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The usage of "whom", "also", parallelism" - Few Grammar Sentence Corrections


deadfire55 2 / 4  
Oct 20, 2010   #1
I have a few sentences in my college essay that I can't seem to work around. Any ideas for any of them would be great!

1) "There was espicailly one woman of whom I became fond of."
Correct usage of whom? Use the word "of" twice? End sentence with "of"?

2)[A sentence that says why I continued] "I also continued because I knew my time would be making a difference for...
Is the position of "also" correct? Or should it go after "continued"?

3) "I was worried that I wouldn't be able to support or communicate with the patients."
I think it's called parallelism and I don't think it works with the bolded words. How could I change it?

thank you very much!
SKW01 - / 1  
Oct 20, 2010   #2
Well I think there all fine and you might worry a bit much.
I also asked my mom and she couldn't find anything wrong.
jazzmeen 3 / 15  
Oct 20, 2010   #4
Hi, I am not that good in grammar, but i would say for the first sentence, the word "of", which you used twice, is like..redundant even though it is ok. try using another words, just not to repeat again and again

for the others..i dont see a way to improve them they are ok!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Oct 25, 2010   #5
There was espicailly one woman of whom I became fond of.

Teachnically, it should not end in a preposition:
There was espicailly especially one woman of whom I became fond.

and it still needs another adjustment:
There was one woman of whom I became especially fond.

I think also should go after continued, but it will be even better this way:
Another reason I continued was that I knew my time would be making a difference for...

#3 is fine, no need for a change. You can support and communicate with anyone you like.
:-)


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