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"the biggest problems blue-collar Americans face" - Thesis statement



bela 1 / 1  
May 13, 2010   #1
I will analyze one of the biggest problems blue-collar Americans face; having to work multiple minimum wage jobs for low wages. I will go into greater detail and focus on the underlying root of the problem, the numerous effects the problem has on the person and the people around him/her and conclude by finding a solution

Above is my thesis for the book Nickel and DImed by Ehrenreich and I have to analyze impact working multiple min.wage jobs has on a family and focus on cause/effects, and offer solutions and my perspective on the issue

Is my thesis good? PleasE comment thanks

Mizo Metallic 2 / 7  
May 14, 2010   #2
well, your thesis sentence is pretty well; but, from my pont of view, you have to create more suspense or get the reader's attraction to continue reading your essay here are the correction.

I will analyze one of the biggest problems blue-collar Americans face (say your topic essay).(delete it) I will go into greater detail ( add S) and focus on the underlying root of the problem, the numerous effects the problem has on the person and the people around him/her and conclude by finding a solution, I agree or do not agree without hesitation that ....

hope it works for you
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
May 15, 2010   #3
If the thesis refers directly to the book by Ehrenreich, it will be unique, because it will establish his work as a theme for yours. So, I think you should write a thesis that mentions his book and your unique point that you want to make about it.

I really think you should just write several paragraphs (be sure to begin each para with a topic sentence) to see what is going on in your own mind. Remember, one para = one idea (i.e. expressed in the topic sentence,, supported with an example.

Let each para be about 100 words, with 4 or 5 sentences.

After rereading his book, and reading some related articles, write a few paragraphs, and then look at the direction you seem to be taking. Write a thesis that says something about what YOU think about what Ehrenreich says about this issue and what other people say. Use a unique theme.
OP bela 1 / 1  
May 15, 2010   #4
Mizo Metallic
Thanks
icemaster2340 14 / 34  
May 15, 2010   #5
Depends on how formal the essay has to be... my teacher does not like me to use I in any part of the paper, but then again, different teachers have different standards and expectations.


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