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Selaf   
Apr 23, 2017
Writing Feedback / Whether luck is important to success? TOEFL [3]

Do you agree or disagree with this statement: When people success, it is because of hard working, luck has noting to with success.

justifying the luck in a person' success



The word diligence is always associated with success. However, none of us can plead ignorance the importance of luck in one's success, for there are a vast array of cases prove it.

First, we can not conceal the fact that a piece of luck plays an essential role in discoveries or inventions. Alexander Fleming, the discoverer of penicillin, is just such a person. He has experimented on antibiotic for almost nine years, but the idea of penicillin didn't occur to him until he saw the mildew on a chunk of cheese by chance. Luck translates consecutive laborious work into a great discovery.

What is more, the importance of luck can also be justified on the ground of rising one to fame. Let us consider young authors. It is anything but easy for them to be known by public: They make every endeavor to improve their writing skill. The pressure of life bears down on them, pushing their to wrest a living from taking menial jobs. It seems that rise to fame overnight is a jam tomorrow. But one day, everything changes. The author meets an editor who loves his essay at the right time and the right place, or he gets a piece of his work published and suddenly attracts people's interest. Years of hard-working bring the author to the doorway of success, but good luck eventually help him reap success.

Last but not the least, the smile from Lady Luck help many people secure job. After years of conditioning, most of us have developed an unshakable faith in the power of luck in job finding. Has this ever happened to you? Have you ever had nothing better to do than wonder on the street? Have you ever sent resumes to a tremendous number of companies and gotten no reply? But with the help of luck, a job hunter may reckon your resume carefully rather than just throw it to rubbish bin, which makes everything different. So powerful is the luck that we are increasing aware of its impact.

What I feel oblige to clarify is hard work is also inseparable from success. However, hard work without luck always lead to nothing. So that we should summon our courage to deal with troublesome study or work, but we can still cherish the hope that one day we can be amply rewarded by the Lady Luck.

Thank you for rectifying my essay.
Selaf   
Apr 23, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 Cause and effect. Topic: Crime and safety in a society [7]

For example:
1.So great is a series problems of public security that the public are becoming increasingly aware of its impact. instead of 'Currently,personal safety has become a popular issue in our society.'

2.The high crime rate is always associated with unsafe feeling. instead of just using 'cause'
3.....
Selaf   
Apr 23, 2017
Writing Feedback / Whether luck is important to success? TOEFL [3]

@Holt
I think I understand what you mean. For instance, I delete the first sentence of my last paragraph and replace it with following sentences, which makes it look like this:

Not only does luck help people with discovery and invention, but it benefit them in terms of becoming famous and finding jobs. So that ....
Will it help?
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