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|Write an essay to a college or graduate school classifying the abilities and talents you possess
3 - Duc Trung, this is not a very well developed college application essay. While it is understandable in most instances,...
Graduateductrung1901 - Jul 9, 2018 / Holt - Jul 10, 2018
|I feel a sense of pride in being so closely associated with the field of computer science. MS SOP
3 - Thank you @Holt , that was really helpful for me . I will definitely make the necessary requirements....
Graduatevinnyk - Jun 23, 2018 / vinnyk - Jun 27, 2018
|Details of received academic prizes and awards during my tertiary studies
2 - Haniye, the essay that you wrote is technically excellent in the sense that you gave direct responses to the...
Graduatehaniye - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|Data has become the new gold standard; SOP for part time Data Science Masters
Graduateontheway1 - Jun 8, 2018 / ontheway1 - Jun 11, 2018
|Career & Program Investigation essay for the Architectural Technologies (AT) Program
2 - Your response to questions listed under bullet listing #2 is not complete. You need to do further research about...
Graduatehypothesis - Jun 9, 2018 / Holt - Jun 10, 2018
|Why I wish to study in Canada and what is my educational goal? Master of Global Management program
5 - @Holt Thanks for describing everything. I have a correction for my question 1. I just added some more sentences...
Graduatesultanarafin - May 29, 2018 / sultanarafin - Jun 1, 2018
|Definiteness of purpose is the starting point of all achievement; MS in Business Analytics SOP
2 - Namrata, the essay is too full of information. It takes a tremendously long time to read, decipher, and analyze...
GraduateNamratakamthe - May 28, 2018 / Holt - May 29, 2018
|Letter of Intent for MPH application in Environmental & Global health, USA. Suggestions requested!!
2 - Suhela, the essay is running too long without really focusing on the required content. Try to write a new...
Graduatesuhela - May 21, 2018 / Holt - May 22, 2018
|Commercial Vehicle Technology Master of Science application at Technische Universität Kaiserslauter
2 - Balakrishnan, your letter is too autobiographical in content to be considered a motivational letter. A motivational letter is usually,...
GraduateBalakrish - May 8, 2018 / Holt - May 9, 2018
|MSc Sports Technology in Germany - My motivation for this pursuing this degree
7 - "Maybe you should try to link your academic need more on your future goal and your career path." ...
GraduateElectrick - May 3, 2018 / Electrick - May 6, 2018
|Describe why you are applying for XXX University
3 - Ola, the prospect of you being admitted into the university relies less on gathering public information bout the university...
GraduateOla_Mohd - Apr 29, 2018 / Holt - Apr 29, 2018
|My Statement of Purpose for Graduate Studies (MS in Computer Sciences)
3 - Haleema, you wrote a personal statement which does not have the same function as a statement of purpose. The...
Graduatehaleemasadiq - Apr 21, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Masters of Science in Accounting, Admission Essay - Becoming a CPA
2 - Patel, the information you have included here belongs in the statement of purpose, not a personal statement. You have...
Graduatepatel1067 - Apr 19, 2018 / Holt - Apr 20, 2018
|Opening Paragraphs for Personal Statement About Interest in Medicine - which is the most promising?
3 - Lin, none of your personal statement opening paragraphs are usable for one reason, they all refer to your "childhood...
Graduatepurplesk8er7 - Apr 18, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|I need this education - your future career goals as a social worker
2 - Jasmine, your essay is extremely difficult to read. You need to separate the presentation into paragraph topics. Group these...
Graduatevarenya29 - Apr 16, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|SOP for Master's in Management, technology and entrepreneurship - background, career strategy, aims
3 - Mughda, Your academic background is appropriate for your application. However, you spent too much time being so descriptive in...
GraduateMugdhaG - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 15, 2018
|Focus on Hepatitis B infection - SHORT ESSAY OF ABOUT 500 WORDS - TO OFID SCHOLARSHIP
Graduatekabenge - Apr 11, 2018 / Holt - Apr 14, 2018
|One page essay explaining interest to attend a professional workshop on modeling
GraduateShuting - Apr 2, 2018 / Shuting - Apr 13, 2018
|Personal Statement for MA Conflict, Governance and International Development
4 - Wuhni, your approach to this essay is incorrect. It is too academic in presentation. There is a lack of...
Graduatefwuhni - Apr 6, 2018 / Holt - Apr 11, 2018
|My dream to study abroad in Japan after high school graduation
3 - Edward, this is a throw away essay. What that means is that the reviewer will read this essay, discover...
Graduatezhanghui - Apr 1, 2018 / Holt - Apr 2, 2018
|Applying for MSc in Finance Program in the National University of Singapore
3 - Laras, the problem with your presentation is that the motivation aspect of your presentation is not strong enough. The...
Graduateviolet96 - Mar 26, 2018 / Holt - Mar 29, 2018
|"Find what you love and love it deeply" - Public administration statement of purpose
3 - Valentina, your statement of purpose actually lacks a purpose because you did not focus on a proper academic and...
GraduateValas177z - Mar 22, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|"Somewhere, something is waiting to be known" - Robotics MSC Degree application essay
3 - thank you for your review & advice ,I did change a lot of motivation letter. for the events &...
GraduateUplifter - Mar 11, 2018 / Uplifter - Mar 16, 2018
|Describing myself as a decent candidate for MSc in Artificial Intelligence
3 - Giuseppe, you over complicated what should have been a simple 5 paragraph letter to the admissions committee. There is...
Graduateneb - Mar 2, 2018 / Holt - Mar 7, 2018
|Application via uni track in KAIST for a master's degree in Computer Science. KGSP 2018 Study Plan
3 - Mary, thank you for the pointers they are of great help! I'll update my study plan accordingly....
Graduateradzxx - Feb 25, 2018 / radzxx - Mar 5, 2018
|This masters' course is to make a successful career in Data Analytics - SOP
2 - Gayathri, paragraphs 2 and 5 are irrelevant to the essay. The history of data as indicated by your father...
GraduateGayathri B - Feb 25, 2018 / Holt - Feb 28, 2018
|What are your career goals and how will your advanced business degree help achieve these goals?
2 - Gina, since this is a career goal essay, I would not advise you to include a paragraph that discusses...
Graduateginnaa - Feb 24, 2018 / Holt - Feb 27, 2018
|SOP for Masters in Smart Grids and Building Technology - apply for French university
3 - STATEMENT OF PURPOSE I have been working in the field of energy efficiency and renewable energy for the...
Graduateyakshkumar16 - Feb 23, 2018 / yakshkumar16 - Feb 27, 2018
|Why should they choose me for KGSP 2018 ?
4 - "Korea is known for its spectacular rise from one of the poorest countries in the world to a developed...
Graduatekopure - Feb 14, 2018 / smtn22 - Feb 26, 2018
|The accounting and finance diploma at LSE stands out to me - reasons and motives
Graduateays1805 - Feb 21, 2018 / ays1805 - Feb 22, 2018
|My fascination towards data analytics. SOP for Masters in Business Analytics in UIOWA
Graduatevasanthgvk3 - Feb 16, 2018 / vasanthgvk3 - Feb 17, 2018
|My examination essay - what is your biggest mistake
3 - @Holt I just remembered. The topic presentation is 'what is your biggest mistakes and what did you learn...
Graduatemuisas - Feb 13, 2018 / muisas - Feb 14, 2018
|KGSP study plan; There is a problem in my country I would like to help fix
2 - Tracy, your first 2 paragraphs are irrelevant to the prompt. The presentation of the problem with the mindset of...
GraduateTracy212 - Feb 13, 2018 / Holt - Feb 14, 2018
|Ivey MSc Business Analytics - understanding of quantitative analysis tools and technical skills
2 - Funmi, your response to the prompt is too academic in approach and hence, does not have a real world...
GraduateKhristiie_xx - Feb 12, 2018 / Holt - Feb 13, 2018
|Personal statement for MSc in Advanced Security and Cybercrime; The need for cyber security expert
2 - Yahaya, here the thing. Your whole essay does not tell me anything about the development of your interest in...
Graduateyauwalu84 - Feb 12, 2018 / Holt - Feb 13, 2018
|My Western Ivey MSc Business Analytics Application Essay
3 - Thank you for your reply. The MSc is geared towards individuals with 0-2 years experience. I am currently in...
GraduateKhristiie_xx - Feb 11, 2018 / Khristiie_xx - Feb 12, 2018
|The more I studied in machine vision, the more fascinated I would be - Statement of Purpose
2 - Shayan, since this is a statement of purpose for a secondary masters degree, there is no need to dwell...
Graduateshayansh - Feb 9, 2018 / Holt - Feb 10, 2018
|MED SCHOOL PERSONAL STATEMENT INTRO
2 - Rebecca, I am not sure why you are asking other people to describe you in your personal statement. This...
Graduaterl623 - Feb 5, 2018 / Holt - Feb 7, 2018
|Why am I interested in Climate Science and Policy
2 - tree plantation While in working with incorporated touted --> you used two verbs, choose the most appropriate one or...
Graduatesam1982 - Feb 4, 2018 / zhayendzuji - Feb 5, 2018
|Experiential learning at Mays Business will enable me to make the most out of the program resources.
2 - Hi your first paragraph is more about your experience in teaching and less to do with tech. In my...
Graduateriser101 - Feb 4, 2018 / sam1982 - Feb 4, 2018
|The world of data. Statement of Intent for MS in Data Science program
4 - Hi! Since this is a statement of purpose I think you might missed the "purpose of taking the course...
Graduateutv - Jan 23, 2018 / kukas90 - Jan 29, 2018
|The impact of the Erasmus Mundus emPLANT master's scholarship in your home country
3 - BIsrat, you have presented very relevant information in relation to food insecurity in Eritrea.However, I am not sure what...
Graduatemeksebsium - Jan 29, 2018 / Holt - Jan 29, 2018
|My connections with chemicals - first draft for personal statement for masters in chemical review.
2 - Muhammad, your personal essay is not focused on the development of your interest in Chemistry in the proper manner....
Graduateblackhawk9112 - Jan 28, 2018 / Holt - Jan 28, 2018
|First SOP Draft Msc in CS. English is my 2nd language and change in background is making it hard.
2 - Balaganesh, this is a personal statement. So you cannot use this for a statement of purpose (SOP). The SOP...
GraduateGanzdoodle - Jan 28, 2018 / Holt - Jan 28, 2018
|'One of the best data science course' - SOP for MS in Data Science at Syracuse University
Graduateakshita_1102 - Jan 27, 2018 / akshita_1102 - Jan 27, 2018
|Need review on my application essay for Graduate admission in Architecture (Building Technology)
5 - @Holt Thank you so much for helping me with the structure. I'll make the necessary changes. As for the...
Graduatevalete - Jan 25, 2018 / valete - Jan 26, 2018
|Statement of Intent for Masters in Global Health
5 - Thank you so much! Your guidance has been very helpful. I will re-edit it again. However, I was slightly...
Graduatenaj12 - Dec 25, 2017 / naj12 - Jan 21, 2018
|Drug development and it's importance : A statement of interest in Msc. In pharmaceutical science
2 - Chisom, most of your essay is not responsive to the prompt requirements. There are some portions that you can...
GraduateChisomeboh - Jan 20, 2018 / Holt - Jan 21, 2018
|Statement of Purpose for Professional MSc in Big Data
2 - Adwait, your college academic presentation should not enumerate the classes that you took unless you excelled and received honors...
Graduateadwaitasathe - Jan 20, 2018 / Holt - Jan 20, 2018
|I envisage myself as a pioneer, an entrepreneur in the field of Mechatronics.
5 - @Holt This is a letter of Motivation For graduate school in Europe.I have drafted this by covering the points...
GraduateShekhar12 - Jan 19, 2018 / Shekhar12 - Jan 20, 2018
|Personal Statement for The OSCE Academy Application 2018 Programme: Politics and Security
GraduateEuterpe - Jan 17, 2018 / Euterpe - Jan 19, 2018
|SOP FOR MS GAME DEVELOPMENT FALL 2018
2 - HI Rutul, in relation to the university ranking, our forum is not in the habit of ranking universities, nor...
Graduaterutulmthakkar - Jan 18, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|Applying for the International Masters in Security, Intelligence and Strategic Studies
GraduatePienniuvynass - Jan 18, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|'Master in Economics at your distinguished university' - application essay
2 - Ray, what you have here is a statement of purpose. This is not a personal statement. A personal statement...
GraduateRayx - Jan 18, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|Reason for pursuing career in Occupational Therapy and why this school. Short Personal Statement
GraduateSummings - Jan 16, 2018 / Summings - Jan 17, 2018
|SOP for MA in Computational Social Science, University of Chicago
2 - Yun, you do not present a solid purpose for your line of study aside from an excitement and eagerness...
Graduategretadai - Jan 15, 2018 / Holt - Jan 15, 2018
|Applying for Korean Government Graduate Scholarship: A Meaningful Impact On East Asian Societies.
3 - @Holt Thank you very much! Regarding your comment on Professional experience, I forgot to mention my work at the...
Graduatesephiran17 - Jan 12, 2018 / sephiran17 - Jan 12, 2018
|Statement of purpose for Masters in Data Sciences at Columbia University
2 - Jayath, this is a personal statement, it is not a Statement of Purpose. You will have to write a...
Graduatejayath2016 - Jan 11, 2018 / Holt - Jan 12, 2018
|University of Ryerson's data science and analytics program - application essay
Graduatemeek0904 - Jan 11, 2018 / meek0904 - Jan 11, 2018
|Statement of Purpose - MS in Data Science University of Minnesota
GraduateDarthIra - Jan 10, 2018 / DarthIra - Jan 11, 2018
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