 26, 2021
|My Demon - The verdict of my diagnoses
NEW - THE VERDICT The pain in my shoulder had not changed by the time of my appointment with Dr. Reed....
Writing Feedbackmjdmartin - Mar 24, 2021 / — -
|In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one's own family
2 - There is an unnecessary discussion point in your restatement. The part about the main reasons why people would spare...
Writing FeedbackTri An - Mar 23, 2021 / Holt - Mar 24, 2021
|New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers
3 - Thanks for your feedback. 1. I totally agree with exceeded word limit comment. I will work on limiting it...
Writing Feedbackdipsy07 - Mar 22, 2021 / dipsy07 - Mar 24, 2021
|Discuss both views: joining university or leave school to get a job
4 - @lynguyen2912 Here's a structure you can use for this which works everytime with this question prompt: INTRO: Restate...
Writing Feedbacklynguyen2912 - Mar 21, 2021 / Ahmed adobewan - Mar 23, 2021
|Personal Essay: History - a concept, theory, or topic you have explored.
2 - You told the reviewer what topic is of interest to you. It was explained quite well. The reason you...
Writing FeedbackPocket Friend - Mar 22, 2021 / Holt - Mar 23, 2021
|SHOW HOW THE WORLD HAS CHANGED SINCE THE INVENTION OF THE MOBILE PHONE
2 - If I am right and the original prompt of this essay was based on how people's interaction has changed...
Writing FeedbackNguyenMy19055 - Mar 22, 2021 / Holt - Mar 23, 2021
|The line chart below shows the percentage of Internet users in 3 countries from 1999 to 2009
2 - - What kind of graph? Be specific. The reader cannot see the image. Show your familiarity with the...
Writing Feedbackngockhanh1811 - Mar 22, 2021 / Holt - Mar 22, 2021
|Writing task 1 - the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 to 2006
2 - You still have room to make the report more informative. You have only written 169 words. The target word...
Writing Feedbackvanhoa - Mar 21, 2021 / Holt - Mar 22, 2021
|An argument about whether the country should be the host for a worldwide sports event or not
3 - @Holt Thank you so much. Can I ask you what is the right pattern for comparative discussion? I'm quite...
Writing Feedbacknguyenngocanhthu - Mar 20, 2021 / nguyenngocanhthu - Mar 21, 2021
|Writing task 1 - Safety condition of endangered plants and their different living places
2 - For starters, you are not writing enough words to merit a high TA score. While the minimum word count...
Writing Feedbackpeter4904 - Mar 21, 2021 / Holt - Mar 21, 2021
|Usage of margarine, butter, low fat and reduced spreads - IELTS TEST
2 - - Ending when? The information is incomplete. The summary must include the start and end date of the...
Writing Feedbackalexrussso - Mar 20, 2021 / Holt - Mar 21, 2021
|iELTS essay about the internet which has brought significant changes to our lives in recent years
4 - Hi friend, I have taught that we should avoid using generalization in the essay. "nobody can deny the fact...
Writing Feedbackhphnngcquan - Mar 18, 2021 / juliachung - Mar 20, 2021
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Discussion - The effects of international tourism to local countries
2 - Good work on the 2 restatement sentences. You covered the interpretation excellently. However, the need for the thesis statement...
Writing Feedbackbeloyal - Mar 19, 2021 / Holt - Mar 20, 2021
|IELTS TASK 2 - WHAT ARE THE CHALLENGES WHEN MOVING TO NEW PLACES AND STRATEGIES
2 - Yes, you wrote it within 40 minutes. However, you are still over explaining and using useless sentences that do...
Writing Feedbackjuliachung - Mar 18, 2021 / Holt - Mar 19, 2021
|Some people believe that owning a home is more important than renting one.
3 - Hi friend, firstly, I believe to get a higher band, your introduction should be paraphrased, not copied from the...
Writing Feedbackcecilisabella - Mar 14, 2021 / juliachung - Mar 18, 2021
|Museums and art galleries are not needed today, because of technology
3 - Hi Long231312, I think there has been an unclear idea in your statement. Although you claim to be partially...
Writing FeedbackLong231312 - Mar 18, 2021 / juliachung - Mar 18, 2021
|IELTS General Writing Task 1: Seaside Hotel Booking
4 - Dear All, I took some online course and tried to rewrite this part 1. I believe my writing still...
Writing Feedbackroy_leung - Mar 5, 2021 / roy_leung - Mar 17, 2021
|Nowadays many ecosystems in the world are experiencing problems
2 - - Whose extinction? What is this discussion about? What is the purpose of this essay? The original prompt...
Writing Feedbackpeggyhan - Mar 16, 2021 / Holt - Mar 17, 2021
|fossil fuels are the main sources of energy,alternative energy should be encouraged for used
2 - The original prompt for this essay asks if you think this is a positive or negative development. Since your...
Writing Feedbackminhngan - Mar 16, 2021 / Holt - Mar 17, 2021
|The potential damage for children when they are overusing computers. Write 250words
3 - Sorry, an important exam of mine is coming and I have to prepare quickly by writing two simultaneously. Thanks...
Writing FeedbackBlackrain - Mar 15, 2021 / Blackrain - Mar 16, 2021
|Traffic jams and traffic accidents are big problems in Vietnam
2 - This is a 4 paragraph essay that utilizes only 2 reasoning paragraphs. One for the causes and one for...
Writing FeedbackBlackrain - Mar 15, 2021 / Holt - Mar 16, 2021
|The difference between men and women who did daily physical activity in Australia
NEW - fit people in aUSTRALIA The bar chart provides information about how difference between men and women who live...
Writing Feedbackchunxmi - Mar 15, 2021 / — -
|From a long time psychologists claim that colors can affect people's feelings. IELTS 2
3 - Hi, I think to strengthen your argument, you need to give some counter argument first then your rebuttal. Maybe...
Writing FeedbackDiepVu99 - Mar 5, 2021 / juliachung - Mar 15, 2021
|IELTS writing 2 - Topic: pros and cons of public transport
2 - You are not being asked to discuss why public transportation is so popular and some negatives of using it....
Writing Feedbackbaochau123 - Mar 14, 2021 / Holt - Mar 15, 2021
|IELTS TASK 1; The rate of employed British people based on genders in various working fields in 2005
Writing Feedbackjuliachung - Mar 14, 2021 / juliachung - Mar 15, 2021
|Do you like living with wealthy people or those who come from different social class?
3 - The writing might be too short for some people, like me. You should demonstrate more aspects of the problems...
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