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|The prevention on health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine.
1 - The most effective and affordable method for the health issues is prevention Government should make awareness among people...
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|[IETLS writing] In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing
4 - Hi Wang Gang.. I have read your essay closely and found a few improvement you have needed. Turning to...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - 17 hours ago / akbarmappiare - 4 hours ago
|Art is considered an essential part of all culture throughout the world. However, these days fewer a
3 - Adiya, due to the lack of the prompt instructions regarding the actual topic and discussion style, it it's difficult...
Writing Feedbackadiya - 6 hours ago / Holt - 5 hours ago
|Is Violence the Result of TV, computers, and video games?
2 - ... a battle on games is you've learned how to use violence or murder. Personally I don't recommend...
Writing Feedbackhalib_2309 - 6 hours ago / LadyOfClockwork - 6 hours ago
|A lot of young people spend their time sitting in front of the television at home
3 - I also wrote six paragraphs in my first IETLS writting. The mistake should be avoided in the future....
Writing Feedbackkimyoongi - 2 days ago / LadyOfClockwork - 6 hours ago
|Parents have a dilemma and are unsure if their children should compete or cooperate with others
2 - @celinechan This essay will not get a passing score because it failed to properly address the prompt requirements. Rather...
Writing Feedbackcelinechan - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|Television influences badly on children's creativity
4 - @Holt Thank you Holt for your review. I'm sincerely grateful. Firstly, I d'like to say that my full essay...
Writing FeedbackIris Riverside - Jun 22, 2017 / Iris Riverside - 1 day ago
|IELTS TASK 2: Some people think that the government should pay one of the parents
3 - Thanks a lot @Holt. I will work on complex sentences and try to complete the sentences with proper...
Writing Feedbackmtrj - 2 days ago / mtrj - 2 days ago
|Sport amenities as an optimal method of making the public healthier?
2 - Duc, regardless of what test you are writing a practice essay for, the main component that must be seen...
Writing FeedbackDuc Mosby - Jun 23, 2017 / Holt - Jun 23, 2017
|The body of an ielts essay related to personal happiness achievement
2 - Duy, in all honesty, this is one of the most off tangent discussion for this topic that I have...
Writing FeedbackLeestorm - Jun 23, 2017 / Holt - Jun 23, 2017
|Writing task 1 in ielts about the table of poverty people in Australia in 1999.
3 - WRITTING TASK 1: The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in...
Writing FeedbackBLUESTONE - Apr 4, 2017 / BLUESTONE - Jun 23, 2017
|[Ielts task 2] Education's effectiveness in leading people to a healthy eating habit
Writing Feedbackthien_my - Jun 21, 2017 / tran le hai anh - Jun 23, 2017
|Should museums charge for admission? Benefits and drawbacks.
6 - Anna, I read the entire response and felt like there was so much more that you could say. Your...
Writing Feedbackdinosps9a4 - Jun 20, 2017 / brayan1996 - Jun 22, 2017
|[TOEFL] INCREASING THE PRICE OF GAS AND ELECTRICITY IS WISE, IN MY OPINION!
3 - @Holt thank you for your comment on my post! In response to your question, The prompt requirement asks "Do...
Writing FeedbackMinh Nguyen - Jun 22, 2017 / Minh Nguyen - Jun 22, 2017
|Writing task 1: The percentage of 10-15 year-olds chatting online and playing games.
2 - Moon, the paragraph presentations you made are too short. You need to learn to use full stops instead of...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jun 22, 2017 / Holt - Jun 22, 2017
|Rates of smoking in Someland
Writing FeedbackHuyhiep231 - Jun 16, 2017 / Red Moon - Jun 22, 2017
|A movie that has inspired you and its impact on your life. Problem in usage and convention - CBEST
Writing Feedbackbaljinder - Jun 21, 2017 / baljinder - Jun 22, 2017
|Information about the private use of Internet, Cd player, mobile phone and home computer in the UK
2 - Alessandro, you have to always remember that you will lose points for writing single sentences instead of complete paragraphs....
Writing Feedbackyendo - Jun 21, 2017 / Holt - Jun 22, 2017
|Explain any risk you have taken in your life. Cbest level essay.
Writing Feedbackbaljinder - Jun 20, 2017 / baljinder - Jun 21, 2017
|The pie chart below shows the main reasons why students chose to study at a particular UK university
2 - Darren, while you did a pretty good representation of the overall information in the essay, your summary statement lacks...
Writing FeedbackDarren Mai - Jun 21, 2017 / Holt - Jun 21, 2017
|[TOEFL] Because modern life is complex, young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Writing FeedbackERIC SUNG - Jun 20, 2017 / Holt - Jun 20, 2017
|Some people say it is OK to use animals for our benefit, others say it is not good to exploit them
4 - You need some further explanation, such as solutions the third paragraph, set law is a good idea but your...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Jun 11, 2017 / ERIC SUNG - Jun 20, 2017
|Ielts task 2 : The title is magical inside, plz make it more magical
3 - Ethan, word of advice never end an essay with "in conclusion." The reader should get the idea that your...
Writing FeedbackEthan Truong - Jun 18, 2017 / brayan1996 - Jun 19, 2017
|Academic Writing: the daily audiences percentage of UK radio and television X-XII 1992
2 - Haiyin, you need to develop a more consistent presentation of your timeline in your English sentences. Try to familiarize...
Writing Feedbackravatrav - Jun 18, 2017 / Holt - Jun 19, 2017
|A new recreational facility in Tusk - GRE writing task: Argument Essay
3 - Sodiq, basing the result of your work on the 30 minute time constraint, I am confident that you can...
Writing FeedbackHidy - Jun 17, 2017 / Holt - Jun 18, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task: technology and the wealth gap
2 - Chen, consider the prompt instructions. It is clear threat you are being asked to defend only one side of...
Writing Feedbackyac803 - Jun 16, 2017 / Holt - Jun 17, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Discussion Essay - Homework effectiveness
Writing FeedbackDarren Mai - Jun 16, 2017 / Darren Mai - Jun 17, 2017
|IELTS 2: Education in prison is used to reduce the crime rate so that prisoners can get a job.
4 - its a good essay and the vocabulary is advance. i'm happy to read this to refresh my knowledge and...
Writing Feedbackthieman - Jun 9, 2017 / klarashati - Jun 16, 2017
|Unhealthy activities in modern society
3 - Hy, you are writing an academic paper, not a creative writing class narrative essay. Therefore, you should not be...
Writing FeedbackLee Hy - Jun 13, 2017 / Holt - Jun 14, 2017
|The number of population figures for India and China - the line gragh
2 - Trang, you need to work hard on improving your grammar structure, range, and accuracy. I understand that English is...
Writing Feedbackbinchocopie123 - Jun 13, 2017 / Holt - Jun 13, 2017
|The information of millions of television viewers in sports by four different country.
3 - It is difficult to understand your writing since you do not have any picture included. Please post the picture...
Writing FeedbackTylen - Jun 13, 2017 / eddies - Jun 13, 2017
|The amount of time people spent by the phone in the UK
3 - Thanks a lot for your correcting. Can you please tell me the highest possible score I could get for...
Writing Feedbackoanhcute - Jun 11, 2017 / oanhcute - Jun 12, 2017
|Kids, youth and elders in Italy and Yemen
2 - Khoa, the summary overview is only considered a complete paragraph when it indicates all of the forthcoming discussion information...
Writing Feedbackdaiha20082009 - Jun 11, 2017 / Holt - Jun 11, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: What should be done to promote equality of opportunity for men and women at work
Writing FeedbackRiley Nguyen - Jun 10, 2017 / Riley Nguyen - Jun 11, 2017
|Different views about what kinds of obligation a company should have
3 - @baosoftware1 I will be discussing only your opening statement. You need to paraphrase the topic because this is...
Writing Feedbackbaosoftware1 - Jun 9, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Jun 11, 2017
|The proportions of British students speaking another language in 2000 and 2010
Writing Feedbacknhidd - Jun 10, 2017 / nhidd - Jun 11, 2017
|Governments should control the amount of violence in the media. To what extent do you agree or not
4 - @BinZ I assumed that prompt requirement means the topic. You have to read the instruction carefully before you...
Writing FeedbackBinZ - Jun 10, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Jun 11, 2017
|Schools concentrate far too much on traditional subjects which do not adequately prepare student
Writing FeedbackDunghoang - Jun 11, 2017 / Dunghoang - Jun 11, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2: What are the perspectives for study abroad?
Writing Feedbackimcloud16 - Jun 10, 2017 / imcloud16 - Jun 10, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 1 : Why young executives are stressed at work and the consequences.
4 - You should add an overall paragraph after the introduction and one more body paragraph (because the third paragraph seems...
Writing Feedbackguan721 - May 21, 2017 / Riley Nguyen - Jun 10, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Essay about the main causes of stress in modern life and how could stress be reduced
3 - @Holt Thank you very much. I feel very grateful for your reply. Because I've just decided to study IELTS,...
Writing Feedbackvanslogy - Jun 10, 2017 / vanslogy - Jun 10, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: Electricity Production Change in Australia and France
4 - Be careful when using words in writing task 1. Not all words can be used, for example: "different pattern...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Jun 9, 2017 / eddies - Jun 10, 2017
|[Task 1] The graph below shows the changing trend of the use of modern technology in homes in the UK
Writing FeedbackTung Anh - May 30, 2017 / baosoftware1 - Jun 9, 2017
|Should schools spend more time in teaching traditional subject or skills?
3 - Well, when it comes to introductory statement, then your task is to simply state the background or the rubric...
Writing Feedbackiisernaw - Jun 7, 2017 / eddies - Jun 9, 2017
|Some people say international sports events help in world peace. Agree or disagree?
2 - CJ, you have the potential to become a good essayist. You have a good handle on the background of...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Jun 8, 2017 / Holt - Jun 8, 2017
|People think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum age for driving.
4 - I reckon brainstorming the ideas first before writing. Your body paragraphs needed to present more clear points. ...
Writing Feedbackbaosoftware1 - Jun 4, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Jun 8, 2017
|Emotion based decisions will have high tendency to be wrong - they should be taken with free mind
2 - Jayati, I have a few points of major concern in your essay. The first of which is the incomplete...
Writing FeedbackJt548313 - Jun 7, 2017 / Holt - Jun 8, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 1 : The three companies' waste
8 - @Red Moon In my opinion, perhaps at the beginning, you can make a grouping between B and C which...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - May 20, 2017 / Yulia Indah - Jun 7, 2017
|The essay : is advertising needed or it forces us to buy stuff?
6 - @amirebmm The structure of your essay should have at least 4 paragraphs: introduction, positive points, negative points and conclusion....
Writing Feedbackamirebmm - May 28, 2017 / maruko chan - Jun 7, 2017
|The technological progress and globalization influence positively to human's life (with exceptions)
3 - There are some rules using apostrophe ('s) in English such as possessive form (e.g. the bird's cage) and plural...
Writing Feedbackhidzikatat - Jun 6, 2017 / iisernaw - Jun 7, 2017
|Age distribution of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for future
3 - Jade, you can improve upon your opening statement in order to get a better task accuracy score. At the...
Writing Feedbackkxwai - Jun 5, 2017 / Holt - Jun 6, 2017
|Immigration has a major impact on the society. Main reasons of immigration and its consequences.
Writing Feedbackutsi - Jun 2, 2017 / utsi - Jun 6, 2017
|IELTS-Task 1: The flow chart below shows the three stages of glass bottle recycling
3 - @Holt thank you very much. Your feed back have proven to be extremely useful and i really appreciate that....
Writing FeedbackLeonardo Nguyen - Jun 4, 2017 / Leonardo Nguyen - Jun 5, 2017
|Entertainment and sport or healthcare and education
2 - @thanhhoang12a7 your opening statement should represent the two points of view prior to the presentation of your opinion. That...
Writing Feedbackthanhhoang12a7 - Jun 4, 2017 / Holt - Jun 4, 2017
|Chances do not make a major contribution to the triumph of anyone
5 - Do you guys can check my rewritting again ? It is argued that fortune plays a leading role in...
Writing Feedbackanhdt117 - Jun 2, 2017 / anhdt117 - Jun 4, 2017
|The same educational opportunity should be given to both gender students
2 - Lung, you have developed a very interesting and highly appropriate discussion for the subject provided. Your lien of reasoning...
Writing Feedbackmrgreatteacher - Jun 4, 2017 / Holt - Jun 4, 2017
|Quick world means quick decisions to make.
Writing Feedbacktrungomega - Jun 4, 2017 / trungomega - Jun 4, 2017
|Issue Essay for GRE AWA section - technology and human skills
3 - Thank you Holt, I will work on constructing fluent grammatical structure, I would also appreciate hint on how to...
Writing Feedbacktizentos - Jun 3, 2017 / tizentos - Jun 3, 2017
|Australian teenagers and junk foods in their diet
4 - 1. You wrote: ... of eaten per year for pizza, fish ... Feedback: The article is missing before...
Writing Feedbackd2ny - May 30, 2017 / thunga2603 - Jun 3, 2017
|The number of people smoking, divided into two different gender groups
5 - 1. You wrote: ... people smoking in Someland which is ... Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found 2....
Writing FeedbackTung Anh - May 31, 2017 / thunga2603 - Jun 3, 2017
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