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|AAS International Security - Why did you choose your proposed course and institution
3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your suggestion. The problem is this essay is limited to only 2000 characters...
Graduatebystandershopper - 2 days ago / bystandershopper - 2 days ago
|Banking Sector - How will the proposed study contribute to your career*? Australia Award.
GraduateLenabouillot - Mar 26, 2020 / Lenabouillot - Mar 26, 2020
|Seeking advice for a statement of purpose needed to apply for a master in robotics at EPFL.
3 - Hi holt, your feedback has been really welcome. The MSc is indeed targeted to people just finishing their BSc....
Graduatefratopa - Mar 19, 2020 / fratopa - Mar 21, 2020
|GKS2020 Embassy Track Master of Communication & Media Personal Statement
2 - Remove all references to researched content in this essay. You are writing a personal statement, not a research study...
Graduateattalicious - Mar 20, 2020 / Holt - Mar 21, 2020
|Personal statement for applying a MAs educational leadership
2 - The essay tends to be mundane overall. It doesn't really catch the eye of the reviewer. It is descriptive...
GraduateCutecarrot - Mar 20, 2020 / Holt - Mar 21, 2020
|Some people think that strict punishment for driving offences are the key to reduce traffic accident
2 - You forgot to count the discussion topics before you wrote the prompt restatement. This is a comparison of points...
GraduatePheobe - Mar 20, 2020 / Holt - Mar 20, 2020
|Personal Statement to University of Limerick, Ireland
3 - @Holt Hi Holt, Many thanks for your feedback. This statement purpose mainly demonstrates my passions and my background....
Graduatekhangdu8897 - Mar 12, 2020 / khangdu8897 - Mar 14, 2020
|Personal Statement for Financial Mathematics master
Graduateionix - Mar 12, 2020 / ionix - Mar 13, 2020
|Statement of purpose for GKS 2020 (computer engineering) embassy track
3 - @getdani Hi, I think you should start the essay with a nice introduction. Don't hold shotgun than blows...
Graduategetdani - Mar 9, 2020 / shingeki1996 - Mar 11, 2020
|Learning and unlearning (Msc Motivation Letter- Software Engineering)
Graduatepranklyspeaking - Mar 9, 2020 / pranklyspeaking - Mar 10, 2020
|GKS 2020 Statement of Purpose: Focus on SMEs for better productivity
2 - I am afraid that you will need to revise this essay. You see, the masters degree course you plan...
Graduateitsmedione - Mar 9, 2020 / Holt - Mar 10, 2020
|About my internship: help me with the grammar mistakes and the fluency in my essay!
4 - @Holt thank you for your suggestions! I rewrite the essay. I would like to know if this is clear...
Graduateemem123 - Mar 2, 2020 / emem123 - Mar 3, 2020
|GKS 2020 University track Global Business major personal statement
2 - The motivation with which you apply to the course is not really solid towards representing a future career path...
Graduatebekakzkz - Mar 1, 2020 / Holt - Mar 2, 2020
|Fulbright Master's Future Plans Essay
4 - @gtacchini i think it is better to outline WHY the current program will benefit you future career, and HOW...
Graduategtacchini - Feb 25, 2020 / alie_alie - Feb 27, 2020
|Personal Statement for GKS 2020 Graduate under Graduate Program of Industrial Pharmaceutical Science
2 - There is a severe lack of Korean connections between your work experience and academic background. Your interest in studying...
Graduatenblhhld - Feb 26, 2020 / Holt - Feb 27, 2020
|Essay on 'Why My Undergraduate Academic Performance Is A Poor Indication of Potential'
Graduatechazoko - Feb 25, 2020 / Ulaai - Feb 26, 2020
|Motivation letter For Masters Program in Accounting and Auditing
Graduatealie_alie - Feb 26, 2020 / alie_alie - Feb 26, 2020
|Msc in Civil Engineering personal statement. My Passion for civil engineering and Transport Planning
Graduatepam2233 - Feb 24, 2020 / pam2233 - Feb 26, 2020
|My personal Statement to study Biochemical Engineering; I seek to pursue a career in science
2 - Your essay is a bit too long for a personal statement. You don't really need to present an autobiography...
GraduateBenedicta Frema - Feb 24, 2020 / Holt - Feb 24, 2020
|SOP for Masters in Business Analytics; using data to extract right knowledge and insights
2 - The essay needs to be edited to make it more interesting to read. This being a statement of purpose...
Graduateschoudhary - Feb 24, 2020 / Holt - Feb 24, 2020
|I am willing and able to share mentioned skills and competence with MBA's classmates.
4 - @serbinax Thank you for your valuable feedback. I'll try to rework it somehow and again will send it here....
Graduatealmas_kz - Feb 19, 2020 / almas_kz - Feb 21, 2020
|Review My Personal Statement For a Master Degree In Data Science at Columbia University
3 - @Holt Thank you for your valuable feedback! I do realize that the Essay was pretty lengthy, I just...
Graduatetangc2 - Feb 14, 2020 / tangc2 - Feb 15, 2020
|Kindly Review my Personal Statement for a Masters in Cybersecurity at Sheffield Hallam Uni
4 - Oh, thank you for your insightful response. The application only requested for a minimum of a 100 words....
Graduatestartupng - Feb 12, 2020 / startupng - Feb 14, 2020
|Review my SOP for my application to German university in Computational Engineering.
Graduatesankeerthgn - Feb 13, 2020 / sankeerthgn - Feb 13, 2020
|SOP for MS in Industrial Engineering; to make connections within the field and ultimately land a job
4 - As the major you're applying isn't in line with your undergraduate major (ME -> Industrial Eng), you need to...
GraduateAvenger214 - Feb 8, 2020 / Ulaai - Feb 10, 2020
|Review My Letter of Motivation for Masters in Finance and Economics in Germany
2 - I believe that paragraphs 4 and 5 have the most required information for a letter of motivation. However, both...
Graduateanjumnavid - Feb 8, 2020 / Holt - Feb 9, 2020
|Bioinformatics personal statement for graduate school
2 - It sounds confusing, self-defeating, and illogical. The presentation needs a lot of work. Since the course you want to...
Graduateqguo551 - Feb 5, 2020 / Holt - Feb 6, 2020
|U of T Engineering Supplementary Essay - extracurriculars and developed skills
2 - You don't really need that long-winded introduction at the start. Your essay will be better helped, due to the...
Graduateyellowjello123 - Feb 5, 2020 / Holt - Feb 5, 2020
|Erasmus Mundus Scholarship - Masters in Models and Methods of Quantitative Economics (QEM)
GraduateIshtiaqurrahman - Feb 3, 2020 / Ishtiaqurrahman - Feb 4, 2020
|Applying to the MAIA to be fully educated - SOP
3 - You cannot use any part of this essay for your statement of purpose. This will work as a personal...
Graduatemomda - Feb 2, 2020 / Holt - Feb 3, 2020
|Master in Translational Cosmetics and Dermatological Sciences Motivational Letter
GraduateBiochemcos - Jan 27, 2020 / Biochemcos - Feb 2, 2020
|My long-standing fascination - STATEMENT OF PURPOSE CHEMICAL ENGINEERING MSc PROGRAMME
3 - @Kilekun This Essay does not show any purpose of you undertaking your studies in XXX University. You didn't make...
GraduateKilekun - Jan 31, 2020 / Uromi - Feb 1, 2020
|Statement of Purpose for Data Science & Analytics (MSc) from Cork Institute of Technology
3 - One thing that reviewers do not really like coming across in any sort of essay is a quotation from...
GraduateZeroToInfinity - Jan 30, 2020 / Holt - Jan 30, 2020
|Personal Statement Masters in Data Science / Finance Major
Graduatelethalasian - Jan 27, 2020 / lethalasian - Jan 29, 2020
|Personal Statement for Human Rights and International Politics masters
2 - The development and your experience regarding human rights and its violations are not solid enough in this presentation to...
Graduateionacampbell - Jan 29, 2020 / Holt - Jan 29, 2020
|SOP (Study Plan and Goal) - GKS Scholarship in Computer Engineering
2 - The goal of study and study plan must be based on a thesis like presentation of a problem you...
GraduateYinMOo - Jan 24, 2020 / Holt - Jan 25, 2020
|MMS:Asset Mamagement at YALE
2 - The actual goal of your interest in enrolling in this course is to become a financial adviser. Therefore, all...
GraduateNingP - Jan 23, 2020 / Holt - Jan 24, 2020
|SOP FOR MPH in Boston (HEALTH POLICY AND MANAGEMENT)
3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your time,attention and your corrections. They are very much appreciated. I would work...
GraduateAdekiite - Jan 22, 2020 / Adekiite - Jan 23, 2020
|To be an asset to the program. SOP for MS in Biomedical Regulatory Affairs
2 - Omit the part about your marriage. That is irrelevant to the reviewer and does not prove anything with regards...
Graduateshwetanimwal - Jan 23, 2020 / Holt - Jan 23, 2020
|Review Personal Statement for Data Science Masters
2 - If we are to consider only the relevant parts of your writing that respond to the prompt requirements, we...
GraduateAlatif56 - Jan 21, 2020 / Holt - Jan 22, 2020
|SOP Pharmacy Phd review! I look forward to all critiques
4 - @Ulaai @Holt Thank you both for your valuable feedback! I will definitely be taking your comments into consideration....
Graduatehuskal - Jan 19, 2020 / huskal - Jan 20, 2020
|LOI for MA in International Development - career engagement
Graduatereenaz - Jan 20, 2020 / reenaz - Jan 20, 2020
|Environment Design; STATEMENT OF PURPOSE - Goal of Study & Study Plan / Future plan after Studies
Graduaterafaelapsouzza - Jan 18, 2020 / rafaelapsouzza - Jan 19, 2020
|Pursuing master's degree in International Trade GKS/KGSP - small family and destiny
3 - This essay should not have been based on your personal considerations for content. You must ensure that your work...
Graduatealexng - Dec 25, 2019 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|Personal Statement for Tourism Development and Culture EMJMD
3 - Don't make boastful claims in your letter such as "top student". What the reviewer considers a top student and...
GraduateKhamidova - Dec 24, 2019 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|SOP: Why pursue Masters in Business Analytics in University X (Canada)?
3 - Since this is a statement of purpose for a masters degree, you should be focusing less on your college...
Graduateanalyticsaspiran - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|"Describe a meaninful experience in your life." PT school essay prompt
3 - This sounds like you are writing the beginnings of a novel instead of discussing an important experience in your...
Graduatecheyennebucknerr - Jan 7, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Personal Statement for MS in Applied Data Science
3 - While there is no required word limitation on the personal statement for this university, you should not write more...
GraduateIris_viva - Jan 4, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Structure of SOP essay for UX and UI design
2 - The missing element in this version of your study plan is ; what is the relevance of this research...
Graduatejos3ph - Jan 13, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Master in Finance & Accounting program - my first draft for personal statement
2 - It is a bit difficult to review your personal statement as you did not indicate if the university has...
GraduateKamrul Hasan - Jan 9, 2020 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|Personal Statement - Applying for Master in e-Business Management
Graduatedianaoctavia - Dec 28, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2020
|I am going to write a study objective for the Fulbright scholarship
2 - Hello. From what I understand, it seems like you still don't have specific place to pursue your masters degree...
GraduateAli163 - Dec 24, 2019 / Ulaai - Jan 4, 2020
|National Concern - Graduate Degree Application - Personal Statement for studies in Korea
2 - @eti_k Thank you for coming in this website. First is that don't sound like you admire korea than...
Graduateeti_k - Dec 28, 2019 / shingeki1996 - Jan 4, 2020
|Letter of motivation for EMJMD critical care nursing
3 - @luke matu Hi there. Thanks for coming to the site for feedback! Since you are working with a...
Graduateluke matu - Dec 23, 2019 / Maria - Jan 2, 2020
|Erasmus Mundus in Security and Cloud Computing - expectations, career aspirations, experience, etc.
GraduateYusufbek - Dec 19, 2019 / Yusufbek - Dec 23, 2019
|Essay topic: Carey Business school shapes business leaders who seize the opportunity
2 - @dichangwei Hello. Welcome to the forum! Here is my feedback on your writing. Be cautious of your...
Graduatedichangwei - Dec 19, 2019 / Maria - Dec 23, 2019
|Statement of Purpose in the field of Data Science for a 13 years experience java developer
2 - @surima Welcome! Here is my feedback that I hope can help you out. The first sentence immediately jolts...
Graduatesurima - Dec 18, 2019 / Maria - Dec 19, 2019
|Chain management and me - Applying for Master studies in the United Kingdom
3 - @Maria Thank you so much for the feedback!!! Your comments are very valuable, especially pointed out the fact that...
GraduateTingkkk - Dec 15, 2019 / Tingkkk - Dec 17, 2019
|Personal statement - Former QA & Product Manager applying Master of Data Science
2 - @Hana Fang Welcome to the forum! I hope that my feedback gives you insight on how to improve your...
GraduateHana Fang - Dec 11, 2019 / Maria - Dec 13, 2019
|Audit and Finance LETTER FOR MASTER ADMISSION - the university offers the best opportunities for me
2 - Dear Ernest, I am not going to delve deep into particular details from your writing. Instead, I am...
GraduateATOWILSON - Dec 12, 2019 / Sunrise011 - Dec 13, 2019
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