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|Sticky: [WRITING TASK 1] The average on cell phone, national fixed line amd international fixed line service
4 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your feedback. Maybe i typed too fast so i made a lot unexpected mistakes. I...
Writing Feedbackelliemiller - Oct 13, 2020 / elliemiller - Oct 14, 2020
|The bar chart demonstrates a brief view of the percentage of Australians who exercised regularly
Writing Feedbackngocmaing - 6 hrs ago / Holt - 13 mins ago
|In many cities the constructions of new houses and office building is not controlled
Writing Feedbackphidang123 - 21 hrs ago / phidang123 - 1 hr ago
|Writing Task 2 - Able to make film for everyone. Positive or Negative?
5 - @Holt Thank you for your advice. In the concluding paragraph, I think I should reconfirm my opinion after giving...
Writing Feedbackthanhtrung97 - 2 days ago / thanhtrung97 - 17 hrs ago
|The chart below illustrates the number of prisoner in five nations throughout 50 years
Writing Feedbacklucy190496 - Oct 21, 2020 / lucy190496 - 22 hrs ago
|A large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Pros and cons?
Writing Feedbackpeter164 - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
|IELTS TASK 2 - can online classes replace the traditional one?
2 - For a task 2 essay, you should not be overwriting the information in the presentation. Stay within the 250-290...
Writing Feedbackhantran - 2 days ago / Holt - 2 days ago
|Lots of people deem that youngsters are inappropriate to crucial positions in government or business
3 - Many thanks...
Writing FeedbackMandyHuang - Oct 21, 2020 / MandyHuang - 2 days ago
|IELTS Task 2 - Increasing the number of sports facilities to improve public health
2 - You have written a very long essay that does not follow the discussion requirements as provided in the original...
Writing Feedbackkimanhlethi1702 - Oct 21, 2020 / Holt - Oct 21, 2020
|IELTS task 2 - gender preference on school classes
2 - Your prompt paraphrase requires a clearer representation of gender. These days, there are more than one gender identities so...
Writing FeedbackMiao56 - Oct 20, 2020 / Holt - Oct 20, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - Rice exports from Thailand and Vietnam
2 - Since you are doing a comparison data presentation format, it would be better if you provide the measurements for...
Writing Feedbackngthuha - Oct 19, 2020 / Holt - Oct 20, 2020
|Why music is necessary for human? The traditional vs modern sounds.
Writing FeedbackYuzzuya - Oct 19, 2020 / Holt - Oct 20, 2020
|IELTS 1: The line graph compares 4 European nations in terms of the average carbon dioxide emissions
3 - @Holt I have rewritten my general trend paragraph. Could you check it for me whether it is good or...
Writing Feedbackngthuha - Oct 17, 2020 / ngthuha - Oct 20, 2020
|Report about a cooking course (practising for CAE exam)
3 - @Holt, thank you very much for your feedback. I get the impression that I have misunderstood all the students'...
Writing Feedbackannanefedovaspb - Oct 12, 2020 / annanefedovaspb - Oct 19, 2020
|These days, youngsters are susceptible to be had an impact on many factors
2 - The essay you wrote does not meet the 250 minimum word requirement. 231 words is still substantially far enough...
Writing Feedbackphong123 - Oct 19, 2020 / Holt - Oct 19, 2020
|In order to become well-rounded individuals, all college students should be required to take courses
2 - Did you write this for a CBEST essay? It is difficult to review your work for appropriate content and...
Writing FeedbackEdwart123 - Oct 18, 2020 / Holt - Oct 19, 2020
|IELTS TASK 1: MIXED CHARTS ON EDUCATION IN SINGAPORE
3 - Rather than saying "According to", use the phrase "Based on" instead. It is more academic sounding since you are...
Writing Feedbackamira11545 - Oct 18, 2020 / Holt - Oct 19, 2020
|IELTS essay: fast food availability
3 - The maximum word count for this Task 2 essay is 290 words. You have written 347 words and not...
Writing Feedbackgiotinhsao - Oct 18, 2020 / Holt - Oct 19, 2020
|The percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B
3 - You are presenting information from 4 pie charts. You must accurately identify the type of image and number of...
Writing Feedbackbwibimbap - Oct 18, 2020 / Holt - Oct 19, 2020
|In order to ease traffic congestion issues, some proposed to provide free public transportation
2 - The biggest problem in your essay, I think, is organization. Your supporting ideas and examples are not organized...
Writing Feedbacktctc8797 - Oct 18, 2020 / amira11545 - Oct 18, 2020
|Writing task 2: Community service should be a part of high school programmes
2 - I think, overall, this essay is good enough to get a good score, structure, grammar, word count, and so...
Writing FeedbackHannah Robjn - Oct 16, 2020 / tctc8797 - Oct 18, 2020
|DISCUSS: WHICH IS BETTER, DISTANCE LEARNING OR TRADITIONAL CLASSROOM?
4 - I think the essay format should be like: Introduction Advantage Disadvantage Your opinion Conclusion 5 Total paragraphs would...
Writing Feedbackstudyingabroad - Oct 15, 2020 / tctc8797 - Oct 18, 2020
|Advocated student groups - UT Austin supplemental - Diversity short answer
2 - You did very weel in the background section and the outside the classroom discussion. Your essay is missing the...
Writing Feedbackcarot2103 - Oct 18, 2020 / Holt - Oct 18, 2020
|IELTS Essay. Job satisfaction versus job security, which one is more important?
3 - Kindly use a timer when writing your essay next time. Set it for 40 minutes. I believe that you...
Writing Feedbacktctc8797 - Oct 17, 2020 / Holt - Oct 17, 2020
|Essay about the causes and solutions of teenagers prefer socializing online to meeting in person
4 - Band scoring is not part of our basic free services. To include band scoring in the review, please consider...
Writing Feedbacksurithienan - Oct 17, 2020 / Holt - Oct 17, 2020
|SOME OF PARENTS AND STUDENTS THINK THAT THE CURRENT COLLEGE ENTRANCE EXAMINATION SHOULD BE ABOLISHED
3 - I think you should pay more attention on the grammar correction first, instead of using some complicated sentence structures...
Writing Feedbackkimchi1501 - Oct 17, 2020 / tctc8797 - Oct 17, 2020
|The picture gives a description of the honey bee's life cycle
2 - I think you are missing the question in your thread. Also, there must be at least 3 sencentes...
Writing Feedbackkhanh talina - Oct 15, 2020 / aliceewdoublee - Oct 17, 2020
|In-class instructions and online learning. Which one suits you best?
2 - Is there a word count for this essay? It somehow feels like you stopped discussing the topic before you...
Writing Feedbackkihui7954 - Oct 17, 2020 / Holt - Oct 17, 2020
|IELTS Essay: Some cities have vehicle-free days, when private cars, trucks, motorcycles are banned
3 - Your second paragraph is under developed in terms of explanation. After you present an example, you should work on...
Writing Feedbacktctc8797 - Oct 16, 2020 / Holt - Oct 17, 2020
|IELTS Essay: Art classes, like painting and drawing, are not as important as other subjects
3 - The essay that you wrote does not respond in any way to the provided discussion question. Let's do a...
Writing Feedbacktctc8797 - Oct 16, 2020 / Holt - Oct 17, 2020
|Using foreign languages - IELTS writing task-2 practice
3 - @tctc8797 Thanks for finding this out. I need to think about clarity! Actually I wanted to give a conclusion...
Writing Feedbacksulagnastoic - Oct 16, 2020 / sulagnastoic - Oct 16, 2020
|How do you change the world
2 - You are not really responding to the question. You are giving what we call a non-response. A whitewash. An...
Writing Feedbackpaggie65 - Oct 15, 2020 / Holt - Oct 16, 2020
|Printed newspapers in the future can be replaced
3 - You are being asked to consider a discussion point. You are not being asked to represent an argument. So...
Writing FeedbackClockWork - Oct 15, 2020 / Holt - Oct 16, 2020
|Should students use smartphones at school ?
3 - You are not answering the main question as you are developing both advantages and disadvantages. You could separate both...
Writing Feedbacklynnx241 - Oct 9, 2020 / daigonzur - Oct 16, 2020
|Task 1: Information regarding the proportion of people doing volunteer jobs in six different spheres
3 - @Holt Many thanks for your comment. However, can I rewrite my essay in this way? The pie charts...
Writing Feedbacktrphuongtrang99 - Oct 12, 2020 / trphuongtrang99 - Oct 16, 2020
|Studying abroad becomes one of the popular students' choices
4 - some corrections here! First, it is an excellent opportunity to learn not only knowledge but also improve your language...
Writing Feedbackcamly178 - Oct 11, 2020 / Messiah - Oct 15, 2020
|College is not the only way to success (No word limit)
Writing FeedbackHannah Robjn - Oct 13, 2020 / Hannah Robjn - Oct 15, 2020
|The conscription of Unpaid community service at high school - IELTS Task 2 agree or disagree
5 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your comments it helps me a lot,I'll try to make corrections as suggested....
Writing Feedbackxingyinglixi - Oct 14, 2020 / xingyinglixi - Oct 15, 2020
|Why "discovery" is important for me
4 - @Holt Thank you so much Holt😊☘💚 This was my first experience in writing.i try to apply your tips...
Writing Feedbackznb_jln - Oct 13, 2020 / znb_jln - Oct 14, 2020
|coursework - descriptive writing
2 - The essay itself is descriptive. However, the descriptiveness does not help the story move forward. The descriptions should not...
Writing Feedbackjameth - Oct 14, 2020 / Holt - Oct 14, 2020
|Should Hong Kong set up a closed camp for non-refoulement claimants?
NEW - government discussion paper Topic: Should Hong Kong set up a closed camp for non-refoulement claimants? Hello, this paper...
Writing Feedbackrodman_chan - Oct 14, 2020 / — -
|Increased human lifespans - IELTS task 2 advantages and disadvantages
3 - In the prompt paraphrase, you have to clearly indicate, through a restatement, the discussion instructions. You could have done...
Writing Feedbacksillyqa - Oct 13, 2020 / Holt - Oct 14, 2020
|TOEFL: Sad but true, we become less happier and unsatisfied than we were in the past
2 - Your opening paragraph is not very understandable to a native English speaker. You are making claims that are not...
Writing Feedbackolivia0926 - Oct 13, 2020 / Holt - Oct 14, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2 - WHETHER INTERNET-BASED SELF-STUDY CAN REPLACE FORMAL EDUCATION.
3 - Kindly review the question you are being asked to respond to. This is not an essay that is asking...
Writing FeedbackVoThuyPhuong - Oct 13, 2020 / Holt - Oct 14, 2020
|It is widely argued that the railways are more in need of the Government's investment than roads
3 - @Holt Thank you for the very detailed reply! I will definitely look over those mistakes and make improvements following...
Writing Feedbackaliceewdoublee - Oct 13, 2020 / aliceewdoublee - Oct 13, 2020
|The topic of how necessary the public areas are
2 - You have misrepresented the original topic, which means you changed the prompt requirement. This deviation could result in points...
Writing Feedbackjanehello - Oct 13, 2020 / Holt - Oct 13, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - FAST FOOD RELATED DISEASES
2 - You are making claims in your prompt paraphrase that are not included in the original presentation. There is no...
Writing Feedbackdenis85 - Oct 13, 2020 / Holt - Oct 13, 2020
|THE PERFORMANCE OF THE FOURTH INDUSTRIAL REVOLUTION IN KOREAN PUBLIC DIPLOMACY
2 - The first 2 sentences are not effective in helping you explain what the problem you will be discussing in...
Writing FeedbackHIENDONG - Oct 13, 2020 / Holt - Oct 13, 2020
|Ielts Writing task 2: Art classes should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?
3 - This is a task 2 essay, not an academic research paper. Kindly remember that you have 40 minutes to...
Writing Feedbackdrbaby - Oct 12, 2020 / Holt - Oct 13, 2020
|Writing TASK1- The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007
2 - Use the present time frame reference for this essay since you are summarizing (not summarized) the report at the...
Writing Feedbacksooooo314 - Oct 12, 2020 / Holt - Oct 12, 2020
|Single-gender vs. Mixed-gender schools
4 - Clearly, dividing boys and girls demands more educational expense on facilities- How? This point is not clear in your...
Writing Feedbackparadis_149 - Oct 11, 2020 / Preeti gupta - Oct 12, 2020
|Should parents let their children decide the job they will do in the future? What's your opinion?
Writing FeedbackPlagg - Oct 11, 2020 / Holt - Oct 11, 2020
|The average number of students per class in primary and secondary schools in six regions by 2006
3 - Actually, the only error you made was that you said the comparison was based on a world average when...
Writing Feedbackamira11545 - Oct 10, 2020 / Holt - Oct 11, 2020
|WRITING TASK 1 The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 19
NEW - total world population - analysis of the chart The given bar graph provides information regarding the proportion of...
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|The Dangers of Putting Too Much Pressure on Kids
5 - First, there must be no contractions (like ''couldn't'') in an academic essay since it is formal writing. Second, I...
Writing Feedbackblueberry_vn - Oct 8, 2020 / paradis_149 - Oct 11, 2020
|IELTS PART 2- Being a well-known personality - benefits or disadvantages?
3 - because your 2nd paragraph only has 2 reasons, instead of using firstly, secondly, I suggest using For example, Furthermore....
Writing Feedbackaxr - Oct 2, 2020 / thphuong1911 - Oct 11, 2020
|Writing task 2: Is it good for school and university students to take part in a part-time job?
6 - A part-time job can help ... They could improve their time ... --> these sentences seem do not link...
Writing Feedbacktieumylinh - Oct 3, 2020 / thphuong1911 - Oct 11, 2020
|Writing task 2: Release auto-driving vehicles. Advantage or Disavantage?
7 - Following are my feedbacks: - 2nd paragraph, you should add the topic sentence such as there are a variety...
Writing FeedbackDoanloc - Oct 7, 2020 / thphuong1911 - Oct 11, 2020
|WHETHER WHAT CHILDREN WATCH ON TV OR THE AMOUNT OF TIME SPENDING ON IT CAN AFFECT THE BAHAVIOR
3 - You did a great job by addressing all the questions in the task. However, I suspect you should work...
Writing Feedbackstudyingabroad - Oct 8, 2020 / amira11545 - Oct 10, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF INCREASES IN LIFE EXPECTANCY
3 - Hi 1st paragraph, you mentioned "this trend". I suggest you should have short description of what this trend is...
Writing FeedbackSophie1108 - Oct 8, 2020 / thphuong1911 - Oct 10, 2020
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