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The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.



mrabbas 2 / -  
Aug 6, 2013   #1
The charts compare changes in the share of sources of energy in United States in two different decades . Generally , while tow experienced rises , there were declines in the two .

According to the diagrams , oil accounted for the most significant proportion in 1980 ( 42 % ) while it had a considerable decrease ( 9 % ) over 10 years . The contribution of natural gas approximately remained constant ( only 1 % ) as well as hydroelectric power at an insignificant { humble } level . Whereas nuclear power had a substantial growth which doubled from 5 % to 10 % .There was a 5 % rise in coal contribution , which climbed 22 % to 27 % .

Overall , oil contributed the largest proportion of source of energy throughout the survey , however hydroelectric power had the smallest share .
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My friends this essay is too short but i want to know about grammatical mistakes . Thanks all .


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Pahan 1 / 1824  
Aug 6, 2013   #2
in United States

in the United States

The charts compare changes in the share of sources of energy in United States in two different decades .

.... The two words I have highlighted tend to give a different impression about the charts. For me, I think that each pie chart shows the energy source used by each year. So, together they present a comparison. You better rephrase this sentence to give a clear idea to the reader about what these pie charts present. Also, it is good to mention the type of chart too;

The two pie charts illustrate the percentage usage of energy sources in the United State in 1980 and 1990 respectively.


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