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hhdbr

Jan 15, 2017

Grammar, Usage / 'One might wonder what...' Need correction for this essay sentence [5]

sentence structure

Hi,
Can someone please correct/ improve or correct the structure of this sentence. It comes right after a narrated description.

'One might wonder what is this description of.' Is this right?
'One might wonder what this description is of.' Is this better?

Please suggest anything. thanks

hhdbr

Jan 15, 2017

Undergraduate / Project with Syrian Kids - critical thinking story / Why LMU? (LMU Supplements) [3]

@sweetsenior
seem quite thorough but I'd say see if you can make them more precise so the reader gets to the point without having to shuffle through all the details

hhdbr

Jan 15, 2017

Grammar, Usage / 'One might wonder what...' Need correction for this essay sentence [5]

@Hoaidepchi
thanks for the reply.
It's that Im narrating someone's description. Its for a college essay and this is how it starts:

Year one: perfect.
Year two: perfect.
Year three: perfect.
Year four: perfect
Overall experience: couldn't be better.

One might wonder what is this description of. I thought the same thing too, when my (relative) described how his experience at (college name) was.

Hope this helps and you can suggest improvement. thanks