I wish to pursue Master of Science in Petroleum Engineering at XXX. My future career goal is to join a dedicated research team at a premier university where I can earn credibility, not just credentials. I aim to be a pioneer in developing new technologies that will benefit society. When I decided to pursue my master's degree, I researched thoroughly and came to know that Germany is the best place for it. It has world class technical universities, which provides standard education and quality research programs. And University of XXX is one of esteemed university. The main reason I am applying in X is that, it is an internationally renowned university and valued by many national as well as international companies. It has best research facilities and experienced faculty members.
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I wish to pursue Master of Science in Petroleum Engineering at XXX. My future career goal is to join a dedicated research team at a premier university where I can earn credibility, not just credentials. I aim to be a pioneer in developing new technologies that will benefit society. When I decided to pursue my master's(MASTERS) degree, I researched thoroughly and came to know that Germany is the best place for it. It has world class technical universities, which provides standard education and quality research programs. And University of XXX is one of esteemed university. The main reason I am applying in X is that, it is an internationally renowned university and valued by many national as well as international companies. It has best research facilities and experienced faculty members.
I completed my schooling( GRADUATE SCHOOL) with good marks and cleared All India Engineering Entrance Exam (AIEEE) with top 5(% - DELETE, WERE NOT TALKING ABOUT PERCENTAGE, WERE TALKING ABOUT YOUR RANK) among 1.3 million students. I got admitted in X one (OF) the top engineering college of India. I was good in physics and chemistry thus I chose(CHOOSE) Chemical Engineering for my Bachelors degree. I learned basic(s of - DELETE) chemical engineering(; - DELETE PUNCTUATION MARK) and its (colorful - ???, I SUGGEST A DIFFERENT ADJECTIVE TO USE IN DESCRIBING A CURRICULUM, TRY "intriguing") curriculum aroused my curiosity to dive deeper into subjects such as heat and mass transfer, fluid flow operation, separation process. I asked Prof. X, and expressed my interest. He guided me to work on the steady state simulation of absorber column in my dissertation work. Dissertation work involved use of Aspen plus as a tool for the simulation of the packed bed absorber for the absorption of carbon dioxide from flue gas into a suitable solvent (Monoethanolamine). It was the study of rate based mass transfer operation, in which diffusion of carbon dioxide along with reaction in solvent takes place which enhances rate of absorption. Experimental setup established and performed to verify the virtual model. To learn practically(PRACTICALLY LEARN) about the processes and how fundamental principles actually applies in industries I did my summer intern at Oxygen Plant, on Experimental Study of Air Separation Unit cryogenic process with internal compression cycle. It was the study of fractional distillation of Air. It carried out below -170degC(DEGREE CELSIUS) for the separation of Nitrogen, Oxygen and Argon, main constituents of air. I learned about the process thoroughly. I practically related the basic thermodynamic principles, Joule Thompson effect, Raoult's Law, throttling effect, laws of thermodynamics, heat and mass transfer phenomenon with the process.
I developed my interest in petroleum engineering from first year of my college. In my (under graduation curriculum - I SUGGEST REPHRASING OR REPLACING WITH "vocational course") I chose(CHOOSE) to study petroleum refinery engineering. I imbibe(d - ONGOING ACTION) with the basic knowledge of petroleum engineering. I learned about design of various types of distillation column in my process equipment design course. I got exposure to learn about the production of petroleum products and its classification, gaseous fuel, various processes such as thermal and catalytic cracking, reforming, polymerization etc. By pursuing master degree I will be able to serve my country to develop the oil industry either by providing innovation to the current technology or by teaching in Universities (is - DELETE AND REPLACE WITH, "AS IT IS) also a great ambition of mine.
After (my under graduation - DELETE AND REPLACE WITH, "COURSE") I joined X. Here, I am working as a process engineer. I take care of Process flow measurement and optimization of Cement Mill Section. I have not limited myself to gaining experience purely in the science field. I worked with different section mechanical, instrumentation and electrical for the optimization of process. I was able to experience the working life in an office environment. Meeting deadlines, working to a specific schedule, being flexible and learning how to work with(in - WITHIN IS INSIDE, WITH IS YOUR WORKING TO) new systems, manpower management (WHICH) were all basic tasks (which - DELETE AND REPLACE WITH "that") prepare(S) an individual for new opportunities. Through this Masters degree I would like to learn about reservoir management. Earning Master of Science will broaden my knowledge and provide a chance to work in Petroleum engineering field. The courses offered by the department of petroleum engineering coincide with my interest. I am confident that my competence and commitment help me in contributing meaningfully to the research at (your - DELETE AND REPLACE WITH "the") university. I look forward to joining X as a graduate student.
So Vivek, I wish you the Best of Luck in the endeavor!! Before you hit that "send" button though,I have a few notes to share;
> spell check - there's nothing more embarrassing than your application not accepted due to misspelled words, so SPELL CHECK it!
> grammar and vocabulary - mind your grammar and the words you use in reaching out to your readers.
> POOF READ - I'm a big fan of proof reading before I send out an article, simply because it serve me very well and for sure it will do the same to
you.
'till then, CHEERS!!!