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|PERSONAL STATEMENT FOR LSHTM - PUBLIC HEALTH - LSHTM
3 - @Maria Thank you so much!! I sincerely appreciate it. I did try to be concise, I will review it...
Graduatejhara121 - May 31, 2019 / jhara121 - May 31, 2019
|Personal narrative for SLP UOfC - Speech-Language Pathology
2 - @katy265did Hi there! Let me help you with your essay. A couple of key reminders: 1. Remember...
Graduatekaty265did - May 27, 2019 / Maria - May 27, 2019
|STATEMENT OF INTENT FOR GRADUATE STUDIES IN BIOMEDICAL ENGINEERING IN CANADA
GraduateCautiouswriter - May 25, 2019 / Cautiouswriter - May 26, 2019
|Statement of intent for MA in Education at University of Nottingham UK
2 - @Jegede Hi there! I've noticed that you're new to the forum. Welcome! I'll help you with your essay....
GraduateJegede - May 25, 2019 / Maria - May 25, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for applying to German University in Master of Data Science
2 - @guiaria Hi there! Let's work through your essay. First and foremost, I'm going to put down a few...
Graduateguiaria - May 15, 2019 / Maria - May 15, 2019
|Motivation letter for Application to Experimental Geoscience at The University of Bayreuth
2 - @Odunakintoye I appreciate the introductory portion of your essay where you made mention of your background. You have sufficiently...
GraduateOdunakintoye - May 13, 2019 / Maria - May 13, 2019
|Motivation for selecting a career in healthcare & interest in becoming an anesthesiologist assistant
Graduatepresent1079 - Apr 18, 2019 / present1079 - May 7, 2019
|" Computational Science and Engineering " - SOP for Ruhr Bochum University, Germany
3 - Can you please tell me specifically from where I should start rephrasing for Material Science Program SOP...
Graduatemdabir1203 - May 6, 2019 / mdabir1203 - May 6, 2019
|Media Industry - Essay for scholarship of Bournemouth University
Graduatelevanchi196 - May 3, 2019 / levanchi196 - May 4, 2019
|'great investment for my future' - Motivation Letter for MSc in Data Science
Graduatedreiframe - Apr 30, 2019 / dreiframe - May 2, 2019
|I'm looking forward to apply for the online masters in data science - SOP essay
2 - The structure of the essay is messy. The arrangement of the thoughts is quite inconclusive because there is seemingly...
Graduatefocuson - Apr 30, 2019 / Maria - Apr 30, 2019
|Statement Of Purpose (SOP) for industrial engineering (mtszfa) - to candidate for a Master's degree
4 - You mean that if i replace your proposed sentences instead of what it has been written, it will...
Graduatemtszfa - Apr 28, 2019 / mtszfa - Apr 30, 2019
|This essay is about letter of intent for my graduate studies in Canada - Masters in Education
2 - Your essay had a creative approach to showcasing your intention. Still, I would rather prefer that you try to...
GraduateNaz123 - Apr 26, 2019 / Maria - Apr 26, 2019
|The inevitable decision to be an artist. Graduate SOP for SCAD (Illustration)
2 - I appreciate the content, flow, and construction of your essay; it's immensely full of intimate anecdotes that will serve...
Graduatemsmith161 - Apr 23, 2019 / Maria - Apr 23, 2019
|SOP for Master of information / Computer Programming (Harvard online)
2 - In terms of content, I think that your essay is excellent. It has provided a comprehensive overview of your...
Graduateynynl - Apr 20, 2019 / Maria - Apr 20, 2019
|Check my SOP for Department of Material Science and Simulation at Ruhr-Universitaet Bochum
Graduatevishnumohan327 - Apr 16, 2019 / Maria - Apr 16, 2019
|Personal Statement for Medical School - My Scribing Experience
2 - Hello, I've read your writing and I find it quite interesting. You have mentioned some anecdotes to show how...
Graduatehdholaki - Apr 12, 2019 / cao1km - Apr 12, 2019
|Personal Statement for MSc in Data Science / Informatics School
3 - Thank you very much for your response. I agree with your suggestions. However, in case I proceed in...
Graduateredykt - Apr 11, 2019 / redykt - Apr 11, 2019
|Green Technology and Engineering - Help with my Personal statement
3 - @Ise_g I think that your essay's formatting is beautiful because of your usage of anecdotes. The more personalized an...
GraduateIse_g - Apr 5, 2019 / Maria - Apr 6, 2019
|MBA application Essay draft, the 'spikiest' pictures with the explanations.
3 - Thank you so much Maria! That is really helpful. I need watch out grammars. I will upload new one....
GraduateJolin lu - Mar 27, 2019 / Jolin lu - Mar 27, 2019
|Goal of study and study plan for Korean university application
4 - I think your essay is a little messy. I would recommend you add more life situations and reduce the...
Graduateitha20 - Mar 21, 2019 / IamIana - Mar 27, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for MSc in Data Science (Marketing Analysis)
2 - Pharyacha, There are a couple of things I want you to take note of. Academic reviewers will appreciate...
Graduatepharyacha - Mar 24, 2019 / Maria - Mar 24, 2019
|Letter of Motivation - MSc Economics Universitat Hamburg
2 - Inzzudinfarras, I suggest that you review basic grammar rules and punctuation. There were several slips in your essay....
GraduateIzzudinfarras - Mar 18, 2019 / Maria - Mar 22, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for M.Sc in Computer Science - Germany
2 - There are a few changes that are suggested in able to allow clarity to your application letter. In...
Graduatebsse0520 - Mar 20, 2019 / Constance - Mar 22, 2019
|Personal Application Statement of Msc electronic information engineering
2 - Since this is an academic paper, please remove such statements as "As a matter of fact" and "In the...
GraduateAirydisc - Mar 17, 2019 / Constance - Mar 22, 2019
|Study Plan for Canada Study Permit- MEng in Civil and Env Engineering.
2 - Yeu, I am afraid that this is not a valid study plan. You have only explained your extenuating circumstances...
Graduatedecimo1993 - Mar 16, 2019 / Holt - Mar 17, 2019
|MSc in Accounting and Finance - extended personal statement
Graduatenemo2020 - Mar 5, 2019 / nemo2020 - Mar 14, 2019
|SOP for Msc Business Analytics; improving systems to gather enormous amount of data
4 - @Holt Thanks a lot for your informative response. I was not aware of the difference between them. I wrote...
Graduatetomm3344 - Mar 8, 2019 / tomm3344 - Mar 11, 2019
|Better English teaching. What makes me eligible for the Fulbright Scholarship? Study objective essay
2 - Mohammed, what is your study objective title? Why are you writing a personal statement when what you should be...
GraduateHama1996 - Mar 7, 2019 / Holt - Mar 8, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for Business Informatics/Management Information Systems
2 - @lebronzey set this essay aside and use it as the basis of your personal statement when that requirement comes...
Graduatelebronzey - Mar 7, 2019 / Holt - Mar 8, 2019
|Pharmcas- Pharmacy school personal statement!
3 - The main thing that I find confusing here is that as a pharmacist, your mother was never in a...
Graduaterlawlgnskite - Feb 28, 2019 / Holt - Mar 1, 2019
|GKS 2019 personal statement, Culture and Tourism Contents
3 - Samara, it isn't about what you want to tell the reviewer, it's about what the reviewer needs to know...
Graduateshagharo - Feb 26, 2019 / Holt - Feb 26, 2019
|The need for representation of women in the Bahamas
5 - The examples of successful women will depend upon which sector of society you want to represent their participation in....
GraduateMickey242 - Feb 20, 2019 / Holt - Feb 22, 2019
|Difficult to be accepted into Physical Therapy. Personal Essay 2018-2019 PTCAS
Graduatesfrancois212 - Feb 20, 2019 / sfrancois212 - Feb 21, 2019
|Ideal balance between theory and practical application. Personal Statement - Business Analytics
3 - Jorgen, when considering what the content of a personal statement should be, a reviewer will find that this essay...
Graduatejhalmsli - Feb 17, 2019 / Holt - Feb 18, 2019
|My interest in Korea can be traced to the beginning of the years 2000s... (GKS 2019)
2 - Aline, there is no need to reference your family background as you did in this essay. That is not...
Graduateamesquita - Feb 16, 2019 / Holt - Feb 17, 2019
|The robust course curriculum offered. SOP for Master's in Business Analytics
2 - Roshini, you have to revise the statement of purpose to discuss how your college studies helped prepare you for...
GraduateRoshini - Feb 16, 2019 / Holt - Feb 17, 2019
|Texas A&M MS in Marketing - why study at Mays
4 - Shruti, I find that the statement that you wrote is not properly focused on a useful response. The most...
Graduateshrutishahh - Feb 15, 2019 / Holt - Feb 16, 2019
|Urban planning and real estate managemenet of Korea - KGSP/GKS personal statement
3 - @IamIana Tehre are specific discussion points for the GKS - G personal statement. Most of which are not represented...
GraduateIamIana - Feb 15, 2019 / Holt - Feb 16, 2019
|Motivation, plans and goals to make a breakthrough in construction industry and material science
Graduateafaf_93 - Feb 10, 2019 / abclaudya - Feb 11, 2019
|2nd Application Essay - Global MBA Program University of Hawaii
2 - The problem with your essay is that it is about an extra curricular activity. So there is a lack...
Graduatepjongko91 - Feb 8, 2019 / Holt - Feb 9, 2019
|KGSP Application - Part 2 (research goal - how can I contribute?)
7 - I think that since you mentioned that you have learned korean for three years its enough if you only...
Graduateeviand - Feb 2, 2019 / Jazzmin - Feb 8, 2019
|Civil Engineering - KGSP Application Goal of study & Study Plan
2 - Hessel, more than 90% of this essay is not geared towards the goal of study and study plan of...
Graduatehesseljw - Feb 6, 2019 / Holt - Feb 7, 2019
|Digital Triangle Team - Review my admission essay.
3 - Salah, the reviewer is looking for a more solid representation of your responsibility skills. Based on the discussion you...
GraduateBEBROS - Feb 6, 2019 / Holt - Feb 6, 2019
|1st Essay - Global MBA Program, Shidler College of Business (University of Hawaii at Manoa)
5 - Thanks for the detailed feedback. I will incorporate your observations into my second draft. Thanks again!...
Graduatepjongko91 - Feb 5, 2019 / pjongko91 - Feb 6, 2019
|KGSP-Graduate Personal Statement for Archaeology; Dead Men Do Tell Tales
Graduateggmax - Jan 27, 2019 / Jazzmin - Feb 5, 2019
|Chemistry Study - PERSONAL STATEMENT for scholarship
2 - I noticed that this essay is far longer than the average and expected length of a personal statement. A...
GraduateJazzmin - Feb 4, 2019 / Holt - Feb 5, 2019
|Data Science Masters - Columbia University Personal Statement
2 - Gautam, this is a very strong essay. I would call it highly competitive and should receive proper consideration from...
Graduategm1234 - Feb 2, 2019 / Holt - Feb 3, 2019
|An accountant - Statement of Purpose for applying Master
2 - Elen, while the first paragraph somewhat responds to one of the questions, the rest of the essay does not...
GraduateHeinna10 - Jan 31, 2019 / Holt - Feb 1, 2019
|Dual concentration in statistics and pure mathematics. Statement of Purpose for MS in Statistics
3 - @Holt Thanks so much for your response! Very helpful advice - I'm going to work on revising my statement...
Graduatehm1234 - Jan 30, 2019 / hm1234 - Jan 31, 2019
|KGSP Statement of Purpose - trying to stay withing word limit while including only useful info
Graduateeviand - Jan 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 31, 2019
|Statement Of Purpose for Stanford Graduate Computer Science Program
2 - Charles, what is the word limitation on this essay? The reason I ask is because you only provided information...
Graduatecweng - Jan 29, 2019 / Holt - Jan 30, 2019
|Graduate degree in User Experience Design - Master of Information
2 - Muhammad, you are over explaining your reasons in the essay. The over explanations result in you digressing from the...
GraduateReza2019 - Jan 29, 2019 / Holt - Jan 30, 2019
|My life was chosen for me from the womb. Personal Statement for Chemistry Graduate School
2 - If I have understood you correctly, you aim to study in chemistry instead of becoming a doctor - so...
Graduateprincesskitten - Jan 28, 2019 / delelse - Jan 28, 2019
|My enthusiasm to explore data science. Personal Statement - The Data Science Colloquium at Michigan
3 - Yilin, the personal statement should show the development of your interest in the major you have chosen. It is...
Graduateyoungnmax - Jan 27, 2019 / Holt - Jan 28, 2019
|Statement of Purpose - MS in Data Science George Washington University
3 - I think you could use the fourth paragraph as a start of your statement of purpose. And you could...
GraduateLedTheZeppelin - Jan 14, 2019 / youngnmax - Jan 27, 2019
|A supplementary essay describing a challenge faced at work and how I overcame it
3 - Pranay, first up, you cannot use a mock situation at the office. A mock situation is simply a task...
GraduatePranaySingla - Jan 26, 2019 / Holt - Jan 27, 2019
|Data Science is a promising profession - University of Michigan SOP
2 - Yilin, how far into the future are your travel agency plans? Give it a time-frame. Remember that the MS...
Graduateyoungnmax - Jan 26, 2019 / Holt - Jan 27, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for Meng in Chemical Engineeing National University of Singapore
2 - Shi, please set this essay aside and use it later on as a personal statement. The essay is not...
Graduateivy1223 - Jan 23, 2019 / Holt - Jan 24, 2019
|Reasons for choosing IPCV as field of interest and as program of study
2 - Pazhanivel, there is a strong reference to your practical research skills in this motivation letter. That is good for...
GraduateLevinahzapa - Jan 19, 2019 / Holt - Jan 21, 2019
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