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melkorthefoul   
Aug 14, 2010
Undergraduate / "the gift of giving" (quality accomplishment) - UC prompt #2 [6]

Well, I'm not applying to UC's, so I'm not too familiar with the essay, but I'll try my best to help.

First off: I don't think rewriting is needed... you seem to be answering the question, methinks.

1. It asks for a accomplishment, contribution or experience. In your case, I think its a nice mix of all 3, in the form of community service. So you have certainly got the topic right.

2. It should be most important to you. I can't judge that, so skip that.

3. What about it makes you proud? You got 2 examples, which are quite relevant. Maybe get 1/2 more?

4. How does it relate to the person you are? You got quite a bit in there, I think

I think thats its OK... certainly not as bad as you seemed to think! As for really fine tips? I'm still new at this, so perhaps wait for a moderator to help :)
melkorthefoul   
Aug 14, 2010
Undergraduate / "In Search of Schrodinger's Cat" Describe a creative work and its influence on you [7]

First try at writing the common app essay... hope it works out :D

Prompt: Describe a character in fiction, a historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an influence on you, and explain that influence.

(I'm assuming non-fiction still comes under creative work, yes?)

It's a rather thin book, considering what it's about... just about 300 pages, insignificant in the grand scheme of things. But the influence those 300 pages have had on me? Incomparable. There have been far greater works published in the history of mankind, but "In Search of Schrodinger's Cat" by John Gribbin has special meaning for me, because it triggered my passion for physics.

Before I came across this book, I had a vague, unfocused interest in just about anything - history, anthropology, sociology, biology, chemistry, physics... but I didn't feel any connection to any one subject in particular. I would read books on all sorts of odd topics, from medieval torture techniques to sculpting bonsai trees, all of which I found interesting, but not fascinating. During the many career fairs I attended, I always felt lost, unable to really find anything that I had a passion for. Asking my parents was no use, as they told me to take up a profession "that I loved", which left me exactly where I was before.

However, when I stumbled across the book in a second hand book sale, I picked it up in the same spirit in which I picked up books on combat camouflage, or applied economics -pure, simple curiosity. As I started reading about quantum theory, however, I felt something I had never felt before. Books on combat camouflage are certainly interesting, but in no way do they really change your world view. Quantum physics, however, is a whole new ball game. Take, for example, the desk in front of you. Feel the toughness of the wood. Now imagine that someone comes along and tells you that, in fact, the table isn't made out of particles, but instead, it's just a load of waves. Like a beam of light. You might be tempted to check him into the nearest lunatic asylum, but the fact is that quantum theory proves that this is true. Particles are waves, and vice versa.

Bet you found that weird, huh? That's just scratching the surface of quantum weirdness. Schrodinger's cat (the one that is both dead and alive), the mysterious quantum property "spin" (which has no real world analogy), Bose-Einstein condensates (which crawl up the sides of their containers), superconductors (which have no resistance whatsoever), quantum tunneling (which allows particles to 'teleport' themselves), the infamous double slit experiment (in which one particle fired at two slits somehow behaves like it went throw both, but only if you aren't looking)...the fun keeps on going!

The book's style of writing was also of great help, I suspect. Searching up quantum theory on the Internet would have no effect on me, other than causing me to retire with a headache from staring at complicated math that was, and remains, well beyond my ability. Gribbin, however, wrote a book that was (practically) free of any math whatsoever which, I felt, could almost be considered light reading. It gave me tons of confidence - I knew that quantum theory existed well before I read the book, but I had always assumed that it was too hard for me. Reading this book, and being able to understand the concepts of quantum mechanics was very important to me, as it taught me two very important things. Firstly, nothing is too hard to learn. And secondly, the complicated math that I was so afraid of? It's just a tool, nothing more, and it doesn't necessarily hinder my understanding of any topic in physics.

Due to these two revelations, I have been able to greatly increase my knowledge of physics. During the summer, I was able to study at the Tata Institute for Fundamental Research in Bombay, where I was taught Special Relativity, and I continue to correspond with the professor. I have also taught myself the basic of particle physics, and am currently trying (that's the operative word) to learn General Relativity.

Lofty goals indeed, but without the interest, and most importantly, the confidence that Gribbin's book imparted to me, I would still be stuck in limbo, wandering aimlessly, not knowing what the future may hold. (And I still don't, due to the Uncertainty Principle...)

^^See what I did there? :D

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