Please review the following paragraph as an opening para for statement of purpose:
Coming from a small town called XYZ in ABC, India, we were never really encouraged to explore areas of interest let alone identify a career on their basis. The only principle that was reiterated over and over again was that education was the only means to success. Exams and mark-sheets thus became my sole areas of focus resulting in excellent scores throughout my school years. When it came to further studies the socially acceptable options were limited- Engineering or Medical. My keenness for mathematics easily tilted the balance in favour of Engineering and the buzz around computers made the choice of specialisation particularly easy! As such, you could say that the course of my career was decided in the most seemingly arbitrary way.
I want opening to be unique and true thats why instead of flattering about computer science and its implication (generally boasted) i preferred to write something true. Please suggest is it good ??
In later part of application i'm converting the above theme to : "though i was undecided earlier but today i feel like this (computer science) is the place which is my passion... sort of similar...
Please comment soon.
Coming from a small town called XYZ in ABC, India, we were never really encouraged to explore areas of interest let alone identify a career on their basis. The only principle that was reiterated over and over again was that education was the only means to success. Exams and mark-sheets thus became my sole areas of focus resulting in excellent scores throughout my school years. When it came to further studies the socially acceptable options were limited- Engineering or Medical. My keenness for mathematics easily tilted the balance in favour of Engineering and the buzz around computers made the choice of specialisation particularly easy! As such, you could say that the course of my career was decided in the most seemingly arbitrary way.
I want opening to be unique and true thats why instead of flattering about computer science and its implication (generally boasted) i preferred to write something true. Please suggest is it good ??
In later part of application i'm converting the above theme to : "though i was undecided earlier but today i feel like this (computer science) is the place which is my passion... sort of similar...
Please comment soon.