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itsme2216   
Oct 16, 2017
Writing Feedback / Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. [5]

TOPIC:- Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle, others believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

maintaining a healthy lifestyle in a country



In this era, health is a major concerning issue for the development of a country. Some people believe, maintaining a healthy lifestyle is a personal interest. However, there are a few, who hold the government responsible for it. In my opinion, both of them share equal importance.

On one hand, until individuals have self-conviction, no incentive can lure them to pursue a healthy lifestyle. It is more of a personal effort as nobody can push individuals, living a sedentary lifestyle, to adopt a healthy lifestyle.

On the other hand, some people think, the government should help in sustaining a better lifestyle. A major chunk of the overall budget is allocated to health, if the government takes initiatives, it would be able to save a lot of money. Moreover, due to shrinking income, many people are unable to afford nutritious diet, gym facilities etc. Henceforth, the government could act as a catalyst in leveraging these facilities to its citizens.

Furthermore, people are living in a stressful work environment and poor infrastructure. This has further lead to the deterioration of physical and mental health of the individuals. The government should play a vital role in exploring solutions to nullify this issue. This step will not only provide a healthy environment to live but will also contribute to the overall development of the country.

In a nutshell, people should understand the importance of a healthy living and the government should help people to access these facilities. Hence, a collaborative approach will lead to a healthy lifestyle and a better future.
itsme2216   
Oct 17, 2017
Writing Feedback / Should long-term job-seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work [4]

TOPIC:- should long-term job-seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community?

voluntary services contribution



In many countries, the government gives benefits to the unemployed or long-term job-seekers. It is observed that people take undue advantages of these benefits and take it for granted. Some people suggest that this section of the society should be involved in voluntary services. As their involvement could be considered as their contribution to the community.

In my opinion, unemployed people should be involved in different types of voluntary works based on their skills and key interests. As this will be a significant contribution to the betterment of the society. For example, voluntary works like teaching kids in a remote village would be a remarkable step in the upliftment of the underprivileged society.

Moreover, such interactions could also help these people in enhancing their knowledge, building confidence and overall personality development. Their involvement in voluntary services would make them realize the importance of work. They would develop a sense of ownership and responsibility towards their work. Furthermore, such activities could also help people in building strong networks. As they would get ample of opportunities to interact with people and showcase their talents. This could aid them to fetch a good job based on their key interests.

However, there are a few drawbacks to it which cannot be ignored. It is observed that people involved in community services like working with poor children, senior citizens, abandoned or injured animals etc., expose themselves to the risk of emotionally getting involved. This would leave them sad or anxious for those whom they are trying to help.

To conclude, doing voluntary services will benefit both the individuals as well as the society. Hence, these activities would provide new avenues to the individuals and contribute to the overall development of the country.
itsme2216   
Oct 18, 2017
Writing Feedback / Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. [5]

I have modified it, based on the feedback. Please suggest.

In many counties, the government gives benefits to the unemployed or long-term job-seekers. Some people believe that this section of the society should be involved in voluntary services. As their involvement could be considered, a return to the benefits provided by the government.

It is observed that people take undue advantage of the benefits provided by the government. They tend to become lazy. lethargic and take it for granted. If these people are involved in community services, based on their skills and key interests. They would become confident and would realize the importance of work and money in their daily life where thousands of people struggle to sustain their likelihood.In addition, by doing social services, people would get to know their surroundings and other social issues prevailing in the society. They would be inspired to work for the betterment of the society. This way, they could build trust and harmony amongst the citizens of the country. It would lead to increase in the happiness quotient of the country.

Moreover, voluntary services like working with underprivileged children, senior citizens, abandoned and injured animals would contribute to the overall growth and development of a country. For example, teaching kids in a remote village would be a significant step for developing the future of the underprivileged children. As these kids will learn new things in life, which would increase the knowledge of poverty-struck families. And would further help them to fetch better jobs in the society.

Top conclude, indulging in voluntary services would benefit both the individuals as well as the community. Hence, such activities would open new avenues for the individuals and brighten the future of the country.
itsme2216   
Oct 18, 2017
Writing Feedback / Should long-term job-seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work [4]

I have modified it, based on the feedback. Please suggest.

In many countries, the government gives benefits to the unemployed or long-term job-seekers. Some people believe that this section of the society should be involved in voluntary services. As their involvement could be considered, a return to the benefits provided by the government.

It is observed that people take undue advantage of the benefits provided by the government. They tend to become lazy. lethargic and take it for granted. If these people are involved in community services, based on their skills and key interests. They would become confident and would realize the importance of work and money in their daily life where thousands of people struggle to sustain their likelihood.In addition, by doing social services, people would get to know their surroundings and other social issues prevailing in the society. They would be inspired to work for the betterment of the society. This way, they could build trust and harmony amongst the citizens of the country. It would lead to increase in the happiness quotient of the country.

Moreover, voluntary services like working with underprivileged children, senior citizens, abandoned and injured animals would contribute to the overall growth and development of a country. For example, teaching kids in a remote village would be a significant step for developing the future of the underprivileged children. As these kids will learn new things in life, which would increase the knowledge of poverty-struck families. And would further help them to fetch better jobs in the society.

Top conclude, indulging in voluntary services would benefit both the individuals as well as the community. Hence, such activities would open new avenues for the individuals and brighten the future of the country.
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