Please help me see if any improvements can be done. Thank you! :)
Para 1
A cage is an enclosure used to confine or protect something. People nowadays keep animals in cages for entertainment and profit purposes. Some people say that caging the animals is a money-making gimmick and it is unethical as it deprives them of their freedom. However, there are other reasons, such as the importance of preserving the species to ensure it does not go into extinction, giving people a chance to appreciate wildlife that is impossible to find in a modern, commercialized city and protecting the human population from any threats caused by dangerous animals.
Para 2
-Keeping animals in cages increase the chances that they do not go into extinction.
- Gives future generations the chance to enjoy these wildlifes too.
-Captive breeding for most animals, except for those that cannot survive in captivity, increases their population size.
-Many skeptics criticize that keeping animals in enclosures cause them to lose their natural instinct. Hence lose their ability to hunt for food and die from starvation
-But if they were to remain in the wild, there is a high chance that they would not survive. Eg. Global warming, change in climate-floods, droughts. Unable to adapt to the sudden change of environment.
-They would also be protected from illegal poachers who hunt animals for their body parts
-eg rhinoceros horn used in traditional Chinese medicine
Para 3
- People can also learn more about wildlife creatures that cannot be found in their country and gain knowledge about their plight.
- People can also learn more about these wildlife creatures and gain knowledge about their plight.
-eg Singapore Zoo entertains visitors with animal shows which carry an educational message that it is important to protect these animals.
-People may be more cautious of their actions in the future.
- These animals, in the meantime, get all their basic necessities, from food to shelter and even medical checkups, improving their standard of living.
-Besides, zookeepers are employed to cater to the needs of these animals, creating employment in the process.
Para 4
-Some animals that invade into human settlements pose a threat, thus there is a need to keep these animals in cages to prevent any problems in the future.
-For example, there was a case in the Malaysia that a reticulated python slithered into a house and consumed an infant.
- This shows that such animals should be caged as they are life-threatening creatures.
-Many argue that caging up the animal deprives the animal of freedom and considered as a form of torture. Instead, they should be released back to the wild. However, they may come back without any warning, taking victims by surprise.
Para 5
In conclusion, there is a need to keep animals in cages so as to save their species from extinction, give people a chance to appreciate wildlife and protect humans from animal threats. I feel that animals should be caged for meaningful purposes and not solely for money or cruel intentions. Animals are also living things, thus we must learn to respect and sympathize with them.
Para 1
A cage is an enclosure used to confine or protect something. People nowadays keep animals in cages for entertainment and profit purposes. Some people say that caging the animals is a money-making gimmick and it is unethical as it deprives them of their freedom. However, there are other reasons, such as the importance of preserving the species to ensure it does not go into extinction, giving people a chance to appreciate wildlife that is impossible to find in a modern, commercialized city and protecting the human population from any threats caused by dangerous animals.
Para 2
-Keeping animals in cages increase the chances that they do not go into extinction.
- Gives future generations the chance to enjoy these wildlifes too.
-Captive breeding for most animals, except for those that cannot survive in captivity, increases their population size.
-Many skeptics criticize that keeping animals in enclosures cause them to lose their natural instinct. Hence lose their ability to hunt for food and die from starvation
-But if they were to remain in the wild, there is a high chance that they would not survive. Eg. Global warming, change in climate-floods, droughts. Unable to adapt to the sudden change of environment.
-They would also be protected from illegal poachers who hunt animals for their body parts
-eg rhinoceros horn used in traditional Chinese medicine
Para 3
- People can also learn more about wildlife creatures that cannot be found in their country and gain knowledge about their plight.
- People can also learn more about these wildlife creatures and gain knowledge about their plight.
-eg Singapore Zoo entertains visitors with animal shows which carry an educational message that it is important to protect these animals.
-People may be more cautious of their actions in the future.
- These animals, in the meantime, get all their basic necessities, from food to shelter and even medical checkups, improving their standard of living.
-Besides, zookeepers are employed to cater to the needs of these animals, creating employment in the process.
Para 4
-Some animals that invade into human settlements pose a threat, thus there is a need to keep these animals in cages to prevent any problems in the future.
-For example, there was a case in the Malaysia that a reticulated python slithered into a house and consumed an infant.
- This shows that such animals should be caged as they are life-threatening creatures.
-Many argue that caging up the animal deprives the animal of freedom and considered as a form of torture. Instead, they should be released back to the wild. However, they may come back without any warning, taking victims by surprise.
Para 5
In conclusion, there is a need to keep animals in cages so as to save their species from extinction, give people a chance to appreciate wildlife and protect humans from animal threats. I feel that animals should be caged for meaningful purposes and not solely for money or cruel intentions. Animals are also living things, thus we must learn to respect and sympathize with them.
