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Clark Kent   
Oct 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / How far do you agree that Music needs words to be of any interest? [7]

Overall, your writing is very good, all the ideas you explain very clearly and there are no serious grammatical errors. but you need to consider more is the use of the article a, an and the. In this article, I found some words that should use the article a, an or the, but you do not give. One quick note, remember to use comma (,) for several conjunction such as However and in fact.

Words are not necessary to explain the feeling this piece gives to someone; it can simply be interpreted by one listen. In fact(USE COMMA) most of the famous musicians in the classical era had no words in their songs or requiems.

There might only be select few which don't host lyrics. However(USE COMMA) this doesn't change the fact that without the main music

"Does Music need words to be of any interest?" I believe that Music is a language that doesn't have to be effable(AFFABLE)

Music(THE MUSIC) is actually a very flexible language as well.

KEEP SPIRIT!!!!
Clark Kent   
Oct 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / The Tourism Destroyed by The Tourist - Task 2 for IELTS [4]

Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? what can tourists do reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?

Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.


Many people argue that the drawbacks of the tourism destination country are much more than the benefits, especially the negative impact of the environment. I strongly agree that the tourist snatch the harmony of the historical sites which has long guarded by the local residents. The guests should take an action to decrease this matter.

The popularity of the tourist place brings a lot of benefits to the country, especially the government and the local inhabitant. The government gets much additional income by the visitors. For instance, France is a country with the highest wages from the tourism sector, and the government is able to allocate this money to improve the supporting facility of tourist area, such as airport, train, bus and multiply the number of public facilities to the holiday maker spot. In addition, the citizen also helpfully by this trend, they are able to be a guide or offer some traditional diet to the visitors and provide a home stay or hotel for them. For example, most of the human being in Borobudur Temple in Indonesia were a guide, they help foreign people to know about the history of the temple and they get paid by it.

However, the drawbacks are more dangerous than the benefits. The big number of the tourism places are damaged by the visitors nowadays. To illustrate, according to the Beijing Times, 30% of Chinese wall has been wrecked by the irresponsible tourists. Furthermore, the increase of the number of tourists can also create a local culture become not sacred anymore like further back. There are a particular statue and traditional dance that in many years ago can only see by the local people and forbidden for the others. In contrast to the present, after becoming a tourist destination many of the conventional ceremonies or conventional heritage have shown by the inhabitant thanks to the satisfaction of the visitors. A case of point, according to writer, Ian Coleman report that in Guatemala there is a village with statue of a man called Maximon, who has a special spiritual meaning for the local tribe and visitors can not to see it, but now visitors pay money for them to bring the statue out and carry it around. As a result, Maximon has lost his original meaning, and now just another tourist attraction.

All in all, tourism not only give benefits to the government and the country who has a tourist place, but also they reduce the sacred value of the traditional heritage. In my opinion, the tourist should respect the local culture. In other words, they have to keep all the traditional heritage safe and do not exploit it for the individual need.
Clark Kent   
Oct 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : Talent search program on television. [2]

Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment?

Prospecting talented people by particular television show have been famous in many countries nowadays. I strongly believe that it is the best system that can help humankind to reach their dreams to become actors and actresses.

Today, the number of television programs which entertains human increased dramatically since the 20th century. It cannot be separated from the high demand of spectators who want to watch an amusement performance of the candidates. The show not only gives advantages for the contestant, but also the television company. The rating of the television program growth significantly since the first show and reached a peak at the final day. The audiences are very satisfied thanks to this event and spend much time to watch directly in the location or watch on the television. In Conclusion, the show presents a spectacular entertainment for the audience and benefit to the participant and the television company.

However, I argue that this program is the top mode to detect human with endowment in particular part, such singing. Simon Fuller is the first man who creates this show in 2001 with name 'Pop Idol' and now transform into 'British Idol'. Thanks to Simon, many countries follow his way to find gifted human being in the world. Due to many countries who organize this event, new actors and actresses are showing up and become famous because of it. Most of them come from poor family and remote village, but they can change their destiny by this program. For example, Kelly Clarkson before succeeding in American Idol was a cocktail waitress and sales promotion girl, thanks to American Idol she becomes famous and release two albums since won the first American Idol in 2006. To conclude, this method is really helpful to the entrant who want to succeed in entertainment area.

In conclusion, searching ingenious person through the television event is the most advance way nowadays and it is not only give the advantages to the candidates, but also to the companies.

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