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Dec 5, 2016
Writing Feedback / Snowman Revenge - it was built on a hydrant. [5]

Snowman Revenge

Mary was 10 yers old, he likes playing with snow, he makes the snowman in front of her house. In her village the snow only falls once or twice. While the snow falls mary makes snowman with her brother. They make snowman in the yard.

The snowman's hand made of twig, eyes from stone and nose made of carrot. They are very proud with their snowman next to street. Many people are happy with their snowman.

So around 5 P.M. their family go outside and look at their snowman. The family is happy and take foto with snowman. So Mary and her family gat in to house for dinner together. Suddanly they hear truck's sound in outside. Jim runs to outside directly. Jim knows this truck. It is scott's truck.

Scott brikes mary's snowman by he truck. So mary cries, then jim makes again the snowman. Jim makes bigger snowman. Suddanly scott go to new snowman to brike again. But jim has made a trep. Scott get the trep and he truck broke.

Jim laughes because he has secret. The snowman is built on hydrant.

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