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shannonbaker143 1 / -  
Aug 23, 2011   #1
All his life, however, McLurkin has enjoyed building things
As a child, he played for hours with legos and cardboard boxes, like many future engineers, he wanted to understand how things worked.

manveer954 1 / 2  
Aug 23, 2011   #2
You might want to stop after bulding things, before starting with as a child, "All his life, however, Mclurkin enjoyed building things."

But Im not convinced at what you would like me to revise?
Roxal 3 / 13  
Aug 24, 2011   #3
All his life, McLurkin has enjoyed building things - you don't need however here

As a child, he played for hours with legos and cardbaord boxes. Like many future engineers, he wanted to understand how things worked. you don't link 2 independent clauses together with a comma; that is a comma splice error.

If you want to link them, here is the revised version

As a child, he played with legos and cardboard boxes for hours because he wanted to understand how things worked, like many future engineers.


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