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Should same-sex marriage be legalized? Argumentative essay



HungHung 1 / -  
Sep 21, 2015   #1
Topic: Should same-sex marriage be legalized? (Argumentative essay)

Most people believe that they deserve the rights they are granted by the government. However, not all citizens are afforded equal rights. Most homosexual people are consistently denied the right to have a same-sex marriage even if they are also upstanding citizens. They are held at an unfair disadvantage solely because of their sexual orientation. This discrimination must stop because homosexual couples are law-abiding citizens too, who should be afforded the same rights as heterosexual couples. Personally, I totally agree that same-sex marriage should be legalized, because it turns a moral right into a civil right, it also decreases the divorce and suicide rates.

First, it can be clearly seen that the legalization of same-sex marriage will turn a moral right into a civil right. Same-sex couples have the right to the very same benefits that heterosexual couples enjoy, as homosexuals were also born by the way heterosexuals were born. In other words, they are both human. Legalizing same-sex marriage will help the relationship of homosexual people become more serious and responsible. Equally important, the legalization of same-sex marriage also has deep spiritual significance, it demonstrates that the society respects the dignity of all people and protects for all citizens. There is no doubt that all citizens pay their taxes, so they must have the same rights. Marriage is not the privilege of a group of people, everyone has the right to marry voluntarily. Therefore, heterosexuals have the right to be married, then there is no reason that homosexuals do not have the right to get married in a legal way. Moreover, today's concerns regarding same-sex marriage are the same in that no government has the right to deny marriage between two individuals who do care and love each other. Homosexual couples' freedom is absolutely broken because they are incapable of marrying the one they truly love (Ten reasons why gay marriage should be legalized, 2014). To protect that freedom, America's government official allowed same-sex marriage on 27th June 2015. "Today is a big step in our march toward equality. Gay and lesbian couples now have the right to marry, just like anyone else...America should be very proud" President Barack Obama stated . The official acceptance of same-sex marriage in the United States has created gigantic hope for homosexual people all over the world that there will be a day they can marry to the one they love in their own country. In conclusion, the legalization of same-sex marriage of the American Government in particular and of the whole humanity in general will turn a moral right into a civil right.

Furthermore, it is apparent that the divorce and suicide rates will decrease if same-sex marriage is legalized. Love is the most important matter in any marriage (Gay marriage. Why it should be legalized, 2014). As a result, allowing homosexuals the opportunity to get married will increase marriage rate because less couples will get divorced due to incompatibility or infertility. In other words, legalizing same-sex marriage will decrease divorce rate because it cannot get any worse than it is right now. For example, Massachusetts - the state has legalized same-sex marriage in 2004, has decreased 20% the divorce rate and became the state which had lowest divorce rate in the United States. In addition, giving homosexual people a chance to get married will also decrease the suicide rate. Teenagers are commit suicide are due to they being bullied at their school as a result of their sexual orientation. Legalizing same-sex marriage will show them that homosexuality is accepted and respected in society. In other words, this legalization will explain to younger generation that being different is not a social disability, so that they will never feel the need to take their own lives because they are homosexual. For instance, the lasted statistic of the U.S. Census Bureau showed that the LGB teenagers in the family which has high rejection are easy to suicide 8.4 times than LGT peers come from the family which has low rejection. The study also showed that half of all students who have experienced homophobic bullying have thought about killing themselves. Unfortunately, 20% have tried to, suggesting that homosexual youngsters are three times more likely to attempt suicide than other teenagers (Trevor, 2013). Thus, homosexual people also have the right to marry the person they really love. Moreover, the homosexuals as well as their love all need the acceptance and respect from society. Consequently, the legalization of same-sex marriage will diminish the divorce and suicide rates.

Those who disapprove of the same-sex marriage may argue that same-sex couples are unable to procreate. However, it has been investigated that there are more children are adopted in the country which has legalized the same-sex marriage (Top 10 reasons why gay marriage should be legal, 2014). Most adoption agencies discriminate against same-sex couples and make it incredibly difficult for them to adopt children. Many agencies will only release children to "married" couples, therefore rejecting stable, loving, homosexual parents. By legalizing homosexual marriages, adoption agencies will be forced to grant the same respect and right to homosexual couples. Same-sex marriage will increase the chances for thousands of foster children to gain loving parents and families. Moreover, procreation has never been required for marriage, so the premise that marriage is for procreation is wrong - or at least incomplete. Sterile couples, old couples, and couples who simply don't want to procreate are all allowed to marry. Nobody objects to their marriages, so nobody should on this ground object to same-sex marriages. In other words, the true meaning of marriages is to create a happy environment for everyone, not create an environment just for procreation. Another objection to same-sex marriage is that the traditional marriage is sacred institutions which foster the common good of society. Accordingly, the alteration of the traditional views on marriage may weaken the institution and lead to polygamy, even interspecies marriages. On the other hand, same-sex marriage will never affect to the traditional marriage, they can totally exist together (TFP Student Action, 2009). From a purely biological standpoint, heterosexual monogamy can be seen as unnatural when we consider the common occurrence of polyamorous societies, communal child-rearing and the like throughout history and evolution. Nowadays, our modern society allows people who barely know each other to get married and separate only a few months later. Which is more likely to weaken the institution of marriage - a male and female couple with this flippant attitude or two members of the LGBT community who are willing to take the risk of judgment and discrimination, simply to fight for the recognition of their relationship? To sum up, legalizing homosexual marriages will increase a large number of children adopted successfully and same-sex marriage will never threaten traditional marriage, they can coexist side by side.

In conclusion, same-sex marriage should be legalized because of many reasons: turning a moral right into a civil right and decreasing not only the divorce but also the suicide rate. Although some people believed that homosexual marriage is harmful and must be opposed, examining the good sides of legalizing same-sex marriage proves otherwise. The acceptance for homosexual marriage will increase amount of children successfully adopted. And there is no negative effect when same-sex marriage is legalized. Heterosexuals have the right to love and marry to the love they love, so do homosexuals, the reason is that they are both human.

P.S. Please help me check this argumentative essay. Is there any mistakes? Is it well-structured?
Thank you very much !!! :"3


vangiespen - / 4077  
Sep 21, 2015   #2
There is an imbalance in the way that you argued this essay Hung. When you write an argumentative essay, you have to follow a specific format. For example, for every pro discussion, there is a con discussion. All of your arguments point towards your strong support for the legalization of same sex marriage. In order to properly balance your line of reasoning, you should have ensured a discussion of the supporting and opposing side of each argument that you presented. By doing that, you allow the reader to come to his own conclusion regarding the matter based upon the information you provided.

For example, you mentioned that legalizing same-sex marriage will lessen the divorce and suicide rate. The evidence that you presented supports your discussion. However, there is a sector of society that believes that same-sex marriage increases the possibility of divorce and suicide for a number of reasons. You can research the information I am about to give you. With regards to divorce, allowing same-sex marriage often dissolves the traditional marriage that couples have. If one partner is gay and involved in a heterosexual family, legalizing same-sex marriage means that the gay partner can get out of the marriage through divorce and then marry his or her partner. This has a negative effect on the children from the straight marriage, sometimes resulting in the suicide of the child or children. There are psychological factors to consider so your discussion now becomes flawed. The only remedy will be to ensure that you accurately represent the supporting and opposing side of each argument.

I also need to point out that you cannot end your essay with a question. While you did present a concluding paragraph after the question, you left the reader hanging. Expecting you, as the writer, to give additional information prior to the wrap up statement. Rather than presenting the sentence as a question, you should re-frame it to sound like an opinion or a statement instead. You can only pose a question within an argumentative essay provided you plan to present some sort of response to it within the accompanying or immediately succeeding paragraph.


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