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|Sticky: [WRITING TASK 1] The average on cell phone, national fixed line amd international fixed line service
4 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your feedback. Maybe i typed too fast so i made a lot unexpected mistakes. I...
Writing Feedbackelliemiller - Oct 13, 2020 / elliemiller - Oct 14, 2020
|[Writing task 1] The number of cars made in three countries
3 - Excuse Tien, It's not about your topic. I'm a newbie. I have a question. How can you attached your...
Writing FeedbackTien xu - 23 hrs ago / James15 - 12 hrs ago
|Help with Writing Task 2 - Essay on topic Study Abroad. Do the benefits outweigh the drawbacks?
NEW - QUESTION More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits...
Writing Feedbackmadhur1688 - 12 hrs ago / — -
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Origins of increasing crime rates and proposed solution
2 - The writer's opinion fails to represent the discussion requirement which is to state the summary of the possible causes...
Writing Feedbacklovedionise - 2 days ago / Holt - 2 days ago
|The Effects of Therapy Dog Visits on Individuals in Alcohol and Other Drug Rehabilitation Facilities
3 - @Holt Thank you for taking the time to read and provide feedback. Sorry I should have clarified the purpose,...
Writing FeedbackMickeyMouse - Mar 18, 2023 / MickeyMouse - Mar 18, 2023
|[IELTS Writing task 1] Pie chart - Comparative Graphs; time spent on several activities
2 - Well you did well in terms of providing an ample word count for your task 1 essay. However, you...
Writing FeedbackAP17025 - Mar 16, 2023 / Holt - Mar 17, 2023
|What should be the primary goal of universities?
2 - You need to comrpess your thoughts into paragraphs of no more than 5 proper explained and formatted sentences. That...
Writing Feedbackhtruc2005 - Mar 16, 2023 / Holt - Mar 17, 2023
|[task 1] The table give information about the underground railway systems in six countries
2 - Try to complete the summary overview next time. When you indicate that a table has been provided, consider that...
Writing Feedbackodysey - Mar 15, 2023 / Holt - Mar 16, 2023
|Strict controls about noise or people can make as much noise as they want? Discuss 2 views+Opinion
2 - You should not be combining your personal opinion in the public opinion restatement. That is because you are...
Writing FeedbackAmiable - Mar 14, 2023 / Holt - Mar 16, 2023
|The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in UK(Task 1)
2 - You have met the minimum word count requirement but not the proper format for the discussion presentation. There should...
Writing FeedbackThanhPham25 - Mar 14, 2023 / Holt - Mar 16, 2023
|The diagram show two methods of using water to produce electricity
2 - What kind of pictures were provided? Were these diagrams or procedural illustrations? The image identifier does not clarify...
Writing Feedbackrslmsayu - Mar 13, 2023 / Holt - Mar 14, 2023
|IELTS 1: Goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four modes of transport
2 - Teh summary overview definitely needs improvements. For starters, the run on sentence could have been presented over 3 sentences...
Writing Feedbackchupchip - Mar 12, 2023 / Holt - Mar 14, 2023
|Essay about finding out about the history of the house
2 - Your topic restatement keeps too many keywords from the original presentation for the examiner to view it as a...
Writing Feedbackmaithuytram - Mar 12, 2023 / Holt - Mar 14, 2023
|IELTS 1: The table below shows different home appliances owned in Great Britain from 1972 to 1983.
Writing Feedbackngominhchau0205 - Feb 27, 2023 / ngominhchau0205 - Mar 14, 2023
|The line chart below shows the number of men and women that smoke cigarettes in Australia
3 - @cxvzfbxdng I think you should mention to the period of time in the first paragraph. In paragraph 3, you...
Writing Feedbackcxvzfbxdng - Mar 11, 2023 / Namta - Mar 13, 2023
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Some people spend a lot of money attending cultural or sports events
4 - @painiteeee I think your essay is quite good. You attempt to use complex sentences and advanced vocabulary. Besides, the...
Writing Feedbackpainiteeee - Mar 9, 2023 / Namta - Mar 12, 2023
|Having more international sports events (such as the Olympics) is a good way to promote world peace
2 - You have to use first person pronouns in the presentation of your writer's opinion. That is because you...
Writing FeedbackPrisoni - Mar 11, 2023 / Holt - Mar 12, 2023
|Educating children about laws and crimes is more effective than establishing stricter laws
2 - While this is an agree or disagree essay, it is also an extent essay. Therefore, your response...
Writing Feedbackalohabrothers155 - Mar 11, 2023 / Holt - Mar 12, 2023
|Industrial area in Norbiton and how it is planned for development in the future CAMBRIGDE 17 IELTS 1
2 - The essay meets the word count minimum. That is good. What is bad then? The paragraph presentations are not...
Writing Feedbacksundaymay - Mar 10, 2023 / Holt - Mar 10, 2023
|[Task 2] Educate girls and boys in separate schools or mixed school
2 - There is no real argument presented here. Just opposing ideas. It is important not to exaggerate the idea presentations...
Writing FeedbackTania9094 - Mar 10, 2023 / Holt - Mar 10, 2023
|Essay about minority languages
Writing Feedbackksenloom - Mar 9, 2023 / Holt - Mar 9, 2023
|Descriptive a holiday celebration
3 - I hope everyone will have a chance to gather with each member of their family to strengthen their family's...
Writing Feedbacktrangdai - Mar 7, 2023 / trangdai - Mar 9, 2023
|[ielts writing 2] Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagr
2 - This is an unnecessary reference point in this presentation. The 2 sentence restatement and writer's opinion that clearly...
Writing Feedbackkydie0812 - Mar 9, 2023 / Holt - Mar 9, 2023
|An increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment.
2 - The essay is not doing anything. You are the writer, you are the speaker, it is your opinion being...
Writing Feedbackccts1503 - Mar 8, 2023 / Holt - Mar 9, 2023
|(IELTS Task 2) Should people tie their companionship to only one particular organization or not?
2 - You have a tendency to use mix English words that have contradictorty meanings in your sentences. For example, assertion...
Writing Feedbackhahan - Mar 8, 2023 / Holt - Mar 9, 2023
|[Ielts task 2] Sugary drinks should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar
2 - Why are you not offering a personal opinion as indicated by the original prompt. For comparison purposes, you were...
Writing Feedbackjason808 - Mar 8, 2023 / Holt - Mar 8, 2023
|The reason for cosmetic surgery increasing and your view about its effect.
2 - While your discussion is somewhat related to the original prompt, it is mostly off topic in terms of discussion...
Writing FeedbackTruc Vien - Mar 8, 2023 / Holt - Mar 8, 2023
|IELTS 2 - The unintended consequences of social media for young people and their relationships
Writing FeedbackNamta - Mar 6, 2023 / Namta - Mar 7, 2023
|The most effective method to educate children to cooperate is playing team sports at school
2 - The main issues that the discussion has directly relates to the lack of proper word usage and English writing...
Writing Feedbackpilards - Mar 6, 2023 / Holt - Mar 7, 2023
|Is taking part in team sports the best way to educate children about cooperation in life?
2 - The essay is only 229 words. It is far too short of the required 250 minimum words. Ordinarily, this...
Writing Feedbackhailey 13 - Mar 6, 2023 / Holt - Mar 7, 2023
|There are contradictory opinions about hosting athletics events in a country
Writing Feedbacknguyet299 - Mar 5, 2023 / nguyet299 - Mar 6, 2023
|Heated debate as to whether increasing the price of petrol can address environmental problems
2 - Considering that only one point of view was presented in the original prompt, and there is no opposing...
Writing FeedbackKhanhlinh128 - Mar 5, 2023 / Holt - Mar 6, 2023
|(Ielts Wrting Task 1) The rate of male and female candidates who passed the driving test
2 - The summary overview is confusing to read. There is too much information in a single sentence that creates confusion...
Writing Feedbackkiseki - Mar 5, 2023 / Holt - Mar 5, 2023
|IS HISTORY MORE CRUCIAL THAN SCIENTIFIC SUBJECT?
2 - You have done an acceptable job when it comes to the prompt restatement. It shows the 2 sides of...
Writing Feedbackntcuwl - Mar 5, 2023 / Holt - Mar 5, 2023
|Some people say government should give health care the first priorities, some others believe there a
Writing Feedbacklanaaaaaa - Mar 3, 2023 / kiseki - Mar 5, 2023
|Essay about public museums and art galleries will no longer be necessary because computer
Writing Feedbackedmi8band - Mar 3, 2023 / kiseki - Mar 5, 2023
|Essay about working from home - a new trend these days
Writing Feedbackkiseki - Mar 3, 2023 / kiseki - Mar 5, 2023
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Socializing online or meeting one another in person?
2 - As far as the prompt restatement is considered, it is not a very good representation of the original topic....
Writing Feedbacknjmpjs - Mar 3, 2023 / Holt - Mar 4, 2023
|As children grow, they change their social behaviour.
2 - There is a slight misrepresentation in your first reasoning paragraph. The incorrect reference to "repulsive nature" disconnects from the...
Writing Feedbackrakeshkukkar013 - Mar 3, 2023 / Holt - Mar 4, 2023
|The arts or health and education ?
3 - The main problem with this essay is that the ideas are not well developed and your thesis is also...
Writing FeedbackLong Le - Mar 2, 2023 / rakeshkukkar013 - Mar 3, 2023
|The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need of commuting
2 - The essay is all set to receive a failing mark. There can be no other consideration for this discussion...
Writing Feedbackcuongtran - Mar 2, 2023 / Holt - Mar 3, 2023
|IELTS WRITING PART 2: the importance economic progress for a country
3 - Although I believe that rest of the essay is fine, there are some serious issues with your body paragraphs....
Writing Feedbackandrepr1 - Mar 2, 2023 / rakeshkukkar013 - Mar 2, 2023
|Due to a higher life expectancy rates nowadays, the retirement age of employees should be increased
3 - @Holt Thanks for replying and advising me. Actually, I tried really hard to keep this essay under 300, but...
Writing Feedbackrakeshkukkar013 - Mar 2, 2023 / rakeshkukkar013 - Mar 2, 2023
|TOEFL task 2 essay on dancing aiming for a full score
2 - Try to avoid using contractions in your academic writing presentations. Always spell out the 2 words necessary to deliver...
Writing FeedbackTOEFLtaker2023 - Mar 2, 2023 / Holt - Mar 2, 2023
|Sugar-based drinks are more popular in many countries. What is it caused by?
Writing Feedbackkaililam260 - Mar 1, 2023 / Holt - Mar 2, 2023
|IELTS 2: Surveys show that people are living longer in many countries.
2 - In the prompt restatement, why did you indicate "individuals" alone, which has an all encompassing age reference as opposed...
Writing Feedbacknightrain - Mar 1, 2023 / Holt - Mar 2, 2023
|IELTS 2: Different views about whether teachers should give their students assignments or not
3 - Further explanation for P2 'Furthermore...view about school' will make this reason more convincible, why asking children to do homework...
Writing Feedbacktrangta0807 - Feb 14, 2023 / nightrain - Mar 1, 2023
|Young people today spend too much money and time following fashion trends (clothing, technology)
3 - 1. your essay is too long for IELTS writing. 2. informal writing, such as putting 'and' 'but' at the...
Writing FeedbackBeanMiller - Feb 27, 2023 / nightrain - Mar 1, 2023
|More and more people no longer read newspaper or watch tv programs to get news. They get news about
3 - wow, thanks for your reply. if I rewrite the third paragraph's first sentence: even though the trend is good,...
Writing Feedbacknightrain - Feb 28, 2023 / nightrain - Mar 1, 2023
|Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treat
2 - The essay has not followed the discussion requirement for the task. Hence, it will receive an automatic failing score...
Writing FeedbackGigi Clarkson - Feb 28, 2023 / Holt - Feb 28, 2023
|IELTS: Parents responsibility of making their obese children fat. Should they be punish for it?
6 - The essay is quite brief and needs more supporting ideas. It is also founded several grammatical errors. I must...
Writing FeedbackKrystal Tran - Feb 18, 2023 / andrepr1 - Feb 28, 2023
|The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university
4 - The essay presented a clear overview and analyzed some primary points. There are a few grammatical errors and I...
Writing Feedbackrishabhk4896 - Feb 21, 2023 / andrepr1 - Feb 27, 2023
|IELTS WRITING PART 2: the importance of homework for children
4 - Hi @Holt Thanks for the frank feedback. I noticed that my restatement is inaccurate and can cause a...
Writing Feedbackandrepr1 - Feb 20, 2023 / andrepr1 - Feb 27, 2023
|The percentages of four recycled materials, namely paper, glass, aluminium and plastic
3 - There are lots of grammar mistakes in your essay I can barely understand your essay at some point because...
Writing Feedbackrishabhk4896 - Feb 12, 2023 / Panjasrose - Feb 26, 2023
|IELTS Task 1 The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media
2 - You are prone to using word fillers in your reporting essays. This is not a positive thing when it...
Writing Feedbackrishabhk4896 - Feb 22, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
|Writing task 1 : top ten countries which have the highest number of Internet users
2 - This is not a part of the image presentation so the reference to China's actual population is not...
Writing FeedbackPanjasrose - Feb 23, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
|The percentage of people in each age group who watched a film in cinema regularly (1984-2003)
2 - Even though you wrote 7 words over the advised 200 maximum word count for this presentation, the report itself...
Writing FeedbackPanjasrose - Feb 24, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
|Some say that the university students should pay the full cost of their studies
2 - I have to immediately call your attention to the presentation format of this essay. I am not sure if...
Writing Feedbackabsarkhan125 - Feb 25, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
|Ielts2: Video records are better way to learn the way people in the world live rather than documents
2 - Well, it appears that you are 25 words short of the acceptable word count in this presentation. That poses...
Writing Feedbackaqua modern 409 - Feb 25, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
|Essay about whether or not change is good
2 - You did a very good job in the prompt restatement. Your opinion was also well developed but came short...
Writing Feedbackbaongan00006 - Feb 25, 2023 / Holt - Feb 25, 2023
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