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|"Somewhere, something is waiting to be known" - Robotics MSC Degree application essay
3 - thank you for your review & advice ,I did change a lot of motivation letter. for the events &...
GraduateUplifter - Mar 11, 2018 / Uplifter - Mar 16, 2018
|Describing myself as a decent candidate for MSc in Artificial Intelligence
3 - Giuseppe, you over complicated what should have been a simple 5 paragraph letter to the admissions committee. There is...
Graduateneb - Mar 2, 2018 / Holt - Mar 7, 2018
|Application via uni track in KAIST for a master's degree in Computer Science. KGSP 2018 Study Plan
3 - Mary, thank you for the pointers they are of great help! I'll update my study plan accordingly....
Graduateradzxx - Feb 25, 2018 / radzxx - Mar 5, 2018
|KGSP study plan; There is a problem in my country I would like to help fix
GraduateTracy212 - Feb 13, 2018 / Tracy212 - Mar 1, 2018
|This masters' course is to make a successful career in Data Analytics - SOP
2 - Gayathri, paragraphs 2 and 5 are irrelevant to the essay. The history of data as indicated by your father...
GraduateGayathri B - Feb 25, 2018 / Holt - Feb 28, 2018
|What are your career goals and how will your advanced business degree help achieve these goals?
2 - Gina, since this is a career goal essay, I would not advise you to include a paragraph that discusses...
Graduateginnaa - Feb 24, 2018 / Holt - Feb 27, 2018
|SOP for Masters in Smart Grids and Building Technology - apply for French university
3 - STATEMENT OF PURPOSE I have been working in the field of energy efficiency and renewable energy for the...
Graduateyakshkumar16 - Feb 23, 2018 / yakshkumar16 - Feb 27, 2018
|Why should they choose me for KGSP 2018 ?
4 - "Korea is known for its spectacular rise from one of the poorest countries in the world to a developed...
Graduatekopure - Feb 14, 2018 / smtn22 - Feb 26, 2018
|The accounting and finance diploma at LSE stands out to me - reasons and motives
Graduateays1805 - Feb 21, 2018 / ays1805 - Feb 22, 2018
|My fascination towards data analytics. SOP for Masters in Business Analytics in UIOWA
Graduatevasanthgvk3 - Feb 16, 2018 / vasanthgvk3 - Feb 17, 2018
|My examination essay - what is your biggest mistake
3 - @Holt I just remembered. The topic presentation is 'what is your biggest mistakes and what did you learn...
Graduatemuisas - Feb 13, 2018 / muisas - Feb 14, 2018
|Ivey MSc Business Analytics - understanding of quantitative analysis tools and technical skills
2 - Funmi, your response to the prompt is too academic in approach and hence, does not have a real world...
GraduateKhristiie_xx - Feb 12, 2018 / Holt - Feb 13, 2018
|Personal statement for MSc in Advanced Security and Cybercrime; The need for cyber security expert
2 - Yahaya, here the thing. Your whole essay does not tell me anything about the development of your interest in...
Graduateyauwalu84 - Feb 12, 2018 / Holt - Feb 13, 2018
|My Western Ivey MSc Business Analytics Application Essay
3 - Thank you for your reply. The MSc is geared towards individuals with 0-2 years experience. I am currently in...
GraduateKhristiie_xx - Feb 11, 2018 / Khristiie_xx - Feb 12, 2018
|The more I studied in machine vision, the more fascinated I would be - Statement of Purpose
2 - Shayan, since this is a statement of purpose for a secondary masters degree, there is no need to dwell...
Graduateshayansh - Feb 9, 2018 / Holt - Feb 10, 2018
|MED SCHOOL PERSONAL STATEMENT INTRO
2 - Rebecca, I am not sure why you are asking other people to describe you in your personal statement. This...
Graduaterl623 - Feb 5, 2018 / Holt - Feb 7, 2018
|Why am I interested in Climate Science and Policy
2 - tree plantation While in working with incorporated touted --> you used two verbs, choose the most appropriate one or...
Graduatesam1982 - Feb 4, 2018 / zhayendzuji - Feb 5, 2018
|Experiential learning at Mays Business will enable me to make the most out of the program resources.
2 - Hi your first paragraph is more about your experience in teaching and less to do with tech. In my...
Graduateriser101 - Feb 4, 2018 / sam1982 - Feb 4, 2018
|The world of data. Statement of Intent for MS in Data Science program
4 - Hi! Since this is a statement of purpose I think you might missed the "purpose of taking the course...
Graduateutv - Jan 23, 2018 / kukas90 - Jan 29, 2018
|The impact of the Erasmus Mundus emPLANT master's scholarship in your home country
3 - BIsrat, you have presented very relevant information in relation to food insecurity in Eritrea.However, I am not sure what...
Graduatemeksebsium - Jan 29, 2018 / Holt - Jan 29, 2018
|My connections with chemicals - first draft for personal statement for masters in chemical review.
2 - Muhammad, your personal essay is not focused on the development of your interest in Chemistry in the proper manner....
Graduateblackhawk9112 - Jan 28, 2018 / Holt - Jan 28, 2018
|First SOP Draft Msc in CS. English is my 2nd language and change in background is making it hard.
2 - Balaganesh, this is a personal statement. So you cannot use this for a statement of purpose (SOP). The SOP...
GraduateGanzdoodle - Jan 28, 2018 / Holt - Jan 28, 2018
|'One of the best data science course' - SOP for MS in Data Science at Syracuse University
Graduateakshita_1102 - Jan 27, 2018 / akshita_1102 - Jan 27, 2018
|Need review on my application essay for Graduate admission in Architecture (Building Technology)
5 - @Holt Thank you so much for helping me with the structure. I'll make the necessary changes. As for the...
Graduatevalete - Jan 25, 2018 / valete - Jan 26, 2018
|Statement of Intent for Masters in Global Health
5 - Thank you so much! Your guidance has been very helpful. I will re-edit it again. However, I was slightly...
Graduatenaj12 - Dec 25, 2017 / naj12 - Jan 21, 2018
|Drug development and it's importance : A statement of interest in Msc. In pharmaceutical science
2 - Chisom, most of your essay is not responsive to the prompt requirements. There are some portions that you can...
GraduateChisomeboh - Jan 20, 2018 / Holt - Jan 21, 2018
|Statement of Purpose for Professional MSc in Big Data
2 - Adwait, your college academic presentation should not enumerate the classes that you took unless you excelled and received honors...
Graduateadwaitasathe - Jan 20, 2018 / Holt - Jan 20, 2018
|I envisage myself as a pioneer, an entrepreneur in the field of Mechatronics.
5 - @Holt This is a letter of Motivation For graduate school in Europe.I have drafted this by covering the points...
GraduateShekhar12 - Jan 19, 2018 / Shekhar12 - Jan 20, 2018
|Personal Statement for The OSCE Academy Application 2018 Programme: Politics and Security
GraduateEuterpe - Jan 17, 2018 / Euterpe - Jan 19, 2018
|SOP FOR MS GAME DEVELOPMENT FALL 2018
2 - HI Rutul, in relation to the university ranking, our forum is not in the habit of ranking universities, nor...
Graduaterutulmthakkar - Jan 18, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|Applying for the International Masters in Security, Intelligence and Strategic Studies
GraduatePienniuvynass - Jan 18, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|'Master in Economics at your distinguished university' - application essay
2 - Ray, what you have here is a statement of purpose. This is not a personal statement. A personal statement...
GraduateRayx - Jan 18, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|Reason for pursuing career in Occupational Therapy and why this school. Short Personal Statement
GraduateSummings - Jan 16, 2018 / Summings - Jan 17, 2018
|SOP for MA in Computational Social Science, University of Chicago
2 - Yun, you do not present a solid purpose for your line of study aside from an excitement and eagerness...
Graduategretadai - Jan 15, 2018 / Holt - Jan 15, 2018
|Applying for Korean Government Graduate Scholarship: A Meaningful Impact On East Asian Societies.
3 - @Holt Thank you very much! Regarding your comment on Professional experience, I forgot to mention my work at the...
Graduatesephiran17 - Jan 12, 2018 / sephiran17 - Jan 12, 2018
|Statement of purpose for Masters in Data Sciences at Columbia University
2 - Jayath, this is a personal statement, it is not a Statement of Purpose. You will have to write a...
Graduatejayath2016 - Jan 11, 2018 / Holt - Jan 12, 2018
|University of Ryerson's data science and analytics program - application essay
Graduatemeek0904 - Jan 11, 2018 / meek0904 - Jan 11, 2018
|Statement of Purpose - MS in Data Science University of Minnesota
GraduateDarthIra - Jan 10, 2018 / DarthIra - Jan 11, 2018
|Dominica - Home country benefit (scholarship essay); a career in Food Chain Systems
3 - @Holt Thanks much. Appreciate it. I Was really looking forward to some feed back how the proposed study...
Graduatelekisha - Jan 8, 2018 / lekisha - Jan 10, 2018
|Personal History Statement - University of California - Davis - Fall 2018
3 - Many thanks, @Holt. I would work on the essay based on your feedback. You've been very helpful....
Graduategoke - Jan 9, 2018 / goke - Jan 9, 2018
|My SOP/personal statement/achievements/interests for my postgraduate application
4 - Here is how I prepared it within the suggested structure and please I need your comments. Thanks in advance....
GraduateHiwi_Life - Jan 3, 2018 / Hiwi_Life - Jan 9, 2018
|Letter of Intent/Essay for DNP-FNP Admission!
2 - JG, you need to properly group your essay in the manner indicated by the prompt in order to create...
GraduateTellSaint - Jan 8, 2018 / Holt - Jan 9, 2018
|Personal Statement for Computational Mechanic Master Degree in Germany
2 - Regina, since you are applying for acceptance to study a masters degree course, there are two things irrelevant in...
Graduaterechar - Jan 8, 2018 / Holt - Jan 8, 2018
|ESSAY FOR ERASMUS MUNDUS REVIEWS AND SUGGESTIONS - MFAMILY MASTERS
2 - Smriti, this is an overly informative essay. I have to say that you have told an extremely compelling tale...
GraduateSmriti1111 - Jan 7, 2018 / Holt - Jan 8, 2018
|Help me revise my answers to the 5 questions asked by the UMSI（User Experience Program）
3 - Hi Mary, Thank you so much for the advice and examples. They inspire me a lot!! Actually, I also...
Graduaterobyroby - Jan 7, 2018 / robyroby - Jan 7, 2018
|My never-ending search for learning. Scad Graduate Admission Statement of Purpose
3 - Marcela, while this essay showcases your high regard and interest in your major, there is no real accomplishment to...
Graduatemarcelapinheiro - Jan 5, 2018 / Holt - Jan 6, 2018
|Pharmaceutical Master - Review for Scholarship Essays
3 - @Holt thank you very much for precious respond. Sorry I still didnt understand what do you mean by "prompt"...
Graduateyusufzaimh - Jan 4, 2018 / yusufzaimh - Jan 4, 2018
|The choice that I made to become successful: Personal Statement
GraduateHiwi_Life - Jan 1, 2018 / Hiwi_Life - Jan 2, 2018
|Statment of purpose for masters in public health - every person well being
Graduateoshoapollo - Jan 2, 2018 / oshoapollo - Jan 2, 2018
|Explain why I want to pursue a MS degree in Computational Finance - 1st half of personal statement
4 - @rinirini Thank you so much for your suggestions! They are very helpful. One thing is that, 'modeling' is...
Graduatemimimichelle - Jan 1, 2018 / mimimichelle - Jan 1, 2018
|Purpose statement for data science- past achievement, current and future plans.
Graduatedev1991 - Dec 30, 2017 / WileECoyote - Dec 31, 2017
|Short Term & Long Term Goals and Skill sets to achieve your target_Cambridge Essay
2 - Abhishek, it appears that you do not understand the prompt requirements. There are only 2 questions to be responded...
Graduateabhist12 - Dec 30, 2017 / Holt - Dec 30, 2017
|Personal statement for MSc in Computer Science, plans for the future
3 - Thanks @Holt. I am somehow confused about SOP, Personal statement, and motivation letter, I think I read something on...
Graduatealbarka00 - Dec 29, 2017 / albarka00 - Dec 30, 2017
|MIS Academic Statement from someone with professional experience - but no research experience
2 - Daniluk, your opening statement doesn't make sense. If you are using that as an example of the critical problems...
Graduateejd233 - Dec 28, 2017 / Holt - Dec 29, 2017
|Statement of Purpose - MPS Communication Design - Parsons School of Design
2 - Tseng, you need to summarize your background to only the pertinent information. This whole essay focused on your background...
Graduateemmyktt - Dec 28, 2017 / Holt - Dec 28, 2017
|My Personal statement to study MSc at Brunel University London
3 - Coming from a country that has limited academic possibilities, I desired to attend higher studies overseas, at a university...
GraduateHiwi_Life - Dec 25, 2017 / Hiwi_Life - Dec 27, 2017
|Do I really want to be a doctor? Draft Personal Statement for Med. School
2 - Supreeth , this essay is tremendously long and it tends to get boring because of the way that you...
Graduateprincesskitten - Dec 26, 2017 / Holt - Dec 26, 2017
|Motivation letter Master accounting and finance
3 - Holt, thank you so much for your helpful advices! I have just rewritten it, trying to follow your guidelines....
Graduatesarahsss - Dec 23, 2017 / sarahsss - Dec 24, 2017
|University of Waterloo - Masters - Why you chose this University?
3 - @Holt Thanks for the insight. I realized how "not-to-the-point" the essay. Here is the updated one. Waterloo has...
Graduateanshulkirti - Dec 18, 2017 / anshulkirti - Dec 20, 2017
|My motivation for attending the Embedded Computing Systems Programme
Graduatenelly12345 - Dec 10, 2017 / nelly12345 - Dec 18, 2017
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