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tsp8487   
Aug 23, 2009
Writing Feedback / Appearance and society values--An GRE issue [9]

Hi, everyone. I am from China, and this is the first time for me to put my essay here. Thanks for giving me some suggestion.

An GRE issue:

208"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."


One must be inevitably influenced by society principles, society that he/she lives in. people were born to follow the belief and thoughts, which are developed by their ancestors. In a particular environment, someone who has different society ideas and values, might dresses himself/herself and behaves differently from others. These individuals sometimes would be seen as deviant and most likely be blamed or excluded by other regular ones. The instinct of human that pursuing approval from others make most of individuals in a particular society or history conform to the popular appearance and behavior rules which reflect the particular society's or history's ideas and values.

Therefore, the way people look, dress and act, to some extent, reveal their attitudes and interests about their neighbors, culture, society, etc. A lot of people in today's world, especially in developed countries, look and behave differently. Some of them may like wearing sports costumes ,while others enjoy putting on formal clothes; some like smoking cigarette, while others indulge themselves in natural and fresh air; some are busy climbing mountains, while others traveling on the sea. This reveals the society's tolerance to diversity of existence and people's freedom of pursuing their own life style. But in a different period or a particular country, this is not the case. For example, women in Iran should shelter their face from being seen by others, which reflects the society's belief and thoughts about women's rights.

However, appearance and behavior of a society, at times, are unable to tell its true face. As described in a very famous film--Dance with Wolf, during eighteenth century, when European colonists were busy working to explore new land in the middle of America, they have to fight with Indians who are original residents on the land. The while men saw the yellow ones as primitive people, because they enjoyed fighting with different tribes and always lived on butchering animals, which labeled them as kill-liker. But the truth is that while Indian were wearing poor clothes and lived on seemingly simple rude hunting life, they know how to live harmoniously with nature and animals and they also possess many better personalities, including warmhearted, loving peace, tolerant, respecting to other civilizations, than the white who think they are the more advanced race, but factually stole other people's home and oppressed them. So, only from the phenomena can not the whole story be told.

In some cases, appearance is most likely only to reveal one particular person's personality--his liked and disliked, not the society as a whole. Appearance and behavior always tell others who you are or want to be, because they are the outlets of your thoughts and belief. People become more and more judging others from their appearance, especially when they meet a person at the first time. So one might become more and more caring about their looks and pay more attention on how to give a good first-impression. Of course, their appearance and behavior follow their society ideas and values. But different people actually have different believes in many areas. So, it is hard to find out all their common believes only according to their costume and actions.

In one world, appearance and behavior can reflect a society's ideas and values to some extent, but difficult to reflect all aspects. To explore a particular society's mental soul need a more thoroughly investigation in kind of areas of the society, not simply through its people's exterior traits.
tsp8487   
Aug 25, 2009
Writing Feedback / Appearance and society values--An GRE issue [9]

Thank you, Superkid. I agree with you that sometime, our thinking pattern is somewhat different from others. Worse more, I am such person that often labeled as skip-thinker. Although I am trying my best to deal with this problem, it is still tough for me to completely overcome it.

Communication is one of the most important tools for us to eliminate misunderstandings when we chat with people from other countries. Also, communication is an effective way to share our outcomes with different culture. So, communicating with people holding different language is very important. Thereby, we need to sharp our foreign language skill especially English and that is why people like us come here. However, I think we also have the responsibility to benefit our foreign friends. So, welcome more friends from different area around the world to learn Chinese, and if anyone interested in China or Chinese, I wish that I can give you some help. My Email: tsp8487@gmail.com.

Simone's suggestion is good. And I wish that one day we, the new students in this forum, become somebody like Simone to help more future new students improve their English skill. "Student talk" sounds good. Now, I can take this task. However, welcome Simone and all other warmhearted friends to give some suggestion.
tsp8487   
Aug 25, 2009
Writing Feedback / esssay -global warming&natural disasters [8]

Good work, really, but, the causes of global warming might be more complex. Some are due to human activity, but some are not. Policies, people' attitudes toward pollution, will also influence the causes and effects of global warming as well as natural disasters. More complete analysis will make this essay stronger.
tsp8487   
Aug 25, 2009
Undergraduate / Money or Health [10]

It is a catalyst the spur the brutal force that propelling the giant churning wheel of civilization.

I am a little confused with this.

Maybe you can pay more attention on the relationship between money and health than on the long beginning of where money comes from.
tsp8487   
Aug 25, 2009
Student Talk / Challenges for Chinese to Study English [20]

Hi, Introduce myself again, Tong, comes from China, wanting to apply PhD, autumn 2010.

We Chinese students are facing some particular problems,such as grammar,syntax, when we study English, especially when we are writing about an issue or argument. These problems may be unique for our peoples because of our unique culture. So, here, let us talk about it and find possible solutions which will benefit all of us in the future.

You can talk about whatever you want to say so long as it is related to this topic. problems, sotutions, experience are all available.

If you are native-English-speaker, please give some suggestions according to your own experience. Thank you!
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