Writing a paper on two short stories (Greasy Lake / Where are you going where you..)

Here my intro essay, just need correction and feedback, its due apprx. in 7hours the quicker the better please

Introduction
Coming of age signifies a growth in a person self, he or she will experience a pivotal moment that will shape their character and show a realization of what they really are. The two stories that illustrate both concepts are Greasy Lake by T. Coraghessan and Where Are You Going Where Have You Been by Joyce Carol Oates. Greasy lake represents three young men on road to maturity, along the way they make a number of mistakes and must suffer the consequences. On the other hand, the author Joyce Carol Oates demonstrates a young woman who's also on the road maturity but focuses on self-discovering. Her character represents a clueless innocent girl who lives in the present but has no sense of future consequences, which entails the storyline. In both stories, foreshadows and characterization were among the elements of fiction used by both authors to show that their action will catch up to them through consequences. In all things considered we can begin to depict a connection between these two short stories that in coming of age when discovering self-identify, one must go a revelatory experience or obstacles that shapes there future behavior.

Coming of age signifies a growth in a person'sselfidentity.It is the time when he or she will experience a pivotal moment that will shape their character and showlead to a realization of what they really are. The two stories that illustrate both concepts are Greasy Lake by T. Coraghessan and Where Are You Going Where Have You Been by Joyce Carol Oates. Greasy lake represents three young men on road to maturity, and along the way they make a number of mistakes and must suffer the consequences. On the other hand, the author Joyce Carol Oates demonstrates a young woman who is also on the road to maturity but focuses on self-discovery . Her character represents a clueless, innocent girl who lives in the present, but has no sense of future consequences, which entails (deepens?) the storyline. In both stories, foreshadowing and characterization were among the elements of fiction used by both authors to show that theirall actions will catch up to them throughresult in consequences. In all thingsConsidering these aspects , we can begin to depic t a connection develops between these two short stories; that in coming of age whenand discovering self-identify, one must go through a revelatory experience or obstacles that shape there future behavior.

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