AP Literature; THESIS STATEMENT & Introduction

I had to write an essay to get into AP Literature last year Now I have to correct it this year
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THe topic was who was characterized more in a passage. Her is what I have written. HOw should I correct it if it even needs correcting.

Thanks

In the passage, Harriet Smith's physical features are expressed in detail and minute facets of Emma's appearance are stated. With careful reading however, Emma's character is described far more than Harriet's. Through characterization we get a good feel for both girls, but in two totally different ways. Emma is characterized through her own personal thoughts and opinions, which lead to a better overall understanding of who she is as a person. With Harriet, we are only introduced with her appearance, getting no insight into her personality. The language and condemning tone toward Emma clearly show her personality while with Harriet we only get to visualize her outer self

Greetings!

I think you've done a good job of pointing out the distinction between the two very different ways the women are characterized. I don't know what sort of word limit you might be working with, but if you have room, you might give just a brief quotation for both, demonstrating the difference, to further bolster your position. Usually, specifics are preferable to generalities, as a means of supporting a position.

I hope this is helpful!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com

Help with UC prompt #1: Lit major

don't know how to start. any suggestions? happy thanksgiving!

What's this, you need to explain why you want to major in literature? Literature is human thought codified in language, written symbols! It is more exciting than anything. I think you should take another look at some of your favorite literature, and write one rhythmic, flowing paragraph. Celebrate literature.

After than, write another beautiful paragraph about your professional aspirations.

Finally, conclude by somehow connecting your favorite literature with your professional aspirations.

Good luck!!

Kevin