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Oct 11, 2017
Writing Feedback / Public celeberations such as festivals, holidays... shouldn't be financed by governments [5]
Dear all!
This is my essay for IELTS writting task 2. Could you please spend your time on reading and comment whether or not it is ok? thanks and I hope to receive your feedbacks and recommendations. Thank you :)
Question:
Many people think that public celebrations (like national holidays, festivals, etc.) are a waste of money and that the government should spend these funds in a better way.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and examples from personal experience where appropriate.
Essay:
Nowaday, it is universally acknowledged that the expenditure goverments spent on public celeberations is enormous, which is due to the amount of funds for organizing and the loss in productivity as on these national holidays, employees are off from work. Therefore, many people think that these funds should be spent judiciouly on alternative ways instead of on these public holidays. Personally, I strongly disagree with this opinion.
First and foremost, it is undeniable that the productivity is lost when employees are off freom work. However, that loss is incomparable with the amount and quality of work performed after they have a relaxing holidays with their families. It is obvious after some days away from work, worker get more energy, beter working spirit and morale, which are vital for the enterprise's development. For instance, in Vietnmam, due to the Labour Day, employees have relaxing time with their families and friends, thus, when being back to work, they are more energetic and work harder.
Moreover, public holidays are the time for a country to consolidate the national spirit and they show the rememberance of the victory, or the important events of one nation in the past. Due to these public celeberations, every citizens of a country may feel prouder and stronger as they are united. For example, the Independent Day is when all Vietnamese citizens show their respect and gratitude to the sacred moment of victory. For these morale values, it is impossible to abolish the organization of the national holidays.
To recapitulate, due to the relevant improvement in productivity and the morale values, the public celeberations must be remained and organized judiciously by the governments to ensure the mentioned outcomes.
Dear all!
This is my essay for IELTS writting task 2. Could you please spend your time on reading and comment whether or not it is ok? thanks and I hope to receive your feedbacks and recommendations. Thank you :)
Question:
Many people think that public celebrations (like national holidays, festivals, etc.) are a waste of money and that the government should spend these funds in a better way.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and examples from personal experience where appropriate.
money for public celeberations
Essay:
Nowaday, it is universally acknowledged that the expenditure goverments spent on public celeberations is enormous, which is due to the amount of funds for organizing and the loss in productivity as on these national holidays, employees are off from work. Therefore, many people think that these funds should be spent judiciouly on alternative ways instead of on these public holidays. Personally, I strongly disagree with this opinion.
First and foremost, it is undeniable that the productivity is lost when employees are off freom work. However, that loss is incomparable with the amount and quality of work performed after they have a relaxing holidays with their families. It is obvious after some days away from work, worker get more energy, beter working spirit and morale, which are vital for the enterprise's development. For instance, in Vietnmam, due to the Labour Day, employees have relaxing time with their families and friends, thus, when being back to work, they are more energetic and work harder.
Moreover, public holidays are the time for a country to consolidate the national spirit and they show the rememberance of the victory, or the important events of one nation in the past. Due to these public celeberations, every citizens of a country may feel prouder and stronger as they are united. For example, the Independent Day is when all Vietnamese citizens show their respect and gratitude to the sacred moment of victory. For these morale values, it is impossible to abolish the organization of the national holidays.
To recapitulate, due to the relevant improvement in productivity and the morale values, the public celeberations must be remained and organized judiciously by the governments to ensure the mentioned outcomes.