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"professional volunteer" - Peace Corps Application Essay #1



poetkate88 1 / 2  
Mar 9, 2012   #1
Thank you so much for reading! I wish to do some extensive cutting of unnecessary words.

Questions that must be answered :

- Your reasons for wanting to serve as a Peace Corps Volunteer; and
- How these reasons are related to your past experiences and life goals.
- How you expect to satisfy the Peace Corps 10 Core Expectations (please be specific about which expectations you expect to find most challenging and how you plan to overcome these challenges).

My friends have called me a "professional volunteer" ever since I took my first assignment with AmeriCorps at 19. I've had everything from -wow, you're impressive to why don't you stop trying to save the children and get a real job. But I realize I cannot stop trying to encourage others or empower them. I want to serve as a Peace Corps Youth Development Volunteer because I have an incredible passion for children and would like to pass along the hope that has been placed in me, that is that every person is valuable and deserves to pursue their dreams.

My hope and passion are rooted in my past experiences. I cannot say what compels me to do the things I have done. All I know is that I am open to it. In summer of 2010, I came to Denver to work with a ministry. I primarily led youth groups in short term urban mission trips. This was also coupled with being a day camp counselor at Denver Inner City Parish. DICP served low-income Hispanic youth. I was there to both participate and initiate participation in programming and empower the youth groups to just be active in youth groups-even if it's just for one day. It was in Denver that I realized that I realized my life calling was to bring hope to at risk youth through encouragement, guidance and investment in their lives. Because of this I joined, Michigan Service Scholars, and volunteered at Great Lakes Center for Youth Development, a non- profit that raised awareness about rural at-risk youth populations in Upper Michigan (UP) and empowered non profits across the UP. I also taught Poetry workshops to low income and at risk youth at various centers in Marquette. Last summer, I came to Chicago to work with a similar ministry who also hosted youth groups on short term mission trips. I led groups to homeless shelters, soup kitchens and nursing homes. We also spent afternoons at Dr. King's Boys and Girls Club. It was great learning from the kids there and be able to invest in their lives that summer. I also loved empowering the youth groups to serve while they were in the city. This fall I worked at a group home for delinquents and taught them positive behaviors.

I believe all these qualifications have prepared me for Peace Corps. I am ready to step out of my comfort zone and invest. I want to learn from them, I want to laugh with them. Throughout my experiences, I have learned to be very flexible. The more open and flexible I am, the more I will grow and benefit others around me. I will go wherever my skills and abilities are benefited most. I have always been conservative and was raised with the utmost respect for all peoples. I cannot wait to drink tea and share dinners with my host family and hear their stories.

dreamer 3 / 18  
Mar 10, 2012   #2
Hello!
Nice reading your essay.
Just a few comments:

I've had everything from - " wow, you're impressive" to " why don't you stop trying to save the children and get a real job" .

...placed in me - that is that every person is valuable and deserves to pursue their dreams.

It was great learning from the kids there and to be able to invest in their lives that summer. I also loved empowering the youth groups to serve while they were in the city. This fall, I worked at a group home for delinquents and taught them positive behaviors.

The more open and flexible I am, the more I will grow and benefit others around me.
(try not to repeat the word flexible)

I will go wherever my skills and abilities are benefited most. I have always been conservative and was raised with the utmost respect for all peoples. I cannot wait to drink tea and share dinners with my host family and hear their stories.

^ this ending seems a little abrupt. Try to create the image of dining with a host family and listening to their stories in the mind of the reader, if that is your intention to end this way. Maybe try being a little more descriptive and cut down on the sentences that began with "I..."

:)
Overall, a strong essay! Liked seeing your accomplishments shine and how it has affected you.
All the best!
OP poetkate88 1 / 2  
Mar 10, 2012   #3
thanks so much! its supposed to be under 500 words and is pushing 467 right now...So I hope I can cut more. I am not sure I answered the last part to the fullest, so I need to work on that more. thanks again :)


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