Artificial Neural Network ; SOP for PhD Chemical Engineering

Please give me your view on following SOP for the Ph D (Chemical Engg) admission
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Process equipment design is an important area in chemical engineering. Almost all manufacturing processes are not complete without a heat transfer operation. Heat is nothing but money. That's why saving heat is saving money. Most of the time design of heat transfer equipments is based on old empirical equations which are specific to operating conditions and geometry. These equipments have there own limitations which forces designer to consider factor of safety during design, this leads to overdesigning of equipment. Therefore there is large scope available in this area.

Over the period, I found that I can make progress in my academic career only if I could keep myself updated with advancement in chemical engineering. And this can be achieved only through research. This will also be helpful to my students as only updated teacher can make his student competitive in present world. Pursuing Ph.D. will not only help me but also increase the standards of my institute.

In present world computer is an integral part of the life. It helps us to progress at higher speed. Artificial Neural Network is one of the upcoming areas which can be applicable for almost all the fields. So I think integrating heat transfer with the area like Artificial Neural Network may give us beneficial future. Meanwhile I have designed the exchangers, evaporators for equipment manufacturing company using computer software and my own developed codes. I look forward positively for my contributions towards research in this field will bring some outcome that will help the society to progress.

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Almost all manufacturing processes are incomplete without a heat transfer operation.

Therefore there is large scope available in this area.

Over the course of time , I found that I could make progress in my academic career only if I could keep myself updated with advancement in chemical engineering.

And This can be achieved only through research.

Maybe change the order of the sentences, so they go in this order:
Artificial Neural Network is one of the upcoming areas which can be applicable for almost all the fields. So I think integrating heat transfer with the area like Artificial Neural Network may give us beneficial future.In the modern world computers play a crucial role in our lives by helping us to progress at a higher speed.

I think you should read about "topic sentences" on the internet and give one good, solid topic sentence to each of these paragraphs. A topic sentence should tell the reader what the paragraph is about. The topic sentence is the WHOLE paragraph expressed in a single sentence. Come up with a topic sentence for each paragraph.

Can you say something intriguing at the very beginning to capture attention?

How about mentioning the specific school to which you are applying?

I look forward positively for my to making a positive contribution to research in this field and hope to bring some outcome that will help the society to progress.

Thank you Kevin. definitely, I will implement your suggestions.