Undergraduate / 'Being respectful and helpful' - the qualities of a good neighbor [2]

Hi,

I just read through your essay. The qualities of an ideal neighbor described are good but you could probably support it with an example for atleast one quality.

I also feel that the ending could be improved on a little :)

I think the beginning should be:

Since humans are sociable in nature...

The first quality that a good neighbor should have is to be friendly. If a neighbor greets you with a smile whenever you see him/her

It makes you feel that you can count on him/her whenever you need advice.

Another quality that defines a good neighbor is that he/she should be respectful.

Ending:
I believe that it is each one's responsibility to respect their neighbor's property as well as privacy...

Maybe you should replace the phrase 'good neighbor' with something else as there seems to be a lot of repetition.

Cheers!

Undergraduate / 'academically rigorous atmosphere' - Umich supplement essay [2]

Hi :)
Your essay seems pretty good but I have edited a bit of the grammar. Also, I didn't get the last line - 'understanding how the world works'. Maybe you should replace that part with something else. You could also be a little more specific on the course/degree that you would like to pursue in the Physics Department.