Undergraduate / Storyteller. MIT Admission Essay - Something you do for the pleasure of it. [5]

... came home with a bulky (USE A BETTER ADJECTIVE HERE gray camera ...
I would spend use "I spent" here because the tense is much more appropriate the next few (...) in my life, filling the disks with ...I mean , we do get the picture here but you sould try something like ".....filling the disks with lots of joyful happenings which were soon to be memories.

... taught me that words are unnecessary. ... there are other ways of telling stories that didnt involve sitting down around the campfire for hours .Stories are toldYou could replace this with something like "I could tell stories' through my viewfinder add a "where" here emotions are captured, and every detail is stored.AT THIS POINT , FIND A MORE SUITABLE LINK BETWEEN THIS CONCLUDING STATEMENT AND THE PREVIOUS SENTENCE

I still carry a camera with me ...THIS IS A WONDERFUL CONCLUSION

The essay was beautiful in general although you didn't exactly answer the question. Yes , you are a story teller in your own way , that is , via your knack for voluntary photography but I feel as though you should give them a touch of why you enjoy this but not spend too much talking about this because you have a limited number of words. Other than that , your essay is awesome !

Undergraduate / Correlation between my interests and the possibilities at Purdue University [3]

Purdue is a large, leading school......... *Landscape Architecture*
Being one of the best schools in landscape architecture, I can gain much more than my corse offers.
You need to rephrase the part about meeting other students who are studying engineering. It seems rather astray from the point. Ratherput it as,
Purdue has high quality STEM education, conseqently , I will be able to work together with other science majors; I am therefore given a feel of the diverse fields other than those of my major.. or something like that could work

Other than that , this is a relatively good essay
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