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Undergrad Application Essay FIT "I could have never imagined"



lylreaganmac 4 / 8  
Sep 13, 2016   #1
So I am rewriting and starting from scratch for my Fashion Institute of Technology admissions essay and I need a good lead in sentence. I want to show my personality a bit and make it stand out. Again this is just the first sentence but I always struggle with the beginnings.

I could have never imagined that my plans for the rest of my life would flourish after discovering the Fashion Institute of Technology through a Pretty Little Liars episode.

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I could never have imagined that all of my plans for my future would do a 180 and flourish after watching a Pretty Little Liars episode.

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I could have never imagined that all of my plans for my future would be modified all because of one Pretty Little Liars episode.
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I could have never imagined that the fate of my future rested in the hands of the writers for the show Pretty Little Liars.

I am not sure which one is best but also I'm not sure if it is a bad choice. This is my first admissions essay and I'm not sure what is the best option.

TJLuschen - / 236  
Sep 13, 2016   #2
I like the last one best. Unfortunately I have no idea what Pretty Little Liars is or how it could relate to your career decision.


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