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|Personal Statement - Master of Supply Chain Management for University of Melbourne
2 - Do not mix motivational factors into the personal statement as those are 2 different application essays. when one trees...
Graduaterasiana - 1 day ago / Holt - 16 hrs ago
|SOP in artificial intelligence, applying to COMMAS, Germany
GraduateHel_ppp87 - Jul 3, 2022 / Holt - Jul 4, 2022
|Describe three things others do not know about you
3 - @Holt Thank you for the feedback! This is an application essay. The first point was mainly about hobby of...
Graduatefinik - May 28, 2022 / finik - May 28, 2022
|STATEMENT OF PURPOSE IN ACCOUNTING - admission at Jiangsu University
2 - The statement is quite long and chatty. It provides more generalizations rather than specifics. The reviewer will be most...
GraduateEben45 - May 25, 2022 / Holt - May 26, 2022
|Statement of Purpose - Masters in Renewable energy
2 - The writer has provided a motivational letter rather than a statement of purpose. These 2 are often interchanged by...
Graduateeas333 - May 21, 2022 / Holt - May 21, 2022
|Latest career-related goals and study area for the scholarship
2 - Open with an impressive statement about the state of urban housing and development in your country. Focus on explaining...
GraduatePyangon - Apr 26, 2022 / Holt - Apr 26, 2022
|Personal Statement - Applied Computer Science at University of Gottingen (300 word limit)
2 - The reference to "an early age" could mean anytime from birth to puberty. It is a misleading term that...
Graduateanakin487514 - Apr 7, 2022 / Holt - Apr 8, 2022
|SoP MSc Finance & Private Equity core module at the London School of Economics and Political Science
3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback. I am not sure how to approach a concise 4 paragraph SOP. In...
Graduateismafeed - Apr 3, 2022 / ismafeed - Apr 4, 2022
|Personal Statement for MSc. Internet of Things and Data Analytics
2 - Remove certain aspects of this presentation that are misplaced. Information about work experience, among others, should be discussed in...
GraduateKellsnotnice - Mar 30, 2022 / Holt - Mar 31, 2022
|Software Engineering - statement of purpose
2 - While the program does not require work experience, some sort of related training or internship experience would help the...
Graduateabc_123 - Mar 28, 2022 / Holt - Mar 28, 2022
|Statement of purpose - I'm applying for master's in health informatics.
3 - @Holt Thanks for your feedback.. I really appreciate. I will look into your advice. Though, I will need your...
GraduateMoss95 - Mar 26, 2022 / Moss95 - Mar 27, 2022
|AAS Question About Human Resoursces needs
4 - Hai, I think it will be better to just directly state 'yes i will/not' in the first sentence of...
Graduatenurfaqihmuh - Mar 14, 2022 / lemonade97 - Mar 18, 2022
|Motivation Letter - Erasmus Mundus Joint Masters Degree - Master in Medical Imaging and Applications
2 - I can understand how, based on the application requirements, you will believe that you are highly qualified as an...
GraduateA_yousuf98 - Mar 6, 2022 / Holt - Mar 7, 2022
|Eager to learn more - GKS Personal Statement
2 - Sadly, the given personal statement does not meet the masters degree requirements for the application. This type of statement...
Graduatedpatld - Mar 6, 2022 / Holt - Mar 6, 2022
|STATEMENT OF PURPOSE FOR MSC IN PROCESS SYSTEMS DESIGN AND ENGINEERING
2 - Paragraphs 3,4,5, are the only usable paragraphs for a masters sop in this presentation. The revised version must focus...
Graduateronajiri - Mar 1, 2022 / Holt - Mar 2, 2022
|Global negotiation, business - goal of study and study plan for Korean university application
2 - The lack of proper gramamr usage on the part of the writer tends to create a confusing thesis presentation....
Graduatemnbvcxz0303 - Feb 20, 2022 / Holt - Feb 21, 2022
|Personal Statement for Rutgers University M.S. in Rehabilitation Counseling
2 - Based on the opening statement, you have provided the reasons why your interest in Rehab Counseling has grown into...
Graduaterachelying - Feb 13, 2022 / Holt - Feb 14, 2022
|Management and leadership - PERSONAL STATEMENT GKS GRADUATE - MBA
6 - Thank you @nitakajole I appreciate your feedback. @beestory thank you so much for your advices . I wish...
GraduateHiba21 - Jan 31, 2022 / Hiba21 - Feb 13, 2022
|International Relations_Personal Statement_GKS_GRADUATE
2 - This is an interesting personal statement but, it does not reflect the total personal statement considerations for the GKS...
Graduatesolmartinez - Feb 5, 2022 / Holt - Feb 5, 2022
|Essay to apply at University College Dublin for MSc Course
3 - @Holt Hey. Thank you for your feedbacks. I needed more clarity to what you mentioned. Do you want...
Graduatesanghaisahil3 - Jan 27, 2022 / sanghaisahil3 - Jan 27, 2022
|Subject Objective Aminef, Teaching English and Other Languages
2 - There is actually nothing unique about the subject objective of the applicant. The motivation (subject objective) is one among...
Graduateawenaries04 - Jan 24, 2022 / Holt - Jan 25, 2022
|SOP for mathematical finance - the master's level at Universiti Teknologi Brunei (UTB)
2 - To create an effective statement of purpose, the applicant must create a convincing academic and career driven reason for...
GraduateEmmydon - Jan 20, 2022 / Holt - Jan 20, 2022
|STATEMENT OF PURPOSE- MS STATISTICS FOR UNIVERSITIES IN USA
3 - @Holt I just completed by undergraduate studies and currently working as a graduate trainee so I don't have more...
GraduateXever - Jan 17, 2022 / Xever - Jan 17, 2022
|Aerospace Engineering Motivation for KTH - the master's program at the University of Pisa, Italy
2 - The first paragraph is a throw away. The introduction it provides does not move the essay forward and fails...
Graduatekescienku - Jan 16, 2022 / Holt - Jan 16, 2022
|SOP for SJPES program - UN's sustainable development goals
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your review. The deadline of this program was rescheduled to 15th Feb....
Graduatehn0x - Jan 11, 2022 / hn0x - Jan 14, 2022
|Development of energy-efficient devices - PTDF statement of purpose
2 - There is nothing in this essay that would be considered a response to the prompt requirements. Yes, I will...
Graduatejoshbj360 - Jan 12, 2022 / Holt - Jan 12, 2022
|European Master in Public health with a specialization in Advanced Biostatistics and Epidemiology
2 - The first paragraph should be completely removed. It sounds very amateurish. Almost as if you are applying to college...
Graduatexzibit - Jan 10, 2022 / Holt - Jan 11, 2022
|Motivation for science and engineering - SOP for GENIAL GrEen NetworkIng And cLoud computing program
3 - This essay is just a reflection of your experiences and lack the ability to motivate. kindly review and streamline...
Graduateadewale0630 - Jan 8, 2022 / Klexyking - Jan 8, 2022
|MS in Human Computer Interaction | Statement of Purpose
2 - It is difficult to say that you can use this essay across all the universities with little to no...
GraduateAnmolMishra20 - Jan 3, 2022 / Holt - Jan 4, 2022
|Personal Statement for GKS-G 2022 Scholarship for Masters in Spanish Language and Literature
2 - Name the title, publication date, and volume number so that the reviewer can exercise the option to verify...
GraduateRutujaM - Dec 29, 2021 / Holt - Dec 30, 2021
|Masters of Health Informatics U of Waterloo.
2 - Definitely a dramatic opening that sets up an exciting personal statement, only to be disappointed by the succeeding...
GraduateRas_Patrick - Dec 29, 2021 / Holt - Dec 29, 2021
|Letter Of Motivation - Master in Technical Management
Graduatelalitkumar - Dec 28, 2021 / lalitkumar - Dec 28, 2021
|Need review for my sop for MS in data science; The capacity to discriminate between what you know...
2 - This is a highly arrogant, condescending and irritating personal statement. If this is how you choose to present yourself...
GraduateSivasankar - Dec 25, 2021 / Holt - Dec 25, 2021
|Erasmus Mundus Masters in Central and East European, Russian and Eurasian Studies Personal Statement
3 - Last paragraph where you said that you want to study in Europe because of their political and economic action...
GraduateMeerimia1 - Dec 18, 2021 / monicaaa0017 - Dec 21, 2021
|Personal Statement - Digital Business Management
2 - Depending on the actual maximum word count as provided by university for this essay, the average personal statement should...
Graduateessaadia - Dec 20, 2021 / Holt - Dec 21, 2021
|Professional and cultural experiences shaped your career goals/ how this major will help to that
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for the review. i really appreciate it. Considering this is my first draft and...
Graduatesravyareddyk - Dec 14, 2021 / sravyareddyk - Dec 14, 2021
|"Review on SOP for MS-CS/MCS with work experiences in 2 different companies"
2 - This paragraph is only acceptable in a college application personal statement. It is not relevant to an MSc...
Graduatevaradsanpurkar - Dec 13, 2021 / Holt - Dec 13, 2021
|Warwick essay draft a brief (4,500 characters maximum) personal statement
2 - The mention of your parents as your first motivating factor requires more explanation and motivation development. What jobs do...
Graduatekentseng - Dec 11, 2021 / Holt - Dec 12, 2021
|Personal Statement for MSc Finance & Accounting in Westminster
Graduateleesol - Nov 24, 2021 / Mehul07 - Dec 10, 2021
|MSc Data Science UK - Personal Statement; What makes me an excellent candidate for this program?
Graduateshellhead - Dec 4, 2021 / Mehul07 - Dec 10, 2021
|MSc Business Analytics - Why are you an ideal candidate and how will the program help achieve goals?
2 - You appear to be a highly skilled candidate for your course of choice. However, these skills are over discussed...
GraduateMehul07 - Dec 8, 2021 / Holt - Dec 8, 2021
|Pharmacy (Medicinal Chemistry) - Personal Statement
2 - When you write a personal statement, do not focus on your academic background and community leadership. The personal statement,...
Graduatewhh123 - Dec 5, 2021 / Holt - Dec 6, 2021
|LoM - Argument of an engineering student applying for masters in global development policy - EMJMD
2 - Sadly, you have not developed a compelling argument because your presentation takes on a personal statement direction rather than...
GraduateSSS2022 - Dec 4, 2021 / Holt - Dec 5, 2021
|[NEED REVIEW] "I find Data Science fascinating" - Statement of Purpose for Master of Data Science
2 - What a lovely personal statement. Too bad it failed to contain any actual reference to the purpose for your...
GraduateKavan14 - Dec 3, 2021 / Holt - Dec 4, 2021
|[Need Review] Statement of Purpose - MS in Artificial Intelligence and Data Science (Summer 2022)
2 - Your statement of purpose feels over extended and needs to be whittled down to only 750-1000 words. It tends...
GraduateVJain - Dec 2, 2021 / Holt - Dec 2, 2021
|Motivation Statement for MS Game and Media Technology in Utrecht University
Graduateboringjill - Nov 26, 2021 / Holt - Nov 27, 2021
|STATEMENT OF PURPOSE for Vehicle Engineering
3 - Thanks for the review. I would take all your advices into consideration and arrange a better SOP. Regards....
Graduatelenjoy - Nov 4, 2021 / lenjoy - Nov 19, 2021
|Statement of Purpose - Parsons School of Design - MPS Communication Design - reasons for applying
2 - The main problem with this essay is the way it focuses a majority of the discussion on your background....
GraduateKotekSroka - Nov 15, 2021 / Holt - Nov 16, 2021
|Technology trend that may impact your target career. - MS Business Analytics Essay for CUNY.
2 - Based on the emerging trend, how do you see it affecting your current carell as an obstacle towards your...
GraduateKhushi123 - Nov 13, 2021 / Holt - Nov 14, 2021
|MOTIVATION STATEMENT FOR MASTER OF ART IN POPULATION STUDIES
2 - You have written this essay without any consideration for the readily available discussion guidelines for the motivational letter. There...
Graduatefkoomson - Nov 12, 2021 / Holt - Nov 13, 2021
|Personal Statement for MSc of Statistics and Data Science at University of KU Leuven
2 - The motivation of the writer got lost in translation. The presentation, with heavy editing, will work as a personal...
Graduatexmcmay - Nov 10, 2021 / Holt - Nov 11, 2021
|Apply MSc finance programme in Trinity College Dublin
NEW - Plz give me advices about my personal statements. ( limitation of 500 words, How can I rewrite some parts...
GraduateHogf - Nov 8, 2021 / — -
|Statement of Purpose for masters program in Computer Science in the USA - Review request
2 - The second paragraph should have a clearer purpose for your studies. The series of questions does not signify any...
Graduaterandom888 - Nov 7, 2021 / Holt - Nov 8, 2021
|Personal Statement for MSc in Data Science at University of Michigan
NEW - Hi everyone! For editing, content, and formatting needs please contact us at firstname.lastname@example.org. Thank you! EF Personal...
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|Review My SOP for PhD in Nuclear thermal hydraulics
GraduateNikesh - Oct 28, 2021 / Holt - Oct 29, 2021
|My passion for improving health and well-being. SOP FOR GLOBAL PUBLIC HEALTH
2 - This comes across.more as a cover or motivational letter. It does not contain the correct focus on the purpose...
GraduateDrfon - Oct 12, 2021 / Holt - Oct 13, 2021
|Personal Statement - MFA In Film Production (NYU, UCLA, Columbia)
NEW - Please refer to our private review services at email@example.com since you specific review specifications. Free review only covers general...
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|'The need to bridge the gaps in my skills' - Statement of Purpose review for MS in computer science
NEW - There is no specific prompt I am trying to answer. So this is a general statement of purpose. ...
Graduatenaeempatel010 - Oct 7, 2021 / — -
|Personal Statement for Postgraduate Study. University in United Kingdom (Development Studies)
2 - The personal statement should never be the biography of the student in any fform. Where a motivational statement is...
Graduateaktivasi - Sep 24, 2021 / Holt - Sep 26, 2021
|Statement of purpose - OSLOMET Norway- MS-Applied Computer and Information Technology
2 - Expand on this portion. Specifically, discuss academic accomplishments, related research work, and any other academic participation that will...
Graduateshroud - Sep 19, 2021 / Holt - Sep 21, 2021
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