'even more equipped' - Physician Assistant Narrative on CASPA

I've always been drawn to the health care field. I started my college career with a plan to be a pharmacist, switched to nursing, but finally found my calling to be a Physician Assistant.

I know that I have been wired to be a health care provider. I love people. It does not matter what walk of life they are from, or their age. I have compassion for them and can easily talk to them. This has enabled me to connect with patients, earn their trust, and provide effective care.

I am very attracted to the career of being a Physician Assistant. Through the hours I have spent working in the hospital as a nurse's aide on the cardiac floor and shadowing an Orthopedic PA, I find it to be a perfect balance of patient contact and office time. With these hours I've realized the crucial role of being part of a health care team. I look forward to working with doctors, nurses, and techs to help the patient get well and provide quality care.

I know being a Physician Assistant I will not be limited to a single location. Job opportunities will be world wide, as there will always be people in need of medical attention. That gives me all the more reason and passion to pursue this career. I want to help as many people as I can.

The medical field is not easy in any way; from the vigorous studying to the emotional attachment to a patient. I know that I am prepared, and will be even more equipped once a Physician Assistant.

Why have you drawn to this field? There is no connection between the first sentence and the second one. U started the introduction with the fact that you like health care, then you talked about your educational/professional back ground. I think you should rewrite the introduction. Open the introduction with an attractive sentence and try to make a relationship between statements.

Try to use transitions to improve the coherence of the essay. U wrote some information about yourself one by one without the use of transitions. In fact, the unity of the essay is poor and it seems like a train which moves forward with no stop.

Regards
Ahmad

"Through the hours I have spent working in the hospital as a nurse's aide on the cardiac floor and shadowing an Orthopedic PA, I find it to be a perfect balance of patient contact and office time" --very good!

Do you have any personal experiences or stories to tell while working or with a PA that made you really consider being a PA? I know in my narrative, I've tried to put in specific cases of why I liked shadowing, what I did with a doctor/PA, a specific incident that made me want to go into healthcare.

As stated previously, doesn't quite flow. The use of transitions will definitely help this. Also, I know CASPA has only a 5,000 ca=haracter limit but you are well under that. Feel free to write more and expound on what exactly you like about the PA profession. What is that crucial role you've seen them play? Other than having jobs all over, what else pulls you in about the profession?

Good luck!

Thank you so much! I know now that I made it way to broad