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|SOP for Masters of Information System Security
Graduatemesbah90 - Mar 21, 2021 / mesbah90 - 1 day ago
|"Accessibility" - Personal statement for MSc in HPPF in LSE
2 - Your discussion is heavily focused on the reasons why you want to study MSc in Public Health. You failed...
GraduateMinc - Apr 6, 2021 / Holt - Apr 7, 2021
|Industrial Revolution 4.0. Statement Of Purpose for MSc in Human Resources
Graduatemekh - Apr 4, 2021 / mekh - Apr 4, 2021
|SOP MCs Computer Science - EPFL - academic background and career strategy
Graduategiupiter_kh - Mar 30, 2021 / giupiter_kh - Mar 31, 2021
|GKS-G Global Korean Scolarship | Personal Statement | Ph.D. in Cybersecurity
3 - Thanks for your feedback. I rewrote the personal statement: Hello, my name is Oscar Llerena. I am the...
Graduateresearcher182 - Mar 25, 2021 / researcher182 - Mar 29, 2021
|Study plan for master's of enterprise management for university in China
2 - This is not a study plan. This is a personal statement. There is nothing in this presentation that represents...
Graduateasya - Mar 28, 2021 / Holt - Mar 29, 2021
|Learning Korean - GKS - Statement of Purpose - Language Study Plan
2 - The language study plan is normally responded to within 1-2 paragraphs that immediately outline the pre-Korea and post-Korea language...
Graduateiyo - Mar 26, 2021 / Holt - Mar 27, 2021
|GKS-G Korean Scholarship | Personal Statement | M.S. Public Policy (Environment/Green Development)
3 - Thank you for your response. I've checked and do qualify under a new Korean Heritage category, provided neither...
Graduatescoriae - Mar 25, 2021 / scoriae - Mar 26, 2021
|Personal Statement for M.Eng. Mechanical Engineering at University of Alberta
2 - The ideal SOP presentation has a maximum word count of 750 words. I find this essay to be extremely...
GraduateDioBrando69 - Mar 23, 2021 / Holt - Mar 24, 2021
|Why becoming a GOI-IES Scholar matters to you, what you'll gain from this scholarship?
2 - This is actually an ordinary essay that does not have any stand out points or references that could catch...
Graduatemebax64893 - Mar 18, 2021 / Holt - Mar 19, 2021
|Anesthesiologist Assistant Program Personal Statement: Experience with Healthcare Disparities?
2 - I can understand how your father's illness would have opened your mind to considering a career in healthcare. However,...
GraduateGenJen - Mar 18, 2021 / Holt - Mar 19, 2021
|Cross major - Personal Statement - GKS Graduate University Track
Graduatehrdynt23 - Mar 14, 2021 / Holt - Mar 15, 2021
|MASTER OF GLOBAL BUSINESS - AAS 2021 - Why this course and institution?
2 - ONE ESSAY PER THREAD. ADMIN SHALL DELETE THE REST OF THIS POST. KINDLY POST THOSE AS INDIVIDUAL THREADS INSTEAD....
Graduatetpekar15 - Mar 10, 2021 / Holt - Mar 10, 2021
|Agricultural economics and rural development - Graduate Program - GKS - Personal Statment
2 - The essay is a relaxing read that covers all of the elements required in the discussion. However, I feel...
GraduateKasogi - Mar 9, 2021 / Holt - Mar 9, 2021
|Supply Chain - Personal Statement Graduate GKS, Industrial Engineering
2 - Though your introduction to Korea is an interesting aspect of this presentation, it does not reflect a direct connection...
Graduatekarinrizky - Mar 5, 2021 / Holt - Mar 6, 2021
|Fascination for things that fly. Personal statement for MS in Aerospace Engineering
2 - The Personal Statement should not be so loaded with the courses you completed both on and offline. You practically...
GraduateAnmol Chaudhary - Mar 4, 2021 / Holt - Mar 5, 2021
|GKS-G Personal Statement for AI & Natural Language Processing
2 - The early part of the essay is a good introduction to your profession, but does not really apply itself...
Graduatequeenrey - Mar 3, 2021 / Holt - Mar 4, 2021
|Cambodia Development - AAS Application: Why did you choose your proposed course
2 - How does your proposed course relate, in a professional manner, to addressing the needs of Cambodia? You gave a...
GraduateReksanil - Mar 2, 2021 / Holt - Mar 2, 2021
|Spreading myself too thin on Cover letter/Personal Statement for Aerospace Engg, ISAE-SUPAERO?
3 - @Holt The paragraph 4 is the "how the program will help your future career" paragraph. Do you suggest another...
GraduateVarunVP - Feb 28, 2021 / VarunVP - Mar 1, 2021
|2021 GKS Graduate; Personal Statement; I'm the youngest member of a four...
Graduateslyny - Feb 26, 2021 / slyny - Feb 26, 2021
|SOP for MS Human Computer-Interaction/ Changing Direction
2 - Your approach to presenting your relevant education is acceptable. Since the educational background does not seem to be a...
Graduatesbp - Feb 23, 2021 / Holt - Feb 24, 2021
|MBA and technology - [KGSP-G] MASTERS IN BUSINESS ADMINISTRATION-STATEMENT OF PURPOSE
GraduateAkua Grey - Feb 21, 2021 / Akua Grey - Feb 22, 2021
|SOP- SCAD - What first drawn me to a career as a visual artist were animations I watched as a child
2 - There is no real purpose for your studies. You have written a motivational letter rather than a statement of...
GraduateDizm - Feb 15, 2021 / Holt - Feb 16, 2021
|Anesthesiologist Assistant Graduate Program; Personal Statement; motivation for career in healthcare
2 - You have clearly explained why you want to pursue a career in healthcare. However, you have not made any...
GraduateLorquetL007 - Feb 12, 2021 / Holt - Feb 13, 2021
|Master's Programme in Mechanical Engineering with Automotive Engineering specialization
2 - The motivation for choosing the university is too superficial. It is based on commonly known information and what you...
GraduateSam96 - Feb 7, 2021 / Holt - Feb 8, 2021
|Innovation and technology projects - GKS Program - Study Plan
2 - There are several paragraphs that need to be removed from this presentation. The first 2 paragraphs do not help...
GraduateThyciane - Feb 5, 2021 / Holt - Feb 6, 2021
|Personal Statement for Master of Science in Human-Computer Interaction
2 - I wish I had a copy of the prompt requirements that your personal statement has to respond to. As...
Graduateazio - Feb 5, 2021 / Holt - Feb 5, 2021
|Personal Ethical Dilemma essay for graduate school
2 - First up, never use the real names of people you know in the essay to protect their privacy. Yes,...
Graduatemedicat - Feb 4, 2021 / Holt - Feb 4, 2021
|LOM for Erasmus Mundus E-Pico Program (Views, ideas, anything)
2 - It would be better if you reverse the presentation of your letter. Since this is a motivation letter, the...
Graduateweatherkicksass - Jan 31, 2021 / Holt - Feb 1, 2021
|SOP for Msc in psychology and cognitive science
2 - You have to remove the reference to being an 11 year old and having such an active interest in...
Graduateale996 - Jan 30, 2021 / Holt - Jan 31, 2021
|STATEMENT OF PURPOSE FOR GEOSCIENCE MASTER DEGREE, BRUNEI DARUSSALAM GOVERNMENT SCHOLARSHIP (BDGS)
2 - What is the purpose of your thesis research? How do you see this contributing to the study of volcanology...
Graduateshofihawan - Jan 28, 2021 / Holt - Jan 29, 2021
|University of Pennsylvania's Master of Behavioral & Decision Science - Personal Statement
NEW - Personal Statement essay Hi all, I am applying to Master of Behavioral & Decision Science, University of Pennsylvania....
Graduatelisarg - Jan 24, 2021 / — -
|UVirginia Data Science Statement Of Purpose
2 - You have a strong academic background. However, you are mistaking the internship for a professional experience which, even if...
GraduateMSDataScAspirant - Jan 22, 2021 / Holt - Jan 23, 2021
|[KGSP-G] - International Trade Studies (GSIS) - Statement of Purpose
3 - I believe a good way to start your Goal of Study is with some experiences you had that motivated...
Graduatenhunggngu - Jan 21, 2021 / AlfredoCruz - Jan 21, 2021
|REVIEW GUYS - TRACK MOTIVATION FOR MASTERS IN ENGINEERING DESIGN WITH MACHINE DESIGN TRACK
2 - The educational background that you are presenting is just an enumeration of courses. It does not prove that you...
Graduatesalil96ii - Jan 19, 2021 / Holt - Jan 20, 2021
|Statement of Purpose for MPH in Global Health, unconventional background (PhD in Computer Science)
Graduatechiraz - Jan 19, 2021 / Holt - Jan 19, 2021
|Statement of Purpose for Human Rights Studies in Sweden
2 - This is way too long for a statement of purpose. Unless otherwise specified, the SOP should be completed within...
GraduateMehjabin Ferdous - Jan 19, 2021 / Holt - Jan 19, 2021
|Statement of purpose for graduate school, why EMECS - Erasmus Mundus Programme
2 - You cannot focus solely on your undergraduate education for an EM masters scholarship application. You have to show a...
GraduateTuronbek - Jan 18, 2021 / Holt - Jan 18, 2021
|Statement of Purpose - Masters Degree in Education Leadership, Organizations, and Entrepreneurship
2 - I am not sure if this incorrect statement of purpose will help your application to Harvard. Specially since it...
Graduatemanuelavilasb - Jan 13, 2021 / Holt - Jan 14, 2021
|Personal Statement Masters in EnergySystems (500 WORDS) - University of Oxford
2 - There is an extreme focus on your academic achievements overall. This unusual focus has resulted in your inability to...
GraduateHafizTaimoor - Jan 13, 2021 / Holt - Jan 14, 2021
|STATEMENT OF PURPOSE/ MS in Human Nutrition in South Korea / [GSP]
2 - You can skip the first paragraph in relation to the TOPIK test. That is irrelevant to the discussion which...
Graduatemanabae - Jan 12, 2021 / Holt - Jan 12, 2021
|International Security - Personal Statement - Erasmus Mundus IMSISS Scholarship
3 - i think it should be ... paradigms that prevent individuals to live from living in a safe environment...
GraduateSofiaM - Jan 7, 2021 / A7zanany - Jan 8, 2021
|To Yale Silver from Belarus startup industry
3 - @Holt Thank you for the advice! I rebuilt it a bit. Does it seem stronger? However, my commitment deals...
GraduateMaximDeykalo - Jan 7, 2021 / MaximDeykalo - Jan 7, 2021
|Statement for Purpose for Masters in Game Design/Development
2 - What you have here is a great personal statement that shows the development of your interest in Game Design...
Graduatewhaj47 - Jan 6, 2021 / Holt - Jan 6, 2021
|Personal Statement for Msc in Marketing in Dublin
2 - As you are discussing an interest in Marketing based on a masters degree foundation, you should avoid references to...
Graduatefariha - Dec 26, 2020 / Holt - Dec 28, 2020
|How to explain two years of gap in Statement of Purpose?
2 - The gap year is not a regularly required piece of information in a statement of purpose. The SOP focuses...
GraduateAnu123 - Dec 18, 2020 / Holt - Dec 18, 2020
|'I wanted to become a monkey' - Personal Statement for Masters of Environmental Management
4 - You should have an appropriate introduction. For example: My name is ABC, an environmental scientist in BCD institute. I...
GraduateCallipyge - Dec 14, 2020 / phidang123 - Dec 17, 2020
|My propensity towards data-driven systems and computer-based application - Data science masters SOP
2 - There is a problem with this essay. Though you fulfilled the academic and technical requirements for the course, even...
Graduateanurag2509 - Dec 15, 2020 / Holt - Dec 15, 2020
|Short answer essay for Masters of Environmental Management
GraduateCallipyge - Dec 10, 2020 / Callipyge - Dec 11, 2020
|SOP - DOCTORAL DEGREE IN ECONOMICS (AGRICULTURAL ECONOMICS)
3 - @Holt. Thanks for the useful feedback. The requirement was stated as lettter of intent. I assumed that...
GraduateDeborah554 - Dec 7, 2020 / Deborah554 - Dec 8, 2020
|SOP For Civil engineering at CMU
3 - Hi Holt, Thank you for your advice. it is really helpful for me I don't have a master degree....
GraduateDuctien1996 - Dec 7, 2020 / Ductien1996 - Dec 8, 2020
|SOP Review for CMU's Master of Software Engineering (MSE for Professionals)
2 - The presentation itself is more of a lengthened experience presentation rather than a statement of purpose. From beginning to...
Graduateshikha1421 - Dec 6, 2020 / Holt - Dec 7, 2020
|Statement of Purpose for MSc on Thermal Power and Fluid Engineering.
4 - Woah! I really appreciate your contributions, @Can2018543 and @Holt. Thank you so much. I will apply it for corrections....
GraduateMacjoseph - Dec 4, 2020 / Macjoseph - Dec 6, 2020
|SOP for MSc Program at TU Delft
2 - The second paragraph is irrelevant to the discussion. You should remove that paragraph and replace it instead, with a...
GraduateAda1998 - Dec 3, 2020 / Holt - Dec 4, 2020
|The intro for my SOP for masters in AI
3 - You have misunderstood the prompt for the SOP. A purpose is not the same as an explanation of the...
GraduateRitika_sharma - Nov 30, 2020 / Holt - Dec 1, 2020
|Statement of purpose for Seoul National University KLEC
3 - @Holt Thank you for your advices. So you would suggest I just cut out the first introduction part where...
Graduateviola99 - Nov 27, 2020 / viola99 - Nov 27, 2020
|Check my SOP for a PhD application in material science
GraduatebLANK_95 - Nov 25, 2020 / bLANK_95 - Nov 25, 2020
|Sstudy plan - MA in economics at Concordia University
2 - There are only a few paragraphs from this version that can be transferred to the revised presentation. Use paragraphs...
Graduatebanafsheh - Nov 24, 2020 / Holt - Nov 25, 2020
|Personal Statement for University of Leeds - Msc Advanced Mechanical Engineering
3 - @Holt Thank you for your suggestions. I am still having some queries on what is the difference between a...
Graduatevisakhr1998 - Nov 16, 2020 / visakhr1998 - Nov 17, 2020
|School of visual art - statement of intent for MA of design
2 - You may want to lose the friendly letter of introduction format in this presentation. You are undergoing a written...
Graduatexzhou - Nov 14, 2020 / Holt - Nov 14, 2020
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