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|SOP; The perfect fit. The Data Science and Analytics program is what I am looking for.
2 - This better be only a partially written SOP because if this is your full SOP, then you have a...
GraduateChikaa - 1 day ago / Holt - 18 hrs ago
|Autoimmune Disease has shaped my relationship with Medicine - Perfusion school essay
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for taking the time to provide your feedback! I will definitely be revising and...
Graduatecxw67 - Sep 27, 2020 / cxw67 - 2 days ago
|Thoughts about my MS Data Science Statement of Purpose
3 - For the statement of purpose, you need to go beyond your childhood interests and undergraduate training. Since you are...
Graduateksssh - Sep 27, 2020 / Holt - Sep 28, 2020
|MS Business Analytics - Why is the next logical step? What will you gain?
3 - @Holt Thanks a lot for reviewing this. I really appreciate it. It seems that I might have to write...
Graduatesatya07 - Sep 21, 2020 / satya07 - Sep 22, 2020
|Application for Big Data management and Analytics Program to study at the top institution
GraduateNafee - Sep 14, 2020 / Nafee - Sep 14, 2020
|"Relevant Knowledge/Training Skills" MSc in HR Management admissions essay
3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback! This is an essay on the job training which university require in addition...
Graduatemischievous - Sep 5, 2020 / mischievous - Sep 6, 2020
|Personal Statement KGS 2021 / Preparing for Graduate
4 - The more I learn about mechanical engineering, the more I assured that a career as a mechanical engineer is...
GraduateDFS29834 - Aug 25, 2020 / Lily013 - Sep 1, 2020
|"My high school, my second home"
2 - The essay is a bit too superficial in presentation. There is no impact to the description you provided. Though...
GraduateKurekoHikari - Aug 26, 2020 / Holt - Aug 26, 2020
|Both wearing fashionably and quality of work are critical and prominent to success in the work
2 - Ok. For this 2 point of view with personal opinion discussion, you need to follow a specific format. If...
Graduatedinhxuanthanh29 - Aug 2, 2020 / Holt - Aug 2, 2020
|Data Science playing a key role in changing the world - SOP essay
2 - Are you responding to a specific statement of purpose prompt or not? If you are responding to a prompt,...
Graduatefaten91 - Jul 31, 2020 / Holt - Aug 1, 2020
|Masters in Human Resource Management KGSP 2020
NEW - My first Draft.Masters in Human Resource Management KGSP 2020 - Motivations with which you apply for this program...
GraduateKrishaP - Jul 14, 2020 / — -
|Medical School Personal Characteristics Prompt
3 - @Holt Wow you're goooood!!! Thank you so much for your help - English is not my native language, so...
GraduateDrJosh - Jul 13, 2020 / DrJosh - Jul 13, 2020
|Questions about the balance of experience and academic proposal -regarding personal statement
Graduatewingkee - Jun 30, 2020 / wingkee - Jul 11, 2020
|"Never stop learning, for when we stop learning, we stop growing" - SOP for business data analytics
Graduateandyb017 - Jul 8, 2020 / andyb017 - Jul 10, 2020
|Engineering Job - AAS Supporting Statement: Question No. 1
4 - The first paragraph is more useful in the career goal statement response. The second paragraph should be more focused...
Graduatedarklord30 - Jun 28, 2020 / Holt - Jun 29, 2020
|Lecturer in a higher institution - KGSP Future Plan.
2 - This is not a true KGSP Future after studies plan. This is a non-answer that does not give specifics...
GraduateKrishaP - Jun 19, 2020 / Holt - Jun 19, 2020
|Masters admission - Letter of motivation - business and entrepreneurship
3 - @Rohi1 Impressive vocabulary. I think little bit of explanation on how you overcome challenges you faced in your business...
GraduateRohi1 - Jun 8, 2020 / rijumaharjan2052 - Jun 17, 2020
|Masters admission - Letter of motivation - Management
2 - There is no clear motivation in your essay. That is because you aimed to present a personal statement as...
Graduatelclinse - Jun 10, 2020 / Holt - Jun 10, 2020
|Essay: why Design, do you fit for the chosen stream?
2 - While you have shown your passion and motivation for the course in this essay, what you failed to do...
Graduateralph1494 - Jun 8, 2020 / Holt - Jun 9, 2020
|Computer Science Graduate program Application Question - Answer Essay (limited in 250words)
2 - Your transition to tech should be based on more personal and career oriented reasons. Career goals should be indicated...
Graduateathiecheng1010 - Jun 5, 2020 / Holt - Jun 6, 2020
|Why the need to study environment? SOP Just a start.
2 - Your SOP should be more related to your background in Biosecurity. The purpose of your masters application must be...
GraduateEmawin04 - Jun 3, 2020 / Holt - Jun 3, 2020
|Letter of motivation for a Master's Programme in Digital Media and Society
2 - Do not keep using "flow" to kick off your paragraphs. It is not a topic sentence and the repeated...
GraduateAnya_q - May 29, 2020 / Holt - May 29, 2020
|Career change from Finance to Bioinformatics - MS SoP review
2 - This is an excellent personal statement. It doesn't really provide the necessary information to prove that you have a...
Graduatestankunas - May 19, 2020 / Holt - May 19, 2020
|Mechanical engineering at Kohl TU
GraduateKid1975 - May 11, 2020 / Kid1975 - May 11, 2020
|Statement of Purpose for MS in Business Analytics in UK (3 years of Work ex)
2 - The essay needs to focus more on the purpose aspect and less on the narrative background aspect. Your presentation...
Graduategrimmhuntress - May 4, 2020 / Holt - May 5, 2020
|Statement of Purpose for Masters in System Engineering
GraduateAaditya_karan - Apr 28, 2020 / Holt - Apr 29, 2020
|The success of a person depends on the right kind of education - SOP for Masters in Computer Science
2 - Do not treat the statement of purpose as your academic biography. The presentation in this essay does not really...
Graduaterat7378 - Apr 27, 2020 / Holt - Apr 28, 2020
|"Mutual learning" - Essay for the MBA program at Illinois State University
2 - Let's be clear here. The reviewer will require you to provide only 4 paragraphs, at the most, for this...
GraduateIshtiaqurrahman - Apr 23, 2020 / Holt - Apr 23, 2020
|MSc Data Analytics - Admission Essay (supplemental)
2 - Compress the systems you built. Both systems should only comprise one paragraph. Your essay ran too long because of...
Graduateastridglo - Apr 20, 2020 / Holt - Apr 21, 2020
|Statement of Purpose - MSc Applied Data Analytics
2 - The first 2 paragraphs are what directly affect the length of your essay. Too much backstory is affecting the...
Graduateglowryeah - Apr 15, 2020 / Holt - Apr 16, 2020
|As a GOI-IES Scholar, how will you extend yourself beyond your project/studies
2 - The most promising part of this essay is the last paragraph. Properly developed, it holds the most interesting method...
Graduatenabilah_hannan - Apr 8, 2020 / Holt - Apr 9, 2020
|Energy Engineer - Statement of purpose for masters.
GraduateFroggy23 - Apr 8, 2020 / Froggy23 - Apr 8, 2020
|Social Services - I am applying to MPH programs and this is my SOP
Graduateekidowu - Apr 5, 2020 / ekidowu - Apr 6, 2020
|Statement of purpose - why I want to apply for Master in Business Analytics?
2 - The essay needs to be reformatted in order to create a more interesting SOP and information presentation. The current...
Graduatesadikabid27 - Apr 4, 2020 / Holt - Apr 4, 2020
|Review my Essay for Msc in Data Science from LMU and suggest any changes
3 - Thanks a lot Holt for your valuable suggestions. I will surely make the changes as suggested by you. Again,...
Graduatedikshita - Apr 3, 2020 / dikshita - Apr 3, 2020
|"Three aspects'" - Self introduction for master's degree interview
4 - I think that you should add the data you wrote this letter and tell more about the purposes and...
GraduateZavy - Mar 31, 2020 / emmawattson - Mar 31, 2020
|AAS International Security - Why did you choose your proposed course and institution
3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your suggestion. The problem is this essay is limited to only 2000 characters...
Graduatebystandershopper - Mar 27, 2020 / bystandershopper - Mar 27, 2020
|Banking Sector - How will the proposed study contribute to your career*? Australia Award.
GraduateLenabouillot - Mar 26, 2020 / Lenabouillot - Mar 26, 2020
|GKS2020 Embassy Track Master of Communication & Media Personal Statement
2 - Remove all references to researched content in this essay. You are writing a personal statement, not a research study...
Graduateattalicious - Mar 20, 2020 / Holt - Mar 21, 2020
|Personal statement for applying a MAs educational leadership
2 - The essay tends to be mundane overall. It doesn't really catch the eye of the reviewer. It is descriptive...
GraduateCutecarrot - Mar 20, 2020 / Holt - Mar 21, 2020
|Some people think that strict punishment for driving offences are the key to reduce traffic accident
2 - You forgot to count the discussion topics before you wrote the prompt restatement. This is a comparison of points...
GraduatePheobe - Mar 20, 2020 / Holt - Mar 20, 2020
|Seeking advice for a statement of purpose needed to apply for a master in robotics at EPFL.
2 - The first question I have is, why are you applying for admission to a master's course without first having...
Graduatefratopa - Mar 19, 2020 / Holt - Mar 20, 2020
|Personal Statement to University of Limerick, Ireland
3 - @Holt Hi Holt, Many thanks for your feedback. This statement purpose mainly demonstrates my passions and my background....
Graduatekhangdu8897 - Mar 12, 2020 / khangdu8897 - Mar 14, 2020
|Personal Statement for Financial Mathematics master
Graduateionix - Mar 12, 2020 / ionix - Mar 13, 2020
|Statement of purpose for GKS 2020 (computer engineering) embassy track
3 - @getdani Hi, I think you should start the essay with a nice introduction. Don't hold shotgun than blows...
Graduategetdani - Mar 9, 2020 / shingeki1996 - Mar 11, 2020
|GKS 2020 Statement of Purpose: Focus on SMEs for better productivity
2 - I am afraid that you will need to revise this essay. You see, the masters degree course you plan...
Graduateitsmedione - Mar 9, 2020 / Holt - Mar 10, 2020
|Learning and unlearning (Msc Motivation Letter- Software Engineering)
2 - Take an international point of view regarding your interest in Software Engineering. Discuss how you maybe plan to develop...
Graduatepranklyspeaking - Mar 9, 2020 / Holt - Mar 10, 2020
|About my internship: help me with the grammar mistakes and the fluency in my essay!
3 - Your essay does not make any sense to the reader. You have 300 words with which to write this...
Graduateemem123 - Mar 2, 2020 / Holt - Mar 2, 2020
|GKS 2020 University track Global Business major personal statement
2 - The motivation with which you apply to the course is not really solid towards representing a future career path...
Graduatebekakzkz - Mar 1, 2020 / Holt - Mar 2, 2020
|Fulbright Master's Future Plans Essay
4 - @gtacchini i think it is better to outline WHY the current program will benefit you future career, and HOW...
Graduategtacchini - Feb 25, 2020 / alie_alie - Feb 27, 2020
|Personal Statement for GKS 2020 Graduate under Graduate Program of Industrial Pharmaceutical Science
2 - There is a severe lack of Korean connections between your work experience and academic background. Your interest in studying...
Graduatenblhhld - Feb 26, 2020 / Holt - Feb 27, 2020
|Essay on 'Why My Undergraduate Academic Performance Is A Poor Indication of Potential'
Graduatechazoko - Feb 25, 2020 / Ulaai - Feb 26, 2020
|Motivation letter For Masters Program in Accounting and Auditing
Graduatealie_alie - Feb 26, 2020 / alie_alie - Feb 26, 2020
|Msc in Civil Engineering personal statement. My Passion for civil engineering and Transport Planning
Graduatepam2233 - Feb 24, 2020 / Holt - Feb 25, 2020
|My personal Statement to study Biochemical Engineering; I seek to pursue a career in science
2 - Your essay is a bit too long for a personal statement. You don't really need to present an autobiography...
GraduateBenedicta Frema - Feb 24, 2020 / Holt - Feb 24, 2020
|SOP for Masters in Business Analytics; using data to extract right knowledge and insights
2 - The essay needs to be edited to make it more interesting to read. This being a statement of purpose...
Graduateschoudhary - Feb 24, 2020 / Holt - Feb 24, 2020
|I am willing and able to share mentioned skills and competence with MBA's classmates.
4 - @serbinax Thank you for your valuable feedback. I'll try to rework it somehow and again will send it here....
Graduatealmas_kz - Feb 19, 2020 / almas_kz - Feb 21, 2020
|Review My Personal Statement For a Master Degree In Data Science at Columbia University
3 - @Holt Thank you for your valuable feedback! I do realize that the Essay was pretty lengthy, I just...
Graduatetangc2 - Feb 14, 2020 / tangc2 - Feb 15, 2020
|Kindly Review my Personal Statement for a Masters in Cybersecurity at Sheffield Hallam Uni
4 - Oh, thank you for your insightful response. The application only requested for a minimum of a 100 words....
Graduatestartupng - Feb 12, 2020 / startupng - Feb 14, 2020
|Review my SOP for my application to German university in Computational Engineering.
Graduatesankeerthgn - Feb 13, 2020 / sankeerthgn - Feb 13, 2020
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