Did I put the comma's in the right place in this sentence?!

shadowfax 5 / 21

Jan 20, 2011 #1

Ok so this is my concluding line for my GA Tech essay

"After all, a rich life, in addition to academics, also includes friendships and connections to one's community and I believe that kind of life can begin at Georgia Tech."

I was just wondering if I put the comma's in the right place or not. Like, do I need a comma after "After all?"

Thank You in advance!!!

taniish23 - / 1

Jan 20, 2011 #2

I think the commas in the first sentence are OK. It just depends on how pronounced you want the phrase "in addition to academics" to be. I could read that phrase without it being separated by commas.

About the latter part of the sentence, I would put a comma between "community" and "and" in "to one's community, and I believe".

That's my editorial opinion. Thanks!

alexamoses98 - / 1

Jan 21, 2011 #3

I agree. Put a comma after community because those are two independent clauses.

EF_Susan - / 2310

Jan 26, 2011 #4

A great way to learn the correct use of commas is to read Strunk and White. (Google it)

"After all, in addition to academics a rich life also includes friendships and connections to one's community, and I believe that kind of life can begin at Georgia Tech."

jayy1 - / 1

Jan 26, 2011 #5

I agree with the first respond add a comma after community and you be in the right track good luck

Bukhmmas 2 / 2

Jan 27, 2011 #6

"After all, a rich life and academics also includes friendships and connections to one's community. I believe that kind of life can begin at Georgia Tech."

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