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NEW - Some people think that government should not give international aid since they have disadvantages people like unemployment and homeless...

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Writing task 2: Jobs and assigned genders

2 - @bartex This is too short for task 2. You will be penalized for that. You might want to add...

Writing Feedbackbartex - 5 hrs ago / serbinax - 2 hrs ago

IELTS TASK2: THE IMPACT OF THE INTERNET, POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE?

2 - As technology has become well-developed, the internet has brought numerous convenience {here the noun should be plural} to our...

Writing Feedbacksandyhsu - 7 hrs ago / serbinax - 3 hrs ago

IELTS task 2 Reading Ebooks vs watching TV and playing computer

NEW - Some people believe that reading stories from e book better than watching TV or playing computer games for children....

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[ IELTS TASK2] About - socialize online trend

5 - @Holt @V184ht Thank you so much for your advice!...

Writing FeedbackIsabella00 - 1 day ago / Isabella00 - 4 hrs ago

Wrting task 2 - Foreign students in English-Speaking countries to learn English

3 - 1.Introduction part may need to be brief, so that you can reduce the word count. 2.you don't have to...

Writing FeedbackVictorvu - 10 hrs ago / sandyhsu - 8 hrs ago

IELTS task 1: Diagram on electricity generation from tides

3 - You misspelled "sea" as see. "See" means to have something in sight while "sea" is a body of water....

Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - 14 hrs ago / Holt - 10 hrs ago

General Training - Task 1 - Type: Complaint - Subject: Issues with shared parking area

3 - The letter that you wrote is very good but not yet at the 7 mark. The reason that the...

Writing FeedbackGaucho - 15 hrs ago / Holt - 10 hrs ago

IELTS Task 1: In the chart - British Men and Women in further education

4 - @Holt Thank you very much for your comment...

Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - 1 day ago / vuthuylinh2611 - 11 hrs ago

People visiting nations - a line chart bellow by summarizing the information

3 - The summary overview is incomplete. It does not mention the measurement factor (in the millions). The trending statement was...

Writing Feedbackmaitrang95 - 17 hrs ago / Holt - 11 hrs ago

Ielts Writing Task 1 bar chart The average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different

3 - As you are aiming for 6.5, it is touching the mark. Para 3: " the number of unpaid...

Writing Feedbackhallynguyen13579 - 17 hrs ago / GATE - 13 hrs ago

Reasons for seeking happiness and successful in foreign countries.

3 - This is an IELTS Task 2 question. Are you practicing to take that test? You did not specify if...

Writing Feedbacksou78 - 22 hrs ago / Holt - 15 hrs ago

Turtles in India (four different species) - IELTS Writing Task 1, line graph

2 - The summary overview could have been more completely represented in the paragraph by indicating several additional information. These information...

Writing Feedbackjoseipg - 1 day ago / Holt - 15 hrs ago

IELTS Task 2 - Railways development or Roads development

3 - On the contrary, you did not do a very good job on this essay because you did not immediately...

Writing Feedbackbeekill - 1 day ago / Holt - 16 hrs ago

General Training - Task 2 - Type: Agree or Disagree - Subject: ban smoke, public areas, countries

4 - I wrote a new version of my essay taking into consideration the comments made. Could you please check if...

Writing FeedbackGaucho - 1 day ago / Gaucho - 18 hrs ago

Truth in relationship between people

4 - Some grammatical and spelling mistakes: -The broad definition of the truth is, to be honest, and DO not...

Writing Feedbacksou78 - 2 days ago / Gaucho - 19 hrs ago

My views on Online Courses Learning

3 - Some grammatical and spelling mistakes: -THESE days there are some funny stories about teachers in live broadcast. -In...

Writing FeedbackCloudfly - 1 day ago / Gaucho - 19 hrs ago

Encouraging a sense of competition in children or teaching them cooperation?

2 - Since you are self studying, the first thing I want to call attention to is your word count. Always,...

Writing Feedbackhallynguyen13579 - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago

Living alone is trending, do you think it is positive or negative

4 - I am self-learning so I will try my best to help you. In recent years it has become a...

Writing Feedbackcorn - Feb 12, 2020 / hallynguyen13579 - 1 day ago

4 - While the general review that you did in the second version is acceptable, you should also be looking for...

Writing Feedbackhuyduongts - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago

Life is better today than it was 100 years ago. Do you agree?

3 - 1, I think your word count will be not enough so you need to improve. 2, For the first...

Writing FeedbackDung918 - 2 days ago / hallynguyen13579 - 1 day ago

WRITING TASK 1 - number of graduates of different gender in Canada

4 - Thank you all guys. I have rewritten my essay today. Could you please give me some suggestions on it...

Writing Feedbackshinxg - 2 days ago / shinxg - 1 day ago

Computer technology vs Maintaining public libraries

4 - Some grammatical and spelling improvements: - In the modern life... - ... important part IN our lives. -...

Writing FeedbackDaisyhanoi09 - Feb 13, 2020 / Gaucho - 1 day ago

Ielts Writing Task 1: spending on three different telephone services in the USA

2 - You forgot to include the inclusive years of the graph, in the overview summary. This means that your summary...

Writing Feedbackthiendinh3 - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago

Most people are not as fit and active, as they were in the past. Problems and solution

3 - Your prompt paraphrase is incomplete and lacking one sentence to complete a paragraph. You have not indicated the discussion...

Writing Feedbackaprilmk - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago

Writing Task 2 - Education - Higher Education - Both Views

4 - Hi @Holt and @shinxg, Thank you very much for your feedback and comments, which help me so much....

Writing Feedbacktimmy88 - 2 days ago / timmy88 - 1 day ago

Ielts Writing Task 1: the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester

3 - To me, you should replace spend most hours for on watching; - had climbing --> climbed as this activity...

Writing FeedbackNguyet Tran - 2 days ago / aprilmk - 2 days ago

The computer provides us with convenience and eliminates manual work

3 - @Holt Thanks for your advice. I will try a mixture of singular and plural ownership pronouns in later writing....

Writing Feedbackshinxg - Feb 15, 2020 / shinxg - 2 days ago

IELTS Writing task 2: High consumption of soft beverages - reasons and solutions

3 - Some grammatical mistakes that you could fix: ... essential part OF ... ... in THE competitive market...

Writing Feedbackduongthao - Feb 15, 2020 / Gaucho - 2 days ago

Crime in two countries comparison. REVIEW MY IELTS WRITING OF LINE GRAPH

2 - Remember to use a space bar to separate a period at the end of a sentence, before you start...

Writing Feedbackbeckycyy - Feb 15, 2020 / Holt - Feb 15, 2020

What are the causes and effects of global warming? Suggest some possible solutions to this problem.

2 - I will assume that this was written as an English writing exercise and that you were allowed to research...

Writing Feedbackstella52 - Feb 15, 2020 / Holt - Feb 15, 2020

Describe a film/movie you would like to share with your friends

2 - Spoiler Alert! You were being asked to do a movie review, without telling the whole story of the movie....

Writing Feedbackson2409 - Feb 15, 2020 / Holt - Feb 15, 2020

IELTS task 2 - adolescents have to take part in campaigns to contribute to the community

2 - As you only wrote 223 words for this essay, it will be futile for me to review your work....

Writing Feedbackminnadoan - Feb 15, 2020 / Holt - Feb 15, 2020

Ielts Task 1: Gross Domestic Product including IT and Service industries in the UK from 1992 to 2000

4 - @Holt: Thank you so much for your valuable feedback. I am working on it, that's exactly what I am...

Writing FeedbackNguyet Tran - Feb 13, 2020 / Nguyet Tran - Feb 14, 2020

IELTS TASK2 About Spending money on construction of new transportation or improving old systems

3 - Let's start with your introduction.It is ok. You didn't paraphrase the question right. Grammatical errors -"Needless to say, it...

Writing FeedbackRaeeeee - Feb 13, 2020 / GATE - Feb 14, 2020

[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] The purpose of a university degree

3 - This is a three point of view discussion paper. You did not address the discussion in that manner. You...

Writing Feedbackhien082nguyen - Feb 13, 2020 / Holt - Feb 14, 2020

[IELTS TASK 2] About success: Some people are born with talents, however some are taught

5 - You should not add your personal feelings (Example: I greatly admire Messi) in your essays. Try to avoid informal...

Writing Feedbackdienrol - Feb 13, 2020 / lildaisy - Feb 13, 2020

"Why you should drink wine daily" a proposal essay.

2 - The proposal should offer an idea into how the topic will be discussed. This should be a compare and...

Writing FeedbackSjames6 - Feb 12, 2020 / Holt - Feb 13, 2020

IELTS TASK 2: THE BEST WAY TO TEACH TEENAGERS ABOUT THE DANGER OF CRIME IS EX-PRISONERS

NEW - In recent years, imparting teenagers about the consequences of crime is necessary. Some people consider that ex-prisoners are an...

Writing Feedbackcorn - Feb 12, 2020 / — -

Ielts task 2. In recent years, people are likely to live alone instead of starting a family

5 - You should replace affect=impact And positive= benefits Negative=drawbacks...

Writing FeedbackMai Nhu Y - Feb 8, 2020 / corn - Feb 12, 2020

[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Pros & Cons Technology affects Social relationship

7 - I think it is better for you to use at the opposite end of the spectrum rather than nevetheless...

Writing FeedbackKieric - Feb 9, 2020 / corn - Feb 12, 2020

School, Education, Society - [IELTS Writing task 2]

4 - @holt @ttxnam Thank you so much for your feedback....

Writing Feedbacklinhcong - Feb 12, 2020 / linhcong - Feb 12, 2020

It's hard to define happiness - why? The intrinsic and extrinsic factors

3 - I really appreciate the time and effort you put into assessing this essay. I have noticed the teachers have...

Writing FeedbackHeiden - Feb 12, 2020 / Heiden - Feb 12, 2020

Magical Tool - [IELTS ACADEMIC-WRITING TASK 2] MUSIC'S EXTRAORDINARY ABILITIES

3 - Good work. This type of writing could very well land you within the 6 band score based on the...

Writing FeedbackNgoc98 - Feb 12, 2020 / Holt - Feb 12, 2020

Reducing traffic accidents by penalizing drivers? [IELTS WRITING TASK 2]

5 - It's reasonably good. But the way to improve road quality should be more specific in paragraph 3. And in...

Writing Feedbackthingoc - Feb 12, 2020 / shinxg - Feb 12, 2020

Student behave badly these days. Why occurs? Give solutions

3 - Since you did not provide information as to whether this essay was written as an exercise for a specific...

Writing Feedbackhtnanh2310 - Feb 12, 2020 / Holt - Feb 12, 2020

[IETLS ACADEMIC - WRITING TASK 2] MOBILE PHONE - ANTISOCIAL INVENTION?

4 - OMG Thanks for your comments they're really helpful to me. I think I know what I have to do...

Writing Feedbacktranggnh - Feb 12, 2020 / tranggnh - Feb 12, 2020

Different views about the amount of money paid to top sportspeople.

5 - Actually, I'm in favour of the perspective that athletes deserve the money they earn because their occupation demands many...

Writing Feedbackparviz - Feb 10, 2020 / htnanh2310 - Feb 12, 2020

General Training - Task 1 - Type: Job Application - Subject: Social events' organiser

2 - It is important that you know that just because other people tell you how the might have written the...

Writing FeedbackGaucho - Feb 10, 2020 / Holt - Feb 10, 2020

[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF TRAVELLING ALONE

4 - Basically, your essay did not follow the original prompt at all. The original prompt is: Some people like...

Writing Feedbackjacinthejanny19 - Feb 9, 2020 / Holt - Feb 10, 2020

General Training - Task 2 - Type: Agree or Disagree - Subject: television, laziness, socialisation

3 - @Holt Thank very much for your feedback, I appreciated it. I will use your suggestions to improve my next...

Writing FeedbackGaucho - Feb 9, 2020 / Gaucho - Feb 9, 2020

Discuss about child begging in Vietnam and state my opinion on it. (approximately 150 words)

4 - @Holt I am appreciated your help. Actually, this is the entrance essay for university. Also, since this is the...

Writing Feedbackdaphnepham - Feb 9, 2020 / daphnepham - Feb 9, 2020

Extreme sports are dangerous and should be banned - is it a good option?

3 - @Holt yeah, i see. thank you for your comment. have a nice day!...

Writing Feedbackrearthinkite381 - Feb 9, 2020 / rearthinkite381 - Feb 9, 2020

Computers are regarded as the most influential invention of the last century

3 - The whole discussion does not follow the required parameters of the original topic. I am not sure why you...

Writing Feedbackdieuthaonguyen - Feb 8, 2020 / Holt - Feb 9, 2020

(IELTS WRITING TASK 2) Population aging: effects and solutions

3 - This is a task 2 essay. That means the first paragraph should be a paraphrase or restatement of the...

Writing Feedbacktuanhnguyen2611 - Feb 8, 2020 / Holt - Feb 9, 2020

3 - Thanks, I really appreciate that....

Writing FeedbackSteve Nguyen - Feb 6, 2020 / Steve Nguyen - Feb 8, 2020

Review my essay - Under the sea - 'the mother of mysteriousness and beauty'

3 - Hi, is it possible to delete this thread since i am submitting this essay for a national writing championship....

Writing Feedbackstevennn - Feb 1, 2020 / stevennn - Feb 8, 2020

Eating vegetarian of Vietnamese people

3 - @Holt thank you so much!...

Writing FeedbackBig Boss - Feb 7, 2020 / Big Boss - Feb 7, 2020

Countries should try to produce all the food for the population and imports

2 - Based on the original prompt for this discussion, it appears that you have cut and paste some references from...

Writing FeedbackEveIssabelle - Feb 6, 2020 / Holt - Feb 7, 2020

IELTS WRITING TASK 2: DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE OPINION

2 - You are still confused as to how to approach the public point of view with personal opinion essay. The...

Writing Feedbackthanhthanh96 - Feb 6, 2020 / Holt - Feb 7, 2020

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