When I was small, I have covered many wonderful places in India. Need correction and better words
exploring charms of india
When I was small, I have covered many wonderful places in India.
This was possible due to the fact my father was serving in the army it is mandatory for serving army man to posted in the new place every three years.You never know if you are going to go to the big city or far flung area.As it is selected in random to place someone in any of the army bases.But it was a pain as well as we just made friends in new place and then the time comes to move to another school and city.
Then it takes the time to know people and make friends. I remember my stay in Kashmir very well.
We have stayed there close to three years.It was the wonderful experience as there were a lot of lakes and lot of garden
to visit.I was small at that time but still remember little fragrance of Shalimar, Nishat and Chashm-e-Shahi which
constitute the famous Mughal Gardens of Srinagar.
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As young person, I benefited from my father's service in the Indian Army. He was often given assignments in various places around the country over a period of 3 years. The family always traveled with him, be it to a big city or a remote area in India. Home for me has always been an army base. While moving around was a bane, I appreciated making new friends in new places and felt sad each time I had to leave my friends, the school I was just learning to settle into, and the city that I had yet to fully discover.
My most notable stay was in Kashmir. I lived there with my family for almost 3 years. I developed a liking for the place because of the numerous lakes and gardens that were always a joy to visit. If I close my eyes and breathe deeply, I am transported back to Kashmir where my senses actively imagine the relaxing scent of Shalimar, Nishat, and Chasm-e-shahi from the Mughal Gardens of Srinagar permeating the air I breath.
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Thanks! and it is amazing how you choose the words to convey the same information.
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