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Name: Piper
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Piperr1288   
Dec 11, 2016
Scholarship / "Hard work and God will never betray you" has been my personal values since I was a child. NTU essay [16]

I'm not really good in English especially in writing but I have to write an essay for my scholarship in NTU.

"Describe, in less than 300 words, the values and beliefs you hold strongly to. Please provide examples of how you have demonstrated these in your actions."

So here is my essay. Please kindly check and correct the errors. I don't mind a critical review. Thankyou xoxo

"Hardwork and God will never betray" has been my personal values since I was a child. That is why I always work hard to achieve my goal. However I never forget to pray to God to bless my way.

Many people told me that I am a goal-oriented person I think it's true. This was highly influenced by the verse "Hardwork will never betray". Whenever I have a goal, I will do anything to reach it, including taking every risks that can happend. I strongly believes that I should finish everything that I started with an impressive goal. This value that I hold strongly to has made me could be the first rank in class when I was in elementary school and senior high school. Whenever I get a task, I always work hard to do it until I am satisfied with the result and when I have an exam, I will never stop studying until I have finished even if it was already late.

Besides, I trust that work hard is nothing without the help of God. Therefore I always pray to God when I have a goal so He can light my way to accomplished my goal. I believe that if we work hard and pray, success will always follow us.

As I said before, I love to take risks and challenge myself to do the best. Therefore I want to challenge myself by enrolling in the leading university in Singapore. However, my mom is a single parent, so for us studying abroad is really expensive. Due to that, obtaining a scholarship is my only chance. I hope that my personall values can make NTU considered me to obtain a scholarship. If I get this scholarship, I assure to do my best for myself, for NTU, and for the world.
Piperr1288   
Dec 11, 2016
Scholarship / "Hard work and God will never betray you" has been my personal values since I was a child. NTU essay [16]

Hi! Thank you for your review and here is my new essay, I hope this is better
Please kindly check the errors again and should I use the first essay or this one? Thankyou

"Do your best and let God do the rest " has been my personal value since I was a child. That is why I always do my best whenever I do something. I also never forget to pray to God to bless my way.

Many people told me ...
Piperr1288   
Dec 12, 2016
Scholarship / "Hard work and God will never betray you" has been my personal values since I was a child. NTU essay [16]

How about this one? But I feel there are are still many grammatical errors. Please check it for me, thankyouuu

"Do your best and let God do the rest " has been my core value since I was a child. That is why I always do my best whenever I do something. I also never forget to pray to God to bless my way.

Many people told me that I am a goal-oriented person and I think it's true. This was highly influenced by the verse "Do Your Best". Do The Best for me means I should finish everything I start with impressive results . Whenever I have a goal, I will do anything ...
Piperr1288   
Dec 12, 2016
Scholarship / "Hard work and God will never betray you" has been my personal values since I was a child. NTU essay [16]

What about this one? Thankyou

"Do your best and let God do the rest " has been my core value since I was a child. Many people told me that I am a goal-oriented person and I think it's true. This was highly influenced by the verse "Do Your Best". For me it means I should finish everything I start with impressive results . Whenever I have a goal, I will do anything to reach it, including taking every risk that can happend. The values I am relying on are what made me succeed with great grades throughout elementary school and high school. I always work hard when I put my mind into something, and to this day I have always reached or exceeded people's expectations after completing every task. No matter how hard work is, or how little time I have, I am not satisfied until I finish what I started.

However, I trust that every work that I do is nothing without the help of God. Therefore I always pray to God when I have a goal so He can light my way. I always try my best when I do something, but I let God to take care of the rest because I believe that God have His own plan for myself.

A few years ago, I joined a math competition in my province. It was a small competition but I challenge myself to joined. I didn't have much experienced, so I just studied as hard as I could. I prayed to God to help me and I did my best in the competition although I felt I couldn't do it. However the result was unexpected! I got the 1st place! I knew this could happend only because I tried to do the best and pray to God.
Piperr1288   
Dec 13, 2016
Scholarship / "Hard work and God will never betray you" has been my personal values since I was a child. NTU essay [16]

This is my last draft

"Do your best and let God do the rest " has been my core value since I was a child. Many people have told me that I am a goal-oriented person and I think this is true. I was highly influenced by the saying "Do Your Best". For me it means I strive to finish everything I start with impressive results . The values I am relying on are what made me succeed with excellent grades throughout elementary school and high school. I always work hard when I put my mind into something, and to this day I have always reached or exceeded people's expectations after completing every task. No matter how hard the task is, or how little time I have, I am not satisfied until I finish what I started.

A few years ago, I joined a math competition in my province. It was a small competition but I challenged myself to join. I didn't have much experience, so I just studied as hard as I could. I studied until late at night to make sure I had mastered everything for the competition day. I prayed to God to help me and I did my best in the competition although initially I felt I couldn't do it. However the result was unexpected! I won 1st place! I knew this could happen only because I tried to do my best and prayed to God

I trust that every task that I do is nothing without the help of God. Therefore I always pray to God when I have a goal so He can light my way. As I said earlier, I always try my best when I do something, but I let God take care of the rest because I believe that God has His own plan for me.
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