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Posts by duynguyen1808 [Suspended]
Name: Marcus
Joined: Oct 21, 2017
Last Post: Oct 22, 2017
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From: United States of America
School: Clear Lake High School

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duynguyen1808   
Oct 21, 2017
Undergraduate / "Struggle in my hopeful soccer"-briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities [2]

college admission extra question



Hey guys, I'm writing this for my college admissions additional questions, this is the draft and I really need it to be cut shorter. Hope I can have your' helps to improve it.

Coming back the US after two months, I was totally ready for my Varsity soccer season. I put myself in a severe training during the whole summer. I played plenty of games in order to gain necessary experiences and skills, and ran almost continuously in each to enhance my stamina. I went to the gym six days per week to train my strength and speed. I was full of hope about the season ahead, with a burning mental and desire since I knew I was already a High School Senior.

But, everything was harsh. As the first year joining school Varsity team, I got a lot of troubles in getting along with the team. The team had a great chemistry with more than twenty American solid players who knew clearly each other as friends, and it was hard for me to be a part of it. I did not gain the favor of the coach, as the tactics and styles he wanted the team to be was so different than any team I have been. I made the team to be a substitutional player. I felt ashamed, as I was so confident and put so much work for this, but ended up with an unexpected result. I tried harder and harder in every practice, and gradually improved myself to be in the team's harmony. I have been giving more chances to get into the field and play, although just about fifteen minutes a game, but I always showed my best and created as many as threats to the opponent's net as possible. Everything seems better day by day, as the team just made the District final, and is ready for State competition. I will keep trying my best to contribute to help the team win the State Champion to have a proud memory of my last High School soccer season.
duynguyen1808   
Oct 22, 2017
Student Talk / The aim of life [56]

I just read your thread and cheerly know that you are still doing well currently. Hey, always be optimist. We are all created by God for a specific purpose. It is hard sometimes because there are a lot of difficulties, but they are the necessary challenges which help you realize who are your important ones, and what you live for.
duynguyen1808   
Oct 22, 2017
Writing Feedback / People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing [3]

Yeah, I agree that there are cases people have to do things they don't want to. I know, life is not fair sometimes, but you need to use both your mind and your soul to find the best remedy for your life and your loved ones'.

Overall, this is good as a brief essay that reaches the topic. But the example is too simple to stand out as a situation for the essay. You can work more on it to emphasize more.
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