Undergraduate / "Chinese boy raised in Malaysia" University of Wisconsin Essay [22]

Personal Statement(Ohio State University)

Basically this essay is a bit similar to another essay(Purdue) i posted just now. I am not very good in English, i really need your help to improve it. Thank you!

Why are you considering The Ohio State University?

Undergraduate / "Chinese boy raised in Malaysia" University of Wisconsin Essay [22]

Describe how your college education will allow you to achieve your personal or professional goals.

Is that you mean i should emphasize on my college education based on the topic above? Sorry that i did not understand so much about the topic.

Undergraduate / "Chinese boy raised in Malaysia" University of Wisconsin Essay [22]

Thanks a lot. Really appreciate about that. Feel free to give any advise you want. Thank you~
I am a Chinese boy who was raised in a small village from Malaysia, a place where is isolated from bustling and flourishing city. It is very common to see people still living under wooden huts.

Undergraduate / "Chinese boy raised in Malaysia" University of Wisconsin Essay [22]

Thank you for the advises. I have already changed the essay. I deleted some of the parts and tried to say more about me. I am going to post it soon, please help me for the final revision. Thank you.

Undergraduate / "Chinese boy raised in Malaysia" University of Wisconsin Essay [22]

Please help me with the advise from Llamapoop123 which stated that my essay is too general. I need to post it after several hours. Please help me to do the final revision. I will very appreaciate about that.