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Aug 12, 2017
Writing Feedback / The table and the pie chart below shows the numbers of visitors and the survey of satisfaction. [5]
Q1 : The opening are very similar to the question, is it ok or not ?
Please give me an advise and the score i may reach in IELTS. Thank you.
The table with a set of data present the total number of visitors before and after the Ashdown Museum refurbished. Two given pie chart also illustrate the result of survey in percentage about the visitor's opinion in satisfy or not in the same period.
Overall, there are less number of visitors with more dissatisfied, which the total number of visitors are increased with more satisfy after the museum was refurbished.
Before the refurbishment, the museum have in total 74000 number of visitors to visit. Half of them are dissatisfied or very dissatisfied, while still have 45% visitors are satisfied or very satisfied and 5% are not in response. Situation changed after the refurbishment, the visitors are raised to 92000 also with the satisfaction. The proportion of visitors who are satisfied or very satisfied are sharply increased from 45% to 75%, while the visitors who are dissatisfied or very dissatisfied are dropped from 50% to 20% and the proportion of no response visitors remain unchanged.
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Q1 : The opening are very similar to the question, is it ok or not ?
Please give me an advise and the score i may reach in IELTS. Thank you.
Total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum
The table with a set of data present the total number of visitors before and after the Ashdown Museum refurbished. Two given pie chart also illustrate the result of survey in percentage about the visitor's opinion in satisfy or not in the same period.
Overall, there are less number of visitors with more dissatisfied, which the total number of visitors are increased with more satisfy after the museum was refurbished.
Before the refurbishment, the museum have in total 74000 number of visitors to visit. Half of them are dissatisfied or very dissatisfied, while still have 45% visitors are satisfied or very satisfied and 5% are not in response. Situation changed after the refurbishment, the visitors are raised to 92000 also with the satisfaction. The proportion of visitors who are satisfied or very satisfied are sharply increased from 45% to 75%, while the visitors who are dissatisfied or very dissatisfied are dropped from 50% to 20% and the proportion of no response visitors remain unchanged.
Words: 164
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