Posts by tmuk

tmuk

Dec 27, 2017

Undergraduate / Proving that I will be a succesful student at Johns Hopkins University [3]

hey Danny
You have a greatly chosen account which would do with some improvement in the execution.Your script was written in simple English, making it sound like any other random story and might risk losing the reader's attention.I would encourage you to add more complex English phrases and, if possible, some captivating incident which can hence help you derive what you "learned from the experience".

Remember also that what they need is for you to focus on the subject of the topic-",when you worked with others and what you learned from the experience" and that should be the richest part of your script which will also earn you credit

tmuk

Dec 27, 2017

Undergraduate / "Why Cornell" Essay - Cosmology and Quantum Theory [6]

hie Issabella
A well composed introduction and an amusing flow of ideas, I like the way you describe your intellectual interests although they are not very distinguishable.

Paragraphing is a good idea, but a bit more clarity can be shown by stating rather...
However your essay is an excellent script and a few grammatical corrections will make it suitable to be handed in

tmuk

Dec 27, 2017

Undergraduate / The hotter the battle, the sweeter the victory - surviving obstacles [2]

Difficulty needs not foreshadow despair or defeat. Rather achievement can be all the more satisfying

There is not but one positive thing which goes without opposition.And any random person would take obstacles as stumbling blocks which succumb to failure.But from every wound, there is a scar, and every scar tells a story, a story that says, "I survived". For after all," the hotter the battle, the sweeter the victory" .

earning a position in the maths olympiad team, making it into Zimbabwe's best schools rugby team and finally changing to my desired examination board was more than enough to make me ecstatic in my academic year.Little did I know that celebrating just as yet was like counting chickens which barely ever existed.

Everything was initiated with a life threatening collision which left me with a broken leg and head injuries two weeks into the rugby season.It was just then that both of my parents had left the country and I, being a boarder, had very little help to rely on.I was only left with four months before my final examinations, with lumsum amounts of schoolwork and responsibilities, and very limited mobility to cope up with.

all of a sudden, the short walk to lessons became a journey, my small backpack a boulder and every minor responsibility, a mammoth task.The awaited exam board change turned out to be the worst mistake.It would take only one decision to let go of everything I had worked for in 17 years just to let down the weight on my shoulders.

In such moments, instead of cutting the line, you discover that adverse events can be so powerful that they force us to come up with ideas we never would have thought of otherwise.It is then that the distant destination called success, with but one pathway leading to it(ambition), and only one available vehicle(persistence) can be reached.The hard work sacrificed for leisure and the perseverance and little tolerance on my in-capabilities led to a speedy recovery and better preparedness for my final examinations.

Any help will be very appreciated...

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