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Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
"Attending twelve different schools in six different countries is a thrilling life experience that has greatly contributed to what I have set to be my utmost dream, owning a leading engineering company in the world of renewable energy. My mother is a housewife who has devoted her life to take care of our family, whereas my father is a Project Manager in Saudi Aramco, world's largest oil supply company. Due to my father's project assignments, my family has to travel and live in various countries around the world. Depending on how one looks at my life experience, one would consider it an extraordinary opportunity that I should give it my best to benefit from, whilst another would consider it as hectic life that may jeopardize my chances of getting the essential education for a promising career.
First thing that comes up to most people's mind when they first hear about my life-story is that it must be a challenging experience to live. This is surely undeniable. A simple example resembling the hardship of the constant movement is not how to start friendships, but how to keep those friendships alive and vivid after saying "goodbye" and moving to the next country. During summer of 2010, while participating in a summer program held in Oxford University, I was delighted to meet two of my old friends who I have met in an International school in Norway, in 2008. All what it takes to be remembered by your friends who came from the dearest environment is just some enjoyable time and effort spent in contacting them from time to time and this, in my humble opinion, is a skill that I have proudly fulfilled that would definitely help me in achieving my dreams.
Yet, another hardship that I have continuously faced is how to adapt to living in a new country with its unique atmosphere, customs and culture, and more importantly is how to adapt in following a new education system in another school. The educational progress with various academic systems, however, is what has always been my and my parent's central point of concern. It is true I have mostly attended international schools; however each school is influenced by the country's native education system. Thus, every decision my parents and I have taken had dramatic impacts directly on me. For example, it affects my chances of receiving quality education, consistent school grades, later submitted to the colleges, and finally my overall future. Familiarizing myself with rich variety of international schools forced me to persistently challenge myself in becoming accustomed to numerous ways of teaching, thus gaining knowledge of how excel accordingly.
Moreover, coming from an Arabic society, I have frequently received comments on how "Close-minded" the Arab people are. I truly believe, however, after all what I have been through that I am an individual who was offered and, in return, accepted this exceptional opportunity to gain an overseas understanding that contributed to my awareness and acceptance of different lifestyles, cultures, customs, belief, etc.
Honestly, I have occasionally surrendered to the hardships of my life and doubted the pros of route I have taken, but now that I am about to start a new academic adventure, I would always remember these twelve years of my life. Starting my undergraduate education in a highly ranked college is the new step in achieving my utmost dream, owning an engineering company that would accomplish the impossible using renewable energy."
One last thing, please tell me what are the best sentences to cut. I'm exceeding the word count.
Firstly,
"Attending twelve different schools in six different countries is a thrilling life experience that has greatly contributed to what I have set to be my utmost dream, owning a leading engineering company in the world of renewable energy."
Why attending different schools leads you to want to set up the dream of an owning a company?
Also, I think the beginning of second paragraph is a little prolixity:
"First thing that comes up to most people's mind when they first hear about my life-story is that it must be a challenging experience to live. This is surely undeniable."
I am a not native English speaker, the above things are just for advices. :)
