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|The need for representation of women in the Bahamas
4 - When you say to make "reference to any successful women in the bahamas that have already laid out the...
GraduateMickey242 - 1 day ago / Mickey242 - 7 hours ago
|Difficult to be accepted into Physical Therapy. Personal Essay 2018-2019 PTCAS
Graduatesfrancois212 - 1 day ago / sfrancois212 - 17 hours ago
|Ideal balance between theory and practical application. Personal Statement - Business Analytics
3 - Jorgen, when considering what the content of a personal statement should be, a reviewer will find that this essay...
Graduatejhalmsli - Feb 17, 2019 / Holt - Feb 18, 2019
|My interest in Korea can be traced to the beginning of the years 2000s... (GKS 2019)
2 - Aline, there is no need to reference your family background as you did in this essay. That is not...
Graduateamesquita - Feb 16, 2019 / Holt - Feb 17, 2019
|The robust course curriculum offered. SOP for Master's in Business Analytics
2 - Roshini, you have to revise the statement of purpose to discuss how your college studies helped prepare you for...
GraduateRoshini - Feb 16, 2019 / Holt - Feb 17, 2019
|Urban planning and real estate managemenet of Korea - KGSP/GKS personal statement
GraduateIamIana - Feb 15, 2019 / IamIana - Feb 16, 2019
|Texas A&M MS in Marketing - why study at Mays
4 - Shruti, I find that the statement that you wrote is not properly focused on a useful response. The most...
Graduateshrutishahh - Feb 15, 2019 / Holt - Feb 16, 2019
|Civil Engineering - KGSP Application Goal of study & Study Plan
3 - Thankyou about your feedback. I already revise my essay. How about now? CO2 sequestration storage is a...
Graduatehesseljw - Feb 6, 2019 / hesseljw - Feb 12, 2019
|Motivation, plans and goals to make a breakthrough in construction industry and material science
Graduateafaf_93 - Feb 10, 2019 / abclaudya - Feb 11, 2019
|2nd Application Essay - Global MBA Program University of Hawaii
2 - The problem with your essay is that it is about an extra curricular activity. So there is a lack...
Graduatepjongko91 - Feb 8, 2019 / Holt - Feb 9, 2019
|KGSP Application - Part 2 (research goal - how can I contribute?)
7 - I think that since you mentioned that you have learned korean for three years its enough if you only...
Graduateeviand - Feb 2, 2019 / Jazzmin - Feb 8, 2019
|Digital Triangle Team - Review my admission essay.
3 - Salah, the reviewer is looking for a more solid representation of your responsibility skills. Based on the discussion you...
GraduateBEBROS - Feb 6, 2019 / Holt - Feb 6, 2019
|1st Essay - Global MBA Program, Shidler College of Business (University of Hawaii at Manoa)
5 - Thanks for the detailed feedback. I will incorporate your observations into my second draft. Thanks again!...
Graduatepjongko91 - Feb 5, 2019 / pjongko91 - Feb 6, 2019
|KGSP-Graduate Personal Statement for Archaeology; Dead Men Do Tell Tales
Graduateggmax - Jan 27, 2019 / Jazzmin - Feb 5, 2019
|Chemistry Study - PERSONAL STATEMENT for scholarship
GraduateJazzmin - Feb 4, 2019 / Jazzmin - Feb 5, 2019
|Data Science Masters - Columbia University Personal Statement
2 - Gautam, this is a very strong essay. I would call it highly competitive and should receive proper consideration from...
Graduategm1234 - Feb 2, 2019 / Holt - Feb 3, 2019
|An accountant - Statement of Purpose for applying Master
2 - Elen, while the first paragraph somewhat responds to one of the questions, the rest of the essay does not...
GraduateHeinna10 - Jan 31, 2019 / Holt - Feb 1, 2019
|Dual concentration in statistics and pure mathematics. Statement of Purpose for MS in Statistics
3 - @Holt Thanks so much for your response! Very helpful advice - I'm going to work on revising my statement...
Graduatehm1234 - Jan 30, 2019 / hm1234 - Jan 31, 2019
|KGSP Statement of Purpose - trying to stay withing word limit while including only useful info
Graduateeviand - Jan 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 31, 2019
|Statement Of Purpose for Stanford Graduate Computer Science Program
3 - The word limit is 750. @Holt , thanks for the input. I will definitely take research/study interest into account...
Graduatecweng - Jan 29, 2019 / cweng - Jan 30, 2019
|Graduate degree in User Experience Design - Master of Information
2 - Muhammad, you are over explaining your reasons in the essay. The over explanations result in you digressing from the...
GraduateReza2019 - Jan 29, 2019 / Holt - Jan 30, 2019
|My life was chosen for me from the womb. Personal Statement for Chemistry Graduate School
2 - If I have understood you correctly, you aim to study in chemistry instead of becoming a doctor - so...
Graduateprincesskitten - Jan 28, 2019 / delelse - Jan 28, 2019
|My enthusiasm to explore data science. Personal Statement - The Data Science Colloquium at Michigan
3 - Yilin, the personal statement should show the development of your interest in the major you have chosen. It is...
Graduateyoungnmax - Jan 27, 2019 / Holt - Jan 28, 2019
|Statement of Purpose - MS in Data Science George Washington University
3 - I think you could use the fourth paragraph as a start of your statement of purpose. And you could...
GraduateLedTheZeppelin - Jan 14, 2019 / youngnmax - Jan 27, 2019
|A supplementary essay describing a challenge faced at work and how I overcame it
3 - Pranay, first up, you cannot use a mock situation at the office. A mock situation is simply a task...
GraduatePranaySingla - Jan 26, 2019 / Holt - Jan 27, 2019
|Data Science is a promising profession - University of Michigan SOP
2 - Yilin, how far into the future are your travel agency plans? Give it a time-frame. Remember that the MS...
Graduateyoungnmax - Jan 26, 2019 / Holt - Jan 27, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for Meng in Chemical Engineeing National University of Singapore
2 - Shi, please set this essay aside and use it later on as a personal statement. The essay is not...
Graduateivy1223 - Jan 23, 2019 / Holt - Jan 24, 2019
|Reasons for choosing IPCV as field of interest and as program of study
2 - Pazhanivel, there is a strong reference to your practical research skills in this motivation letter. That is good for...
GraduateLevinahzapa - Jan 19, 2019 / Holt - Jan 21, 2019
|SOP for Master of Science in Advanced Methods & Data Analysis
9 - Take the research and methodology reference our of your CV and place it in the relevant essay section. This...
GraduateIris_viva - Dec 28, 2018 / Holt - Jan 20, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for MS Human Computer-Interaction, HCI at the University of Siegen
3 - Though the deadline has passed, I would suggest that you synthesize your paragraphs otherwise the information seems to be...
GraduateMTariqKhan - Jan 9, 2019 / Iris_viva - Jan 19, 2019
|My struggle about abstract (World English studies)
Graduatesummerwangs - Jan 17, 2019 / Holt - Jan 18, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for Social work and welfare masters program
2 - Ari, this is more of a personal statement than a statement of purpose. The personal statement comes in at...
GraduateDofarian - Jan 11, 2019 / Holt - Jan 12, 2019
|25 interesting facts describing myself - Duke MQM
3 - Thanks a lot for your advice! I replace the statement of my mother's cancer with this one: I like...
Graduatesirenccc - Jan 10, 2019 / sirenccc - Jan 11, 2019
|My inspiration to pursue a degree in information- personal statement
3 - Thank you so much for your help! Your comment about valuing my own motivating factors over my family background...
Graduatessiwakot - Jan 10, 2019 / ssiwakot - Jan 10, 2019
|Computer Science and Learning - Statement of purpose for HCI
2 - Faiz, while your initial writing could use an overall development of information, that is not the only problem of...
GraduateFaizKhan - Jan 9, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2019
|Letter of Intent for Master of Business Administration
2 - Tuyen, your opening paragraph is weak. It does not really catch the attention of the reviewer. The reason it...
GraduateTuyenDo - Jan 9, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2019
|PS for Columbia University Master of Science in Data Science (Part-time); once dismissed from PhD
7 - Hi, Holt thank you for your explanations. It all makes sense. The website's editing service is only grammatical polish?...
Graduateorangeqq99 - Dec 27, 2018 / orangeqq99 - Jan 8, 2019
|Graduate Application Statement of Purpose Essay for Interaction Design Program
2 - I have reviewed your essay and come to the conclusion that you are not delivering the required prompt requirements....
GraduateGangDang - Jan 7, 2019 / Holt - Jan 8, 2019
|Data Mining - KGSP for Graduate Studies
2 - Kristian, you have not created an appropriate goal of study and study plan for this essay. The approach that...
Graduatekristianjb - Jan 6, 2019 / Holt - Jan 7, 2019
|Motivation Letter for master degree in Biomedical Sciences University of Groningen
2 - Sabah, your dedication to research and learning is evident in this motivational letter. However, it is not strong enough...
GraduateSab1991 - Jan 4, 2019 / Holt - Jan 5, 2019
|LOI for MA in Economics and Finance - about myself, my goal, why master's program, etc.
3 - Happy new year 2019! Thank you very much for your response and insight. It is really helpful and i...
Graduatetjhornet - Dec 12, 2018 / tjhornet - Jan 2, 2019
|Statement of Purpose - Professional Master's Program in Computer Science Big Data Specialization
2 - This is a SOP that can be considered quite strong in terms of your qualifications. So your essay is...
GraduateMichelleA - Dec 28, 2018 / Holt - Dec 29, 2018
|A career change by developing in-depth expertise in data science and become a cloud data scientist.
Graduatetantanisme - Dec 27, 2018 / tantanisme - Dec 29, 2018
|Essay for MS MIS for a student of Electronics Engineering background
Graduatemih_tam19 - Dec 26, 2018 / mih_tam19 - Dec 27, 2018
|Personal Statement for KGSP (Graduate): Application to POSTECH
3 - Kristian, do not include cookie cutter information about the university. Your choice of university should not be based on...
Graduatekristianjb - Dec 26, 2018 / Holt - Dec 27, 2018
|SOP proofreading for graduate U.S. Institutions
2 - Manav, you are over detailing your qualifications in your statement of purpose. The statement of purpose is just that,...
Graduatepatman - Dec 23, 2018 / Holt - Dec 24, 2018
|Required essay for Weatherhead: What values are most important to you?
4 - Hlx, being cooperative is not a value system. That is a character trait. A personal value system refers to...
GraduateHlx - Dec 23, 2018 / Holt - Dec 24, 2018
|ESSAY - Why Smith? Why a masters degree? Why now?
3 - Hi, thank you for correcting my grammar mistakes. Because I already have 298 words, I can't add more words...
GraduateLelezhou - Dec 22, 2018 / Lelezhou - Dec 22, 2018
|Pursuing a business analyst with optimized data-driven recommendation after MSBA at ABC University
3 - Yongju, none of your responses align itself with the prompt requirements. It is as if you just decided to...
GraduatePursuingBA - Dec 20, 2018 / Holt - Dec 21, 2018
|'singing and photography' - SOP: Describe your motivation for pursuing a master's degree.
2 - Hlx, you should connect your interest in the masters course as it relates to your worksite problems. Rather than...
GraduateHlx - Dec 20, 2018 / Holt - Dec 21, 2018
|Why would an accounting graduate suddenly choose to switch his career to computer science? SOP essay
Graduateinvictus - Dec 19, 2018 / invictus - Dec 20, 2018
|SOP - how the MSA fits into your near-term and long-term professional career goals.
2 - Nick, this is not a regular personal statement essay because the university has given you specific instructions about what...
Graduatenafragak - Dec 18, 2018 / Holt - Dec 19, 2018
|"Original Thinking Applied" SOP for MSc Accounting in Manchester.
2 - Fabian, without knowing what the actual sop prompt requirements are, I can tell you that this paper is not...
GraduateFDeeKay - Dec 18, 2018 / Holt - Dec 19, 2018
|How you would use Wesleyan education to make a contribution to your home country. Wesleyan essay.
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|I LOVE SOLVING THE PROBLEMS VIA QUANTIFYING IN FORM OF MATH BUT NOT SOLVING MATH
2 - @duynghi your essay is over informative and has lost focus work regards to what a letter of intent contains....
Graduateduynghi - Dec 17, 2018 / Holt - Dec 18, 2018
|Personal Statement of Data Science master program in data analytics
2 - Li, the last 3 paragraphs of your current essay fall directly within the requirements of a personal statement that...
Graduatesherlocked384 - Dec 16, 2018 / Holt - Dec 17, 2018
|Personal Statement for CS in GRA program; MSc Computer Science
2 - Tian, what you have written is a statement of purpose, not a personal statement. The personal statement highlights your...
Graduatebonafide98 - Dec 15, 2018 / Holt - Dec 16, 2018
|I trust the future potential of Data Science, and I trust my own ability to excel at it. SOP
GraduateZhichen - Dec 12, 2018 / Zhichen - Dec 13, 2018
|Motivation Letter - I am willing to apply to Erasmus Mundus Joint Masters Degree Program
2 - Makid, from what I can tell, this is an extremely long letter that does not have a true motivational...
Graduatemaskawat - Dec 12, 2018 / Holt - Dec 13, 2018
|SOP for admission in a course of statistics & machine learning
2 - Rakhshanda, this sounds more like a college statement of purpose than a masters degree sop presentation. There is very...
Graduatejrakhshanda - Dec 11, 2018 / Holt - Dec 12, 2018
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