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Name: Ipung Havidz W
Joined: Nov 6, 2017
Last Post: Nov 6, 2017
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From: Indonesia
School: Institute Technology of Bandung

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Nov 6, 2017
Scholarship / My previous and current leadership experience have given positive impact to progress in my career [2]

Hello friends,

I have written the essay about my experience for Leadership & Influence and Networking Questions.. Kindly need your help to give me some feedback on my essay. I will appreciate any comments and suggestions

Leadership and Influence Question

360/500 words

Being able to give positive impact to the organization is most people want to accomplish. Leading an organization is one of several ways to achieve it. My remarkable leadership experience started in college life. When I was in college, I often had many opportunities to become a group leader in some tasks that were assigned by certain courses. For example, I was chosen to lead a group consisting 4-5 friends of mine for developing a Mobile Application project for simulating food delivery services. As a group leader, I had to create a time-bound workaround effectively so the project would finish on time. Fortunately, we received positive response for our works and hoped that we would make it real with future improvements.

Another leadership experience I have is when I became an undersecretary of Academic Welfare Ministry in my Student Association. I was responsible for academic services such as lecture reference repository and tutorial schedule. Tutorial was given to consolidate lecture material that had been obtained, usually scheduled three days before exam. There was a common issue while organizing the tutorial; the participants' number was small. By choosing the right time for tutorial and my capability to influence people, the number was increased and they felt satisfied on tutorial program I have made. They thought that this tutorial program had helped them to achieve better grade in certain courses.

Recently, I am in charge of leading mobile development team on a project under GTS IBM Indonesia. My duty is to develop a mobile-based application for asset and incident management. I work with people who are older and have more skilled and experiences. I use this opportunity to increase my knowledge, experience, and skill. This makes me obtain greater leadership and influence skills.

To sum up, leaders have to be agile and good in making decision. They also need to have great skill to influence people to make them achieve their goals. I believe that my previous and current leadership experience have given positive impact to progress in my professional career. I also hope that Chevening Scholarship will help me to make a great impact to my country, especially in Telecommunication field.
pungihw   
Nov 6, 2017
Scholarship / My mission will be to create and lead dream teams in the public sector of Egypt [3]

I think your essay is good. However, some people says we do not need such a detailed statistics. These statements would be better included in why you choose the courses in the UK (on Studying in the UK questions). Your first three paragraphs should be the reasons why you choose the courses. Try to mention some immediate actions upon completing your master degree more detail.

I am sorry if there is something unnecessary. This is only my opinon and overall I like your essay :D
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