"What's In a Name? Ask this Traveler" by Diana Abu-Jaber - Summary--Response

English is my second language i need clarrification on this before i start writing .Your help appreciated.Thank you
I make the introduction and outline so that i can start writing.

ESSAY
In "What's In a Name? Ask this Traveler" by Diana Abu-Jaber opposes an international airport security must stop the unnecessary and inappropriate actions on innocent Americans. In her telling she got unpleasant experience as the result of her Arabic sounding name. In her journey to another nation she has been questioned and continually stopped every time she attempts to reenter the United States. Also Diana Abu-Jaber mistreated badly by security officers at the airport. "Abu-Jaber" is the name she grew up with. Even though her friends suggested to her to change it, she insisted on keeping it. I agree with her idea that citizens like her should not suffered whenever they enter an airport and wants to keep her name.

One reason I agree with Diana Abu-Jaber one should not treated unequally as the result of his/her Arabic sound name.

Another reason I agree with the idea of concerning how to live together.

Also I agree about keeping her name.

All in all Diana Abu-Jaber has been stopped repeatedly as the result of her Arabic sounding name.

Hi,

Im very pleased to read this. I totally agree with you the Diana shouldnt be judged based on her name. Im arabic myself and so i agree with what u are trying to portray. I think what u need to do is though organize ur ideas more clearly and give three main points. Your points are good but they need to be more specific and also u need to be clear on what u are trying to prove. Please help me with mine as well :)

Perfect points! Just a little bit of wondering.

Do you think the first one and the second one are actually similar to each other? how abt u combining them into one big point and saying sth like only after we get rid of the discrimination/everyone is treated equally even though you have an Arabic name, the world will then become a harmonious place where ppl living happily together or sth? The ideas of how to develop this thought is not clear yet in my mind, but definitely it is just my recommendation and it's totally up to you to take it or not.

Anyway, I think you have a fantastic intro and very creative argument to prove ur point!

HBUUI1991 can u help me with mine if thats okay