How's this for an intro? A THOUSAND SPLENDID SUNS!

Injustice towards women has been a prevalent issue all throughout history. Although it may seem as if this issue has gone away, it is still predominant all over the world. In the book, A Thousand Splendid Suns, Khaled Hosseini shows how poorly women were treated in war-torn Afghanistan. The major issues in this book are the abuse that Mariam and Laila face, the neglect Aziza faces, and Mariam's execution.

Mariam and Laila are abused throughout the whole book. Rasheed starts abusing Mariam when he finds out that she can not have a child.

Hi,
It's a great intro! I am from India and am very passionate about fighting against the injustice women face here, both at a personal, and societal level.

I think this sentence could be reworded: The major issues in this book are the abuse that Mariam and Laila face, the neglect Aziza faces, and Mariam's execution.

I think that it is a parallelism error( I may be wrong)
A better version would be

The major issues in this book are the abuse that Mariam and Laila face, the neglect that Aziza faces, and the execution of Mariam's execution.

I don't think there are any other problems with it. I had to read "Although it may seem as if this issue has gone away, it is still predominant all over the world" again, it's right but I was a little confused for a second( could be just me)