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|I am the master of my fate and I am the captain of my soul. Business Analytics Master SOP
3 - Komal, since you have indicated 2 highly different, unrelated career paths in this essay, you must find a way...
Graduatekomziiie - 2 days ago / Holt - 4 hours ago
|AASSupporting Statements. How did you choose your proposed Course and Inst. M. Accounting ANU
4 - Thanks for the inpust komziee and Holt @Holt, yes Holt, I'd definitely revise my essay. My problem is...
GraduateSeskussaa - 2 days ago / Seskussaa - 6 hours ago
|Personal Statement for university International Relations Program
Graduateterminal28 - 1 day ago / terminal28 - 23 hours ago
|Why a career in healthcare and motivation in becoming an anesthesiologist assistant
5 - @Holt You're right, this was more of a venting draft lol I kind of lost myself with my feelings...
Graduatebaziles - Oct 13, 2018 / baziles - 2 days ago
|ESSAY- MSc in Finance UNIVERSITY OF ROCHESTER
GraduateMichaelz - Oct 13, 2018 / Michaelz - Oct 14, 2018
|Statement of academic purpose - MSc Development Management
2 - Cristina, you can further strengthen paragraph 2 by writing a new paragraph directly under it that will help you...
Graduatecristinacuello - Oct 11, 2018 / Holt - Oct 12, 2018
|Why I choose the Master of Science in Public Health program at XXXX University - personal statement
Graduateohms - Oct 8, 2018 / ohms - Oct 8, 2018
|One page Statement of Purpose for Mechanical Engineering Masters
Graduatenanz17 - Oct 3, 2018 / nanz17 - Oct 4, 2018
|What else should we know about your financial condition in order to consider you for the scholarship
2 - Nathaniel, this is a run of the mill or typical financial story sent to scholarship committees. There is nothing...
Graduateicyn - Oct 3, 2018 / Holt - Oct 4, 2018
|Situation where you had to overcome a significant obstacle to reach a goal.State reactions & lessons
4 - @Holt Thanks so much for your contribution. An updated version attached I needed to be called a graduate...
Graduateicyn - Sep 28, 2018 / icyn - Oct 1, 2018
|Applying Umass, UCI, TAMU, Gatech - MS in computer science with Machine Learning as Specialization
3 - Chinesh, first up, this essay is running tremendously long and will most likely lose the interest of the reviewer...
Graduatechinesh - Sep 30, 2018 / Holt - Oct 1, 2018
|SOP : MS in Data Science Application with relevant internship experience, projects
2 - Hello Jitesh, First, let me say that your essay shows that you know what you are talking about,...
Graduatedatascienceboy1 - Sep 30, 2018 / btoguntade - Sep 30, 2018
|Personal Statement for the Masters in Business Analytics at Michigan State University
GraduateBangBom - Sep 23, 2018 / BangBom - Sep 24, 2018
|Statement of Goals for PhD in Geophysics, why C University would be the best place to achieve them
3 - Thank you for the reply, and they are very helpful! I didn't change those sentences regarding influences from...
GraduateLiu_zzzz - Sep 16, 2018 / Liu_zzzz - Sep 18, 2018
|Answering a question: why you are interested in the program and why you are a suitable candidate.
3 - Ge, there is no professional nor academic motivating factor clearly expressed in this essay. From the sounds of it,...
GraduateSkymelody - Sep 4, 2018 / Holt - Sep 5, 2018
|I have always been passionate about Computers and Communications - personal statment review
3 - Mena, since you are applying for admission to a masters degree course this is definitely not the personal statement...
Graduatemena Safwat - Aug 17, 2018 / Holt - Aug 18, 2018
|Describe main problems teenagers have in your country, explain their causes and suggest solutions
Graduateninhnguyen - Aug 15, 2018 / ninhnguyen - Aug 15, 2018
|I'm in posession of a solid recommendation for a place at the International University of Japan
2 - Byron, were you being asked to write a personal statement with a study plan? This is not a normal...
Graduatebyrontrokongeply - Aug 13, 2018 / Holt - Aug 14, 2018
|I'm seeking to advance on the business field hoping to have an effect on improving business trade
2 - Mohammad, this is not a very strong leadership and influencing essay. Your abilities, as presented in the essay are...
Graduatemoefakhri - Aug 11, 2018 / Holt - Aug 12, 2018
|MPA personal essay- Are these ideas on par with a typical personal statement?
2 - Lexis, there is an advancing progression in the personal statement presentation depending upon the type of studies you are...
Graduatelexis1250 - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 5, 2018
|"Surfing and Family Values" - DPT PTCAS Personal Essay Topic for 2018-2019 Admission
Graduatekarlypag - Jul 27, 2018 / Holt - Jul 28, 2018
|Write an essay to a college or graduate school classifying the abilities and talents you possess
3 - Duc Trung, this is not a very well developed college application essay. While it is understandable in most instances,...
Graduateductrung1901 - Jul 9, 2018 / Holt - Jul 10, 2018
|I feel a sense of pride in being so closely associated with the field of computer science. MS SOP
3 - Thank you @Holt , that was really helpful for me . I will definitely make the necessary requirements....
Graduatevinnyk - Jun 23, 2018 / vinnyk - Jun 27, 2018
|Details of received academic prizes and awards during my tertiary studies
2 - Haniye, the essay that you wrote is technically excellent in the sense that you gave direct responses to the...
Graduatehaniye - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|Data has become the new gold standard; SOP for part time Data Science Masters
Graduateontheway1 - Jun 8, 2018 / ontheway1 - Jun 11, 2018
|Career & Program Investigation essay for the Architectural Technologies (AT) Program
2 - Your response to questions listed under bullet listing #2 is not complete. You need to do further research about...
Graduatehypothesis - Jun 9, 2018 / Holt - Jun 10, 2018
|Why I wish to study in Canada and what is my educational goal? Master of Global Management program
5 - @Holt Thanks for describing everything. I have a correction for my question 1. I just added some more sentences...
Graduatesultanarafin - May 29, 2018 / sultanarafin - Jun 1, 2018
|Definiteness of purpose is the starting point of all achievement; MS in Business Analytics SOP
2 - Namrata, the essay is too full of information. It takes a tremendously long time to read, decipher, and analyze...
GraduateNamratakamthe - May 28, 2018 / Holt - May 29, 2018
|Letter of Intent for MPH application in Environmental & Global health, USA. Suggestions requested!!
2 - Suhela, the essay is running too long without really focusing on the required content. Try to write a new...
Graduatesuhela - May 21, 2018 / Holt - May 22, 2018
|Commercial Vehicle Technology Master of Science application at Technische Universität Kaiserslauter
2 - Balakrishnan, your letter is too autobiographical in content to be considered a motivational letter. A motivational letter is usually,...
GraduateBalakrish - May 8, 2018 / Holt - May 9, 2018
|MSc Sports Technology in Germany - My motivation for this pursuing this degree
7 - "Maybe you should try to link your academic need more on your future goal and your career path." ...
GraduateElectrick - May 3, 2018 / Electrick - May 6, 2018
|Describe why you are applying for XXX University
3 - Ola, the prospect of you being admitted into the university relies less on gathering public information bout the university...
GraduateOla_Mohd - Apr 29, 2018 / Holt - Apr 29, 2018
|My Statement of Purpose for Graduate Studies (MS in Computer Sciences)
3 - Haleema, you wrote a personal statement which does not have the same function as a statement of purpose. The...
Graduatehaleemasadiq - Apr 21, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Masters of Science in Accounting, Admission Essay - Becoming a CPA
2 - Patel, the information you have included here belongs in the statement of purpose, not a personal statement. You have...
Graduatepatel1067 - Apr 19, 2018 / Holt - Apr 20, 2018
|Opening Paragraphs for Personal Statement About Interest in Medicine - which is the most promising?
3 - Lin, none of your personal statement opening paragraphs are usable for one reason, they all refer to your "childhood...
Graduatepurplesk8er7 - Apr 18, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|I need this education - your future career goals as a social worker
2 - Jasmine, your essay is extremely difficult to read. You need to separate the presentation into paragraph topics. Group these...
Graduatevarenya29 - Apr 16, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|SOP for Master's in Management, technology and entrepreneurship - background, career strategy, aims
3 - Mughda, Your academic background is appropriate for your application. However, you spent too much time being so descriptive in...
GraduateMugdhaG - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 15, 2018
|Focus on Hepatitis B infection - SHORT ESSAY OF ABOUT 500 WORDS - TO OFID SCHOLARSHIP
Graduatekabenge - Apr 11, 2018 / Holt - Apr 14, 2018
|One page essay explaining interest to attend a professional workshop on modeling
GraduateShuting - Apr 2, 2018 / Shuting - Apr 13, 2018
|Personal Statement for MA Conflict, Governance and International Development
4 - Wuhni, your approach to this essay is incorrect. It is too academic in presentation. There is a lack of...
Graduatefwuhni - Apr 6, 2018 / Holt - Apr 11, 2018
|My dream to study abroad in Japan after high school graduation
3 - Edward, this is a throw away essay. What that means is that the reviewer will read this essay, discover...
Graduatezhanghui - Apr 1, 2018 / Holt - Apr 2, 2018
|Applying for MSc in Finance Program in the National University of Singapore
2 - Laras, the problem with your presentation is that the motivation aspect of your presentation is not strong enough. The...
Graduateviolet96 - Mar 26, 2018 / Holt - Mar 29, 2018
|"Find what you love and love it deeply" - Public administration statement of purpose
3 - Valentina, your statement of purpose actually lacks a purpose because you did not focus on a proper academic and...
GraduateValas177z - Mar 22, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|"Somewhere, something is waiting to be known" - Robotics MSC Degree application essay
3 - thank you for your review & advice ,I did change a lot of motivation letter. for the events &...
GraduateUplifter - Mar 11, 2018 / Uplifter - Mar 16, 2018
|Describing myself as a decent candidate for MSc in Artificial Intelligence
3 - Giuseppe, you over complicated what should have been a simple 5 paragraph letter to the admissions committee. There is...
Graduateneb - Mar 2, 2018 / Holt - Mar 7, 2018
|Application via uni track in KAIST for a master's degree in Computer Science. KGSP 2018 Study Plan
3 - Mary, thank you for the pointers they are of great help! I'll update my study plan accordingly....
Graduateradzxx - Feb 25, 2018 / radzxx - Mar 5, 2018
|This masters' course is to make a successful career in Data Analytics - SOP
2 - Gayathri, paragraphs 2 and 5 are irrelevant to the essay. The history of data as indicated by your father...
GraduateGayathri B - Feb 25, 2018 / Holt - Feb 28, 2018
|What are your career goals and how will your advanced business degree help achieve these goals?
2 - Gina, since this is a career goal essay, I would not advise you to include a paragraph that discusses...
Graduateginnaa - Feb 24, 2018 / Holt - Feb 27, 2018
|SOP for Masters in Smart Grids and Building Technology - apply for French university
3 - STATEMENT OF PURPOSE I have been working in the field of energy efficiency and renewable energy for the...
Graduateyakshkumar16 - Feb 23, 2018 / yakshkumar16 - Feb 27, 2018
|Why should they choose me for KGSP 2018 ?
4 - "Korea is known for its spectacular rise from one of the poorest countries in the world to a developed...
Graduatekopure - Feb 14, 2018 / smtn22 - Feb 26, 2018
|The accounting and finance diploma at LSE stands out to me - reasons and motives
Graduateays1805 - Feb 21, 2018 / ays1805 - Feb 22, 2018
|My fascination towards data analytics. SOP for Masters in Business Analytics in UIOWA
Graduatevasanthgvk3 - Feb 16, 2018 / vasanthgvk3 - Feb 17, 2018
|My examination essay - what is your biggest mistake
3 - @Holt I just remembered. The topic presentation is 'what is your biggest mistakes and what did you learn...
Graduatemuisas - Feb 13, 2018 / muisas - Feb 14, 2018
|KGSP study plan; There is a problem in my country I would like to help fix
2 - Tracy, your first 2 paragraphs are irrelevant to the prompt. The presentation of the problem with the mindset of...
GraduateTracy212 - Feb 13, 2018 / Holt - Feb 14, 2018
|Ivey MSc Business Analytics - understanding of quantitative analysis tools and technical skills
2 - Funmi, your response to the prompt is too academic in approach and hence, does not have a real world...
GraduateKhristiie_xx - Feb 12, 2018 / Holt - Feb 13, 2018
|Personal statement for MSc in Advanced Security and Cybercrime; The need for cyber security expert
2 - Yahaya, here the thing. Your whole essay does not tell me anything about the development of your interest in...
Graduateyauwalu84 - Feb 12, 2018 / Holt - Feb 13, 2018
|My Western Ivey MSc Business Analytics Application Essay
3 - Thank you for your reply. The MSc is geared towards individuals with 0-2 years experience. I am currently in...
GraduateKhristiie_xx - Feb 11, 2018 / Khristiie_xx - Feb 12, 2018
|The more I studied in machine vision, the more fascinated I would be - Statement of Purpose
2 - Shayan, since this is a statement of purpose for a secondary masters degree, there is no need to dwell...
Graduateshayansh - Feb 9, 2018 / Holt - Feb 10, 2018
|MED SCHOOL PERSONAL STATEMENT INTRO
2 - Rebecca, I am not sure why you are asking other people to describe you in your personal statement. This...
Graduaterl623 - Feb 5, 2018 / Holt - Feb 7, 2018
|Why am I interested in Climate Science and Policy
2 - tree plantation While in working with incorporated touted --> you used two verbs, choose the most appropriate one or...
Graduatesam1982 - Feb 4, 2018 / zhayendzuji - Feb 5, 2018
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