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Sticky: [WRITING TASK 1] The average on cell phone, national fixed line amd international fixed line service

4 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your feedback. Maybe i typed too fast so i made a lot unexpected mistakes. I...

Writing Feedbackelliemiller - Oct 13, 2020 / elliemiller - Oct 14, 2020
(IELTS P2)Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live

NEW - It is widely believed that people should find an approach to live with global warming instead of preventing it....

Writing Feedbackmimimeo - 2 hrs ago / — -
People believe that the government should make college free. AGREE OR DISAGREE?

2 - There are 2 schools of thought provided for this prompt and yetonly one is reflected in the restatement. The...

Writing FeedbackLina nguyen - 15 hrs ago / Holt - 2 hrs ago
The given diagram illustrates the complex procedures required to produce liquid chocolate

2 - The writer must be more familiar with the image types. While the prompt provides a clue to the type...

Writing FeedbackHelenN - 17 hrs ago / Holt - 2 hrs ago
1. Some people think that it is better to work for different organisations during the career

2 - Donot turn the discussion intea controversy. That statement is unnecessary as the writer is altering the original statement presentation....

Writing Feedbackmaichi13 - 18 hrs ago / Holt - 2 hrs ago
Global product and economy - CAMBRIDGE IELTS 10 Test 3 Writing Task 2

2 - There is no prompt attached to this essay which makes it difficult to review. As there are several similar...

Writing FeedbackMinhnek4 - 20 hrs ago / Holt - 2 hrs ago
One thing that makes me happy this week.

2 - This essay is meant to be a deep reflection of your relationship with your sister. If should cover at...

Writing Feedbackeffiechen22 - 21 hrs ago / Holt - 3 hrs ago
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] WHETHER COMPUTERS ARE THE MOST SIGNIFICANT INNOVATION...

2 - Let's be clear, a reference to the "last century" means the most recent 100 years (20th century). The reference...

Writing Feedbackphcnguyen - 1 day ago / Holt - 3 hrs ago
IELTS TASK 2: Individuals have changed their way in interaction

NEW - NOWADAYS THE WAY MANY PEOPLE INTERACT WITH EACH OTHER HAS CHANGED BECAUSE OF TECHNOLOGY. IN WHAT WAYS HAS TECHNOLOGY...

Writing FeedbackDoris1712 - 5 hrs ago / — -
(IELTS) Home schooling vs School education

2 - Proper vocabulary usage is of the utmost importance in these essays. Word references help to bring clarity to the...

Writing FeedbackCrazy Snake - 1 day ago / Holt - 6 hrs ago
Researchers and travelers are now more easily able to visit remote areas such as the South Pole

2 - This 209 word essay starts at a scoring disadvantage for not meeting the 250 minimum word count. The percentage...

Writing Feedbackthutrangg - 1 day ago / Holt - 8 hrs ago
[TOEFL WRITING TASK 2] Grades encourage students to learn.

NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples...

Writing Feedbackprann189 - 12 hrs ago / — -
TOEFL TASK-2 Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient

3 - @shivam1687 ... faster than a average human being. For instance, if you are incharge of a local ......

Writing Feedbackshivam1687 - 2 days ago / HelenN - 16 hrs ago
WRITING TASK 1- the proportion total expenditure in a certain European country between 1960 and 2000

3 - Hi @stella nguyen ... on five sectors increased decreased (?) from 1960 to 2000. ... money for transportation...

Writing Feedbackstella nguyen - 2 days ago / HelenN - 16 hrs ago
The large number of people are drawing attention to communicating online

4 - Hi @mymyt ... that a large number of people... ... this is a highly problematic issue... Therefore, some main...

Writing Feedbackmymyt - 2 days ago / HelenN - 16 hrs ago
Allowing children to decide on matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is beneficial or not?

3 - @VictoriaVu Good idea...

Writing FeedbackVictoriaVu - 1 day ago / Mekonguyen - 19 hrs ago
Raising petrol prices as an effective measure to ease environmental problems

NEW - government should increase the cost of fuel ielts writing task2: People think that government should increase the cost...

Writing Feedbackhathuvu - 1 day ago / — -
Essay about if self-acceptance is the most important trait a teacher can have

2 - A teacher of the English language should have proficient English vocabulary. Lecturers are supposed to have enough English know-hour...

Writing FeedbackQL91 - 1 day ago / Holt - 1 day ago
"the solution for using technological devices too much to organise a meeting with other peolple"

2 - The first paragraph is confusing. It does not make a logical representation of the base presentation. It appears to...

Writing Feedbackducanh123 - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
People from some nations often attach more importance to possessing a home than having rented one

2 - The topic restatement is properly done. AIthough it would benefitted from better synonym usage for the word " rented"....

Writing Feedbackhoangtuanhthu - 2 days ago / Holt - 1 day ago
Different types of activities in the American senior citizens' leisure time from 1980s to 2010s

3 - Thank you for giving me a feedback. It is really helpful for my improvement. Hope to get more feedback...

Writing Feedbackkimcat2207 - Jun 14, 2021 / kimcat2207 - 1 day ago
Some people claim that studying overseas will bring considerable benefits to the country

2 - The presentation is mostly on track and relevant to the prompt. However, issues with grammar in terms of vocabulary,...

Writing Feedbackphamtamm2508 - 2 days ago / Holt - 2 days ago
IELTS WRITING PART 2 - working while studying teenagers

2 - Word usage accuracy is important when writing. Simply stating " working while studying does not carry the same meaning...

Writing Feedbackgiangninh - 2 days ago / Holt - 2 days ago
IELTS TASK 2: Describe causes and effects of extended working hours

2 - Okay. Put away the dictionary and stop looking up representative complicated words that do not help with the clarity...

Writing FeedbackkuroshiroP - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
Writing paragraphs about life goals

2 - Since this is only a single paragraph, you need not lead into your explanation with "To begin with". Go...

Writing Feedbackmanchint - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
The causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society

2 - The prompt paraphrase lacks coherence. The amount of words used in reference to the original discussion topic does not...

Writing FeedbackTrag1112 - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
Writing Task 2 IELTS - conflicts about deciding subjects at university

2 - The validity of the personal opinion you present should be in the 3rd paragraph of the essay. It is...

Writing FeedbackTinhAnhNguyen - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 about impact of social media on both individuals and society.

2 - Keep track of your word count. Always present 250 words or accept the penalties for not presenting the minimum...

Writing FeedbackAli20 - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
The pie charts compare household expenditure spending on five different items in UK and New Zealand

2 - The summary overview is the presentation that gives you the opportunity to run down important information for the leader....

Writing Feedbackhanh_1 - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
Bullying at schools. How to have a good structure in cause-solution writing type?

2 - There are a few things you have to remember when creating your restatement: - Don't refer to a debate...

Writing FeedbackHolan1712 - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - 2 days ago
Toefl Independent Writing - "Never, never give up" means to keep trying and working for own goals

3 - @Holt Thanks for the feedback....

Writing Feedbackackit - Jun 14, 2021 / ackit - 2 days ago
The major environmental issue of our time is the extinction of many living creatures on earth

3 - This does not contain a complete thought. You probably mean that there are other pressing environmental...

Writing Feedbacktrangntt255 - Jun 15, 2021 / niesaysi - Jun 16, 2021
Most people try to balance between work and other parts of theirs lives.

2 - Avoid using a cut and paste of the original prompt reference. This is not good for your LR...

Writing Feedbackkhanhthu292002 - Jun 15, 2021 / Holt - Jun 16, 2021
The graph depicts the percentage of four different materials recycled over the period of 28 years

2 - Incomplete image identifier. What type of graph? Review and memorize the differences. Your first trending sentence should...

Writing FeedbackNalanguyen - Jun 15, 2021 / Holt - Jun 16, 2021
Harder to study at school.

2 - [quote=YeuRosie19]I believe that some solutions can be carefully considered to tackle with it.[/quote] The first part of this sentence...

Writing FeedbackYeuRosie19 - Jun 15, 2021 / Holt - Jun 16, 2021
Writing #1: The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010

2 - For clarity purposes, you must present the year coverage upfront. While the reference works as a time reference....

Writing Feedbackyiwenwen - Jun 15, 2021 / Holt - Jun 16, 2021
Children should be encouraged to play outdoors games that require physical activity?

3 - I try to focus in the first paragraph of your essay. (The) ... by the youngsters at...

Writing Feedbackphucnguyen0409 - Jun 14, 2021 / Ali20 - Jun 16, 2021
Focus on traditional classes more or practical subjects more?

NEW - Some people said that school should focus more on teaching practical subjects such as car maintenence or managing the...

Writing Feedbackphucnguyen0409 - Jun 15, 2021 / — -
Computers are believed to be smarter than humans by several scientists in no time

5 - You have an inaccuracy understanding the topic. Thus, i think you can change "On top of that" ==> "Moreover"...

Writing FeedbackVyvy201197 - Jun 11, 2021 / phucnguyen0409 - Jun 15, 2021
In many cities more and more people are living alone. Is this a positive or negative trend?

3 - There are some replacement needed: paraphrasing carefully about the question so you can have a better view and range...

Writing Feedbackcongbeo95 - Jun 14, 2021 / phucnguyen0409 - Jun 15, 2021
Task 1: Relationships at work with supervisors and companions (survey of workers 2005 and 2009)

2 - Relationships with whom? Refer to the groups in this section first then repeat later. This is...

Writing FeedbackSally_Dao - Jun 14, 2021 / Holt - Jun 15, 2021
Reasons why adults pursue education at their age and how their education costs should be allocated

2 - You missed the minimum word count by 4 words. The standard is 150 - 200 words, you wrote only...

Writing FeedbackLE THI QUYNH NHU - Jun 14, 2021 / Holt - Jun 15, 2021
The benefits of social skills and qualification skills to the company

2 - The phrase still refers to the original key phrase. LR scores are only increased by your alternate word...

Writing Feedbackthao van - Jun 14, 2021 / Holt - Jun 15, 2021
Popularity of fish and three kinds of meat including lamb, beef and chicken in a European country

2 - [ Make this sound more professional. You could say; "The line chart shows the comparative consumption..." to...

Writing FeedbackHarinn - Jun 14, 2021 / Holt - Jun 15, 2021
Learning about the past IELTS task 2

2 - There is no collosal issue being presented. Merely a difference of belieffs. You are trying to use a...

Writing FeedbackPaul16 - Jun 14, 2021 / Holt - Jun 15, 2021
A breakdown of male and female inhabitants passing the driving test in a particular Asian nation

2 - It would be better for your LR score ilt you use the phrase " in no particular Asian...

Writing Feedbackhuyenhoanglekhan - Jun 14, 2021 / Holt - Jun 15, 2021
Traditional newspapers are believed to hold the most vital position among news readers

3 - You just need to paraphrase the statement: Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers...

Writing Feedbackmorce183 - Jun 13, 2021 / niesaysi - Jun 14, 2021
Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? Any solutions?

5 - In this sentence, you have incorrectly restated the idea from the topic (Bullying is a big problem in...

Writing FeedbackMinh Hang Le - Jun 13, 2021 / niesaysi - Jun 14, 2021
WRITING TASK 1 : The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050

4 - "From 1950 to 2050" is different from "between 1950 and 2050." In other words, "between...and" and "from...to" should...

Writing Feedbackthanhtrang - Jun 10, 2021 / niesaysi - Jun 14, 2021
Some people argue job satisfaction is more important than job security.

3 - You should look over your essay because there are some basic mistakes like: "I tend towards the viewpoint...

Writing Feedbackmoe0 - Jun 12, 2021 / Paul16 - Jun 14, 2021
Many think that artificially intelligence robots will do all jobs eventually. Do you agree or not?

2 - This is an opinion essay. It is not an extent response writing task. Your answer is not in...

Writing Feedbacknam2662004 - Jun 13, 2021 / Holt - Jun 14, 2021
The budgets should be centered on illness prevention services by fostering a healthy lifestyle

2 - When you say"to a certain extent ", that indicates a limitation to your agreement. While saying " I...

Writing Feedbacknhinguyen2611 - Jun 13, 2021 / Holt - Jun 14, 2021
The bar chart compares the number of crimes in five different countries of the world (1930-1980)

2 - A properly analyzed task 1 essay must be completed within 20 minutes and between 175 - 200 words. Though...

Writing Feedbackreginaphalangee - Jun 13, 2021 / Holt - Jun 14, 2021
IELTS writing: the most common mistakes that students make when translating Vietnamese into English

2 - You should have included a clear reference to the fact that the info is based on collated opinion...

Writing Feedbackquynhhoang2k - Jun 12, 2021 / Holt - Jun 13, 2021
IELTS task 2: EDUCATION-TEACHERS (both views and opinion)

2 - You are the author right? Why are you referring to yourself in 3rd person when your opinion should...

Writing FeedbackPaul16 - Jun 12, 2021 / Holt - Jun 13, 2021
Should countries around the world establish close connections regarding culture and business?

2 - You need to better reference your restatement of the 2 ideas that were provided. Long sentences such as these...

Writing Feedbackimahunnn - Jun 12, 2021 / Holt - Jun 13, 2021
Write a paragraph (110 - 150 words) about what job would you like to choose in the future.

2 - You do not really prove that your father's occupation and your exposure to it influenced you to become a...

Writing Feedbacklck283 - Jun 12, 2021 / Holt - Jun 13, 2021
It is said that children are able to get their goals if they try their best to do it

2 - The first 2 sentences in your restatement paragraph do not reflect a version of the original. Rather, it is...

Writing FeedbackTrinh Mera - Jun 12, 2021 / Holt - Jun 13, 2021
People being monitored are often unaware that this is happening - what you think about this?

2 - No such word. The word is simply "unaware", specially when describing an ongoing action. Wrong word...

Writing Feedbackunknown vn - Jun 12, 2021 / Holt - Jun 13, 2021
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - SAVING ANIMAL SPECIES

4 - You are expressing an unclear opinion, you both agree and disagree. You should choose one side and explain with...

Writing Feedbackstevenlxag - Jun 11, 2021 / Paul16 - Jun 12, 2021

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