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Sticky: [WRITING TASK 1] The average on cell phone, national fixed line amd international fixed line service

4 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your feedback. Maybe i typed too fast so i made a lot unexpected mistakes. I...

Writing Feedbackelliemiller - Oct 13, 2020 / elliemiller - Oct 14, 2020
[Writing task 1] The number of cars made in three countries

3 - Excuse Tien, It's not about your topic. I'm a newbie. I have a question. How can you attached your...

Writing FeedbackTien xu - 23 hrs ago / James15 - 12 hrs ago
Help with Writing Task 2 - Essay on topic Study Abroad. Do the benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

NEW - QUESTION More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits...

Writing Feedbackmadhur1688 - 12 hrs ago / — -
IELTS Writing Task 2: Origins of increasing crime rates and proposed solution

2 - The writer's opinion fails to represent the discussion requirement which is to state the summary of the possible causes...

Writing Feedbacklovedionise - 2 days ago / Holt - 2 days ago
The Effects of Therapy Dog Visits on Individuals in Alcohol and Other Drug Rehabilitation Facilities

3 - @Holt Thank you for taking the time to read and provide feedback. Sorry I should have clarified the purpose,...

Writing FeedbackMickeyMouse - Mar 18, 2023 / MickeyMouse - Mar 18, 2023
[IELTS Writing task 1] Pie chart - Comparative Graphs; time spent on several activities

2 - Well you did well in terms of providing an ample word count for your task 1 essay. However, you...

Writing FeedbackAP17025 - Mar 16, 2023 / Holt - Mar 17, 2023
What should be the primary goal of universities?

2 - You need to comrpess your thoughts into paragraphs of no more than 5 proper explained and formatted sentences. That...

Writing Feedbackhtruc2005 - Mar 16, 2023 / Holt - Mar 17, 2023
[task 1] The table give information about the underground railway systems in six countries

2 - Try to complete the summary overview next time. When you indicate that a table has been provided, consider that...

Writing Feedbackodysey - Mar 15, 2023 / Holt - Mar 16, 2023
Strict controls about noise or people can make as much noise as they want? Discuss 2 views+Opinion

2 - You should not be combining your personal opinion in the public opinion restatement. That is because you are...

Writing FeedbackAmiable - Mar 14, 2023 / Holt - Mar 16, 2023
The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in UK(Task 1)

2 - You have met the minimum word count requirement but not the proper format for the discussion presentation. There should...

Writing FeedbackThanhPham25 - Mar 14, 2023 / Holt - Mar 16, 2023
The diagram show two methods of using water to produce electricity

2 - What kind of pictures were provided? Were these diagrams or procedural illustrations? The image identifier does not clarify...

Writing Feedbackrslmsayu - Mar 13, 2023 / Holt - Mar 14, 2023
IELTS 1: Goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four modes of transport

2 - Teh summary overview definitely needs improvements. For starters, the run on sentence could have been presented over 3 sentences...

Writing Feedbackchupchip - Mar 12, 2023 / Holt - Mar 14, 2023
Essay about finding out about the history of the house

2 - Your topic restatement keeps too many keywords from the original presentation for the examiner to view it as a...

Writing Feedbackmaithuytram - Mar 12, 2023 / Holt - Mar 14, 2023
IELTS 1: The table below shows different home appliances owned in Great Britain from 1972 to 1983.

3 - Please help me correct this paragraph...

Writing Feedbackngominhchau0205 - Feb 27, 2023 / ngominhchau0205 - Mar 14, 2023
The line chart below shows the number of men and women that smoke cigarettes in Australia

3 - @cxvzfbxdng I think you should mention to the period of time in the first paragraph. In paragraph 3, you...

Writing Feedbackcxvzfbxdng - Mar 11, 2023 / Namta - Mar 13, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Some people spend a lot of money attending cultural or sports events

4 - @painiteeee I think your essay is quite good. You attempt to use complex sentences and advanced vocabulary. Besides, the...

Writing Feedbackpainiteeee - Mar 9, 2023 / Namta - Mar 12, 2023
Having more international sports events (such as the Olympics) is a good way to promote world peace

2 - You have to use first person pronouns in the presentation of your writer's opinion. That is because you...

Writing FeedbackPrisoni - Mar 11, 2023 / Holt - Mar 12, 2023
Educating children about laws and crimes is more effective than establishing stricter laws

2 - While this is an agree or disagree essay, it is also an extent essay. Therefore, your response...

Writing Feedbackalohabrothers155 - Mar 11, 2023 / Holt - Mar 12, 2023
Industrial area in Norbiton and how it is planned for development in the future CAMBRIGDE 17 IELTS 1

2 - The essay meets the word count minimum. That is good. What is bad then? The paragraph presentations are not...

Writing Feedbacksundaymay - Mar 10, 2023 / Holt - Mar 10, 2023
[Task 2] Educate girls and boys in separate schools or mixed school

2 - There is no real argument presented here. Just opposing ideas. It is important not to exaggerate the idea presentations...

Writing FeedbackTania9094 - Mar 10, 2023 / Holt - Mar 10, 2023
Essay about minority languages

2 - Make sure to not use the task 1 format for the task 2 writing test. The writer's opinion +...

Writing Feedbackksenloom - Mar 9, 2023 / Holt - Mar 9, 2023
Descriptive a holiday celebration

3 - I hope everyone will have a chance to gather with each member of their family to strengthen their family's...

Writing Feedbacktrangdai - Mar 7, 2023 / trangdai - Mar 9, 2023
[ielts writing 2] Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagr

2 - This is an unnecessary reference point in this presentation. The 2 sentence restatement and writer's opinion that clearly...

Writing Feedbackkydie0812 - Mar 9, 2023 / Holt - Mar 9, 2023
An increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment.

2 - The essay is not doing anything. You are the writer, you are the speaker, it is your opinion being...

Writing Feedbackccts1503 - Mar 8, 2023 / Holt - Mar 9, 2023
(IELTS Task 2) Should people tie their companionship to only one particular organization or not?

2 - You have a tendency to use mix English words that have contradictorty meanings in your sentences. For example, assertion...

Writing Feedbackhahan - Mar 8, 2023 / Holt - Mar 9, 2023
[Ielts task 2] Sugary drinks should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar

2 - Why are you not offering a personal opinion as indicated by the original prompt. For comparison purposes, you were...

Writing Feedbackjason808 - Mar 8, 2023 / Holt - Mar 8, 2023
The reason for cosmetic surgery increasing and your view about its effect.

2 - While your discussion is somewhat related to the original prompt, it is mostly off topic in terms of discussion...

Writing FeedbackTruc Vien - Mar 8, 2023 / Holt - Mar 8, 2023
IELTS 2 - The unintended consequences of social media for young people and their relationships

3 - @Holt Thank you so much!...

Writing FeedbackNamta - Mar 6, 2023 / Namta - Mar 7, 2023
The most effective method to educate children to cooperate is playing team sports at school

2 - The main issues that the discussion has directly relates to the lack of proper word usage and English writing...

Writing Feedbackpilards - Mar 6, 2023 / Holt - Mar 7, 2023
Is taking part in team sports the best way to educate children about cooperation in life?

2 - The essay is only 229 words. It is far too short of the required 250 minimum words. Ordinarily, this...

Writing Feedbackhailey 13 - Mar 6, 2023 / Holt - Mar 7, 2023
There are contradictory opinions about hosting athletics events in a country

3 - @Holt Thank you...

Writing Feedbacknguyet299 - Mar 5, 2023 / nguyet299 - Mar 6, 2023
Heated debate as to whether increasing the price of petrol can address environmental problems

2 - Considering that only one point of view was presented in the original prompt, and there is no opposing...

Writing FeedbackKhanhlinh128 - Mar 5, 2023 / Holt - Mar 6, 2023
(Ielts Wrting Task 1) The rate of male and female candidates who passed the driving test

2 - The summary overview is confusing to read. There is too much information in a single sentence that creates confusion...

Writing Feedbackkiseki - Mar 5, 2023 / Holt - Mar 5, 2023
IS HISTORY MORE CRUCIAL THAN SCIENTIFIC SUBJECT?

2 - You have done an acceptable job when it comes to the prompt restatement. It shows the 2 sides of...

Writing Feedbackntcuwl - Mar 5, 2023 / Holt - Mar 5, 2023
Some people say government should give health care the first priorities, some others believe there a

4 - Your essay needs to make clear your opinion instead of just one sentence in the conclusion...

Writing Feedbacklanaaaaaa - Mar 3, 2023 / kiseki - Mar 5, 2023
Essay about public museums and art galleries will no longer be necessary because computer

3 - thanks, I am having the same topic as you but I don't know how to express my idea. Your...

Writing Feedbackedmi8band - Mar 3, 2023 / kiseki - Mar 5, 2023
Essay about working from home - a new trend these days

3 - So if I write it again, where will I put my new essays, in this comment? Yes, but you...

Writing Feedbackkiseki - Mar 3, 2023 / kiseki - Mar 5, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Socializing online or meeting one another in person?

2 - As far as the prompt restatement is considered, it is not a very good representation of the original topic....

Writing Feedbacknjmpjs - Mar 3, 2023 / Holt - Mar 4, 2023
As children grow, they change their social behaviour.

2 - There is a slight misrepresentation in your first reasoning paragraph. The incorrect reference to "repulsive nature" disconnects from the...

Writing Feedbackrakeshkukkar013 - Mar 3, 2023 / Holt - Mar 4, 2023
The arts or health and education ?

3 - The main problem with this essay is that the ideas are not well developed and your thesis is also...

Writing FeedbackLong Le - Mar 2, 2023 / rakeshkukkar013 - Mar 3, 2023
The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need of commuting

2 - The essay is all set to receive a failing mark. There can be no other consideration for this discussion...

Writing Feedbackcuongtran - Mar 2, 2023 / Holt - Mar 3, 2023
IELTS WRITING PART 2: the importance economic progress for a country

3 - Although I believe that rest of the essay is fine, there are some serious issues with your body paragraphs....

Writing Feedbackandrepr1 - Mar 2, 2023 / rakeshkukkar013 - Mar 2, 2023
Due to a higher life expectancy rates nowadays, the retirement age of employees should be increased

3 - @Holt Thanks for replying and advising me. Actually, I tried really hard to keep this essay under 300, but...

Writing Feedbackrakeshkukkar013 - Mar 2, 2023 / rakeshkukkar013 - Mar 2, 2023
TOEFL task 2 essay on dancing aiming for a full score

2 - Try to avoid using contractions in your academic writing presentations. Always spell out the 2 words necessary to deliver...

Writing FeedbackTOEFLtaker2023 - Mar 2, 2023 / Holt - Mar 2, 2023
Sugar-based drinks are more popular in many countries. What is it caused by?

2 - You are not being asked if the subject posed is true or false. So it is not necessary for...

Writing Feedbackkaililam260 - Mar 1, 2023 / Holt - Mar 2, 2023
IELTS 2: Surveys show that people are living longer in many countries.

2 - In the prompt restatement, why did you indicate "individuals" alone, which has an all encompassing age reference as opposed...

Writing Feedbacknightrain - Mar 1, 2023 / Holt - Mar 2, 2023
IELTS 2: Different views about whether teachers should give their students assignments or not

3 - Further explanation for P2 'Furthermore...view about school' will make this reason more convincible, why asking children to do homework...

Writing Feedbacktrangta0807 - Feb 14, 2023 / nightrain - Mar 1, 2023
Young people today spend too much money and time following fashion trends (clothing, technology)

3 - 1. your essay is too long for IELTS writing. 2. informal writing, such as putting 'and' 'but' at the...

Writing FeedbackBeanMiller - Feb 27, 2023 / nightrain - Mar 1, 2023
More and more people no longer read newspaper or watch tv programs to get news. They get news about

3 - wow, thanks for your reply. if I rewrite the third paragraph's first sentence: even though the trend is good,...

Writing Feedbacknightrain - Feb 28, 2023 / nightrain - Mar 1, 2023
Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treat

2 - The essay has not followed the discussion requirement for the task. Hence, it will receive an automatic failing score...

Writing FeedbackGigi Clarkson - Feb 28, 2023 / Holt - Feb 28, 2023
IELTS: Parents responsibility of making their obese children fat. Should they be punish for it?

6 - The essay is quite brief and needs more supporting ideas. It is also founded several grammatical errors. I must...

Writing FeedbackKrystal Tran - Feb 18, 2023 / andrepr1 - Feb 28, 2023
The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university

4 - The essay presented a clear overview and analyzed some primary points. There are a few grammatical errors and I...

Writing Feedbackrishabhk4896 - Feb 21, 2023 / andrepr1 - Feb 27, 2023
IELTS WRITING PART 2: the importance of homework for children

4 - Hi @Holt Thanks for the frank feedback. I noticed that my restatement is inaccurate and can cause a...

Writing Feedbackandrepr1 - Feb 20, 2023 / andrepr1 - Feb 27, 2023
The percentages of four recycled materials, namely paper, glass, aluminium and plastic

3 - There are lots of grammar mistakes in your essay I can barely understand your essay at some point because...

Writing Feedbackrishabhk4896 - Feb 12, 2023 / Panjasrose - Feb 26, 2023
IELTS Task 1 The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media

2 - You are prone to using word fillers in your reporting essays. This is not a positive thing when it...

Writing Feedbackrishabhk4896 - Feb 22, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
Writing task 1 : top ten countries which have the highest number of Internet users

2 - This is not a part of the image presentation so the reference to China's actual population is not...

Writing FeedbackPanjasrose - Feb 23, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
The percentage of people in each age group who watched a film in cinema regularly (1984-2003)

2 - Even though you wrote 7 words over the advised 200 maximum word count for this presentation, the report itself...

Writing FeedbackPanjasrose - Feb 24, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
Some say that the university students should pay the full cost of their studies

2 - I have to immediately call your attention to the presentation format of this essay. I am not sure if...

Writing Feedbackabsarkhan125 - Feb 25, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
Ielts2: Video records are better way to learn the way people in the world live rather than documents

2 - Well, it appears that you are 25 words short of the acceptable word count in this presentation. That poses...

Writing Feedbackaqua modern 409 - Feb 25, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
Essay about whether or not change is good

2 - You did a very good job in the prompt restatement. Your opinion was also well developed but came short...

Writing Feedbackbaongan00006 - Feb 25, 2023 / Holt - Feb 25, 2023

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