(about the book Boy's life) - Help with Analytical thesis statement

hello! I am writing a thesis statment for an analytical essay about the book Boy's life. I am talking mainly about a chapter in the book were the boys take flight(imagination). I am also comparing the thougts of "how to read literature like a professor", which talks about what flying means in stories. Here is what i have so far:

From an eleven year olds view, the thought of taking flight is mere imagination, but in the eyes of an author the logic is a breakthough in finding oneself by freedom of opinion. This representation is illustrated [ in Boy's Life] in the development of everything that is thought to be freeing.

My problems are that 1. Do I answer the question: Why does it matter? and 2. how can I add something about the second book into the thesis. Please help me out! Any advice is great!

It seems you are a wonderful writer though but it's habitual that no one's perfect and everyone needs help.I don't actually know whether I'll be able to do that but still I'll try with some of your mistakes.

From an eleven year old' s view, the thought of taking flight is mere imagination, but in the eyes of an author the logic is a breakthr ough in finding oneself by freedom of opinion.

In my opinion you do answer the question so don't worry and continue your wonderful writing!

For your 2nd thesis:
It is really important for one to read any book according to a professor.Since reading as a professor allows one to think like an author himself.To read like a professor it is needed to get the depth of every word as a professor does and to take the story or the theme as if been through one.

I really don't think the idea of the 2nd thesis may really help because I'm simply a beginner around here and you seem to be a great writer yourself, so just bear with me.

Thank you!