Scholarship / Looking for an opportunity to conduct Environmental researches! Personal statement [2]

Hi!
First of all: This is my first time commenting on any essay so please kindly note, that my feedback won't be as precise as Holt's.

The presentation of your academic career sounds pretty sound to me. However, I feel like you've spent a lot of time describing your work experiences. I don't think, that it is necessary to describe what you did in that much detail, instead you should focus more on what you gained from this work experiences so that you have more wordcount to present your motivation for choosing Korea. Because that part, your motiavation for Korea, seems to come a little short compared to the rest. I think there some more detail would be needed. For example: Why exactly did the Korean ambassador's speech inspire you to go to Korea? What exactly do you like about Korean culture and Korean? Moreover, one aspect that I feel is missing: Why did you choose to apply for the KGSP and not any other scholarship program? What commits you to the KGSP? And you said, that you have an interest in the Korean language for about ten years now. Have you already learned some Korean? Do you know how to read and write hangul and have you maybe already taken the TOPIK test? If yes, then I think that it would be good to include this in your essay.

I hope I could help you a bit with my feedback and good luck with your application!

Scholarship / Applying KGSP Korean Language and Literature majoring in Teaching Korean As a Foreign Language [5]

Hi Elisa,
I fear that only including the title of your research won't be enough. From what I gathered from Holt's posts on KGSP study plans so far is, that it is really important to give a lot of details during your study plan presentation. You need more details, be specific on how you want to conduct your research. For example: Are there two different ways to study Korean grammer/pronunciation and do you want to compare them? How would you determine which way is "more efficient"? How many participants do you need to conduct your study? What kind of results do you expect from your research? Answering these questions would show the KGSP reviewer, that you spend time carefully planning your master thesis and that you have a clear vision on how to conduct the research you aspire to do.

I hope this feedback helps you a little and I wish you the best of luck with your application!