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|350 words|Personal Statement for MS in Entrepreneurship and Innovation of USC
9 - @Holt Hi holt, Thanks for your revising tips. I will incorporate your advices into the final draft and...
GraduateIanthexx - Feb 23, 2017 / Ianthexx - 08:59am
|Mathematics education - Statement of purpose for grad school
4 - I am sorry to say this but the essay that you wrote does not fall within the KGSP prompt...
Graduateanne09 - 02:36am / Holt - 06:22am
|The journey from a Plant Engineer to an Entrepreneur. SOP for supply chain management
2 - Deepain, the first thing you have to do with this essay is shorten the length. This is too long...
Graduatedeepain - Yesterday / Holt - 02:25am
|Persevering my dream. Self Introduction Letter for Graduate School.
4 - Hi Ana, I understand that we want to prove our candidacy with details. But given that the adult...
Graduatepb1013 - Feb 23, 2017 / Ianthexx - Yesterday
|Self introduction for Master degree in different field from undergraduate degree.
2 - Prapisiri, you need to write a totally new essay because this current essay doesn't provide the KGSP requirements for...
Graduatejewjewmabushii - Yesterday / Holt - Yesterday
|Health, education, nutrition. Study & Future Plans Abroad Essay
3 - Ana, these are supposed to be written as 2 separate essays composed of one page each. The study plan...
Graduatepb1013 - Feb 23, 2017 / Holt - Yesterday
|Emerging care system market for the elderly in Taiwan. SOP for Actuarial Science in the USA
3 - OK, I see. I will try it. thanks for your suggestion.[/b][/b]...
Graduaterobin963a - Feb 22, 2017 / robin963a - Feb 22, 2017
|This is an essay for admission to an American university for masters in construction management.
29 - Like I said, this essay is good enough to submit. You have done your best to represent your intentions...
Graduateratan251294 - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Feb 21, 2017
|Statement of purpose for Master's course in English Linguistics/ English Literatures and Cultures
3 - I am very grateful to you for your priceless advice. I will definitely follow it. Thank you...
Graduatealinakarimova714 - Feb 14, 2017 / alinakarimova714 - Feb 20, 2017
|My Statement of Purpose for MSc Information Systems at King AbdulAziz University, Jeddah, KSA
2 - Haris, I believe that you have chosen to present the purpose of your study at the start of the...
Graduateharis182 - Feb 20, 2017 / Holt - Feb 20, 2017
|Goals to implement; being professional means being successful
5 - Here is the thing, you are writing a post study plan and yo have to be truthful about this...
Graduatelukme - Feb 13, 2017 / Holt - Feb 18, 2017
|LSE. You must present a personal statement with your application form, between 1,000 and 1,500 words
15 - Holt, I will make that final adjustment and get ready to send it off. Thank you very much for...
GraduateZak Cannon - Feb 11, 2017 / Zak Cannon - Feb 17, 2017
|Motivation Letter for General Linguistics at Radboud University
6 - Choerunnisa, since this is a motivational letter, the information about the organizations that you were a leader of are...
Graduatechoerunnisa23 - Feb 16, 2017 / Holt - Feb 16, 2017
|An Email to Preferred Supervisor - Requirement to apply Master Degree in Japan
5 - Hope it helps! I am considering applying to the International Course... urban and regional planning area. ... especially...
Graduateuta - Feb 14, 2017 / CCA92 - Feb 16, 2017
|London School of Economics personal statement Master in finance
2 - Erik, the personal statement is not an extension of your resume. So remove all of the parts of the...
Graduateewmansil - Feb 15, 2017 / Holt - Feb 15, 2017
|To make India independent of fossil fuels; Motivational letter for Masters in Renewable Energy
5 - Malika, your letter doesn't really work very well because you have presented too much information in it. a motivational...
GraduateMalavika Venu - Feb 8, 2017 / Holt - Feb 12, 2017
|Like potato chips - you can never have just one. SCAD Graduate Admissions Essay for Animation
4 - Colinda, I would like to say that your approach to sentence construction is awesome. This means that if you...
GraduateMintyFresh - Feb 10, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Feb 11, 2017
|Great interest on computer science - SOP: M.Sc. in Artificial Intelligence
4 - @Holt @ichanpants89 Thank you so much for your help I will absolutely make the changes and see how it...
Graduatebonifacechacha - Feb 7, 2017 / bonifacechacha - Feb 8, 2017
|Motivation Letter for Master in Business Administration to Radboud University
6 - Having work experience normally helps in your application. Usually masters degree students have worked in their field of interest...
Graduatehrasky - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 7, 2017
|Math level in Philipinnes and Korea. Scholarship Application - Letter of Self Introduction
4 - At this point, you actually have two options. The first of which is, that you try to revise the...
Graduatekey03 - Feb 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 6, 2017
|My idea about petroleum. Personal Statement for Graduate Admission
8 - You've got a number of unnecessary paragraphs and sentences in this essay which caused you to go overboard in...
GraduateWales931 - Jan 30, 2017 / Holt - Feb 3, 2017
|Losing the moment chasing the goal
8 - The prompt for the self introduction essay for the KGSP program actually encourages you to relate as much as...
Graduatelukme - Jan 29, 2017 / Holt - Feb 3, 2017
|Master of Public Health SOP: refugee beginnings to HPM aspirations (Reproductive/Maternal health)
2 - SamY, the anecdote is too long. It is not something that actually helps to increase the interest in your...
Graduatereapernanashi - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|Personal Statement for Master of Science in Business Analytics at George Washington University
3 - Ran, work in the reference to your current firm into the current second paragraph. That will allow the introduction...
GraduateFreyaRan - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|Essays for an application to school program - set-back experienced
2 - Sara, we have a one essay per thread policy in this forum which is strictly implemented so I will...
Graduatesarabaughman - Jan 31, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|On my way to the Master's program in Digital Marketing in Smurfit School
4 - Thanks a ton for your comments. I am revising my essay to make it look better. :) @Holt...
GraduateThu Pham - Jan 29, 2017 / Thu Pham - Feb 1, 2017
|Statement of purpose for MS in electrical engineering in USA, the field of VLSI designing technology
8 - Explain that you are changing careers. Include information about your previous career in an overview method. Then relate it...
Graduateutsi - Jan 21, 2017 / Holt - Jan 30, 2017
|PS applying for MSc Accounting and Corporate Governance (MSPACG)
2 - David, your essay is direct to the point, informative, but not memorable. It does not contain any memorable elements...
Graduatedaviddai - Jan 30, 2017 / Holt - Jan 30, 2017
|Architecture SOP; What experiences have either inspired your interest in architecture or sustain it?
4 - Memud, there has to be a sense of decency and decorum in the essay that you wrote. That said,...
GraduateMemud - Jan 26, 2017 / Holt - Jan 28, 2017
|Personal History Statement, University of California, Irvine's Human-Computer interaction Masters
6 - @Holt Thank you so much, I think I have got the idea to do improvement. It takes me a...
Graduateicefever - Jan 25, 2017 / icefever - Jan 27, 2017
|The Study Plan for Consulate General of Canada - recommended educational direction
9 - Hi Holt, I truly appreciate for your kind and thorough support. Just wanna say thanks to what you...
Graduatehenrychen - Jan 23, 2017 / henrychen - Jan 25, 2017
|The pain of losing friends. Setback/opportunity/challenge - 250 words only.
11 - You used so much informal words . In my opinion, this is not a essay , it likes reporting...
GraduateRashan - Jan 22, 2017 / maitouyen - Jan 25, 2017
|"The flow of electron" needs your review : SOP for Graduate Programs in Electrical Engineering
5 - Hasibul, rather than posing a question at the start of the essay, turn it into a statement of fact....
GraduateHjamil - Dec 22, 2016 / Holt - Jan 21, 2017
|How business and technical skills will help me with excelling in cyber security industry
2 - Nishtha, your statement of purpose requires content editing. The first half that you developed does not directly relate to...
GraduateNishthaKaura - Jan 20, 2017 / Holt - Jan 20, 2017
|List some of the academic and professional differences made by you in your life.
9 - Renu, this is already an effective closing statement that goes in with the previous essay paragraphs. There is just...
Graduaterk123 - Dec 24, 2016 / Holt - Jan 20, 2017
|How do you anticipate that Shanghai will differentiate your MBA experience?
2 - Pepper, in your first listing, change the term to "Gaining and In-Depth Knowledge of China". The current version of...
Graduatepepperwaston - Jan 17, 2017 / Holt - Jan 17, 2017
|Motivation Letter in communication engineering KTH Sweden.
6 - @Holt thanks a lot for your advice. It really helps me....
Graduatezida - Jan 15, 2017 / zida - Jan 16, 2017
|Motivation Letter - Business Information Systems (MSc Information Studies) - Amsterdam - UvA
7 - I am so relieved to see your comments. Thanks a ton, Holt. Cheers,...
Graduatestalingard - Jan 13, 2017 / stalingard - Jan 15, 2017
|Letter of Motivation for Management & Economics of Innovation Course
3 - @Holt Thank you very much Holt. I really appreciated your comment. I am not assured of my writing...
GraduateStreetwalker - Jan 15, 2017 / Streetwalker - Jan 15, 2017
|Self Assessment Essay for application a position at Risk Advisory in Deloitte
3 - Rolland, I do not really see a strong discussion of your merits or strengths as a potential student at...
Graduaterollandning - Jan 15, 2017 / Holt - Jan 15, 2017
|Letter of Motivation for Quality & Operation Management Graduate Course
9 - @Holt Thank you very much Holt. I will omit the last paragraph as you suggested. I...
GraduateStreetwalker - Jan 14, 2017 / Streetwalker - Jan 15, 2017
|Personal Statement - Management Science / Business Tech / Analytics program
4 - I am not sure about what else can be added in terms of the "Why school" part of the...
Graduatetz35 - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|My essay for applying for Gender studies MA offered by Centeral European University.
9 - Alireza, you should have posted this essay in the other thread since this is a continued conversation of this...
GraduatealiDC - Nov 27, 2016 / Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|Letter of Intent - MFA Child Culture Design - University of Gothenburg
4 - Ade, try to combine the first and last paragraph of your essay in order to create a more informative...
Graduateameadelia - Jan 10, 2017 / Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Design, graphic and art is in my heart. Statement of Purpose for MFA in Visual Communication @SAIC
4 - Astha, in the second paragraph, there is an implication that you changed college courses / majors. As I see...
Graduateaasthathakkar28 - Jan 10, 2017 / Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Words are secondary. Thoughts live; they travel far. RISD, MFA Graphic Design SOP
3 - Raman, in all actuality, you have said a lot in your essay without saying anything of substance at all....
GraduateRamanbhandari - Jan 10, 2017 / Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Personal statement - Master in Analytics - Descriptive analytic to improve businesses' efficiency
13 - Thank you so much @Holt I wish you all the best....
Graduatecatnguyen181 - Jan 7, 2017 / catnguyen181 - Jan 11, 2017
|Nigerian activities and overview. Motivation letter for masters in Telecommunications Engineering
5 - @Holt @chizy7 Here is an improved version. Please take a look at it. Despite the positive trends in...
Graduateokorocyril - Jan 6, 2017 / okorocyril - Jan 9, 2017
|How did you solve a problem and the results? - Texas Austin MSBA Essay
8 - @Holt Thank you so much for the help. I am finalizing this essay....
Graduatepandaman - Jan 6, 2017 / pandaman - Jan 9, 2017
|I am looking for admission in MS in Financial Mathematics. Evaluate my SOP.
Graduateragni - Nov 25, 2016 / Holt - Jan 7, 2017
|WORKING WITH AUTISTIC CHILDREN. SLP Graduate Program Essay!
11 - Maura, although it is a bit confusing, the fact that you have stood up for your advocacy is clear...
Graduatespeechhopeful - Dec 27, 2016 / Holt - Jan 6, 2017
|Rebuilding Syria - Personal Statement for a Project Management master program
1 - Hi everyone, please help me correct my personal statement for a Project Management master program Rebuilding Syria Through...
GraduateMohanad13 - Jan 6, 2017 / — -
|The master program of my choice: PROJECT MANAGEMENT STUDY OBJECTIVES
5 - @Diazalichsan Thank you very much, I will take your suggestions into consideration. That really helped a lot. Thanks again...
GraduateMohanad13 - Jan 4, 2017 / Mohanad13 - Jan 5, 2017
|I wrote an essay named Tet holiday on my life in Vietnam
2 - Letrang, while there are numerous problems with the grammar that you used in this essay, I would like to...
Graduateletrang2911988 - Jan 5, 2017 / Holt - Jan 5, 2017
|English Essay for graduate school to describe experience with English
4 - Lisa, you should definitely highlight the English living and speaking experience that you had during the two weeks that...
Graduatelisa_severus - Jan 4, 2017 / Holt - Jan 4, 2017
|The road I chose. SOP Review for PhD Computer Science with Specialization in Artificial Intelligence
4 - In our early childhood, ... My heart still gogoes on. ... that not many fields of human endeavor can...
GraduateRamblerrose - Dec 28, 2016 / lisa_severus - Jan 4, 2017
|The proseminars in particular attract me. Seeking an advice on Personal Statement for MIT Sloan MFin
7 - Thanks Holt, I agree with you. I think I have already shown what I need to show....
GraduateChiChaChee - Dec 31, 2016 / ChiChaChee - Jan 2, 2017
|Cryptography and Encryption/Decryption techniques intrigued me
3 - Thanks Holt for such a prompt reply,and feedback . Will work on the indicated flaws ....
GraduatePranshu - Jan 2, 2017 / Pranshu - Jan 2, 2017
|MY CAREER PROGRESSION. Statement of Purpose for MSc in UoM
6 - Mary, thanks again for your contributions and Happy New Year !...
Graduateserikbar - Dec 29, 2016 / serikbar - Dec 30, 2016
|Imperial College "Concrete Structures" Personal Statement
9 - @Holt Dear Holt, Yes, I have discussed with him about my plan, and he will write a recommendation...
GraduateEng Phin - Dec 26, 2016 / Eng Phin - Dec 29, 2016
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