Should animals be kept in cages? (Essay plan)

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Para 1
A cage is an enclosure used to confine or protect something. People nowadays keep animals in cages for entertainment and profit purposes. Some people say that caging the animals is a money-making gimmick and it is unethical as it deprives them of their freedom. However, there are other reasons, such as the importance of preserving the species to ensure it does not go into extinction, giving people a chance to appreciate wildlife that is impossible to find in a modern, commercialized city and protecting the human population from any threats caused by dangerous animals.

Para 2
-Keeping animals in cages increase the chances that they do not go into extinction.
- Gives future generations the chance to enjoy these wildlifes too.
-Captive breeding for most animals, except for those that cannot survive in captivity, increases their population size.
-Many skeptics criticize that keeping animals in enclosures cause them to lose their natural instinct. Hence lose their ability to hunt for food and die from starvation

-But if they were to remain in the wild, there is a high chance that they would not survive. Eg. Global warming, change in climate-floods, droughts. Unable to adapt to the sudden change of environment.

-They would also be protected from illegal poachers who hunt animals for their body parts
-eg rhinoceros horn used in traditional Chinese medicine

Para 3
- People can also learn more about wildlife creatures that cannot be found in their country and gain knowledge about their plight.
- People can also learn more about these wildlife creatures and gain knowledge about their plight.
-eg Singapore Zoo entertains visitors with animal shows which carry an educational message that it is important to protect these animals.
-People may be more cautious of their actions in the future.
- These animals, in the meantime, get all their basic necessities, from food to shelter and even medical checkups, improving their standard of living.
-Besides, zookeepers are employed to cater to the needs of these animals, creating employment in the process.

Para 4
-Some animals that invade into human settlements pose a threat, thus there is a need to keep these animals in cages to prevent any problems in the future.

-For example, there was a case in the Malaysia that a reticulated python slithered into a house and consumed an infant.
- This shows that such animals should be caged as they are life-threatening creatures.
-Many argue that caging up the animal deprives the animal of freedom and considered as a form of torture. Instead, they should be released back to the wild. However, they may come back without any warning, taking victims by surprise.

Para 5
In conclusion, there is a need to keep animals in cages so as to save their species from extinction, give people a chance to appreciate wildlife and protect humans from animal threats. I feel that animals should be caged for meaningful purposes and not solely for money or cruel intentions. Animals are also living things, thus we must learn to respect and sympathize with them.

Good job, whmcheryl. Your plan is very succinct and clear. I like it.

But perhaps you want look at both sides of the problem.

There are also a few problems which are brought about by keeping animals in cage. For example, as you say,


However, keeping them in cages, at the same time, deprives the animals from its natural habitats. And it leads to many serious consequences. For ex, the animal losses its natural instinct or becomes weaker and more vulnerable to diseases.

And perhaps, you want to add in some suggestion. For example, instead of keeping them in the cages, we should keep them in a huge safari which provides a similar environment to their natural habitat. And there, different types of animals can interact with one and another.

All the best to your essay.

Thanks so much for your suggestion :)

It seems very good, but could you tell me if it is argumentative essay is going to be or what?? :)

I think that you should also state another choice for protecting the animal is make a nature reserve but it's cons maybe costing too much to build!

This is the weak part. Do not state the obvious unless you are going to make an interesting observation about it.

Look at all the points you make and identify the THEME that underlies them all. Your MAIN IDEA is made up of all those points. Can you say your main idea in a single sentence?

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