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Anesthesia Assistant Masters Application Essay - Nontraditional student.

2 - I realize that you are a non traditional student applying for entry into a Masters course for Anesthesia Assistant....

Graduate VLB07278 - May 11, 2026Holt - May 15, 2026
MOTIVATION STATEMENT: EURO-ASIAN MASTERS IN MEDICAL TECHNOLOGY AND HEALTHCARE BUSINESS (EMMAH) ERASM

2 - I do not believe this is the word you want to use. I bet you did not look...

Graduate ceefortune - May 7, 2026Holt - May 9, 2026
Program: Master of Arts in Teaching (faith based institution)

2 - This personal statement is very insightful and shows a personal connection with your desire to obtain a masters degree....

Graduate evesharo - May 5, 2026Holt - May 6, 2026
Personal Statement for the MBA in Marketing at Inha University

2 - The way that you prompted the AI to use your personal experience in writing the personal statement for you...

Graduate gureumy - Apr 2, 2026Holt - Apr 3, 2026
Personal Statement for DGIST with Advanced Intelligent Mechatronics and Control Laboratory

2 - This is a pretty solid, human written personal statement with very little AI assistance in the polishing aspect. This...

Graduate Hoangvu3108 - Feb 24, 2026Holt - Feb 24, 2026
Application for a masters degree in Biomedical Engineering- Scholarship (1000 words needed)

2 - Your name dies bit define you academically. It however, tells the reviewer who your are. What name your...

Graduate momoo00 - Feb 18, 2026Holt - Feb 19, 2026
Direct-PhD Physics Statement of Purpose for King Fahd University (KFUPM)

2 - You have delivered an excellent expanded resume in this essay. However, that is not what the statement of purpose...

Graduate Hafsa - Feb 15, 2026Holt - Feb 16, 2026
Personal Statement for MIB (China Government Scholarship- University Track)

2 - It is highly unfortunate that you allowed AI to completely write this personal statement for you. So, while the...

Graduate moonsph1nx - Feb 3, 2026Holt - Feb 4, 2026
PTDF Statement of Purpose (Msc Data Engineering)

2 - I frown upon students who come here with 80% AI generated essays, then ask for my opinion on their...

Graduate phrezzz - Jan 30, 2026Holt - Jan 31, 2026
Personal Statement for ILSPSD Erasmus Mundus Programme

2 - Do not repeat or reference information that is in your CV. The reviewer will already know about that...

Graduate ghufran - Jan 28, 2026Holt - Jan 28, 2026
Master Student Autobiography for Admission in Taiwan University

2 - The academic biography is usually integrated into the Statement of Purpose and motivational letter presentation of the application. So...

Graduate venki - Jan 25, 2026Holt - Jan 25, 2026
Motivation letter for the MA in Art History in Tor Vergata, Rome, Italy

2 - I wish you had not used AI to polish this essay. It comes across as highly educated and polished...

Graduate seyedas - Jan 13, 2026Holt - Jan 14, 2026
Personal Statement for MS in Human Factors Engineering at VTech

2 - Your completed essay does not follow the information requirements for the personal statement. A vast majority of the guide...

Graduate v444rsh - Jan 9, 2026Holt - Jan 11, 2026
Computational modelling and Human-Computer Interaction - International Research Programs

2 - You haven't really provided an effective research statement here. I feel that the actual thesis statement is not clearly...

Graduate Pawniwillaceit - Jan 9, 2026Holt - Jan 11, 2026
GKS-G Personal Statement | EdTech major

2 - Good work in using Ai to polish the content of your motivational letter. This essay has kept the human...

Graduate thaohinnn - Jan 6, 2026Holt - Jan 7, 2026
Erasmus Mundus Neuroscience + data science program motivation letter

2 - I like your approach to your motivational letter. However, it still needs to be corrected. For starters, there is...

Graduate obb0526 - Dec 28, 2025Holt - Dec 29, 2025
Personal Statement Letter for IMSISS with ERASMUS MUNDUS / Strategic assessments

4 - The reviewers prefer that the personal statements lean more towards the reflective and pondering side of the applicant. That...

Graduate ghosttwwriter - Dec 26, 2025Holt - Dec 27, 2025
This is my Motivation letter for UvA can someone tell me if it good and what changes i can do

2 - The tone being used in this essay is too informal. Almost AI like in tone and writing content. While...

Graduate Punitj - Dec 27, 2025Holt - Dec 27, 2025
Personal statement for IMSISS

2 - A personal statement is not the same as a motivation essay. Therefore, the minute the reviewer read these...

Graduate Believe4580 - Dec 24, 2025Holt - Dec 27, 2025
Academic Personal Statement for Masters in Robotics at a top university in the USA.

2 - The rationale behind your desire to pursue this masters degree is difficult to find in this presentation. The paragraph...

Graduate neevan642 - Dec 22, 2025Holt - Dec 25, 2025
Academic Statement of purpose for Masters in Computer Science at a top university in the USA.

6 - The advice I gave you regarding how to fix this essay applies to the next personal statement that you...

Graduate Abhirup7 - Dec 20, 2025Holt - Dec 24, 2025
Personal Statement for Erasmus Mundus Joint Master IMSISS Programme

2 - You need a clearer introduction in the first 2 paragraphs. Your department and its problems should be mentioned first,...

Graduate Handy - Dec 14, 2025Holt - Dec 15, 2025
GKS G My Personal Statement of Early Childhood Education

2 - Your discussion is very generalized in coverage when the GKS requires a slightly more in-depth representation of your information....

Graduate bbdaga - Dec 11, 2025Holt - Dec 12, 2025
Statement of purpose for master application - Semiconductor

2 - This does not show a solid direction in terms of your career path. You are telling the reviewer...

Graduate audreylee1005 - Dec 7, 2025Holt - Dec 8, 2025
Statement of purpose and objectives for studying - KAIST graduate admission

2 - A statement of purpose should not be seen by the reviewers as your academic, technical, or professional history. Rather,...

Graduate audreylee1005 - Dec 4, 2025Holt - Dec 4, 2025
'Learning to Listen: How Places and People Shaped My Architecture' - Graduate Statement of Intent

2 - The paper does not properly represent a statement of intent. This is only usable as an undergraduate application essay....

Graduate sam1012 - Nov 20, 2025Holt - Nov 21, 2025
GKS-G 2026 Personal statement for AI related major

2 - Save this in-depth discussion for your Language Study Plan essay. It is misplaced here as it does...

Graduate JoaoMansur - Nov 16, 2025Holt - Nov 17, 2025
Statement of Purpose for PhD in Computer Science (with focus on AI in healthcare)

2 - I am not sure how to direct your application essay at this point because there is no information about...

Graduate raaajit - Oct 26, 2025Holt - Oct 26, 2025
Linguistics and Natural Language Processing Personal Statement - University of Edinburgh MSc

2 - The actual mission of your quest to complete an MSc in the University of Edinburgh is not fully detailed...

Graduate thinker24 - Oct 23, 2025Holt - Oct 24, 2025
From Bangladesh to the US - personal statement for Hunter College TESOL grad school program

2 - You should not be referencing other languages in the personal statement. While you are using this to prove your...

Graduate sheriecherie - Oct 8, 2025Holt - Oct 9, 2025
Suggestions needed: Statement of Purpose for Erasmus Mundus Master's Program in Public Policy (MAPP)

2 - As a masters degree student, your statement of purpose should clearly explain the next phase of your academic plans...

Graduate msamfromjava - Sep 22, 2025Holt - Sep 22, 2025
Brain and cognitive science graduate school

2 - Further expand on this area. What did your advanced research reveal? How was it received by the funding...

Graduate naminaaa - Sep 7, 2025Holt - Sep 9, 2025
The Business Analytics Program - Why is MSBA program the next logical step for you?

2 - The information you have presented for your application is strong in terms of content but tends to be bogged...

Graduate ajain2007 - Jan 13, 2025Holt - Jan 14, 2025
my motivation for the European Master in Public Health Europubhealth +

2 - You are making over assumptions in this case. It would be better not to make such references...

Graduate CJB20223 - Dec 26, 2024Holt - Dec 26, 2024
Copenhagen Business School MSC Digital Business / Business Administration Motivational Essay

2 - Hi, the focus of each essay is different so you cannot combine the information for each essay into 1....

Graduate jebb1e - Dec 23, 2024Holt - Dec 24, 2024
Green finance and economy - ERASMUS PERSONAL STATEMENT

2 - It appears that you have written a second version of the same essay topic. This one is supposed to...

Graduate habibraza22 - Dec 21, 2024Holt - Dec 22, 2024
A Story of Rebellious Child - GLOCAL Erasmus Mundus Personal Statement

2 - Rather than telling this one dimensional story that does not really help to inform the reviewer regarding the...

Graduate jakartainrain - Dec 18, 2024Holt - Dec 21, 2024
PhD Program in Computer Science at George Mason University - SOP

3 - @Holt Thank you for the feedback. I will update. Can you point out if there are "strength" issues or...

Graduate ffisty_98 - Dec 11, 2024ffisty_98 - Dec 12, 2024
Applying for Computer Science PhD, Statement of Purpose

2 - I am not sure if you will qualify as a PhD applicant because you do not list the correct...

Graduate mrr007 - Dec 10, 2024Holt - Dec 11, 2024
SOP for Master's in Electrical Engineering / ECE

2 - You can use this section to align your academic and professional goals with the university curriculum offering. You...

Graduate applicant101 - Dec 9, 2024Holt - Dec 9, 2024
Statement of Purpose for PhD programme in Chemical Engineering

2 - The reviewer does not care that these programs appeal to you. What matters to him is how you...

Graduate ahmed326 - Nov 29, 2024Holt - Nov 30, 2024
USC Graduate Interactive Media Personal Statement - Why interactive media?

4 - Thank you @Holt @woodg for the feedback! I removed the premed info and rewrote the gaps. Thanks again!...

Graduate potatotush - Nov 9, 2024potatotush - Nov 25, 2024
STATEMENT OF PURPOSE - MASTER IN LOGISTICS AND SUPPLY CHAIN MANAGEMENT

4 - The response sounds like you are still focused on academic development over a period of 5 years when you...

Graduate Heidi_han - Nov 14, 2024Holt - Nov 19, 2024
Personal Statement Review : Masters in Accounting and Finance

2 - These references to childhood influences should be used only for college Accounting major applications. You must go...

Graduate helloitisme - Nov 16, 2024Holt - Nov 17, 2024
SOP review for masters in data science at CMU

2 - This is actually a negative statement in the eyes of the reviewer. This is not something you would...

Graduate yeshwanthg - Nov 15, 2024Holt - Nov 15, 2024
Statement of Purpose - UCSD - Cognitive Science PhD Application

2 - This does not matter. What matters to them will be the mirroring of your research with the professors....

Graduate tts2024 - Nov 15, 2024Holt - Nov 15, 2024
Statement of Purpose - MS in Computer Science at EPFL

2 - The introduction does not set the stage for your interest in Ms Computer Science. You need to revise the...

Graduate shades123 - Nov 14, 2024Holt - Nov 14, 2024
STATEMENT OF PURPOSE – M.S. SAFETY ENGINEERING, XXX UNIVERSITY

2 - It will catch the reveiwer's attention better if you open with a narrative about a similar catastrophe that...

Graduate clarence94 - Nov 14, 2024Holt - Nov 14, 2024
SOP for Automatic Control Engineering at Polimi

2 - You keep mentioning goals that the university aligns with on a personal basis, yet you never mention what these...

Graduate ryayra - Nov 12, 2024Holt - Nov 13, 2024
PhD Microbiology SOP University of Wisconsin

2 - Do not go so far back into your history. This is a statement of purpose. Focus on your...

Graduate Eola - Nov 12, 2024Holt - Nov 13, 2024
Masters in Computer Science application Statement of Purpose (SOP)

2 - Since this is published work, you need to provide the issue specifics such as the date of publication,...

Graduate rish210 - Nov 10, 2024Holt - Nov 10, 2024
Opinions on my masters degree autobiography for CS (Taiwan)

2 - I am considering how well the reviewer will receive this information considering that these are all academic, and thus...

Graduate sentuLLL - Nov 9, 2024Holt - Nov 10, 2024
Structural engineering passion - Personal Statement for Graduate Admission

2 - I do not believe that it is a good idea to mention these two professors in the presentation....

Graduate BrandonDX - Nov 8, 2024Holt - Nov 10, 2024
My first personal statement: Multidisciplinary PhD Program in Biomedical Sciences at Rutgers School

5 - Thank you very much for the consideration, I will work on it....

Graduate lucaszanusso - Nov 2, 2024lucaszanusso - Nov 3, 2024
Biotechnology and bioengineering - commonwealth development impact statement

2 - Unfortunately, your response does not provide the expected responses to the Commonwealth Development Impact statement as required. The written...

Graduate Aeshna Agarwal - Oct 14, 2024Holt - Oct 14, 2024
Personal Statement for MSc Information Technology University of Glasgow

3 - Highlight specific outcomes from your projects, such as improvements in security metrics or stakeholder feedback, to illustrate the impact...

Graduate verschaffeltii - Oct 3, 2024Nandia20060709 - Oct 13, 2024
Building strong network and relationships - Chevening

3 - I suggest you to use STAR method while writing you essay it will make your essay way more structured....

Graduate seeeed - Sep 24, 2024habib_baharuddin - Oct 11, 2024
Personal statement - integrative systems biology PhD program Pitt University

2 - Never indicate that you were not interested in a certain field until later on. Being a PhD applicant,...

Graduate southlab - Oct 5, 2024Holt - Oct 10, 2024
Transportation and Geoinformation Technology - Motivation Letter for Applying Master Program

2 - Your degree is related to Forestry Engineering, which is all about the management of natural resources. You are over...

Graduate ahmadazmi - Oct 1, 2024Holt - Oct 2, 2024
Personal Statement for Master of Science in Anesthesia

3 - I think acronyms like CAA could have been better explained,Since your reviewer might not be a person in the...

Graduate edumanzo - Sep 22, 2024seeeed - Sep 24, 2024

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