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Causes and measures to overcome overweight.

2 - Hello Jea! I think your essay is very effective in persuading why obesity is a problem. There are some...

Writing Feedbackjalp - 5 hours ago / nvijai - 4 hours ago
The advertisers use advanced techniques to show their products better and more attractive. TOEFL

4 - Dear, please work on your spelling mistakes first, I would suggest you check with online websites or tools to...

Writing Feedbacksalvia - 1 day ago / Chuni lal - 4 hours ago
IELTS - The digital and traditional newspapers

6 - @hyperephania I hope you will find it useful... u have to give the different point of view instead of...

Writing Feedbackhyperephania - 2 days ago / Chuni lal - 5 hours ago
Should government be fully responsible for the underprivileged people?

7 - @Holt I did not notice that I have repeated thesis statement. Thank you very much for the review, as...

Writing Feedbackjalp - Jun 9, 2018 / jalp - 6 hours ago
Care taking of kids when parents are away

4 - Hi Chuni, your essay is good at pointing your opinion and looks flawless. You have strong writing skills. Because...

Writing FeedbackChuni lal - 2 days ago / Kim Truong - 6 hours ago
IELTS - Artists have more attention than scientists

4 - Thank you so much for your valuable feedback. Yes I agree with you that I went off topic in...

Writing FeedbackMTALY - 2 days ago / MTALY - 19 hours ago
Some countries have a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of elderlies

2 - Gloria, I am not sure if you have been studying with a tutor for your IELTS test all this...

Writing FeedbackKino18 - 1 day ago / Holt - 22 hours ago
IELTS GT Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world.

2 - Franciane, your essay suffers in terms of C&C in some sections. For example, I am unclear about what you...

Writing Feedbackfrancigd - 1 day ago / Holt - 23 hours ago
Why do we need music? And what about 'traditional' tracks? Aren't they obsolete today?

2 - Hanaa, your prompt paraphrase is missing from this essay. Even though this is a direct discussion essay, it is...

Writing Feedbackhanaa1989 - 1 day ago / Holt - 23 hours ago
What invention in the last 30 years has made the most difference in the lives of people?

3 - @pp50123 You have chosen some very good lines of reasoning for the topic you chose to discuss in this...

Writing Feedbackpp50123 - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
Essay about the charts' summarization - money for children's sports in Britain

3 - Linh, your paper has a factual error located within it. The first error is that you are citing the...

Writing FeedbackLinh Pham - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
Many employers are now offering their employees the option to work from home.

4 - Hello, do you mean i should write 5 paragraph? Paragraph 1: Introduction Paragraph 2: Opinion Paragraph 3: Reason...

Writing Feedbackcherny - 2 days ago / cherny - 1 day ago
IELTS - useful or harmful chemicals in our food

3 - Franciane, I can say that you have a good understanding of the topic provided for discussion. However, you do...

Writing Feedbackfrancigd - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
IELTS; The media should reduce bad news that they write or say

3 - Artin, it is difficult to help you. I am unsure about how to advise you regarding possible improvements to...

Writing FeedbackIMRXI - Jun 21, 2018 / Holt - 2 days ago
The youngster population surpass the number of older people in some countries

3 - Nguyen, this is a direct response question. The response should be coming from a singular point of view. A...

Writing Feedbackkhanhmeoxx - Jun 21, 2018 / Holt - 2 days ago
Should we allow children to make their own decisions on a common matters (such as food or clothes)

6 - Na na, I got special permission to expand on my explanation to you. This is going to happen only...

Writing FeedbackChiuviu - Jun 18, 2018 / Holt - 2 days ago
Some people become famous at young age. Is it good thing or bad thing?

5 - Hoa, you were only asked whether the topic provided was a good or bad thing. To exaggerate the response...

Writing Feedbacksoulpancake - Jun 20, 2018 / Holt - 2 days ago
Many people prefer to use public transportation while others choose personal cars

5 - I have some thoughts to share with your essays. Hope you will find it useful :) First, I...

Writing FeedbackChuni lal - Jun 18, 2018 / khanhmeoxx - Jun 21, 2018
Some people think that the teenager years are the happiest times of most people's lives.

3 - "In spite of that sometimes teens ..." I think this sentence is contradicting to your reason in second...

Writing FeedbackAmelie - Jun 16, 2018 / cherny - Jun 20, 2018
Several advantages of playing sport games

3 - Hi Hoang, Your introduction is much longer than your body paragragh. Normally body paragragh is longer because you...

Writing Feedbackhoanghadhtm - Jun 19, 2018 / cherny - Jun 20, 2018
Some parent allow their children to get busy with paid work

3 - Yi, the reference in the essay is people, not "parents". Therefore, you should not have used the parental reference...

Writing Feedbackcherny - Jun 19, 2018 / Holt - Jun 20, 2018
(CBEST)- A sharp increases in the minimum wage or no

4 - Queenie, your approach to this essay is too simple for a CBEST essay. The way you wrote it only...

Writing Feedbacknguyenqn - Jun 18, 2018 / Holt - Jun 20, 2018
Practical ideas, and the life guidance suggestions

5 - @jessig if u want to write what other people said, you should use " " for the sentence....

Writing Feedbackjessig - Jun 17, 2018 / cherny - Jun 19, 2018
In order to improve a country's education system.... criticize teachers?

4 - Gian, when writing the prompt paraphrase, you must never repeat any word or phrase from the original. So, rather...

Writing Feedbackgdoan1104 - Jun 18, 2018 / Holt - Jun 19, 2018
The question about publication of crucial scientific information - Ielts writing task 2 cambrige 12

4 - Vu, due to the fact that your essay totally discusses only your point of view rather than the two...

Writing Feedbackthi112233 - Jun 18, 2018 / Holt - Jun 19, 2018
Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes

4 - Van, your discussion does not follow the proper format for this discussion. For starters, a direct response is only...

Writing Feedbackvannguyetthanh - Jun 18, 2018 / Holt - Jun 19, 2018
IELTS Writing Task 2 Discuss both point of view: should children learn mathematic in school

4 - @vannguyetthanh how to write conclusion in this type of question? i mean the 2 side of views question....

Writing Feedbackcherny - Jun 16, 2018 / cherny - Jun 18, 2018
Participating in voluntary work in which youngsters provide support for others

2 - Hi, I think your essay is very clear and well-structured. I just see this structure rather strange: "this,...

Writing FeedbackChris Farm - Jun 18, 2018 / Chiuviu - Jun 18, 2018
Should people date at a young age?

2 - Hoa, for starters, your first short paragraph is already a complete essay presentation unto itself. The Task 2 essay...

Writing Feedbacksoulpancake - Jun 16, 2018 / Holt - Jun 17, 2018
In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents' home.

3 - Chuni, your sentence lose cohesiveness and coherence because you are writing run-on sentences in every paragraph. Overly long sentences...

Writing FeedbackChuni lal - Jun 16, 2018 / Holt - Jun 17, 2018
What are the similarities and differences between children and adults in acquiring language?

4 - Thanks for your informative comments. This essay was my midterm paper and my foreign teacher gave me a good...

Writing FeedbackDani96 - Jun 16, 2018 / Dani96 - Jun 17, 2018
Should share information as much as possible? IELS 12 Test 5 Task 2

3 - your conclusion and third paragraphs are contradicting, in the other point of view, you have described that knowledge/information of...

Writing Feedbackcherny - Jun 15, 2018 / Chuni lal - Jun 16, 2018
Efficiency of Working in Groups - TOEFL Essay

2 - Sufang, since this is an opinion essay that asks you to agree with a previously given statement, it is...

Writing Feedbackfang0396 - Jun 15, 2018 / Holt - Jun 16, 2018
IELTS Writing Task 2- Influence of television and computer games on children.

4 - Thi, you misunderstood the prompt requirements. You were being asked to discuss both points of view from a general...

Writing FeedbackThanh Nguyen - Jun 15, 2018 / Holt - Jun 16, 2018
The number of graduates and postgradutes in Britain in terms of the work they did after study

2 - Hien, I found this essay to be highly confusing. lacking in a clear singular trending sentence, and not really...

Writing FeedbackHien N - Jun 15, 2018 / Holt - Jun 16, 2018
The social channels have many detrimental influences on all walks of life; IELTS2

5 - Thank you so much for your comments The original question is: Many people believe that social networking sites...

Writing Feedbackvannguyetthanh - Jun 14, 2018 / vannguyetthanh - Jun 15, 2018
Online education as a replacement to traditional education. Which is more benefitial for a student?

3 - Thank you very much for the review and grateful for the samples and approach you have mentioned. I focused...

Writing Feedbackjalp - Jun 12, 2018 / jalp - Jun 14, 2018
Universities can control the number of seats in the different subjects

3 - Diksha, while the approach that you took to writing this essay is one of the many possible methods of...

Writing Feedbackny14 - Jun 12, 2018 / Holt - Jun 13, 2018
The impacts of the technological development to the comunication of both individuals and society.

2 - Daisy. I wish you had provided the original prompt for this discussion so that I could have a better...

Writing FeedbackDaisybee - Jun 11, 2018 / Holt - Jun 12, 2018
Performing daily tasks without meeting people face-to-face and its effects

2 - Dam, this essay will receive a major deduction in points, which will definitely prevent it from getting a passing...

Writing Feedbackphuonganhms - Jun 11, 2018 / Holt - Jun 12, 2018
Some people choose to stay unoccupied instead of taking up a job which does not fit to their hobby

3 - Nguyen, while you have some pretty good talking points in this essay, your discussions are not developed beyond that....

Writing FeedbackXuanquynh0812 - Jun 11, 2018 / Holt - Jun 12, 2018
Speaking a second language fluently makes a significant change in your life

3 - Chrissanth, you have managed to create a paragraph that has informative talking points but does not really explain the...

Writing FeedbackChrissanth_12 - Jun 10, 2018 / Holt - Jun 11, 2018
Tourism is an important industry in Taiwan.

2 - @Chong I am not sure what prompt you are responding to with this essay and if this is even...

Writing FeedbackChong - Jun 10, 2018 / Holt - Jun 11, 2018
IELTS Task 2 - Should we abandon our convenient lifestyle?

3 - Oh I didn't realize we had to address that in the conclusion as well. Thank you!...

Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Jun 10, 2018 / rubychautran - Jun 10, 2018
Knowledge gained from personal experience or from books and other printed material; which is better?

4 - Kim, this being a compare and contrast essay, the approach should have been coming first from a public approach...

Writing FeedbackKim Truong - Jun 9, 2018 / Holt - Jun 10, 2018
Legalizing Same-Sex Marriage - Argumentative essay

2 - @mei987 your argument is flawed and incorrect as the US Supreme Court has already upheld the validity of same...

Writing Feedbackmei987 - Jun 9, 2018 / Holt - Jun 10, 2018
IELTS1: the percentage of rural, suburban populations in the Northwest Region between 1990 and 2050.

2 - Hai, let's start with your mistakes in using English terms. A century is equivalent to 100 years. 50 years...

Writing Feedbackcloverjm - Jun 9, 2018 / Holt - Jun 10, 2018
Do u think there were more advantages-disadvantages to be part of a large family in the past? IELTS2

5 - Here are some my personal views about your essay: Your introduction: you grab the reader's attention successfully by an...

Writing FeedbackChrissanth_12 - Jun 8, 2018 / Kim Truong - Jun 9, 2018
Enviroment problem - forest protection necessity

2 - Please include the complete prompt for your essay. It is difficult to review when you have an incomplete topic....

Writing Feedbackhungbui - Jun 9, 2018 / jalp - Jun 9, 2018
The paragraph in response to the topic: the disadvantages of being left-handed.

3 - Tung, the disadvantages of being left handed is not referred as "downsized" but rather "down sides". There are two...

Writing FeedbackTung - Jun 8, 2018 / Holt - Jun 9, 2018
What members of a city sports club think about the club's activities, facilities and opening hours?

3 - Thank you very much!...

Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Jun 7, 2018 / rubychautran - Jun 8, 2018
Should universities apply business-like skills instead of providing theoretical knowledge?

6 - Quan, in addition to what Tran pointed out above, I would like to offer you a reminder when writing...

Writing Feedbackminhquan2121 - Jun 6, 2018 / Holt - Jun 8, 2018
Social and practical problems abroad without local language knowledge

5 - Thewin, try to avoid using the same phrases in the prompt restatement as was used in the original. Your...

Writing Feedbackkruhem - Jun 7, 2018 / Holt - Jun 8, 2018
(GRE) Is it necessary for people questioning the authority?

4 - For starters, essays of these kind, analytical essays, do not always have to agree with a given statement. It...

Writing Feedbackyjhsgi - Jun 6, 2018 / Holt - Jun 8, 2018
It is argued that besides making the profit, companies also have responsibilities toward society

5 - @yjhsgi For instance, the government invests ... Besides, companies also create jobs ... I don't agree with that....

Writing Feedbackhuyen smile - May 31, 2018 / huyen smile - Jun 7, 2018
Drunken Irony | A Literary Criticism of "The Drunkard" by Frank O'Connor and its underlying irony |

2 - Alex, it would be better if you present the types of irony within the story in a chronological manner....

Writing Feedbackalpal227 - Jun 7, 2018 / Holt - Jun 7, 2018
International aid for the development plans for developing countries

3 - Hi there. I have some opinions about your second paragraph. You see, you didn't really provide any supporting reason...

Writing FeedbackChuni lal - Jun 5, 2018 / rubychautran - Jun 7, 2018
IELTS TASK comment and maybe give me the band for this essay)

3 - Hi, I thought your report was pretty clear. One point you might have mentioned is that even though their...

Writing Feedbackroxana_0610 - Jun 6, 2018 / TJLuschen - Jun 6, 2018
Levels of youth crime are getting higher in major cities in Viet Nam. Analyze reasons and solutions.

2 - U should pay attention to adj and v value--valuable aware--awareness "the action of thieves" is not correct "that they...

Writing FeedbackJollie - Jun 6, 2018 / JohnsonFan - Jun 6, 2018
[TOEFL]Keeping their rooms tidy and organized, students have a chance to get closer to success

4 - Thank you so much! Thanks for such detailed corrections about my paper. I will modify it carefully according to...

Writing FeedbackClara_cyy - Jun 5, 2018 / Clara_cyy - Jun 6, 2018

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