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|SOP for Master of information / Computer Programming (Harvard online)
2 - @ynynl In terms of content, I think that your essay is excellent. It has provided a comprehensive overview of...
Graduateynynl - 13 hours ago / Maria - 1 hour ago
|Motivation for selecting a career in healthcare & interest in becoming an anesthesiologist assistant
3 - @present1079 With minor flaws and a few alterations, I think that your essay is good-to-go already. Regardless of this,...
Graduatepresent1079 - 1 day ago / Maria - 1 day ago
|Check my SOP for Department of Material Science and Simulation at Ruhr-Universitaet Bochum
Graduatevishnumohan327 - Apr 16, 2019 / Maria - Apr 16, 2019
|Personal Statement for Medical School - My Scribing Experience
2 - Hello, I've read your writing and I find it quite interesting. You have mentioned some anecdotes to show how...
Graduatehdholaki - Apr 12, 2019 / cao1km - Apr 12, 2019
|Personal Statement for MSc in Data Science / Informatics School
3 - Thank you very much for your response. I agree with your suggestions. However, in case I proceed in...
Graduateredykt - Apr 11, 2019 / redykt - Apr 11, 2019
|Green Technology and Engineering - Help with my Personal statement
3 - @Ise_g I think that your essay's formatting is beautiful because of your usage of anecdotes. The more personalized an...
GraduateIse_g - Apr 5, 2019 / Maria - Apr 6, 2019
|MBA application Essay draft, the 'spikiest' pictures with the explanations.
3 - Thank you so much Maria! That is really helpful. I need watch out grammars. I will upload new one....
GraduateJolin lu - Mar 27, 2019 / Jolin lu - Mar 27, 2019
|Goal of study and study plan for Korean university application
4 - I think your essay is a little messy. I would recommend you add more life situations and reduce the...
Graduateitha20 - Mar 21, 2019 / IamIana - Mar 27, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for MSc in Data Science (Marketing Analysis)
4 - Revision: I am applying to the Data Science & Engineering program for the opportunity to earn a Master...
Graduatepharyacha - Mar 24, 2019 / pc_pc - Mar 26, 2019
|Letter of Motivation - MSc Economics Universitat Hamburg
2 - Inzzudinfarras, I suggest that you review basic grammar rules and punctuation. There were several slips in your essay....
GraduateIzzudinfarras - Mar 18, 2019 / Maria - Mar 22, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for M.Sc in Computer Science - Germany
2 - There are a few changes that are suggested in able to allow clarity to your application letter. In...
Graduatebsse0520 - Mar 20, 2019 / Constance - Mar 22, 2019
|Personal Application Statement of Msc electronic information engineering
2 - Since this is an academic paper, please remove such statements as "As a matter of fact" and "In the...
GraduateAirydisc - Mar 17, 2019 / Constance - Mar 22, 2019
|Study Plan for Canada Study Permit- MEng in Civil and Env Engineering.
Graduatedecimo1993 - Mar 16, 2019 / decimo1993 - Mar 17, 2019
|MSc in Accounting and Finance - extended personal statement
Graduatenemo2020 - Mar 5, 2019 / nemo2020 - Mar 14, 2019
|SOP for Msc Business Analytics; improving systems to gather enormous amount of data
4 - @Holt Thanks a lot for your informative response. I was not aware of the difference between them. I wrote...
Graduatetomm3344 - Mar 8, 2019 / tomm3344 - Mar 11, 2019
|Better English teaching. What makes me eligible for the Fulbright Scholarship? Study objective essay
GraduateHama1996 - Mar 7, 2019 / Hama1996 - Mar 8, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for Business Informatics/Management Information Systems
2 - @lebronzey set this essay aside and use it as the basis of your personal statement when that requirement comes...
Graduatelebronzey - Mar 7, 2019 / Holt - Mar 8, 2019
|Pharmcas- Pharmacy school personal statement!
3 - The main thing that I find confusing here is that as a pharmacist, your mother was never in a...
Graduaterlawlgnskite - Feb 28, 2019 / Holt - Mar 1, 2019
|GKS 2019 personal statement, Culture and Tourism Contents
3 - Samara, it isn't about what you want to tell the reviewer, it's about what the reviewer needs to know...
Graduateshagharo - Feb 26, 2019 / Holt - Feb 26, 2019
|The need for representation of women in the Bahamas
5 - The examples of successful women will depend upon which sector of society you want to represent their participation in....
GraduateMickey242 - Feb 20, 2019 / Holt - Feb 22, 2019
|Difficult to be accepted into Physical Therapy. Personal Essay 2018-2019 PTCAS
Graduatesfrancois212 - Feb 20, 2019 / sfrancois212 - Feb 21, 2019
|Ideal balance between theory and practical application. Personal Statement - Business Analytics
3 - Jorgen, when considering what the content of a personal statement should be, a reviewer will find that this essay...
Graduatejhalmsli - Feb 17, 2019 / Holt - Feb 18, 2019
|My interest in Korea can be traced to the beginning of the years 2000s... (GKS 2019)
2 - Aline, there is no need to reference your family background as you did in this essay. That is not...
Graduateamesquita - Feb 16, 2019 / Holt - Feb 17, 2019
|The robust course curriculum offered. SOP for Master's in Business Analytics
2 - Roshini, you have to revise the statement of purpose to discuss how your college studies helped prepare you for...
GraduateRoshini - Feb 16, 2019 / Holt - Feb 17, 2019
|Texas A&M MS in Marketing - why study at Mays
4 - Shruti, I find that the statement that you wrote is not properly focused on a useful response. The most...
Graduateshrutishahh - Feb 15, 2019 / Holt - Feb 16, 2019
|Urban planning and real estate managemenet of Korea - KGSP/GKS personal statement
3 - @IamIana Tehre are specific discussion points for the GKS - G personal statement. Most of which are not represented...
GraduateIamIana - Feb 15, 2019 / Holt - Feb 16, 2019
|Motivation, plans and goals to make a breakthrough in construction industry and material science
Graduateafaf_93 - Feb 10, 2019 / abclaudya - Feb 11, 2019
|2nd Application Essay - Global MBA Program University of Hawaii
2 - The problem with your essay is that it is about an extra curricular activity. So there is a lack...
Graduatepjongko91 - Feb 8, 2019 / Holt - Feb 9, 2019
|KGSP Application - Part 2 (research goal - how can I contribute?)
7 - I think that since you mentioned that you have learned korean for three years its enough if you only...
Graduateeviand - Feb 2, 2019 / Jazzmin - Feb 8, 2019
|Civil Engineering - KGSP Application Goal of study & Study Plan
2 - Hessel, more than 90% of this essay is not geared towards the goal of study and study plan of...
Graduatehesseljw - Feb 6, 2019 / Holt - Feb 7, 2019
|Digital Triangle Team - Review my admission essay.
3 - Salah, the reviewer is looking for a more solid representation of your responsibility skills. Based on the discussion you...
GraduateBEBROS - Feb 6, 2019 / Holt - Feb 6, 2019
|1st Essay - Global MBA Program, Shidler College of Business (University of Hawaii at Manoa)
5 - Thanks for the detailed feedback. I will incorporate your observations into my second draft. Thanks again!...
Graduatepjongko91 - Feb 5, 2019 / pjongko91 - Feb 6, 2019
|KGSP-Graduate Personal Statement for Archaeology; Dead Men Do Tell Tales
Graduateggmax - Jan 27, 2019 / Jazzmin - Feb 5, 2019
|Chemistry Study - PERSONAL STATEMENT for scholarship
2 - I noticed that this essay is far longer than the average and expected length of a personal statement. A...
GraduateJazzmin - Feb 4, 2019 / Holt - Feb 5, 2019
|Data Science Masters - Columbia University Personal Statement
2 - Gautam, this is a very strong essay. I would call it highly competitive and should receive proper consideration from...
Graduategm1234 - Feb 2, 2019 / Holt - Feb 3, 2019
|An accountant - Statement of Purpose for applying Master
2 - Elen, while the first paragraph somewhat responds to one of the questions, the rest of the essay does not...
GraduateHeinna10 - Jan 31, 2019 / Holt - Feb 1, 2019
|Dual concentration in statistics and pure mathematics. Statement of Purpose for MS in Statistics
3 - @Holt Thanks so much for your response! Very helpful advice - I'm going to work on revising my statement...
Graduatehm1234 - Jan 30, 2019 / hm1234 - Jan 31, 2019
|KGSP Statement of Purpose - trying to stay withing word limit while including only useful info
Graduateeviand - Jan 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 31, 2019
|Statement Of Purpose for Stanford Graduate Computer Science Program
3 - The word limit is 750. @Holt , thanks for the input. I will definitely take research/study interest into account...
Graduatecweng - Jan 29, 2019 / cweng - Jan 30, 2019
|Graduate degree in User Experience Design - Master of Information
2 - Muhammad, you are over explaining your reasons in the essay. The over explanations result in you digressing from the...
GraduateReza2019 - Jan 29, 2019 / Holt - Jan 30, 2019
|My life was chosen for me from the womb. Personal Statement for Chemistry Graduate School
2 - If I have understood you correctly, you aim to study in chemistry instead of becoming a doctor - so...
Graduateprincesskitten - Jan 28, 2019 / delelse - Jan 28, 2019
|My enthusiasm to explore data science. Personal Statement - The Data Science Colloquium at Michigan
3 - Yilin, the personal statement should show the development of your interest in the major you have chosen. It is...
Graduateyoungnmax - Jan 27, 2019 / Holt - Jan 28, 2019
|Statement of Purpose - MS in Data Science George Washington University
3 - I think you could use the fourth paragraph as a start of your statement of purpose. And you could...
GraduateLedTheZeppelin - Jan 14, 2019 / youngnmax - Jan 27, 2019
|A supplementary essay describing a challenge faced at work and how I overcame it
3 - Pranay, first up, you cannot use a mock situation at the office. A mock situation is simply a task...
GraduatePranaySingla - Jan 26, 2019 / Holt - Jan 27, 2019
|Data Science is a promising profession - University of Michigan SOP
2 - Yilin, how far into the future are your travel agency plans? Give it a time-frame. Remember that the MS...
Graduateyoungnmax - Jan 26, 2019 / Holt - Jan 27, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for Meng in Chemical Engineeing National University of Singapore
2 - Shi, please set this essay aside and use it later on as a personal statement. The essay is not...
Graduateivy1223 - Jan 23, 2019 / Holt - Jan 24, 2019
|Reasons for choosing IPCV as field of interest and as program of study
2 - Pazhanivel, there is a strong reference to your practical research skills in this motivation letter. That is good for...
GraduateLevinahzapa - Jan 19, 2019 / Holt - Jan 21, 2019
|SOP for Master of Science in Advanced Methods & Data Analysis
9 - Take the research and methodology reference our of your CV and place it in the relevant essay section. This...
GraduateIris_viva - Dec 28, 2018 / Holt - Jan 20, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for MS Human Computer-Interaction, HCI at the University of Siegen
3 - Though the deadline has passed, I would suggest that you synthesize your paragraphs otherwise the information seems to be...
GraduateMTariqKhan - Jan 9, 2019 / Iris_viva - Jan 19, 2019
|My struggle about abstract (World English studies)
Graduatesummerwangs - Jan 17, 2019 / Holt - Jan 18, 2019
|Statement of Purpose for Social work and welfare masters program
2 - Ari, this is more of a personal statement than a statement of purpose. The personal statement comes in at...
GraduateDofarian - Jan 11, 2019 / Holt - Jan 12, 2019
|25 interesting facts describing myself - Duke MQM
3 - Thanks a lot for your advice! I replace the statement of my mother's cancer with this one: I like...
Graduatesirenccc - Jan 10, 2019 / sirenccc - Jan 11, 2019
|My inspiration to pursue a degree in information- personal statement
3 - Thank you so much for your help! Your comment about valuing my own motivating factors over my family background...
Graduatessiwakot - Jan 10, 2019 / ssiwakot - Jan 10, 2019
|Computer Science and Learning - Statement of purpose for HCI
2 - Faiz, while your initial writing could use an overall development of information, that is not the only problem of...
GraduateFaizKhan - Jan 9, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2019
|Letter of Intent for Master of Business Administration
2 - Tuyen, your opening paragraph is weak. It does not really catch the attention of the reviewer. The reason it...
GraduateTuyenDo - Jan 9, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2019
|PS for Columbia University Master of Science in Data Science (Part-time); once dismissed from PhD
7 - Hi, Holt thank you for your explanations. It all makes sense. The website's editing service is only grammatical polish?...
Graduateorangeqq99 - Dec 27, 2018 / orangeqq99 - Jan 8, 2019
|Graduate Application Statement of Purpose Essay for Interaction Design Program
2 - I have reviewed your essay and come to the conclusion that you are not delivering the required prompt requirements....
GraduateGangDang - Jan 7, 2019 / Holt - Jan 8, 2019
|Data Mining - KGSP for Graduate Studies
2 - Kristian, you have not created an appropriate goal of study and study plan for this essay. The approach that...
Graduatekristianjb - Jan 6, 2019 / Holt - Jan 7, 2019
|Motivation Letter for master degree in Biomedical Sciences University of Groningen
2 - Sabah, your dedication to research and learning is evident in this motivational letter. However, it is not strong enough...
GraduateSab1991 - Jan 4, 2019 / Holt - Jan 5, 2019
|LOI for MA in Economics and Finance - about myself, my goal, why master's program, etc.
3 - Happy new year 2019! Thank you very much for your response and insight. It is really helpful and i...
Graduatetjhornet - Dec 12, 2018 / tjhornet - Jan 2, 2019
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