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|Questions about the balance of experience and academic proposal -regarding personal statement
Graduatewingkee - Jun 30, 2020 / wingkee - 5 hrs ago
|"Never stop learning, for when we stop learning, we stop growing" - SOP for business data analytics
Graduateandyb017 - Jul 8, 2020 / andyb017 - 2 days ago
|Engineering Job - AAS Supporting Statement: Question No. 1
4 - The first paragraph is more useful in the career goal statement response. The second paragraph should be more focused...
Graduatedarklord30 - Jun 28, 2020 / Holt - Jun 29, 2020
|Lecturer in a higher institution - KGSP Future Plan.
2 - This is not a true KGSP Future after studies plan. This is a non-answer that does not give specifics...
GraduateKrishaP - Jun 19, 2020 / Holt - Jun 19, 2020
|Masters admission - Letter of motivation - business and entrepreneurship
3 - @Rohi1 Impressive vocabulary. I think little bit of explanation on how you overcome challenges you faced in your business...
GraduateRohi1 - Jun 8, 2020 / rijumaharjan2052 - Jun 17, 2020
|Masters admission - Letter of motivation - Management
2 - There is no clear motivation in your essay. That is because you aimed to present a personal statement as...
Graduatelclinse - Jun 10, 2020 / Holt - Jun 10, 2020
|Essay: why Design, do you fit for the chosen stream?
3 - Shorter version Technology is getting smaller as every day passes and tactile is near getting obsolete,we are marred...
Graduateralph1494 - Jun 8, 2020 / ralph1494 - Jun 9, 2020
|Computer Science Graduate program Application Question - Answer Essay (limited in 250words)
4 - In the past two years, I have been working as a graphic designer for a traditional Chinese food retail...
Graduateathiecheng1010 - Jun 5, 2020 / athiecheng1010 - Jun 8, 2020
|Why the need to study environment? SOP Just a start.
2 - Your SOP should be more related to your background in Biosecurity. The purpose of your masters application must be...
GraduateEmawin04 - Jun 3, 2020 / Holt - Jun 3, 2020
|Letter of motivation for a Master's Programme in Digital Media and Society
GraduateAnya_q - May 29, 2020 / Anya_q - May 29, 2020
|Career change from Finance to Bioinformatics - MS SoP review
2 - This is an excellent personal statement. It doesn't really provide the necessary information to prove that you have a...
Graduatestankunas - May 19, 2020 / Holt - May 19, 2020
|Mechanical engineering at Kohl TU
GraduateKid1975 - May 11, 2020 / Kid1975 - May 11, 2020
|Statement of Purpose for MS in Business Analytics in UK (3 years of Work ex)
2 - The essay needs to focus more on the purpose aspect and less on the narrative background aspect. Your presentation...
Graduategrimmhuntress - May 4, 2020 / Holt - May 5, 2020
|Statement of Purpose for Masters in System Engineering
GraduateAaditya_karan - Apr 28, 2020 / Holt - Apr 29, 2020
|The success of a person depends on the right kind of education - SOP for Masters in Computer Science
2 - Do not treat the statement of purpose as your academic biography. The presentation in this essay does not really...
Graduaterat7378 - Apr 27, 2020 / Holt - Apr 28, 2020
|"Mutual learning" - Essay for the MBA program at Illinois State University
2 - Let's be clear here. The reviewer will require you to provide only 4 paragraphs, at the most, for this...
GraduateIshtiaqurrahman - Apr 23, 2020 / Holt - Apr 23, 2020
|MSc Data Analytics - Admission Essay (supplemental)
2 - Compress the systems you built. Both systems should only comprise one paragraph. Your essay ran too long because of...
Graduateastridglo - Apr 20, 2020 / Holt - Apr 21, 2020
|Statement of Purpose - MSc Applied Data Analytics
2 - The first 2 paragraphs are what directly affect the length of your essay. Too much backstory is affecting the...
Graduateglowryeah - Apr 15, 2020 / Holt - Apr 16, 2020
|As a GOI-IES Scholar, how will you extend yourself beyond your project/studies
2 - The most promising part of this essay is the last paragraph. Properly developed, it holds the most interesting method...
Graduatenabilah_hannan - Apr 8, 2020 / Holt - Apr 9, 2020
|Energy Engineer - Statement of purpose for masters.
GraduateFroggy23 - Apr 8, 2020 / Froggy23 - Apr 8, 2020
|Social Services - I am applying to MPH programs and this is my SOP
Graduateekidowu - Apr 5, 2020 / ekidowu - Apr 6, 2020
|Statement of purpose - why I want to apply for Master in Business Analytics?
2 - The essay needs to be reformatted in order to create a more interesting SOP and information presentation. The current...
Graduatesadikabid27 - Apr 4, 2020 / Holt - Apr 4, 2020
|Review my Essay for Msc in Data Science from LMU and suggest any changes
3 - Thanks a lot Holt for your valuable suggestions. I will surely make the changes as suggested by you. Again,...
Graduatedikshita - Apr 3, 2020 / dikshita - Apr 3, 2020
|"Three aspects'" - Self introduction for master's degree interview
4 - I think that you should add the data you wrote this letter and tell more about the purposes and...
GraduateZavy - Mar 31, 2020 / emmawattson - Mar 31, 2020
|AAS International Security - Why did you choose your proposed course and institution
3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your suggestion. The problem is this essay is limited to only 2000 characters...
Graduatebystandershopper - Mar 27, 2020 / bystandershopper - Mar 27, 2020
|Banking Sector - How will the proposed study contribute to your career*? Australia Award.
GraduateLenabouillot - Mar 26, 2020 / Lenabouillot - Mar 26, 2020
|GKS2020 Embassy Track Master of Communication & Media Personal Statement
2 - Remove all references to researched content in this essay. You are writing a personal statement, not a research study...
Graduateattalicious - Mar 20, 2020 / Holt - Mar 21, 2020
|Personal statement for applying a MAs educational leadership
2 - The essay tends to be mundane overall. It doesn't really catch the eye of the reviewer. It is descriptive...
GraduateCutecarrot - Mar 20, 2020 / Holt - Mar 21, 2020
|Some people think that strict punishment for driving offences are the key to reduce traffic accident
2 - You forgot to count the discussion topics before you wrote the prompt restatement. This is a comparison of points...
GraduatePheobe - Mar 20, 2020 / Holt - Mar 20, 2020
|Seeking advice for a statement of purpose needed to apply for a master in robotics at EPFL.
2 - The first question I have is, why are you applying for admission to a master's course without first having...
Graduatefratopa - Mar 19, 2020 / Holt - Mar 20, 2020
|Personal Statement to University of Limerick, Ireland
3 - @Holt Hi Holt, Many thanks for your feedback. This statement purpose mainly demonstrates my passions and my background....
Graduatekhangdu8897 - Mar 12, 2020 / khangdu8897 - Mar 14, 2020
|Personal Statement for Financial Mathematics master
Graduateionix - Mar 12, 2020 / ionix - Mar 13, 2020
|Statement of purpose for GKS 2020 (computer engineering) embassy track
3 - @getdani Hi, I think you should start the essay with a nice introduction. Don't hold shotgun than blows...
Graduategetdani - Mar 9, 2020 / shingeki1996 - Mar 11, 2020
|GKS 2020 Statement of Purpose: Focus on SMEs for better productivity
2 - I am afraid that you will need to revise this essay. You see, the masters degree course you plan...
Graduateitsmedione - Mar 9, 2020 / Holt - Mar 10, 2020
|Learning and unlearning (Msc Motivation Letter- Software Engineering)
2 - Take an international point of view regarding your interest in Software Engineering. Discuss how you maybe plan to develop...
Graduatepranklyspeaking - Mar 9, 2020 / Holt - Mar 10, 2020
|About my internship: help me with the grammar mistakes and the fluency in my essay!
3 - Your essay does not make any sense to the reader. You have 300 words with which to write this...
Graduateemem123 - Mar 2, 2020 / Holt - Mar 2, 2020
|GKS 2020 University track Global Business major personal statement
2 - The motivation with which you apply to the course is not really solid towards representing a future career path...
Graduatebekakzkz - Mar 1, 2020 / Holt - Mar 2, 2020
|Fulbright Master's Future Plans Essay
4 - @gtacchini i think it is better to outline WHY the current program will benefit you future career, and HOW...
Graduategtacchini - Feb 25, 2020 / alie_alie - Feb 27, 2020
|Personal Statement for GKS 2020 Graduate under Graduate Program of Industrial Pharmaceutical Science
2 - There is a severe lack of Korean connections between your work experience and academic background. Your interest in studying...
Graduatenblhhld - Feb 26, 2020 / Holt - Feb 27, 2020
|Essay on 'Why My Undergraduate Academic Performance Is A Poor Indication of Potential'
Graduatechazoko - Feb 25, 2020 / Ulaai - Feb 26, 2020
|Motivation letter For Masters Program in Accounting and Auditing
Graduatealie_alie - Feb 26, 2020 / alie_alie - Feb 26, 2020
|Msc in Civil Engineering personal statement. My Passion for civil engineering and Transport Planning
Graduatepam2233 - Feb 24, 2020 / Holt - Feb 25, 2020
|My personal Statement to study Biochemical Engineering; I seek to pursue a career in science
2 - Your essay is a bit too long for a personal statement. You don't really need to present an autobiography...
GraduateBenedicta Frema - Feb 24, 2020 / Holt - Feb 24, 2020
|SOP for Masters in Business Analytics; using data to extract right knowledge and insights
2 - The essay needs to be edited to make it more interesting to read. This being a statement of purpose...
Graduateschoudhary - Feb 24, 2020 / Holt - Feb 24, 2020
|I am willing and able to share mentioned skills and competence with MBA's classmates.
4 - @serbinax Thank you for your valuable feedback. I'll try to rework it somehow and again will send it here....
Graduatealmas_kz - Feb 19, 2020 / almas_kz - Feb 21, 2020
|Review My Personal Statement For a Master Degree In Data Science at Columbia University
3 - @Holt Thank you for your valuable feedback! I do realize that the Essay was pretty lengthy, I just...
Graduatetangc2 - Feb 14, 2020 / tangc2 - Feb 15, 2020
|Kindly Review my Personal Statement for a Masters in Cybersecurity at Sheffield Hallam Uni
4 - Oh, thank you for your insightful response. The application only requested for a minimum of a 100 words....
Graduatestartupng - Feb 12, 2020 / startupng - Feb 14, 2020
|Review my SOP for my application to German university in Computational Engineering.
Graduatesankeerthgn - Feb 13, 2020 / sankeerthgn - Feb 13, 2020
|SOP for MS in Industrial Engineering; to make connections within the field and ultimately land a job
4 - As the major you're applying isn't in line with your undergraduate major (ME -> Industrial Eng), you need to...
GraduateAvenger214 - Feb 8, 2020 / Ulaai - Feb 10, 2020
|Review My Letter of Motivation for Masters in Finance and Economics in Germany
2 - I believe that paragraphs 4 and 5 have the most required information for a letter of motivation. However, both...
Graduateanjumnavid - Feb 8, 2020 / Holt - Feb 9, 2020
|Bioinformatics personal statement for graduate school
2 - It sounds confusing, self-defeating, and illogical. The presentation needs a lot of work. Since the course you want to...
Graduateqguo551 - Feb 5, 2020 / Holt - Feb 6, 2020
|U of T Engineering Supplementary Essay - extracurriculars and developed skills
2 - You don't really need that long-winded introduction at the start. Your essay will be better helped, due to the...
Graduateyellowjello123 - Feb 5, 2020 / Holt - Feb 5, 2020
|Erasmus Mundus Scholarship - Masters in Models and Methods of Quantitative Economics (QEM)
GraduateIshtiaqurrahman - Feb 3, 2020 / Ishtiaqurrahman - Feb 4, 2020
|Applying to the MAIA to be fully educated - SOP
3 - You cannot use any part of this essay for your statement of purpose. This will work as a personal...
Graduatemomda - Feb 2, 2020 / Holt - Feb 3, 2020
|Master in Translational Cosmetics and Dermatological Sciences Motivational Letter
GraduateBiochemcos - Jan 27, 2020 / Biochemcos - Feb 2, 2020
|My long-standing fascination - STATEMENT OF PURPOSE CHEMICAL ENGINEERING MSc PROGRAMME
3 - @Kilekun This Essay does not show any purpose of you undertaking your studies in XXX University. You didn't make...
GraduateKilekun - Jan 31, 2020 / Uromi - Feb 1, 2020
|Statement of Purpose for Data Science & Analytics (MSc) from Cork Institute of Technology
3 - One thing that reviewers do not really like coming across in any sort of essay is a quotation from...
GraduateZeroToInfinity - Jan 30, 2020 / Holt - Jan 30, 2020
|Personal Statement Masters in Data Science / Finance Major
Graduatelethalasian - Jan 27, 2020 / lethalasian - Jan 29, 2020
|Personal Statement for Human Rights and International Politics masters
2 - The development and your experience regarding human rights and its violations are not solid enough in this presentation to...
Graduateionacampbell - Jan 29, 2020 / Holt - Jan 29, 2020
|SOP (Study Plan and Goal) - GKS Scholarship in Computer Engineering
2 - The goal of study and study plan must be based on a thesis like presentation of a problem you...
GraduateYinMOo - Jan 24, 2020 / Holt - Jan 25, 2020
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